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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I was impressed with this lesson in learning about becoming a leader. Your metaphors, using the jungle with the hierarchy of animals, was a good example. Fear does contribute to both animal and human behavior as far as who is above them in the chain of superiority.


What I liked most: Your nine points about being a leader have credibility. I think there are some other qualities like knowledge that needs to be added. Also surrounding yourself with either people or references to refer to. I think we are talking about a successful leader with integrity here.




Suggestions for change:
You do have quite a few grammar and punctuation mistakes that need to be corrected. A leader needs check and recheck whatever information he/she is putting out for accuracy.



This writing made me feel: I enjoyed reading this and believe you make some really good points. Many leaders are chosen for different reasons. Whether you can do the task depends on a variety of things, mostly your interest and enthusiasm. People want to listen to someone they can believe in and will create change that helps the majority of others' lives. Stay safe and creative.


Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I had to read this twice to take it all in and reconcile it with what has been going through my brain. Things are changing quickly but not very organized. Revolution is never organized though and utopia will not be around the corner for anyone, except the rich and powerful that have always had the advantage. You did a remarkable job of pointing out the facts of how we have landed where we are. This country has been built on a slave market and religion backed it up. It is so disgusting to see how Christianity was used to keep the save in their place because they believed in a heaven where they would be free. So the older blacks have always clung to their Christian values.


What I liked most: I like the way you used plays, movies and historical facts to make your points. I remember going to the theater with my Mom to see "Guess who's coming to Dinner?" I am in Atlanta, and the theater wasn't very packed with white patrons. As a matter of fact, the theater was still segregated. We had moved from MI so GA was very different but, there was discrimination in the North also.




Suggestions for change: I don't really have any suggestions. This is a very detailed piece that required concentration so it will have a specific reader that is interested.




This writing made me feel: More educated about some things I had not thought of. Having lived here in the Deep South for over 60 years, the preservation of the Confederacy and heritage is a major part of their history. The fact that these peoples ancestors fought and lost their lives for a terrible miscarriage of justice isn't an easy pill to swallow. I think it is going to take another generation to reconcile to this. Great article that I enjoyed reading. Stay safe and creative.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
If you were writing this piece to give people information, you really should have footnotes, don't you think? The following is what I have found out. During the final three minutes, Floyd was motionless and had no pulse while Chauvin ignored onlookers' pleas to remove his knee, which he did not do until medics told him to. At the point where he was found to be pulseless, no move was made to do CPR on him so that is intention. These policemen knew without medical intervention, the man was dead.

The following day, after videos made by witnesses and security cameras became public, all four officers were fired. Two autopsies found Floyd's death to be a homicide. Chauvin was initially charged with third-degree murder and second-degree manslaughter, to which was later added second-degree murder; the three other officers were charged with aiding and abetting second-degree murder.

I am not going to get into the other situation except to say that it wasn't handled very well and a man is dead that didn't have to be. A tazer is not a weapon that normally causes death unless the person hit has an underlying heart condition. Besides there was the choice to have let the man run-they could have gone after him since they had all his information. Policing needs to be changed obviously, after this type of thing has happened time after time. There was the other case in Brunswick GA that had just happened and that was a deliberate killing of a black man by a retired white cop. Are we really surprised people are angry?

As far as the arson and looting, that is against the law and people should be and were arrested. Non-violent protest is our right in America under the Constitution. This is not the first time that rioting has happened here in America. Change always seems to come only with heavy protest and even violence sadly.

The Confederate monuments should have been removed a long time ago and put into a museum. I don't know why they have stayed up this long. There are several that have been defaced or broken that shouldn't have been but that will be taken care of and it is against the law. I guess I am more concerned with people's lives.

Pretty good article, there were some grammar errors. I think you and I look at this differently but that is okay. That is America, no one said we have to be on the same side all the time. I do want peace and change, it is needed, Stay safe and creative.

Kat
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Review of Heroes  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: This is so sad yet it makes me angry. You did a wonderful job of writing about those who made the ultimate sacrifice. I was going through your port and everything seems to be about the military but I didn't see a biography. I am assuming you are a vet and if so, I thank you for your service. You touched me with this poem.


