|Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.
My overall impression: This is a beautiful introduction to a wonderful piece of art. You have painted the scene in my mind along with bringing my senses alive.
What I liked most: He slowly and carefully moves a tiny piece of cloth along the saxophone in his hands, marred with the scars of time, but moving with ease and care, careful not to damage this only thing that has kept him whole.
The detail is wonderful in this piece and there are several examples of this "actions without explanations". The writer can decide what the meaning is. The last part isn't really needed:his everlasting serenity upon the face of a difficult world.
Suggestions for change: You have to polish this piece, correcting punctuation and some grammar. Your detail is marvelous and you use "showing not telling" with desired effect. I think after a couple more edits, this will shine.
This writing made me feel: The pull of these two people towards each other's universe.
Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke