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Review of Center stage  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I know this is probably putting my story into your own. I am a retired RN and a recovering alcoholic. I worked for almost 30 years-had to leave due to my dystonia diagnosis, unable to mange the movements and pain under stress any more. I thought this was an exceptional piece with a lot of despair and empathy. I missed Covid but was there for many other terrible deaths that I write about in my port, changing names.


What I liked most: The idea of using the theater metaphor is very appropriate although when the director says "Cut", the patient remains center stage dying.
I love this:I had center stage; I don't want to be the lead get me out of this fucked up set. I don't want to play anymore; there is no need to bow my head. This is my low; not my best show. Now hand me that drink, would you please, put me at ease—time to tip the wink.



Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: confused reading between the lines and thinking I know where you are coming from but not sure. We all have patients we will never forget. Mine was a 16 year old (over 50% full thickness burn patient), sent to me to keep comfortable back in 1980. It is tiring work for the body and soul but someone needs to stand guard and make an inevitable death a "good death" as we called it. Sometimes lip gloss is a big thing we can do. You are a hero! Great writing!



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke


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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a beautiful and clever poem you have created. The mix of nature and the senses is pitch perfect. You are an excellent poet, keep writing. Stay safe and creative.

Kat
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Review of Second Thoughts  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I wish I had written this. You take the original 2nd amendment and explain all the changes it has gone through. Now our country has more guns than citizens and mass shootings are a weekly occurrence. Once the decision has become part of the Supreme Court rulings and states pass laws like open carry, how do you begin to put the monster back in the bottle? I don't think it will change in my lifetime. I have always thought reasonable people would see the danger but I am afraid about 1/3 of our population is living on another planet these days. Excellent piece full of critical thinking, sources, reasoning and empathy. Stay safe and creative.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed reading this. It is wonderful that you are able to be so honest about your past life. I think it is admirable that you checked into other religions also. It really shows an open mind. I hope that you are happy and content in your journey in life. This was a refreshing read about a person's journey to discover themselves. Keep writing and stay safe. I wish you peace.

Kat
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Review of The Train Wreck  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This poem is certainly one to ponder on. I like to believe that we are over the worst and better things are on the way. Of course, we are in April now and many have received the vaccines, which is a scientific breakthrough that is a wonder. I didn't vote for Trump either time and have been on pins and needles since he was elected. We all feel differently about politics but I do feel like he might have caused more division in our country. I like the way you refer to the passing of a train, I want to believe we all safely move ahead. There will always be problems. Take care.

Kat
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Review of The Leftovers  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Very Powerful-your emotions are raw in this poem. The anger and pain are communicated to the reader, also the fine line between love and hate that is possible for someone. I wonder if the suicide was planned or accidental. So sorry that this happened to you and I feel so badly for her child. I can't imagine how painful that must have been to try to explain this to a child-you can't. Very poignant writing!

Kat
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Review of Mother of Steel  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is excellent look into the world of caring for an autistic child. It is nicely written with your courage, strength and compassion shown in the words. We have 2 grandchildren that are on the autism spectrum so I have watched my kids struggle with diet and medications, trying to find the right keys. These kids are so bright but can be quite a handful. Each one is every bit as special as any "normal" (whatever that is) child. I admire your writing and steel but bending spine.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Excellent poem for this prompt, sad but very realistic. It is well written with a good flow and rhythm. With all the craziness going on in this world, I have a hard time thinking of funny and joyful subjects. We still have soldiers dying every day in all corners of the globe, from all countries. It is a never ending disgusting activity that no one ever wins, except those who make money or have power (if you consider that winning). Sad but excellent read. Good luck!

