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I try my best to read everything on Writing.com with great care. My reviews always include a first impression, my feelings about theme and structure and where appropriate, some thoughts about possible revisions.*Mugr*
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Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Karen , 
 
I read  with great interest your poem"Beautiful Stranger" . My review of your poem is a way for me to say, “Congratulations On Your Writing.com Anniversary!” I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words inspired.
 
*Coffeer* FIRST IMPRESSION
 
I was deeply touched both by the theme of your poem and the depth of soul you express throughout this wonderful piece. The rhythm and tone suit my tastes perfectly and I was immediately immersed in the story, this lyrical poem unveils.
 
*Coffeer* INSPIRED
 

I especially enjoyed the stanza where your express how the stranger will pause at the gate. It is a beautiful ache that ascends higher from heart to soul and back again in this moment and I feel the possibility that this may be the moment of blissful union of two souls once despairing of romance at last finding complete fulfillment.
 
*Coffeer* SUGGESTIONS
 
I enjoyed your poem as written and would not suggest changing a word. *Smile*
 
*Coffeer* SUMMARY
 
How glorious is the final moments of your poem as the song of longing becomes a triumphant, vibrant song of life. My joy is complete with the one who has found at-long-last love. Absolutely beautifully done.
 
Thank you for sharing your gift!! *Delight*

Kind Regards,

~Kenword~ *MugR*
 
 
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Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello sindbad , 
 
I read  with great interest your poem"The Recipe For You and I" . My review of your poem is a way for me to say, “Congratulations On Your Writing.com Anniversary!” *Suitheart* I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words inspired.
 
*Coffeer* FIRST IMPRESSION
 
Two lives twined together as one are at the center of this gripping tale of being all things to one another through the transition from this life to another. One realm is given up for another and the images of wearing one form of life, and then another and yet another, flows with great emotion and passion.
 
*Coffeer* INSPIRED
 
I especially appreciated how there is nothing conventional in your prose. The relationship is unique and it is given many colors and textures that challenge the static, flat line images I may harbor from years as a statistician of life. The tone stays ethereal throughout the work and urges me to look at how much of my soul I am willing to pour out for the sake of another.
 
*Coffeer* SUGGESTIONS
 
I was extremely pleased with the poem exactly how you have created it. *Smile*
 
*Coffeer* SUMMARY
 
The message of this generous glimpse into other worlds and ways of being is open, I believe, to many interpretations. Only you as the artist probably know the full scope of your intent. But the many facets of your piece are amazing and present a joyous wonder on which to meditate.
 
Many stars for uniquely creating a genuine life song!! *Delight*

Kind Regards,

~Kenword~ *MugR*
 
 
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Review of Madame Birch  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hello Annie , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ and I am glad you are now an author on Writing.com. Welcome.
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "Madame Birch"  inspired.
 
*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* FIRST INSPIRATION   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

I think the wise do go to nature to make inquiry of its secrets. While the beauty that is created rises up around those laboring hard for the days sustenance, all of wonders created around us speak of more than feeding the belly and accumulating wealth. In "Madame Birch" I am reminded that there is something for my heart and soul that doesn’t come from anywhere else by my communion with nature.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* INSPIRED *Boat2*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

I especially appreciate the words you have chosen to press forward the poem’s rhyming scheme. Everything about the scheme - its tone, sounds, meter and rhymes - is soulful and genuinely luscious to read.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* FAVORITE MOMENT   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

This was one of my favorite parts:

Delicately pressed pennies lace-worked in burnished light
Dressed still in summer's gleam,
Holding on to their last vestiges of verdant sheen.


This is vibrant prose that invokes a picture of what could be a regal Duchess or Queen. I have not just entered into a sublime visit with an old friend by the wayside, but an actual visitation with royalty, holding the secrets of a national treasure.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* SUGGESTIONS   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

I found you piece to be absolutely charming and a delight to read. I would not suggest changing a thing.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* MORE INSPIRATION   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

Spending time with "Madame Birch"  was to cast off the cares and concerns of the workday and enjoy a leisurely cup of tea with one who holds many secrets. It was a joy to simply let your images and words work magic in my day. Thank you!! *Smile*

♫~ Kenword~♫ *Mugr* *Writing*
 
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Review of November's Gift  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hello Curious Traveler , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ and I am glad you are now an author on Writing.com. Welcome.
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "November's Gift"  inspired.
 
