My only hope is that this review teaches me something about the writer, helps the writer to improve, helps me to improve my own writing and encourages others to read the piece and give their valuable input.
When I state that a poem is a good poem, what do I mean?
This poem is good because:
It has certain qualities that I find admirable It does something technically difficult very well It is a well-crafted and thought-out expression of language It appeals and I agree with its message It moves me emotionally It gives me a clear movie like picture image in my mind
Elements I am covering :
IMAGERY, VOICE AND TONE-
I love the images that you use in this poem. I feel that the voice and tone in this piece fit the poem.
RHYTHM-
I found the rhythm in your piece to be great.
LINE BREAKS-
The piece uses effective end-stopped lines that have strong end-words that allow me to pause long enough to consider the line.
WORD MUSIC-
"To the sea –
To the ever inconsistent sea –"
I love your use of repetition of the first couple of words and the last word in the first two lines of each stanza. They bring me back to the next line and focus on the theme.
I really do love this poem and I actually added it to my favorites! I feel a need to read this over and over, learn from this piece and even give this style a try. Thanks so much for righting such a great piece!-Kat
To all, I hope you have a great day that’s filled with tons of fun things to write, read, rate and review!-Kat
This is the last piece I'll be reviewing in your port raid!
I love this piece! It really is one of my favorites!
This poem is good because:
It has certain qualities that I find admirable It does something technically difficult very well It is a well-crafted and thought-out expression of language It reminds me of something else I really like (history lesson told in poem form!) It teaches me something new and surprises me. It moves me emotionally It gives me a clear movie like picture image in my mind
The Six Basic Elements of a Poem :
IMAGERY, THEME, DISCOURSE, VOICE AND TONE-
I think you did a great job on the terms of imagery. I really feel that this piece read like a movie. It was actually exciting for me because I was wanting to know what was going to happen during this story. The discourse held my attention and was well done. The theme was heartbreaking. I just love things about the past. The voice and tone showed fear and sorrow.
RHYTHM-
The rhythm and meter in this piece worked really well.
LINE BREAKS-
The line breaks in this piece worked for this piece and moved the story along.
FIGURES OF SPEECH-
I found no concerns for this area.
WORD MUSIC-
The rhyme in this piece helped keep me interested.
FORMAL STRUCTURES-
The formal structure of this piece is a pantoum. I found that the piece followed this structure and was well done.
I love this piece and the story that it tells. I even looked up the link and all. Very interesting! I have completely enjoyed this raid of your port and will be stopping by again! hugs!-Kat
To all, I hope you have a great day that’s filled with tons of fun things to write, read, rate and review!-Kat
Oh, now I really like this one too! I know what you mean by length. I really don't personally feel that a poem should be any length. This one is perfect with the amount of stanzas and lines it has. I think it carries enough on the terms of emotion and imagery. I found no errors in grammar or spelling and found that the piece flowed very well. I completely understand why you would write this for your children.-Kat
Wow, I thought this was another well down poem! I love the imagery that you added to the piece. The theme of yearning for home and not taking things for granted are clearly shown. This was well written, the meter, rhythm and rhyme all flowed and the voice and tone supported the piece. I love it!-Kat
This was so well done. I love how this shape works out with the rhyme, rhythm and meter. I think all three of those areas are well done. I found no grammar or spelling errors either. The end words are well placed and give this piece and emotional feel. I can tell how much you love your fur babies while reading this piece.-Kat
I'm still making my way through your port and have to say that I love this piece!
This poem is good because:
It has certain qualities that I find admirable It is a well-crafted and thought-out expression of language It appeals and I agree with its message It describes my life and fits my thinking It gives me a clear movie like picture image in my mind
The Six Basic Elements of a Poem :
IMAGERY, THEME, DISCOURSE, VOICE AND TONE-
I love the images in this poem. They caught my attention really quickly. I love that you used them to work on the theme of writing. The discourse throughout was just well done. The voice and tone supported the piece.
RHYTHM-
Your rhythm and meter was well done in this piece.
LINE BREAKS-
I like your use of line breaks. They allowed for the piece to flow and also added breaks for reflection.
FIGURES OF SPEECH-
Your use of figures of speech were well done and kept the piece from sounding cliche
WORD MUSIC-
I love the rhyme that you used in this poem. It keeps the piece soft and yet keeps it moving.