What I liked most: I am patriotic; my Dad fought in WW2 and come home after liberating Dachua. Two of my sons served in Afghanistan and Iraq. Both are now retired military and have PTSD among other problems. I am proud of them but angry about the circumstances. One was in a Humvee when it was hit and he was injured seriously. I like your writing and would like to know more about you. I have done so much reading about the wars that we have been involved in and believe the statement; old men start wars and young men die in them. I am sure you get what I mean.

Suggestions for change: None


This writing made me feel: Anytime you touch a reader with emotions, you are doing your job as a writer. I am impressed with your writing. Stay safe and creative.


Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of One Voice  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I am interested and want to find out what happens. You have set up an intriguing scenario. There is one sentence you might want to alter. You write: He invents an alter-ego, an aggressive rock icon who challenges the world with his course, dynamic music. Did you mean to say coarse? I am interested in knowing what is so different between these two personalities. As a lover of all music, if you get musicians together, they have more in common than what divides them. A struggling singer songwriter that sings mellow "protest" music is not so different from an aggressive rock icon who also sings his own form of "protest music". Now if you have a "christian" type singer and a rap or heavy metal icon who sings about gangs, sex and drugs. But these two can have a lot in common also-depends on the lyrics and background of the singer. Am I making sense? We donut people into categories. It is an interesting concept though. Let me know when Chapter one comes out, please. Stay safe and creative.

Kat
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Review of Hospital  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I believe you have experienced this situation yourself or you have a very accurate imagination. You put me right into the room with the patient, feeling his fear, anxiety, even modesty. A superb job of writing, using the readers senses. Since I have been an ill patient and also was an RN in a hospital for over 20 years, this is very real. It is so sad that most of us can't accept the fact of illness, even in a hospital, and keep trying to do the "right" thing. Like illness is something that makes us a weak person and we can't have that. Of course, that is a fighting spirit and we need to have hope.


What I liked most: I felt so very sorry for this man, wanting to help him so much. That is the best thing a writer can do; stir the emotions of a reader.




Suggestions for change: You have a few grammar and spelling mistakes that you probably missed.




This writing made me feel: You said you wanted to paint a picture and you achieved that goal. You put it on the canvas and then added feelings. Wonderful read. Stay safe and creative.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Monochromatic  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Nicely written poem about the racist sin that has covered America since Europeans came here. This emotional read certainly brings up some facts that people want to deny. It flows well and rhymes and strikes a chord of discontent that the poem is meant to send.


What I liked most: I agree with most of your points and this is one big mess. I hope we will be able to finally make some progress.




Suggestions for change:I don't have any.




This writing made me feel: I do have to say that half of the police force in most cities are people of color. I believe we have allowed the police to become loose with their own rules and have become more brutal. Racism is a problem along with covering for fellow cops for bad behavior. I think frustration with the thankless job is part of this, the pay isn't that good and you do risk your life. Not an excuse but it is complicated. I am older and can remember ministers in the Deep South talking about the "coloreds" being inferior to whites so religion has been used also. Very good poem and keep writing. Stay safe.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Paths  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Chris-

I really like this. It flows nicely and I can feel the emotions and your frustration with life. My only suggestion is change your spelling of loose to lose. Other than that, it is really good piece of writing. Hope you are having a good day! Keep writing.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: You are a wonderful poet and have a beautiful soul. This poem gave me hope on a day when I am crying thinking our country is going to self destruct. It flows and rhymes and is filled with love.


What I liked most: We need more of this in our world right now-this feeling that there is a time when all will be able to live in peace with integrity. You are an amazing writer.




Suggestions for change: None-perfection plus achieved




This writing made me feel: Like I walked from a terrible thunderstorm into a sweet gentle rain and there is a rainbow ahead. Thanks for your service. I have 2 sons that are veterans and my Dad served in WW2 and a fiancee in Nam. Take good care of you, wear a mask and keep writing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Interloper  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression:
Now this is exquisite writing. The point of nothing really lasts in this world of ours. Beauty is fleeting, in the eye of the beholder and nature has its own playbook. Some of the most wonderous visions in the world last only a short amount of time.

What I liked most: Writing that makes me use my senses is the best. When I must read and visualize something several times to take it all in makes it more valuable.




Suggestions for change: None.




