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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: You certainly tell it like it is. What a great metaphor, I love using a tree because they live so long and do not die easily. Our democracy is dying a little every day. Hoping 2021 will be much better, it doesn't have to try too hard. This poem flows and rhymes and has an emotional pull that makes you want to cry. Wonderful powerful writing, poet.


What I liked most: I love the 1st two stanzas and then the following 3 ending it with "another leaf falls"-so true. Then the ending is the piece de resistance. All politics is local and if people would only get interested in their local elections and maybe one person, one vote?




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: Angry, I have been angry for quite awhile now. That requires action and right now we can't do much but vote with Covid. Keep writing and stay safe.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
You made my day-I am laughing my a** off! This was so wonderful, very realistic and funny. I felt like I was in the house with you having a great time watching this whole drama. I kind of knew how it would end. This reminds me of our neighborhood, here in GA, that was full of Trump signs. I don't know what would happen if a green, purple, yellow or chocolate person moved in. Once, we had a condo building with 4 units in it and if you passed our application, you were in so we had quite a few different colors and we all lived in one building. Everybody got along and we even had barbecues and decorated the whole building for the holidays. People are people, some nice and some not so much. Thanks for a terrific story. You are an amazing writer. Have a great holiday and we will look forward to a better 2021.

Kat
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Review of Sedentary  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the meaning behind this poem and the visuals are wonderful. This has been very true for me in the past and many are stuck in this place now as a result of circumstances; age, illness, poverty, depression. I feel for those who cannot "give chase". Good luck, stay safe, happy holidays.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Just wanted to send my best wishes for a complete recovery. I am so glad that you didn't end up in the hospital. Do you know how you got Covid? It is so frightening to go most anywhere because so many people don't wear a mask. I saw where you have a disability, so do I, so recovering from this is harder. Thanks for writing this and let us know how you are doing. The exhaustion must be terrible. I watch a lot of news and I have heard that losing your taste and smell for foods is one of the symptoms. Take good care of yourself. Rest and do breathing exercises, I don't know if the physicians told you but I think they are on the CDC site. I am a retired nurse and talk with nurses that are working now so you want to watch for any change. Best of luck and thanks for writing. If I can help in any way, let me know.
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautifully written poem full of visual delights. I loved this, it flows and rings with the season. Stay safe and keep writing.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I really don't know which way you are coming from but you certainly have a lot to say about the destruction of our democracy .I agree with you about that. I am watching news right now showing that over 300,000 of our citizens have died and Russian hackers have breached our cybersecurity. Our current President only speaks of a fraudulent election. All judges and the electoral college have found there wasn't significant fraud. Now maybe some people are wrong but I want to be optimistic about this and hope for a healing going forward.


What I liked most: a well written poem with an emotional tone
A mountain too high
For the sacred powers that be;
But a disservice to America,
Not upholding the promise
Of these pivotal elections.

If the clear winner is not the person taking charge that would be a miscarriage of justice.


Suggestions for change: None

This writing made me feel: I really am confused where you are coming from. I just want all people to wear masks, get vaccines, and then the economy and our USA can get back to some semblance of normal. We are a strong people, very diverse, a land of immigrants that make America proud of its standing in the world, helping all nations. Stay safe and have a good holiday.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Love this! If I was judge, you would definitely win. This was imaginative, short, funny, and says it all about this past year and probably the next one also. Stay safe and creative. Happy Holidays! You're a winner!

Kat
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for entry "A Gawky Kid" 
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with SENIOR CENTER GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Beautiful history written with an artists touch. He will always be a legend, long after we are gone. You are so talented! Thanks for the lovely senses you stirred up so magnificently.

Kat
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Review of Fat Man Dreaming  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I am sitting here crying-this character has stolen my heart. Beautifully written and s honest though I wonder if Eddie is a figment of his imagination-maybe he is exaggerating. He said, no electricity. Maybe he is saying good-bye. I was confused as to whether this character or his daughter are even alive. Theses are crazy times. How many people are living like this? There are the forgotten ones all over that no one knows about. Yeck, I live in my robe every day-something I never thought I would do.


What I liked most: The loneliness and pain that comes through this writing just breaks my heart.