*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* FIRST INSPIRATION   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

There is a phrase that is central to this poem’s, tone, rhythm and theme: This is a Gift.. There is still time to take in the wonder that is fall and a special time of bliss, even if it is a passing moment in time, it is flooded with a brilliant light that is heavenly.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* INSPIRED *Boat2*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

I appreciate how the words to “November’s Gift” engage all of the senses. I see the colors. I hear and feel the crunch of leaves under my tires. I smell the air filled with the “tang of wood smoke”. I taste the smoke that comes off the burning leaves. The images stir the wonder in my soul that does respond with the Poet: This Is A Gift!

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* FAVORITE MOMENT   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

There are images that are life stirring and filled with light in “November’s Gift” and this is a favorite part for me:

One more day!! My heart sings. One more day!
The bicycle has not migrated to storage quite yet
Autumn’s last gasp crunches under my tires.

I find myself in the glory of taking one more ride before the “real” November shows up and sets my soul indoors. And so the song of the day is our bicycle is ready – Let’s roll!

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* SUGGESTIONS   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

Beautiful the way it is.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* MORE INSPIRATION   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

My readings one through three made me smile and ache just a little, as my soul wanted to capture this moment for my own. Subsequent readings placed it in a dear part of my heart. I appreciate what you have done for us in your words and vision. Thank you!! *Smile*

♫~ Kenword~♫ *Mugr* *Writing*
 
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Review of Heaven  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with Inspirational Writers Guild  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hello Poemwriter , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ and I am glad you are now an author on Writing.com. Welcome.
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "Heaven"  inspired.
 
*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* FIRST INSPIRATION   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

“All my sins were forgiven – And my soul was bound to heaven,” is a beautiful image of what salvation means in the heart of the believer who understands their state in this world and seek refuge in the Lord Most high. Your poem inspires faith as it speaks of your personal experience and commitment.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* MORE INSPIRATION*Boat2*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

The tone and gracious expressions in each line of your poem, accelerates my expectation of how the “tears,” and “fears”, “life” and “strife” blend to make the most human of a Christ disciple.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* A BIT MORE INSPIRATION   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

Your final two lines without the benefit of a rhyme still sing to my heart and I am lifted to a higher place of prayer and meditation through the reading.

Everything in your poetic expression resonated with true inspiraton. Write On!! *Smile*

♫~ Kenword~♫ *Mugr* *Writing*
 
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You will show me the way of life, granting me the joy of Your presence and the pleasures of living with You forever. – Psalm 16:11 (NLT)


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Review of The Journey  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with Inspirational Writers Guild  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hello ponkacheese , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ and I am glad you are now an author on Writing.com. Welcome.
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "The Journey"  inspired.
 
*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* FIRST INSPIRATION   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

Starting with the first gripping image, “The Journey” gives my imagination some amazing wonderment to ponder. Why would I be lying among other souls? And why are their spirits visible to me and why are they shimmering? These are mysteries that are suitable for a poem that speaks of the soul on a journey to seek out the awesomeness of God and at the point of ascension into His presence finds “glorious love.”

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* MORE INSPIRATION*Boat2*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

I like how the lines are woven together in the form you have given your poem. They are easy to read and there is nothing forced about the flow to make it seem awkward or contrived. Nice.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* A BIT MORE INSPIRATION   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

There is sweet music in your poem’s tone and the pictures your words create are fresh perspective into the Father of all life.