FORMAL STRUCTURES-
I could not find a formal structure to this poem and none was given.
I think that you did a great job on this piece! It is my favorite piece of work that I have read from you! I love it!
To all, I hope you have a great day that’s filled with tons of fun things to write, read, rate and review!-Kat
I'm just dropping by your port and giving you a port raid!
Theme
I love the message in this piece! It's so clear and easy to understand. I think it's a great message to teach children. To stop and make friends with someone you don't know cus you never know, maybe they can be your best friend.
Form
I really like the form that you used for this piece.
Grammar
I could find no grammar or spelling mistakes in this piece.
Most Liked
"There's a new kid who moved in on the block,
He looks really funny, because he wears silly socks."
I love these lines! They instantly drew me into the story.
Suggestions
My only suggestion would be with the second to last stanza. It seems off to me, too many extra beats.
Personal Thoughts
I think this is a cute children's piece!
I hope you enjoyed hearing my opinion about the piece! If you have any questions please feel free to contact me! Hugs!-Kat
I thought this was great! I wanna say thank you for coming into chat and joining the real time poetry contest! I'm giving you first place! This poem tells a great story and I love the imagery your words bring. I think you did a great job in the 15 mins allowed! keep up the work!-Kat
I'm just dropping by your port and checking things out. Decided I give you a review!
Theme
You clearly show how love is blind even to the aching pains that it provides.
Form
I love the form that you used for this piece. It makes this poem easy to read and follow.
Grammar
I could not find any area's of concern in grammar or spelling.
Most Liked
"My unwavering hand hotly scored,
The scars renewed and brought forth."
I found the above stanza to be my favorite. I love the rhyme used and the meaning of the section.
Suggestions
For me, the last two stanzas felt off and did not seem to flow or fit as well as the first two. I suggest rereading it and seeing if you get the same impression.
Personal Thoughts
I think that this was a great piece that took the theme and presented it in a neat and original way. Great job!
I hope you enjoyed hearing my opinion about the piece Legger! If you have any questions please feel free to contact me. You know you can find me in chat! Hugs!-Kat
Format: I love the format that you used for this poem. It really breaks it down nicely.
Content: I think the theme is clearly presented. I did notice that you changed the voice up. You went from addressing you mother to talking about her to back to addressing her. That change up felt odd to me.
Pluses: I love your use of rhyme in this piece and I could also find no errors in grammar or spelling.
Suggestions:I thought that the rhythm was a little off. I began to stumble around a bit.
Finale Thoughts:I think this was sweet! I loved it and even thought to myself "I wish my kids would write me something like this!". Great job!
I hope that you enjoyed my thoughts on your piece Kirstie!-Kat
I'm just dropping by your port and giving a review.
Theme
Wanted to say that I really like the theme of this piece. It's a subject that touches my heart and one I think about often.
Form
The form in this piece was also nicely done and put together.
Grammar
I could not find any issues with grammar or spelling.
Most Liked
"But history will repeat itself should humanity restart,
And they all shall proceed to tear the world apart."
Suggestions
No suggestions here.
Personal Thoughts
I feel that the theme of this poem was great but at the same time the rhyme seemed force and produced sentences that didn't fit well with the rest of the poem.
"The men will fight from far and away;
They’ll only waste time night and day."
The above is just one of the lines that I thought didn't work. It just seemed like you were looking for something to rhyme with away.
The rhyme in the piece was just too noticeable for me and took away from the theme at times.
I hope you enjoyed hearing my opinion about the piece! If you have any questions please feel free to contact me, I'll be in chat! Hugs!-Kat
Hello Jolly! I'm taking another look into your port!
My only hope is that this review teaches me something about the writer, helps the writer to improve, helps me to improve my own writing and encourages others to read the piece and give their valuable input.
When I state that a poem is a good poem, what do I mean?
This poem is good because:
It is a well-crafted and thought-out expression of language It appeals and I agree with its message It describes my life and fits my thinking It moves me emotionally It gives me a clear movie like picture image in my mind
The Six Basic Elements of a Poem :
IMAGERY, THEME, DISCOURSE, VOICE AND TONE-
The images in this poem are well done. I was able to get a movie like picture going through my mind. The discourse is well done. The theme is clear and the voice and tone support the piece.