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I loved this. Dr. Suess is not gone-he wrote over 40 books and even if they take 6 down, they are delightful and will continue to be read by generations to come. Change is always taking place but the classics still survive. Your tribute is wonderfully written, rhymes and brings the characters to life. My children loved Dr Suess and read his delightful tales to their children. Like Sesame St., it is part of our legacy. There are new books out there also that are wonderful, just see what your grandkids are reading now. Thanks for the memories and may Dr Suess' books live on to thrill other kids.
Fondly,
Kat
The wonderful things that we shall see....
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
You did a thorough and knowledgable job of writing about this problem that has been going on for far too many years. Everything you have documented here is true. Since I really don't claim any specific religious affiliation at this time, I have been involved in many and always noticed that many churches don't even understand much about the Jewish religion, they know about the Holocaust and most believe Jesus was born a Jew. They don't seem to realize there are several different types of Judaism and don't understand the culture. I see the Jewish people as the ones that have consistently come to the aid of the disenfranchised: migrants, African Americans during the Civil Rights heated days of the 60's and still today. Jews have started and supported labor unions, putting their very lives on the line. I have always admired Jewish people that I know because of their family closeness. Most do encourage a good education for their children. Having money and influence in this world helps assure that laws will be made to discourage terrorism and encourage justice. I enjoyed reading this and hope many others will. Very well written with both an emotional tone and accurate facts. Take care and stay safe.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with SENIOR CENTER GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful poem for those of us who are older and still believe in the magic and stardust of love. My congratulations on the Senior win for the "love" prompt for February. Your flow, rhythm and descriptions are perfect and pull on the heartstrings. Keep writing and stay safe.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I really did enjoy this. I love the characters, the descriptions are wonderful and dialogue is very real. I felt like I was in the room. You are very good at character development. I want to wish you luck and I will continue to watch for further exciting writing from you. Stay safe.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Interesting and humorous look at social media. I like the idea of just being honest, that is always appreciated by me. I like a good religious or political discussion if people are being polite about it but it has become a HUGE thing these days.My page is my house and I reserve the right to post what I want but there is such a thing as morals and values. My brothers and I totally disagree on some subjects but we still speak to and love each other.
I think we have made much ado about nothing over social media anyway. But there are always going to be troublemakers, just like the playground. I liked your piece, well written and enjoyed. Facebook is a good place to go if you are looking for trouble so stop thinking that way, post your grandkids photos-we are but mortal men and women, right? Stay safe.

Kat
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Review of As It Was To Be  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is such a beautiful poem that I found inspirational and touching. I love the descriptions in the 2nd stanza, a lovely scene. I find myself confused about the continuation of this touching love. At one point, it sounds like it is still alive and changed over the years or after many years, now gone and you have memories. Poetry truth is known only to the writer, as it should be. Very talented writing that is lovely.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I want to thank you so much for reviewing my poem. I was looking over your portfolio and see that you are 15. I also saw that you are Indian and read your piece on Holi, which I really enjoyed. I love learning about different cultures and religions. I wanted to welcome you to WDC. You are very mature for your age. When I was 15, I kept a diary but it was all about boys LOL.
I read the 1st part of your story and really enjoyed your descriptions and setting up a scene: As she turned, her bright face , fair as milk with cute cat eyes appeared. Her cheeks were soft and red as blossom and her lips soft as creme. She had her long black hair tied into a pony altogether making a gorgeous face. But her classmates called her quite mysterious as she had never talked much to anyone except for her friends - Jack and Anne.

Language is going to be tricky but that is true for all of us in this global world. Your communication in feelings and observations is what is important. Nice to meet a new writer-I wish you the very best. Keep writing.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
You certainly have a lot of writing talent. I love your snapshots of art and life. The feeling of excitement and inspiration for a new project comes through. That is the way any artistic endeavor is begun, an idea here and there comes together into a new way of looking at an object, idea, or feelings expressed on canvas. You have a great eye, a unique way with words and a fresh approach for the art of painting. Keep writing.