This writing made me feel: This piece is a metaphor for life and our idea of what is worthy to behold. You are a very talented writer. Thanks for the read. By the way, dive deeper into my port, you might find a jewel among silly stuff. Stay safe and creative.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of You are Strong.  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: You have brought me to tears with this poem. I hope that is not autobiographical. I do know it is incredibly real because of my own 67 years of real life, many as an RN working with women. You captured all the frustration, pain, loneliness, and regret into this poem. I believe you have taken a tear filled towel and wrung it dry.


What I liked most: I love it when a writer can put themselves into another persons situation and touch a reader. You hit that high mark with several of your writings. You are excellent at it.




Suggestions for change: I will tell you what I have been told-read this aloud several times, delete unnecessary words (and is one). You will find the poem packs more punch (sorry, not a great word for this subject :>)




This writing made me feel: I am on the floor trying to stand up again. We do not give up and that is the hope you leave your reader with. Your main character has that strength also. Stay safe and keep writing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I loved this piece for a couple of reasons and the first is your writing. I felt like you were speaking to me in person and I like that approach. It relaxes the reader and I became interested in the story you were telling. You are a very good writer that gets to the point without unnecessary words or wandering into other territory. I say this because it is a problem for me. The other reason is because I love coffee shops period. The ones that are connected to book stores are my favorites. You can get something yummy, find a solitary seat and read or write. Most people look at books or their phones, so quiet prevails. Keep writing and try their Chai Latte Classic, excellent but overpriced.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
First of all, I hope you are feeling better. Now I am going to rant-I am a Registered Nurse that has done many basic physicals on patients, I feel like this is dangerous medicine. I don't know what questions were asked about your symptoms, was this a call where the physician could see you and at least look into your mouth. There isn't any way he could have seen deep into your throat to see if it was swollen and red. I guess that you might have had a slight fever that you used a thermometer yourself. I guess you must have coughed for him/her but there wasn't a stethoscope to listen for breath sounds and you can also hear heart sounds that way. What about your blood pressure, did you count your own pulse. Was any lab work done? There is so much you can tell by looking into someone's eyes, ears, listening, feeling their skin, looking at their skin color and general appearance. Checking all their pulses and the quality of the heartbeat. I just had a tele call with my neurologist to get my prescriptions filled. It had been a year but nothing on me was new-same disorder, same medication, no blood work needed but he couldn't do a neurologist exam. These physicians and PA's are not magicians that can see through the phone. I think it is convenient but dangerous and I am surprised their malpractice insurance covers it. Done with rant-hope you feel better soon. Great piece of writing-got me stirred up. Crazy world we are living in.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression:
This was a charming piece of writing that was light and a joy to read.

What I liked most:I am a mother-in-law x 4 and am pretty sure I know of one daughter-in-law that might order that chair for me. I have had 2 mother-in-laws and the 1st one had a real problem with me for taking her son away from her. She had a girl all picked out for him already and we ran off-she had never even met me. The marriage lasted 20 years and we learned to stay out of each others way. This was so funny and made me think of her! That is exactly what would have happened if I had done something for her.




Suggestions for change:None




This writing made me feel: Light and that is a nice feeling right now with all the stuff going on in our world I think it is great that you make furniture. My 1st husband used to build most of our furniture-beautiful pieces that I wish I still had. My son has the rolled top desk that he made-birch with a pine stain. I admire the craft so much, you are really creative. Stay safe and keep writing. I have a fun piece called King of my Pond. It is funny, short and light that you might enjoy.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: You touched my heart with this poem. Great words that flow, rhyme and speak the truth.


What I liked most: The emotion that is visceral throughout. I love the last lines where you say you are white etc. That is important!




Suggestions for change:None




This writing made me feel:very emotional, tearful for this poor helpless man who was murdered before our eyes. I have been on this earth for 67 years and have never seen anything so heartless. There was nothing anyone could do about the Kennedy shootings, MLK, or the 9/11 terrorist attack. But to hear those people beg those cops to stop and hear George call for his mother, say "you're killing me" "I can't breathe". Those cops did that for 8 whole minutes knowing they were killing him. Who does that? Well written!!