I am always searching for writing that hits the mark inspirationally. Your poem has done that and more. Write On!! *Smile*

♫~ Kenword~♫ *Mugr* *Writing*
 
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You will show me the way of life, granting me the joy of Your presence and the pleasures of living with You forever. – Psalm 16:11 (NLT)


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Review of When  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with Inspirational Writers Guild  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hello simplegirl64 , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ and I am glad you are now an author on Writing.com. Welcome.
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "When"  inspired.
 
*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* FIRST INSPIRATION   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

The description line of your poem “When” was the first immediate draw for me. The words “lean on His everlasting arm,” call to mind the secure/safe times of singing with my family and friends the words of an ancient hymn. As the words to your extraordinary poem exclaim, it is the One who possesses those arms that makes the believer safe, and strong and I appreciate the form you used to praise the Lord who fills us with hope and security for the future.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* MORE INSPIRATION*Boat2*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

I especially enjoyed the image of how He is the one who “made me strong…When I could walk no more, You carried me along.” While every line of your poem rings true, this line has great significance for me right now.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* MORE INSPIRATION   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

My one and only suggestion would be to re-write the line “When I hurt, You share my pain” to be in the past tense to be in the same tense as your other lines. Just a minor thought and of course the way it is written is splendid the way it is.

I am always searching for writing that hits the mark inspirationally. Your poem has done that and more. Write On!! *Smile*

♫~ Kenword~♫ *Mugr* *Writing*
 
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You will show me the way of life, granting me the joy of Your presence and the pleasures of living with You forever. – Psalm 16:11 (NLT)


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Review of Tomorrow  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
Rated: E | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hello Barnaby , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ and I am glad you are now an author on Writing.com. Welcome.
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "Tomorrow"  inspired.
 
*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* FIRST INSPIRATION   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

“Tomorrow” lingers over one’s senses as a vision of a life to come, free of the dissonance caused by human frailty and insecurity. It is a pastoral place overseen by the creator of all things and the balance between what is healthy and that which is death has been restored. Beautiful.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* INSPIRED *Boat2*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

There is a paradise coming, or already is, that has all the elements of peace that mankind craves. It is a place filled with the spectacle of nature and restores contentment to the human breast. Peace.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* FAVORITE MOMENT   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

”… I would pass the petals
That blow so readily in the wind, their blue tips and pinked
Frame never wilting but still as natural as the world that man
Used to know;…”

I love the images of a place where even those things that have lost their connection with life, still have life within them and never fade or perish. The image speaks of a place where every wonder of nature is alive for the sake of human enjoyment as we tend to the work that is appropriate for our peaceful nature.


*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* SUGGESTIONS   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

I appreciated every image; the meter and tone are wonderful. I wouldn’t change a thing.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* MORE INSPIRATION   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

It seems that there could be a place where all of time just stopped and everything is left perfect for my return. In its essence that moment in time contains everything that will give me pleasure for evermore. If only in my dreams, I long to be there now. Beautiful. *Burstv**Burstr* *Smile*


♫~ Kenword~♫ *Mugr* *Writing*
 
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Review of The Visitor  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hello MK , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ and I am glad you are now an author on Writing.com. Welcome.
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "The Visitor"  inspired.
 
*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* FIRST INSPIRATION   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

Everything about this story is infused with inspiration. The oneness of the truck driver and his wife, the sweet communications, verbal and physical, the settings within the conscious realm and in their dreams, all work together to paint a poignant picture of how loving relationships blossom and sustain over distance and time. Beautiful.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* INSPIRED *Boat2*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

The husband and wife are safe and content in their love. They have secure ties that bridge the gaps that absence can create so that in their thoughts and imaginings of each other more love grows. The hope each has within their relationship speaks of the trust they have engendered over the years so that even their dreams of each other are as real as their being together in each other’s arms.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* FAVORITE MOMENT   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

But this time I dreamed of wonderful things. I dreamed we went on a picnic in a beautiful mountain meadow. The birds sang a lovely song as we laughed and ate and enjoyed each other’s company. His smiling eyes made me feel young again. As luck would have it, the skies didn’t want to cooperate with our picnic. The sky opened up and the rains came down. I tried to gather everything up and make a run for it, but he grabbed me gently by the arm and pulled me up. He smiled at me through the rain running down his face, kissed me, put his arms around my waist as we started slowly dancing through the warm summer rain.