RHYTHM-
Thanks for telling me about the free form of the rhythm!
LINE BREAKS-
I think that the line breaks were done well and added to the piece.
FIGURES OF SPEECH-
Your use of figures of speech gave me new connections to the item at hand.
WORD MUSIC-
I found that this area was great and well done throughout the poem.
FORMAL STRUCTURES-
I could not find a formal structure to this poem and none was given.
I liked this piece and really was impressed by the use of imagery. I think you did a great job on this piece.
To all, I hope you have a great day that’s filled with tons of fun things to write, read, rate and review!-Kat
Hello to my dear chattie friend! Carry, just wanted to give my thoughts about your piece. Don't worry,shouldn't take long, they are just my thoughts...hehehe!
Ok!! First Impressions: I thought that this was well written. I love the fact that you did it off of mostly purely dialogue. It seems more like a intro though.
Mechanics/Typos (ack! I'm no editor!): I couldn't find any typos or anything of that sort.
Flow/Content(I promise not to rewrite your story!): I think that this flowed really well! I never was confused by who was talking or who was giving the action. Great job on this!
Favorite line/s(Oh, which one will it be):
Here it is!
"“Yes, it is!” she cried, her voice muffled by the pillow, “You cheat… it’s YOUR choice, therefore YOUR fault.”"
How true is that statement!
Overall (here I go thinking again. Watch out!...lol!):Ok, overall I think that this was well written. I do though have one suggestion. Since this involves two people, I feel that I need to know more about them. At first I thought this was an issue about a father trying to explain to his daughter why he was leaving (divorce). For me all the statements can fit into that setting. I also didn't understand the ending. "I guess not..." said by the man and her recalling her actions. It left me wondering if he did cheat or not.
Ok, I really, really hope that this review is helpful. I hope that it helped you get an idea of what I liked and disliked and why. Any questions-feel free to ask me right on chat! Until then, ON WARD WITH THE WRITING MY FRIEND!
Hello Jolly! I'm taking another look into your port!
My only hope is that this review teaches me something about the writer, helps the writer to improve, helps me to improve my own writing and encourages others to read the piece and give their valuable input.
When I state that a poem is a good poem, what do I mean?
This poem is good because:
It is a well-crafted and thought-out expression of language It appeals and I agree with its message It describes my life and fits my thinking It moves me emotionally It gives me a clear movie like picture image in my mind
The Six Basic Elements of a Poem :
IMAGERY, THEME, DISCOURSE, VOICE AND TONE-
The images in this poem are well done. I was able to get a movie like picture going through my mind. The discourse is well done. The theme is clear and the voice and tone support the piece.
RHYTHM-
I thought that the rhythm and meter in this piece were off at times and caused me to stumble along the lines. I would just suggest that you reread and see if you feel the same.
LINE BREAKS-
I think that the line breaks were done well and added to the piece.
FIGURES OF SPEECH-
Your use of figures of speech gave me new connections to the item at hand.
WORD MUSIC-
I found that this area was great and well done throughout the poem.
FORMAL STRUCTURES-
I could not find a formal structure to this poem and none was given.
I liked this piece and really was impressed by the use of imagery. I think you did a great job on this piece.(
To all, I hope you have a great day that’s filled with tons of fun things to write, read, rate and review!-Kat
I'm just dropping by your port and giving a review hope you don't mind!
Theme
The theme of this piece is clear. I feel that it didn't come off forcefully which is great.
Form
I'm ok with the form used here. There were times when I thought that the little stanzas didn't work but other than that, it was put together pretty well.
Grammar
I couldn't find any grammar or spelling mistakes in this piece.
Most Liked
I think what I like the most about this piece is that all the ideas seemed original! I really did expect this to be filled with a bunch of "cliche's " but it wasn't! You came out with original ideas, phrases and symbols to get your point across. Great job!
Suggestions
My only suggestion is with the meter and rhyme. At times it seemed off to me but that could be due to me trying to follow the stanzas and such.
Personal Thoughts
I really was impressed to find so much original wording and phrases in this piece. I think you did a great job!
I hope you enjoyed hearing my opinion about the piece! If you have any questions please feel free to contact me, I'll be in chat! Hugs!-Kat
Hello Katie! Just wanted to give my thoughts about your piece. Don't worry,shouldn't take long, they are just my thoughts...hehehe!
