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Review of Abuse  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love your attitude and agree with what you are saying. I don't know your age but for younger women this shouldn't be as much of a problem. I guess it depends on many things, mostly your family dynamic and how girls/ women are respected in your family to begin with. I am 68, married at eighteen and was a Mom at nineteen. I was lucky that my Mom tried to push me to do something for myself, to stand up for what I wanted. But I didn't listen and married an older man who was controlling. My answer was Ms. magazine. I decided to go to college at 21 and it opened so many doors for me, gave me confidence. You keep on standing up for yourself-I have cared for many victims of domestic abuse. Sad what women have endured.
Great writing.

Peace,
Kat
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Review of I'm Sorry  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is such an important story that you tell so well. You should win this time. I am a retired RN and almost all of what you expressed could have happened in the Covid ICU. You bring both the RN and the patient to life with your conversation and descriptions. Excellent writing skills, keep writing. I love the empathy shown.

Peace,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I enjoyed this walk along memory lane about you and your friend. Sorry, she is no longer alive. I have no idea about your age or if you are American. I didn't recognize some of the words (Council, calipers) you used. Maybe you could fill out your bio-block soon. You must be about my age because I remember getting the sugar cubes with the polio vaccine when I was about 8 or so. It was brand new and everyone was excited. After knowing people in iron lungs (respirators) and some with paralysis, my parents feared for their children.


What I liked most:
I am left with lots of lasting memories and reminders that we are all only here for a short time. Diane may be no longer with us but she has inspired me to look at my life and stick to my goals.

I love this quote from J.R.R. Tolkein.
'I wish it need not have happened in my time' said Frodo.
'So do I,' said Gandalf 'and so do all who live to see such times. But that is not for them to decide. All we have to decide is what to do with the time that is given to us.'
J.R.R. Tolkien, The Fellowship of the Ring






Suggestions for change: You have a few punctuation mistakes I noted, like the lack of a comma (easy stuff). You might add a description of your friend as a child, maybe a small conversation you two carried on or the name of a song or icon you both liked. I loved the fact that you had plays. I just hungered to know more about your friend that you were so close to. She sounds like a strong personality that wanted to leave something of herself in this world (her children). Sounds like she had a full and happy life.




This writing made me feel: One of my two very best friends has Alzheimer's now and doesn't recognize anyone anymore. She is 12 years older. I went through that with my Mom, it is so hard on friends and family to see the loss of what made them so special, the essence of their personality. Keep writing, you are very good at it.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke


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Review of Coorah Cockatoo  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Wonderfully written poem with snapshots of the beauty of nature and caution about our carelessness with it. This is certainly a time we all should be caring for our resources that are shrinking or being polluted. I love the description of the bird.
Glossy black feathers-shone bright,
Powerfully strong, beautiful in mid-flight.
Tail feathers with a deep red hue,
A proud red-tailed Black cockatoo
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I see you have this as a children's poem but many adults should appreciate the deep message of this wonderful piece. Keep writing, you do it so well.
Peace,
Kat
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Review of At last life won!  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Such a beautiful write, you have captured nature like a video diary of the birds and the nest. I love the descriptions of the parents protecting their little ones. We are all fascinating creatures with built in instincts over our young. Thanks for the lovely read for the morning. We have baby fawns in our backyard and their Mom, they are a joy to watch.
I feel sad for people that pay little attention to the beauty around them, something that is free and very special. Take care.

Peace,


Kat
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Review of Rose  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: This is a wonderful emotional piece of prose. The rose is always an excellent example of perfection with an armor that can hurt the person that wants possession of it. You used the image very well. It flows with a nice rhythm and good imagery.


What I liked most:

I was born with my thorns to protect myself now it's the flaw to truly let you in.
It's me i caused all your pain, you now watch me wither away... now all your left with is scars.
I was...your perfect rose





Suggestions for change: now all your left with is scars. You might want to change the your to you are or you're. Otherwise it is perfect.




This writing made me feel: I recognize the feelings in this writing. Keep writing, you are very good at it.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke


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Review of Losing you  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Such a heart tugging emotional piece and I feel so much for you. I think it takes a lot of courage to be so real about family issues. A lot of people cover up and appear to be in a cloud or don't want to face the truth. I hope that writing some of your family heartbreak is helping you. I know how much it helped me to journal about my parents deaths and I have no idea what you have gone through, I just know that all families have messy relationships. Kids that don't see their parents for years, parents that cast their children aside for addiction, being gay, marrying someone of another color or religion. It's all messy, some just don't want to talk about it. I hope you can resolve some issues or least connect before your parents depart this world. I am glad you have so much faith. Keep writing.