In this scene there is the rich descriptions that help me understand the inner workings of the couple emotionally and spiritually. Nature springs to life, the skies are moved to respond to the couple’s special event and all remains beautiful because together they dance through major and petty squalls of life.


*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* SUGGESTIONS   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

It is a beautiful story just the way it is.

*Boat2**Seahorseb*  *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv* MORE INSPIRATION   *Scallopb**Scallopp**Scallopv**Boat2**Seahorseb*

I especially enjoyed the mystical elements in “The Visitor.” It awakened in me many memories of personal experiences with my darling wife that would make absolutely no sense to the natural mind. Excellent work!! *Burstr**Burstp**Burstv**Burstr* *Smile*


♫~ Kenword~♫ *Mugr* *Writing*
 
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Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello ☮ The Grum Of Grums , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ , participating in a review challenge in the "King's Landing updating "  as well as reviewing your specific piece as you requested.
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "So The Ant Said To The Elephant"  inspired.
 
*Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown* FIRST INSPIRATION *Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown*

The light touch you use to create a delightful tale of budding romance between new writers is superb in every way. Max and Belle are drawn to each other and in a way that is natural and pristine. They have reached that magic time in life where the dronings of a self-absorbed professor and the disdain of clickish pseudo-intellectuals are easily replaced by the joy they find in each other’s company and the excitement of a budding romance.


*Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown* INSPIRED *Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown*

Can one develop the skills to be a first-rate writer when over the age of 60? Surprises are in store for those who take the leap. And Max receives not only a merit badge for his efforts, but also the delicious attentions of a gorgeous woman.


*Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown* FAVORITE MOMENT

The presentation of Max’ story. Belle’s reaction to the pun at the end of Max’ story is wonderful and of course the reaction of the class and professor are predicable but beautifully paced and narrated. I had to groan, but then again, it is perfectly credible that this is the unique world of Max and Belle. They are sophisticated without the aire of stuffiness. They are classy without the sham and veneer of the rich and famous. I love these guys!

*Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown* SUGGESTIONS *Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown*

I loved it just the way it is. Perfect.

*Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown* MORE INSPIRATION *Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown*

Mediocre grades aside, the wealth of creativity within Belle and Max find a home on a writing website that gives them hope to embrace the fires to write their bliss. They are a delightful couple to hang out with and were there more adventures in the future for them, I would want to be there. Excellent! Inspiring Level 5. *Star**Burstb**Smile*


♫~ Kenword~♫ *Shield1**Shield1**Writing*
 
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Review of Joel  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello ☮ The Grum Of Grums , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ , participating in a review challenge in the "King's Landing updating "  as well as reviewing your specific piece as you requested.
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "Joel"  inspired.
 
*Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown* FIRST INSPIRATION *Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown*

A boy, Joel, lives a few precious moments as an adult that transform his life forever. Built entirely on dialogue, Joel’s story is vivid and clear with a touch of pathos. As a way to give the reader a living presence, in a few of a young boy’s formative moments, “Joel,” works exceptionally well.


*Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown* INSPIRED *Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown*

Joel and his mum have several critical conversations about life and death. Alzheimer’s Disease is taking his great grand mother’s life, and through a visit to say farewell to her, Joel begins to appreciate aspects of being an adult that he has never considered before.

*Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown* FAVORITE MOMENT

The “Not Okay” moment. This segment touches the heart and is a reminder that often things in life are not okay. They are to be lived like all the others and through the "living," maturity and responsibility are developed. Character is shaped; and for those who develop compassion through the process, they are the hope for peace and stability in the world.

*Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown* SUGGESTIONS *Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown*

As a story built entirely on dialog, this piece is perfect. It certainly has the potential to expand, should you desire. There is plenty of room for scene setting and plot development.

*Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown* MORE INSPIRATION *Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown*

Joel lives his life “out loud” for a bit, giving some beautiful insight as to what a lad in his teens must go through to understand what it means to be a fully contributing member of family and society. The dynamic between Joel and his mum are real and encouraging in every way. Inspiring Level 5. Love it! *Star**Burstb**Smile*


♫~ Kenword~♫ *Shield1**Shield1**Writing*
 
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Review of Moving On  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello ☮ The Grum Of Grums , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ , participating in a review challenge in the "King's Landing updating "  as well as reviewing your specific piece as you requested.
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "Moving On"  inspired.
 
*Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown* FIRST INSPIRATION *Crown**Crown**Crown**Crown*

I am especially drawn to the tone, rhythm and thrust of this poem. With the exquisite rhyming pattern, the images fly by leaving remarkable images for my soul to ponder.

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A life comes to an apex, where both the past and present are cast in stark relief of each other and the future path is laid out with enough brilliance that there will no longer be any stumbling. Maybe there will be retribution for past sins, but the will is powerful enough to propel the protagonist through the pain of transformation.

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The last two verses. When everything a life has lived has been examined, put into perspective, and brought to some resolution, what is left? Live on. Live on in the delicious freedom that has come through a metamorphosis of a once corrupt soul - bought with a price of accepting responsibility for the hurt, pain and destruction the person once caused. Redemption.

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“Moving On,” is rich with vibrant images and inspiration. I found it perfect in every way.

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The inspiring close of your poem is solace for the one who has endured the “reaping and sowing” process of life. I relate, because I have been on that journey and know this truth -having eaten the bitter fruit of the pain and sorrow I sowed, I nearly died, but in the dying process I sowed love, peace, joy and contentment. It has brought me to a place where my future is now worth living. Thank you for creating a beautiful place where I was able to contemplate my own journeys. Inspiring Level 5. Superb Poem. *Star**Burstb**Smile*


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Review of Teamwork  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello ☮ The Grum Of Grums , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ , participating in a review challenge in the "King's Landing updating "  as well as reviewing your specific piece as you requested.
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "Teamwork"  inspired.
 
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I love the way your story wiggles and twists to become an inspirational tale with a great plot, narrative-progression and message. Mum, Lisa and Sam are nicely drawn and are believable as their world revolves around each other to make a life worth living.


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Sam becomes the catalyst and source of inspiration and direction for his careless sister by focusing on the one thing that matters to her – music. A crafty trade makes it possible for Lisa to regain her favor with her mother and continue on the path to becoming a great musician.

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The trade. This was a complicated piece of writing, but it is flawless in every way. Lisa reacts predictably but this is Sam’s moment to pull a floundering member of the family back into the tribe. He withstands Lisa’s accusations to broker a new course for her and in the bargain becomes her maths tutor. He slyly partners up with Lisa to ultimately give their mum an easier time of it.

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This is a strong, well developed story, that has potential to be a marketable piece. My only suggestion would be to re-work the title. “Teamwork” is certainly accurate of course, but it doesn’t quite have enough pop to generate the readership your piece deserves.

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The family dynamics are brilliant in the short story, “Teamwork”. Sam has perfected his negotiating skills to such a fine degree that he strikes an astounding bargain with his obstinate sister; and she suddenly develops a desire to excel at mathematics and be a part of a family she had drifted away from. Inspiring Level 5. Well Done. *Star**Burstb**Smile*


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Review of Lost Without You  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Sum1 , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ , participating in a review challenge in the "King's Landing updating " .

 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "Lost Without You"  inspired.
 
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Perhaps she is responsive to the terms-of-endearment that make a loving relationship heat up. It is not a stretch of the imagination that our muse is waiting in a place - sandy, with a sweet and salty sea breeze - promising ecstasy. Perhaps, at the very least, she is in a place stirred by our prayers, our hopes and our desires. She has to know that we love her, cannot live without her, and we will pray to have our relationship with her flourish forever. The images of sobbing, the wrenching of the soul from its creative process and respite from the struggle at the ocean side, are beautifully done and draw me into the author's desperate plight.