Suggestions for change: Noe-perfect




This writing made me feel: This crisis has made a change in all our lives and the response to it also. Will we ever get back to some kind of normal? Thanks for digging down to the bones of this whole war we are trying to fight. Stay safe.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
You know I love to read anything that you write. It always touches my core. We are close to the same age and how I remember the dog tags, just like the ones that were in my Dad's WW2 box along with a dead German's Luger gun (sp?). So they had to be there to identify our remains. It always reminds me of what those assault weapons did to those little children at Sandy Hook-Elementary what was left to bury? Those poor parents. I love how you write about the truth. Will it win in the end and sanitize this mess we are in? I hope we have learned some things. Those of us who seek truths are often sorry we went looking. All the wars and politics along with religion are frightening to delve into. But I don't want to live in a bubble like so many do.

You scored again with a great read and I am glad those soldiers made you feel safe. I felt that way also when my Dad would assure me. Later he told me some "truths" just like my 2 Iraq War veteran sons.

Hope we win this virus war soon, it is almost worse than the others. Stay safe and have a wonderful holiday!

Fondly,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love this, it is beyond wonderful. I was laughing my you know what off after reading this. Had to share with my husband. How clever you are!! I can't wait until they carry that man out of the WH. Stay safe and creative. You are a true artist with a great sense of humor.
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Review of Writing a Novel  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression:
I love this-great stream of consciousness writing and I have been here quite a few times. I think this is typical, hope you are braver than me and actually kept at it. I decided writing should be a hobby. The novel I tried went great then ended up going off into a dozen different directions. I had 8 chapters and was LOST.

What I liked most: I could relate to this so much. It was like I was inside your brain going around in circles.


Suggestions for change:None

This writing made me feel: Like I am not the only one. It's a good thing I have a steady income because I am no Edna Ferber, Maya Angelou, Emily Bronte, Sylvia Path or Kristin Hannah. Stay safe and keep writing-hope you get that wonderful letter.

Kat



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of A Happy Night  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I loved the story. Reminds me of Woody Guthrie sitting around a fire, sharing a bottle, talking with guys that had lost their jobs to factories being closed. Most due to big companies or automation or perhaps the depression. They would leave their families and jump the freight trains to find a better life. You climbed into the bodies of your characters and spoke for them. A talented and beautiful job of writing about the once thriving working class of America that bought stuff from the corporations. Then they were screwed and I don't know where we are anymore. Keep writing wonderful stories, the truth will set us free someday. Listen to Springsteen's "Ghost of Tom Joad", a personal favorite. Stay safe. Guthrie's guitar said, "this machine kills fascists"!
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is a very timely story and you did a great job of telling it, making it feel very real. I could imagine this happening and your visuals and characters are very well developed. The end was very heartbreaking. Excellent idea for this prompt. My brain went right to weddings. Good luck, you deserve to win. Stay safe.
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Beautifully written and very true. We do make our way in life if given a chance to do so. Blessed are those who have the examples put in front of them, the right education and a path to get there. We never know what will be handed to us upon our birth. Joseph Kennedy said to his children "To whom much is given, much is expected". I believe this pearl of wisdom was started a long time before the Kennedys. But it is true.
Some are born disabled (look at poor Rosemary Kennedy whose father approved a lobotomy to "repair" her). Some possibly become disabled by parents that are addicted or had a hard time themselves as children. We all need to work together to make sure all children are given possibilities, an equal playing field according to their ability. I love that you said we are all connected, that is so true. When that can happen this will be a much better world. I remain optimistic that will be our future. Imagine the whole world, a promised land, that we can all make possible together. Thanks for the read. Stay safe.

Kat
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Review of OUR WORLD  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
You are too young to have to worry about all this stuff. It is good that you are speaking about it though. I am old enough to be your grandmother and have seen a lot. I have been keeping a diary since I was your age. It is filled with fun activities like skating with a boy I liked and the teacher I didn't, complaining about my parents being too strict and music lyrics LOL There was a lot going on then also with Russia and the Cold War, racial unrest, Vietnam War but we were kind of shielded from it all. Social media puts it all in your face. My grandchildren worry also. I have seen a lot and I am very optimistic-we made it through all kinds of wars, disease, bad politicians, etc and we prevailed. We will again!!! Keep the HOPE! You are a very talented writer-keep writing and enjoy being young-it only happens once.

Kat
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Review of Substitutes  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I loved this, so touching and funny. You are a really talented writer. Was beginning to think your character had Alzheimer's by the end of the story. Once an RN, always an RN so it was that real. Stay safe.