Peace,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
A touching and beautiful story of family and what we inherit from our parents. Your descriptions are perfect and I love the examples of your life with your Dad. Putting the emphasis on the arthritis in two generations of hands was a gem of an idea. I can relate and even stopped wearing my heirloom jewelry because I hate the looks of my arthritic hands. But we are fortunate to have had parents that cared about our lives, that loved us and, in pain, we share traits that aren't attractive just like we might have had the same beautiful eyes. I have put my rings back on and am proud to wear them. I love this poem: it flows, has a rhythm throughout but mostly it shows generational love.

Peace,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a lovely poem, you expressed a whole experience in just a minimum of words. I can feel the emotions of love that most mothers feel. Even if you give that child up for adoption, a part of you is unique and I think you would always recognize that. Congratulations, I wouldn't change a thing. That was a difficult prompt.

Peace,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
As a fellow recovering addict, I appreciate this rainbow poem very much. You have written a beautiful piece about how your whole world changes when you are sober. Colors really are brighter, nature comes to life, your senses open and emotions come. You see both the beauty and darkness around you. You also mention the honesty that keeps you sober. Truer words have never been spoken. Practicing addicts are the best liars until they get caught and you always do. Like the hole in the road, well, you know that one. Keep writing. This is original, creative and well written with heart felt emotion. There is one in my port you might like, it is kind of dark.
 
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Living by the Hourglass  (13+)
The real picture of addiction is not easy to read about.
#2255393 by Redtowrite
One day at a time.

Peace to you,
Kat
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Review of Fading Summer  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a lovely poem with snapshots of life and emotions, a mix of melancholy and sweetness. I love the final stanza, beautifully written. Have a wonderful day and keep writing. Stay safe.

Peace,
Kat
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Review of Take Flight  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
You have the ability to paint an incredible scene with words, a wonderful gift. There is much to love here, it really appeals to my sense of flying and observing the world below me. Not a part of the mischief man can make but the beauty nature has bestowed us with. I might have to blink quite a bit these days. I really enjoyed this piece. You are spot on with details.

Some thoughts are the formatting, maybe break it up a bit with paragraphs. Perhaps a smaller font (up to you, of course). I have eyesight problems but can always enlarge with my own browser.

I love the eagle and it's power and understand "survival of the fittest". But my heart is with the sparrow. Heart means more than power to me even if it is my demise. Just my personal feelings, to each his own.

Thanks for a great read. Keep writing.

Peace,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an interesting read and something to think about. I believe when someone puts the information out there, they expect something in return. "I am sorry" is much better than" I understand how you feel" because no one can know what someone else is going through. I think it is a shame that people don't send cards out anymore. I know when my parents died, the plants and cards helped. The other thing that is overused is "thoughts and prayers". Then there is the hugs, emoji and love you. This kind of emotional sentiment used to be reserved for close friends and family. Right now with all the Covid restrictions we have been under, it is great to have the Internet though. I know that people still step up and help their neighbors and also volunteer some great advice in support groups when it is asked for. An expression of caring is always better than silence. Very good article with excellent thought required.

Peace,
Kat
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Review of Almost  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love this poem. You have a nice flow with rhythm throughout. The message is one most people can relate to. I don't see any errors. Nice read for today since I was upset about constantly entering a contest and it seems the same couple of people keep winning. I am trying to figure out what I am doing wrong. Try again, I suppose. Thanks for the pat on the back and push to do better. Have a great day. Keep writing.

Peace,
Kat
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Review of Nimrod  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I loved this humor filled read. It is a very realistic portrait of life everyday in 2021. People like the guy in your piece give me a laugh although they can be annoying. What would we do without all these interesting personalities in our Universe? As long as they aren't dangerous, that type frightens me, like the guy(with a bomb?) in front of the Capital. I can do without any extra excitement these days. Keep writing, I like your style.
Peace,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is wonderful and made me laugh-thanks so much. Wish I could write satire like this!
What isn't so great is that there is a degree of realism to it. With 6 grandchildren that are all teenagers or close to, I get very worried sometimes. My grandmotherly advice is hand them condoms (both sexes) and tell them "no matter where you are or what is going on, call me. I will come." It is a frightening world out there. Of course, it always has been but there is more trouble to get into these days. Thanks for the laugh and great writing.

Peace,
Kat
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Review of autumn festival  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really enjoyed this poem. It is hopeful and serene, some feelings we need more of today. It flows nicely and I appreciated the peace it gave me this day. Keep writing and stay safe.

Peace,
Kat
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Review of L'aura del Campo  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with SENIOR CENTER GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Seems like Haiti was just hit and many died. I have noticed that all the news has spoken about today is Afghanistan so they can blame Biden on all channels. No one hardly mention these poor people in Haiti. The next thing will be about all the Muslims being brought into the country from Afghanistan. I don't understand this world. I keep seeing the helicopters leaving Saigon. Many of those people came here and became wonderful citizens. Pol Pot went into the corrupt government of South Vietnam and slaughtered all kinds of people. We forget all these attempts at trying to make other countries into democracies-we aren't even holding our own together.