Ok!! First Impressions: I thought that this was a well written piece of prose! It felt natural.
Mechanics/Typos (ack! I'm no editor!): I found nothing in this area that stood out.
Flow/Content(I promise not to rewrite your story!): This was clear and to the point. I found that the paragraphs flowed well and that the piece wasn't jumpy. The theme was also very clear.
Favorite line/s(Oh, which one will it be):
"If you feel that your words are not reaching out to anyone, you're wrong. Even if your words aren't heard by the people you want, remember that there are those who listen from the sidelines and want to know more about what you have to say. Your words can affect more people than you know, even if you don't see it."
These lines are so true!
Overall (here I go thinking again. Watch out!...lol!): I think this was a great piece and I like how you really got to the level of the reader, making them feel comfortable reading the piece, as if you really there helping them to relate.
Ok, that wasn't too bad was it? I hope not! I hope that it helped you get an idea of what I liked and disliked and why. Any questions-feel free to ask! Until then, ON WARD WITH THE WRITING MY FRIEND!
Format:I love the format that you used here. It works with splitting up each season and giving them their on section. Helps the reader to group together the images thoughts and ideas.
Content: I think that the discourse of this piece is well done. The images are great and touch on many of the senses.
Pluses: I like your use of rhyme in this piece. I think you did a great job with it.
Suggestions: My only suggestion would be to work on the rhythm and meter a bit.
"Like they are melting in the summer The perfect time to go" this line could also use a comma or period.
Finale Thoughts: I think you did a great job with this piece. You are a poet even if you don't see it.
I hope that you enjoyed my thoughts on your piece Ghost. See ya in chat!-Kat
Hi Gaid, I'm just reviewing your work! Hope you don't mind!
Theme
The theme in this piece was easy to find. I think you address it in a manner that doesn't make it too out there.
Form
I'm ok with the form used here. I at first thought it was some sort of shape poem but it seems to fall short in that area. I think it might work to have the stanzas split apart or maybe not have this piece centered.
Grammar
I could not find any issues in the area of grammar of spelling.
Most Liked
"but I delight
that every day
for a year
for a decade
I see
nature’s finale to
yet another grand performance
but each different
each special
and somehow, enchanting"
Suggestions
"some think revenge
for sun’s burning
heat during the long day"
The above lines did not make sense to me. I wondered why the sunset would be revenge to the burning heat during the long day. It seems that this would be better as a relief from the burning heat all day. Or if it's the dislike of the sunset that seem to be wanting then why not say something about the end of the light, the end of the hours in the day.
Personal Thoughts
I really like the ending of this poem. I do however feel that it wasn't visually pleasing to the eye and that splitting it up or tightening it up could help that. I also felt that the first half was confusing. The thoughts and images though were conveyed nicely.
I hope you enjoyed hearing my opinion about the piece! If you have anymore questions please feel free to contact me in chat Gaid! Hugs!-Kat
My only hope is that this review teaches me something about the writer, helps me to improve my own writing and encourages others to read the piece and give their valuable input.
When I state that a poem is a good poem, what do I mean?
This poem is good because:
It has certain qualities that I find admirable It does something technically difficult very well It is a well-crafted and thought-out expression of language It appeals and I agree with its message It reminds me of something else I really like It teaches me something new and surprises me. It describes my life and fits my thinking It makes me rethink my assumptions about the world It moves me emotionally It gives me a clear movie like picture image in my mind
You are what...THE SECOND PERSON TO EVER GET ALL OF MY TOP REASONS WHAT I LIKE IN A POEM! There are many good reasons why!
The Six Basic Elements of a Poem :
IMAGERY, THEME, DISCOURSE, VOICE AND TONE-
Discourse in this poem is cleverly done! The imagery had me cracking up! The theme of this poem is so darn clear, I caught on within the first two lines. It's the same with the voice and tone. I think that this area of elements is what really made this poem work for me!
RHYTHM-
I didn't find any issues on rhythm and meter in this piece.
LINE BREAKS-
Man these line breaks are great! I got to the end of each line and was pretty much either going "What's coming up next?" or "OMG! No she didn't just say that!". The lines really added to this piece. Effective end stop!
FIGURES OF SPEECH-
Metaphors were another thing that added to this poem. Your use of metaphors really added to the theme. They told us exactly how the future was going to be. The added to the tone and voice of this piece and I loved them.
