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Review of Denture Damage  
Review by KatyDid
Rated: E | (4.0)
Oh my gosh that's just WRONG! I love it, especially how you kept repeating "Oh Bert honey, you've got something in your teeth." I like the tone a lot too, just like a sort of good, sort of embarrassed, sort of annoyed teenager would sound in my mind. The only thing I would change is the length of the paragraphs, it was hard for me to finish the story because the were so long, but besides that it was great.
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