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of The New War  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
You have wonderful insight here and I agree with you completely. I have never heard of what distress we are coping with now put quite this way but it is true. I wonder how you feel about this piece since the Covid crisis plus the unemployment with the shutdown and now, the racial unrest. I really worry about this country and if we can make it through all of this on top of the problems we already had. Nice writing, wish it could be more positive. Stay safe and creative.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I like the story. The plot is a good one and I am glad that it ended on a happy note. It kept my attention and I could feel the love between the main character and the woman that was left behind. I always loved the movie "Ghost" and thought of it but this was different in that she thought the man she loved had just left her without an explanation. The description of her looking through the photo book was very good.


What I liked most:
The light of her love and the other light, that pulled me closer to it each and every day.
Couldn’t she see the permanent blood that stained his hands?
My heart leapt in my chest, my anger cursed through my veins as I wanted to jump and kill this man who was trying to steal away my wife after he stole my life.
I love the ending-The very last paragraph is perfect and made me cry.



Suggestions for change:When you review me I want you to be honest, so here goes. Just my opinion, okay? This is what you wrote-I watched as she opened a photo album and leafed through the pages slowly. At some pages she stopped. I saw a tear fall from eye. At some pages I saw a smile cross her face, as she looked upon the pages with such love and devotion that all I had felt was pain. Don’t get me wrong though, it wasn’t a bad pain to most. My heart felt a flutter just knowing that even a picture could still bring a smile to her face. She missed me that much was obvious to me. Lord how I missed her and longed to be able to hold her tightly in my arms and once again know everything would be all right.

Another way to go with less words.

I watched as she slowly looked through our photo albums. I could see the tears in her brown (hazel) eyes. Then sometimes she would smile, her beautiful mouth that I wanted to kiss again. The love she had was so profound that it caused me physical pain. But I was glad there were so many happy memories, that a photo would bring a look of joy, even a laugh. She really missed me. How I desperately wanted to hold her and reassure her everything would be all right.

What you have is fine but I think if you read it out loud you can cut out some words. Do a spell check also.



This writing made me feel: Emotional-I can fee the love, anger and frustration at what happened to the two of you.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Your monologue was really timely in that it brought up many points that need to be considered during this time of social unrest. It is worth a good debate because each of us has an opinion of what is "morally bankrupt and reprehensible". Morals differ depending on what you are taught.

Peaceful protest is our right as citizens and we treasure that right. Now when it comes to arson and looting, that is against our laws. The criminals that took what did not belong to them or destroyed other people's property should have to pay the price in fines and/or jail time. Many of them posted bail and await sentencing. The monuments that are being destroyed mostly belong to the public taxpayers so the laws are different. Defacing public property would be the charge. We do have a system of justice but that is one of the problems right now. It has to be repaired to stop what is going on. If the killing, on cameras, of a unarmed man in handcuffs with his head down had not happened we wouldn't be where we are. That should have never happened and it wasn't the first time so there is a problem with the "law enforcement area" of our justice system.

You must remember that many who are destroying property are not even protesters against police brutality. They are agitators that belong to groups that consistently break laws and cause disruption.

Speaking of a higher power is only considered in the separation of church and state. We do have freedom of religion and can worship as we wish or not. Each of us has a different view of "bad" behavior. The military should not be used against our own citizens unless lives are in danger. That is what is done in authoritarian countries and innocent people could die as a result.

Our Constitution does not need to include punishment for breaking the law because it already calls for three branches of government: the Executive, Legislative and the Judicial. Since we have a judicial branch we have the ability to make laws as "we, the people" need for a democratic society that is constantly changing, So do the laws. Just thought I would point that out.

Thanks for writing this. I think we, as a civilized society, would be much better off sitting down and listening to those who feel they don't have a voice. That way we can decide how to move forward in peace towards a more fair and just world.

Peace, stay safe and creative.

Kat
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Review of Kiss the Wind  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression:
This is so beautifully written. Your descriptions are wonderful and allow me to picture this in my mind. I can feel the very movement of the air and time racing by.

What I liked most: My favorite part:
and in a race,
against each other
or against the sweeping
hand of Time,
we ran like ripples of wind
and currents of water




Suggestions for change:None




This writing made me feel: Light and calm which is difficult for me. You are a wonderful writer with lovely prose and an effortless flow of words that paints a picture.


Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of All the Time  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I admire people who have this kind of faith. It is a wonderful thing to rely on in times of trouble and peace.. This poem is a true testament to your faith.


What I liked most:
The passion behind your words isn't always spoken but there. Beautifully felt and written.