WORD MUSIC-
Talk about music! This piece was down right fun and funny! The use of words in here just cracked me up. I loved the direct rhyme in this piece, it worked with setting the mood and setting up the next line. It gave this piece the pop that it needed to keep that voice and tone going.
FORMAL STRUCTURES-
I couldn't find a formal structure used.
Talk about being fun! I loved this piece. It was not only fun but it showed the harsh and nasty reality. I mean one day babies will come out of tubes and even though this was done in this fun matter, it did touch on some real and disturbing issues. Hey, it could be my sense of humor. I loved the way you brought this topic around. You did it with humor, keeping the realities of what is to come light. I really do encourage all of you reading this review to stop this port and take a look at this piece and get a good laugh. I hope you enjoyed the review as much as I've enjoyed the poem Beth!
To all, I hope you have a great day that’s filled with tons of fun things to write, read, rate and review!-Kat
I thought this was great! I wanna say thank you for coming into chat and joining the real time poetry contest! I'm giving you first place! This poem tells a great story and I love the imagery your words bring. I think you did a great job in the 15 mins allowed! keep up the work!-Kat
My only hope is that this review teaches me something about the writer, helps the writer to improve, helps me to improve my own writing and encourages others to read the piece and give their valuable input.
When I state that a poem is a good poem, what do I mean?
This poem is good because:
It has certain qualities that I find admirable It does something technically difficult very well It is a well-crafted and thought-out expression of language It moves me emotionally It gives me a clear movie like picture image in my mind
The Six Basic Elements of a Poem :
IMAGERY, THEME, DISCOURSE, VOICE AND TONE-
I find your images to be unique. The idea of blue canvas vs white canvas is something new to me. It brought along a great image and caught my attention. The symbol of the blue canvas conveys ideas and thoughts. The discourse of this poem is void of cliché expressions. The theme of love lost/found but not there was clear and presented well. The voice and tone of this poem were well done and supported the theme, discourse and imagery.
RHYTHM-
I found the rhythm in your piece to be great. Everything sounded right. The meter in this piece worked with the rhythm.
LINE BREAKS-
The lines in this piece create suspense and movement allowing the poem to move swiftly.
FIGURES OF SPEECH-
I think you did great in this area.
WORD MUSIC-
I love your use of indirect rhyme! I think I have issues with the direct rhyme in your piece. It comes out...shocking and not so subtle.
FORMAL STRUCTURES-
Once again, I slipped up around the middle. I don't know what it is! Like I said before, it seems to be the style you use. Please contact me and help me to understand this!
This piece was very emotional and created an instant image! I love the use of indirect rhyme that used. I hope that my review has helped you tons Writer (it’s helped me tons!) and I hope that it encourages you the readers to come on out, give your opinions and even read more of the work here in this port!
To all, I hope you have a great day that’s filled with tons of fun things to write, read, rate and review!-Kat
Format:I think the format was pretty good. I don't know what I would change. I keep on wanting to break this piece down into 3 sections...but I don't know if it will work. Other than that, it's fine as it stands...I'm just odd...hehehe.
Content: hummmmm. The theme of this piece is clear and the images are there. Great job on the images actually.
Pluses: Your use of indirect rhyme is way good! Loved it all!
"whispering wings" I love this!
Suggestions:Ummmm...something fell through for me in the area in the middle. I think it might be the rhyme that threw me off. It's the reason why I want to break this into 2 or 3 stanzas. I also thought that the last line went screwy on the flow.
Finale Thoughts: Overall, I love the theme and imagery in this piece. I instantly thought of fairies, gardens, stars and all that magical stuff that dreams are made of. Great job!
I hope that you enjoyed my thoughts on your piece!-Kat
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Format: I love the format that you use here. It breaks down each image for me.
Pluses: I love the narrative and images used in this piece! 
Suggestions:Nothing to suggest!
My only hope is that this review teaches me something about the writer, helps the writer to improve, helps me to improve my own writing and encourages others to read the piece and give their valuable input. 
It has certain qualities that I find admirable 
To all, I hope you have a great day that’s filled with tons of fun things to write, read, rate and review!-Kat 
Ok!! First Impressions: I thought that this was well written. I love the fact that you did it off of mostly purely dialogue. It seems more like a intro though.
