|Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.
My overall impression: I enjoyed this walk along memory lane about you and your friend. Sorry, she is no longer alive. I have no idea about your age or if you are American. I didn't recognize some of the words (Council, calipers) you used. Maybe you could fill out your bio-block soon. You must be about my age because I remember getting the sugar cubes with the polio vaccine when I was about 8 or so. It was brand new and everyone was excited. After knowing people in iron lungs (respirators) and some with paralysis, my parents feared for their children.
What I liked most:
I am left with lots of lasting memories and reminders that we are all only here for a short time. Diane may be no longer with us but she has inspired me to look at my life and stick to my goals.
I love this quote from J.R.R. Tolkein.
'I wish it need not have happened in my time' said Frodo.
'So do I,' said Gandalf 'and so do all who live to see such times. But that is not for them to decide. All we have to decide is what to do with the time that is given to us.'
J.R.R. Tolkien, The Fellowship of the Ring
Suggestions for change: You have a few punctuation mistakes I noted, like the lack of a comma (easy stuff). You might add a description of your friend as a child, maybe a small conversation you two carried on or the name of a song or icon you both liked. I loved the fact that you had plays. I just hungered to know more about your friend that you were so close to. She sounds like a strong personality that wanted to leave something of herself in this world (her children). Sounds like she had a full and happy life.
This writing made me feel: One of my two very best friends has Alzheimer's now and doesn't recognize anyone anymore. She is 12 years older. I went through that with my Mom, it is so hard on friends and family to see the loss of what made them so special, the essence of their personality. Keep writing, you are very good at it.
Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke