| Your story is well told. The title , although catchy, is a bit misleading. I expected to read a story about moving forward, however; I was not disappointed by the story at all. In fact, I enjoyed the dialog mixed with it's descriptive narrative. I thought the dialog revealed alot of information about the individual characters' character.
The contrast between the first half of the story and the second was quite telling. While the first helped the reader feel compassion for the character in the second half, it also revealed an understanding of Clew and Zane's mentality through the unique dialog between them.
Having said that, I felt that there was room for more descriptive language and word usage. T I find the story did not command my attention. One of the things that appeals to me most about reading is the way I get lost in the story or poem, shutting out everthing else. With a few more descriptive words here and there, I feel as though it would be a brillant short story!
You are a truly gifted writer, please don't let my opinion discourage you. As a matter of fact, I look forward to reading more of your work!!!