Sorry, Rant over! Wanted to compliment your lovely but sad poem. It is very visual and a reminder of the force of weather changes that we have a hand in also. I have been reading your blog. Love it. Be well and safe, my friend.

Peace,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
What a lovely well written tribute to both your Dad and hospice. I agree with you, the hospice staff is usually wonderful. I lost my Dad in 1989 at the age of 65 after 1 year of fighting Lymphoma. Chemo took an awful toll on him also. They have better drugs now-even vaccine therapy for some cancers. Then my Mom(83) had hospice for only 24 hours before she died, she had Alzheimer's plus several other chronic conditions. The latest, last year, was my husband's Mom and it was more like the hospice you described. It was more round the clock care for quite a while. Depends on the patient's needs also. I love the way they do as much as you might need or give you privacy. As a working RN when my Dad was in hospice, he wanted it to be just the 3 of us. They were not as strict about narcotics then either because I had to give him extra doses. So I did a lot of the work which was fine. He died with just Mom and I with him. The hospice Nursing assistants came to my mother-in-law's funeral mass. So nice!
After working in the hospital for many years, hospice is a much more personal experience where you are supported as family. Nice read. Sorry about your Dad-we are never really ready. Death seems to come as a wonderful friend to the dying patient though.
Peace,
Kat
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Review of Who Do I Believe?  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I wish there was a way that people with all types of faith could feel comfortable around each other. I have been searching for this for some time. There is such a need to announce that you are a believer even when you might know the other person is not. Now I understand this because part of the point of being a Christian is to bring others to be "saved". I have been a part of the Christian world (mostly Presbyterian where saving is not a big issue, whether you believe in God or not is) for many years and enjoyed studying and going to church but never wanted to "preach" to anyone. I liked your essay on this but it is totally geared to someone who believes completely, some of us aren't sure and are okay with that. Peace to you.
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I loved this, it reminds me of snapshots from a camera. It doesn't really follow conventional rules of writing and maybe that is part of the appeal. People are always trying to repair my paragraph structure, POV, etc. I am confusing them. I love your quick bits of conversation, the flirting with the waitress. My favorite part:A flower dress caught my eye amongst all the suits and pantsuits. The dress flowed around her. The sunlight danced.
She was gone in the crowd but a musician played a song on the street. The song reminded me of times gone past.
Those times are long past.
The significance and lyrics of the song "Pretty Woman", is wonderful. (I love the Roy Orbison version. His voice cries better than George Jones.) It fit in so well.
The ending had me crying and I should've seen it coming. Great read.
Peace,
Kat
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Review of [ References ]  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I read this poem several times and am still confused what you are trying to say. It doesn't seem like you have any trust in anything; religion, institutions, science, politics. Maybe I am getting this all wrong. The structure of the poem is good, flows well and I don't see any errors. I don't have to understand, it is your opinion and writing. I hope you stay safe and continue to write.

Peace,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was well written and very realistic. I had to laugh because it has happened to me. I spent years getting my hair done by a stylist, highlights put in and all. Then I ended up on disability and didn't have the money to keep it up so I bought a do-it-yourself. It was awful. I drove to my usual stylist and she took a look. "What have you done?" I felt so bad. She stripped the color, cut it, and told me not to use what I had bought again. She was understanding when I explained. She ordered some color for me and gave me some tips so I could do my own. That is a real friend. Most people are willing to help in unfortunate situations. Keep writing. Stay safe.

Peace,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very well written piece and I like the question.I think you presented this question well and gave the reader a lot to think about. I think a person is a fool if they don't see how violent society has become. The reasons for it could be argued about but I don't remember anything like this in my lifetime. I agree that you should secure your home and even have a weapon. However I don't think you need an assault weapon or a whole room full. It should be in a safe close to where you can get to it in a hurry. Not where children can get to it or anyone that has mental illness (addiction included). Of course you should be trained and that should be a part of getting a gun. We need stricter gun laws. I remember when the NRA taught people gun safety. It seems to have become a political organization. I really can't tell you I could kill another person but if my grandchild or a loved one was threatened, I don't know. There are other ways to deal with people if you take a self defense course. A gun is something else though. America has more guns than people, a sad situation, don't you think? Being an RN, I have seen the bodies of people that have been shot with these hollow point bullets, organs are shredded, they don't stand a chance of survival. Those need to be off the shelves. Ok, enough said. Thanks for the conversation. I like the way you write.

Kat
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Review of HOMECOMING.  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with SENIOR CENTER GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is such a beautiful piece. The visuals are breathtaking and if I close my eyes I can smell the grass, feel cool water on my lips and be at peace. I have never been to Vermont but you paint such a wonderful picture, I am ready to fly away (oops, no wings). Maybe someday I will get there. We all should have a wonderful place for a final rest. Take care.

Kat
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