Suggestions for change:None




This writing made me feel: I am very happy for you that you have such faith. I have always been one to argue with my minister about everything and he would keep saying "you have to have faith, not all the answers are here for us to know!" Stay safe and creative. Thanks for reading my work-I am sure that you have found I include my own faith in a lot of my poetry and stories. It is just a fragile thing for me to hold to.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression:
You have that magic combination of making me laugh and get upset with you. I love that you question some of the same things I do. As long as I have questions, I will continue to seek answers. Lady Gaga is a wonderful singer that watched everything Madonna did and went after it. She can sing better than Madonna, I'll give her that. She is also very bright and knows how to run her own business-a smart independent woman and I admire that.

What I liked most: I like your style of writing, you make me smile.

Suggestions for change:Stop being a pig about her physical attributes. MEN!!!



This writing made me feel: Like we are friends who are writers about what amazes and drives us crazy. Keep on writing!!! Stay safe.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of My old friend  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I know your old friend quite intimately and it is powerful and painful and ruins lives. I have gone to a few overdose funerals and taken my teenage sons to a couple of their friends. That is the hardest, what do you say to their parents? Your poem made me cry because I understand so well. You have the raw emotions to write.

What I liked most: The raw emotions are perfect. It is a constant fight and I hope you have help. You can't do it alone!

Suggestions for change:None


This writing made me feel: Very sorry because I don't want to see anyone go through this. I am tired of crying over people that I love. This is reality and I love writers that deal with reality. That is the way to heal this crazy world. Truth, reality and compassion for your fellow brother or sister One day at a time or one minute, Keep fighting, praying, going to meetings, reading the Big Book or whatever gets you through. It is the only way to win this one! Consider me a new friend, ok?


Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Wonderful writing. I am so sorry you do not write anymore. I know a stroke can be devastating, did it affect you writing ability? Can you use a microphone or does it affect your thought and/or speech pattern also? I don't mean to be nosy, it is the RN part of me. I worked on a Rehab Unit for awhile and was amazed at the resilience of so many CVA patients-strong and pushing to get back. It is very hard work.I do know sometimes it's that so much has been damaged. I am glad that you can still read and review.

What I liked most: The metaphor of a tree for a life is always good. This uses a good flow of words, rhyme and rhythm. Love the following:
Recalling days long since past and gone.
When its special beauty greeted each dawn.




Suggestions for change:None




This writing made me feel: It is interesting that you use a dead tree. That is like the grave, an ending. There isn't any hope left here, so sad. A very good write that requires some thought. Stay safe and creative.


Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Reading this was such a treat. There are women like Mrs. Johnson that radiate happiness into other people's lives with their own tranquility and love. My Grandmother was such a person. You did a lovely job of writing here with descriptions, trips down memory lane, a life very well lived. Of course, Mrs. Johnson probably was not as perfect as she might have seemed to everyone but that doesn't matter here. She was a joy to those that knew her and that point comes across.


What I liked most: I loved this story for the smile it put on my face. I saw my Grandma who had rosy cheeks, was always ready for a hug or to listen, taught me how to crotchet, made homemade treats and we watched her "daytime stories" together. Her life had been very hard, a sharecropper with 9 children but she never complained. That was because those people had lived through tough times and survived. Life seemed so simple in the 1950's and early 1960's (for some of us). You captured a slice of that wonderful life we are nostalgic for.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: Happy thoughts of my own childhood. You are a really good writer that can put your reader into the story, visualize what is happening and feel the main character's feelings. Thanks for 2 great escapes for today. Stay safe and creative. Visit my port sometime. I believe we are about the same age.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of The Shoe  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: A creative sweet story that I enjoyed. You do a very good job with "show don't tell", something I have a problem with. I like to learn from others. This story was short enough to want to invest my time, kept simple but had a plot that kept me interested. I like the way you ended it on an optimistic note and I made up my own conclusion. This guy meets a girl and 40 years later, they are telling this story to their grandchildren.


What I liked most: The feelings that are shown with the disappointment over the job loss and then the flirting with the pretty waitress. The possibility that all will end well.


Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: Happy and optimistic which is something we can all use a little of these crazy days when the news seems to scream "fire raging now take your political view about it". Thanks for blue skies in the time of turbulent storms. There is a rainbow, after all. Stay safe and creative.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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