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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a beautiful piece of writing that brought back memories of my own young feelings of what I thought was love. I enjoy your way of speaking to the reader, I could relate to all of the experience most of us experience on that rocky path of growing up. It can be such a hard time, the heartbreak is so raw and the highs of those first feelings are so surreal. I always want to educate people that say "being young" is easy. I remember it as plunging into a "scripted" romantic relationship, a scene from a book, never true reality. You leave yourself so vulnerable. The learning curve of love is a process.
The ending is beautiful, with the mother and daughter both moving along the same train of thought. One remembering all those tender heartstrings and the other, just beginning to experience and learn about herself. Wonderful writing that touches the heart. Good luck, you are a winner!

Kat
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Review of The Frozen Tea  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I really was touched by this. You set the scene, brought the characters to life, added a problem to possibly be resolved and then concluded the story in 300 words. I don't know if I could do that. I like what's not being said in this piece. I can feel the pain and disappointment from her and then the fake gestures and empty words from him. It's over, but not forgotten. Excellent piece.
Stay safe.

Kat
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Review of The Rose  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with SENIOR CENTER GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an exquisite poem about a flower that I hold dear. My grandfather grew prize winning roses and did until he was ninety-two. He was featured in several articles. They took so much work but were so worth it. This poem brings the senses to life, I can visualize the birth of a rose and the beauty of life it represents. Thank you for the lovely read. You are very talented.

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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I was mesmerized reading this accurate account of helping the tiny sea turtles. I have even read that if you get to actually see the mom come up on shore and give birth, she cries. I don't know if that is the pain of labor or the fact that she knows only a tiny amount of these babies will make it. You used descriptions to make this so very real, beautiful and such a tribute to the survival of nature. Thank you for writing this beautiful piece. Maybe it will get more attention to the loss of these great turtles that are unfortunately wounded by boats and other harmful environmental factors. Your writing reminds me of what a miracle it is when these babies do survive. By the way, have you ever read any of Mary Alice Monroe's books? This is her passion and she has written a lovely series about it plus raises contributions. Thanks for a great read.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is a wonderful poem. I saw that you didn't bold the phrases, so they disqualified it. I loved the picture prompt but couldn't think of anything to do with the phrases so I gave up. You did a great job. The feelings are there of a broken relationship, the senses of the water and surrounding area, the flow is lovely. You should use it in another contest. There is one for a poem that tells a story, I believe. Do some editing and send it in for that. Best of luck and keep writing. Stay safe.

Kat
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Review of Without Him  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
What a beautifully sad well written poem about loss and a lifetime of love. I remember my Dad dying like it was yesterday. Your parents were lucky to have so many years together. Sounds like they had a wonderful love story. I like you way you started each stanza with your Mom saying something about this man she loved so much. It flows fluently this way and the emotional impact really hits home.
I would imagine you and I are about the same age and loss is such a big part of our lives at this age. It isn't easy to watch the ones you love die but so important to be there. Written very well and I hope you have wonderful memories. Stay safe.
Maybe you have some tips for my writing on Writer's Cramp, I don't feel like I am doing so well at it.
Thanks for being a judge and so fair to everyone.

Kat
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Review of A River in Memory  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love this poem. It is beautifully written with a smooth flow, descriptions that make me hear music and feel young. I loved this part:
The soft notes
slip out of speakers
and roll along my desktop,
before casually
falling to the floor;
a miniature waterfall.
Nice writing.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with SENIOR CENTER GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a very sweet poem and I enjoyed reading it. I have 2 cats and they are both my spoiled children and so much trouble but fun. Your poem flows fairly well but you might want to use your spell check to help you out. The rhyming pattern is fine and it doesn't really matter with any freestyle poetry which I use a lot. I like the way you describe the kitty's antics and I can just see him doing all of those things. The poem makes me want to cuddle with my own kitties and I think the emotions your reader feels is the most important part of a poem. If you are writing about something sad and the reader feels brokenhearted, you have done your job. This is a happy poem and made me smile. Keep writing.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very insightful poem. You did an excellent job in writing it. Stay safe and creative.

Kat
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