Kat
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Review of Starfall  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this poem. It overflows the senses with visual beauty. A lovely journey of a life with metaphors galore. You are a very talented writer. At least that is my interpretation of this writing. It flows with words like stars in the night's sky. Images such as jewels in life, and then stones that we stumble across. Reminds me of Springsteens "Stones in my Mouth" when he speaks about telling lies.

Hanging in the pitchest night,
just begging stars to burn
Diamonds spun in the light,
as facets twist and turn

so when the thunder starts to climb,
and minds, they start to roam
Cherish when those stars align,
... make the runes your own

This is beautifully written, a tale of one life in this huge Universe of ours. Thanks for the read. I had to give it an award. Stay safe and creative.

Kat
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Review of Crossing Over  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I know I have read this before but maybe not. You are so immensely talented in your writing. I can see this so clearly, so many patients that I have sat by beds and wondered about their lives. I guess that curiosity is what drives us, as writers, to find out all we can about others. I love to hear and read stories and feel sorry for people who don't understand that. From one storyteller to another, keep writing, listening and spreading the love where ever you take your talent. Stay safe.

Hugs,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: What a bittersweet tale told as a metaphor for growing older. You are such a talented writer that you slipped the bitter right in with what seemed like a winning idea. Kind of like the older woman who keeps going for cosmetic surgery and when she appears at a reunion, all her old friends hate rather than envy her.


What I liked most: This piece has all the best; humor, emotions, rhymes, rhythm and flows well. I don't know if someone young could understand this. I want to laugh but also cry.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: Like my future is as an old unhappy turkey. Nah, this is a great poem that I enjoyed and could relate to. Thanks for the read. Stay safe and enjoy the holidays.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Sour Milk  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression:
You are an extremely talented writer. I am reading "Homegoing" by Yaa Gyasi right now. It has won several awards and your writing reminds me of hers. To be able to write in first person by a abused child and have it sound authentic is such a gift. Everyone should read this because they don't have any idea of what children go through. I am an activist retired RN, pro-choice because I have seen this in the hospital 1st hand, helped with a Rape Crisis Center and had a good friend abused as a child and heard her stories. People don't know how common this is; poverty and addiction contribute to it. I am also a recovering addict and families tend to continue this with the next generation.

What I liked most: You have a marvelous ability to put yourself in another person's brain. I hope you weren't a victim yourself. You have the inner dialogue as perfect as I can imagine it. Most of these children will not talk since they don't trust. Many don't make it out like your character didn't. Poor innocent children; action is needed. I love what you wrote at the end.




Suggestions for change:
None, It is such a heartbreaking story, it is perfect.



This writing made me feel: I am crying but that doesn't help. To volunteer and if you see something, say something, are the best things you can do or donate. Thanks for writing this. It is a beautiful tribute to a tiny courageous child. Stay safe. Keep writing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is a beautiful poem that stirs many emotions. I think you have to be a certain age to try appreciate the life we are given and what we do with it. This flows beautifully and rhymes. I didn't notice any errors. Thank you for writing this beautiful poem. Hope you had a wonderful Thanksgiving and stay safe.
Congratulations on winning 1st place.

Fondly,
Kat
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for entry "~ SURPRISE ~" 
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
A beautiful story about family love. That was very sweet of you, as a child, to throw a party for your Mom. Not many children would have done that. It reminds me of a time my dad was out of town and sent my Mom roses for their anniversary. I was about ten and I signed for them. Mom was at the store, I think. Anyway, they were in a box tied with a bow. I didn't know any better and stuck them in a closet. I totally forgot when she got home and went out to play. He comes home the next day and asked her. The roses were dead from no water. I was so upset I guess my parents didn't want to punish me. Anyway your story reminded me. Kids have good ideas and just don't know adult things.
I really enjoyed reading this and can imagine how delighted your Mom must have been at the restaurant. Most people want their birthdays acknowledged but they usually downplay it. Each year is a gift, a present of life. Stay safe and keep writing.
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this, few words yet says so much. That is always a satisfying work of literature. This is a poem to live by. No errors seen and I took the words to heart. Thank you. Stay safe and creative.

Kat
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Review of Invisible  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Love this piece, you really zoom into emotions and I can relate. This is so my husband, talk fast and you have about 3 minutes. It is very frustrating when someone does this to you and rude. If a relationship starts out this way, you better leave it. Mine didn't used to be so after many, many years I can tolerate it but let him know. You have a consistent flow to this although it is quite free verse, no errors in grammar and punctuation. Thanks for the read and hope this is fiction, if not, make a stand. Stay safe.

Kat
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