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Crying out with longing to the one who has been our inspiration in the past is not only therapeutic but it is also a rescutation for the creative soul that is choked off from all hope of once again embracing the creative force.

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In the struggle to create the divine, the author is adrift. His shore is made of sand and the ocean pounds out the beat of something inspired, but it is the prayer, beseeching his “baby love” to come to him that touches my heart. It is a real moment in the writer’s life, where trust and faith in the creative process are in a dance that has yet to find its bliss.

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There were two lines that you may want to consider “adjusting”. There is nothing wrong, technically, they just feel awkward no matter how I read them.

1.)Join me, I’m ready for that vow.
2.)Tears streamed down his cheeks, he sought to speak to God.

For me the beauty of poetry is that not everything has to be explained in detail. In these two lines it feels as though you desire the reader to be absolutely clear about what you mean. Words like “Vow”, “join”, “streamed,” “sought” and “speak” are loaded with a lot of meaning and power and can stand on their own. I would find a way to reduce the syllable count on those two lines so that they are more closely related to the lines that proceed them. There would still be plenty of pop to convey the writer’s emotional state.

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To know God and to know that God is the source of all creativity is revealed at a high level of sensitivity in this remarkable poem about finding one’s muse. Where we begin as writers and where the “spirit of creativity” takes over, is often blurred, but as “Lost Without You” declares, we are in a state of great despair when all inspiration is gone. I appreciate your thoughtful writing and expressions. Thank you for sharing your deep insights. *Smile*


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Review of Two free verses  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Tammy , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ , participating in a review challenge in the "King's Landing updating "  as well as reviewing your specific piece as you requested.
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "Two free verses"  inspired.
 
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The voices one hears in the two poems within “Two Free Verses” are unrestrained, at times desperate and at other times soft and yielding, but the tone is precious and gripping. The power in the first poem's verses are in the term ugly. It is used to define the outward and the inward person. If it would stop there one might see a venture into the realm of love, but the story within the poem suggests that it is more than ugliness at work – perhaps it is more like a vain pride in being set aside from ever needing to be bothered by relationships – for they are, after all, painful, hurtful, and often self-serving.

The voice in the second poem's verses is a loving one that desires a relationship to work and apprehends the one they love with promises and a determination to be a safe haven for their soul mate.

Looping my read of each of the poems I was amazed to find the paradox that lives in most humans imbedded in each line . Nearly everyone has doubts about their worth and value especially when associated with their appearance. Most of the people who have been noted for their extreme beauty were often declared to be ugly as a child, and though their outward appearance now earns them accolades, adoration and money, they never-the-less see themselves as that “ugly-child”.

But then there is a time, as in the second poem, when we must get beyond all notions of our self and invest in others. Whether we are loved in return is almost immaterial – and so the second part of the story illuminates the possibility of abandoning one’s self completely for the sake of love.

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Self-realization is parmount in these two poems. Who I am is more critical than what I will do to survive in these vivid pictures. But the two poems demonstrate with beautiful inspiration that we must never let “hate overwhelm” us.

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As your vision widens for the sake of the one you love, the soul is awakened to where the hurt, pain and misery come from. The evil one “cooks up” hatred, and inflicts disease wherever he can. The diagnosis for pressing past hatred is to hang on to the love we find and, as in this tribute to love, create something beautiful that transcends the scars and wounds we receive in this life.



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In the 5th verse of the first poem, the first line is not quite clear, which in most poems is somewhat expected, but the dynamic between the protagonist and the blind man probably should be more definite. “So when he asked,” suggests an inquiry, but I could use some clarity as to what he wants.

These are some edits that I would suggest:

In the first verse of the second poem:

”Not hurt  your [ you ] again.
 

And in the 11th verse of the second poem:
 
”And  restrain [ restraint ] won’t help.
 

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As the new lovers find solace in a mutual love, there is a new hope and a kind of spiritual awakening. The presence of love, hope and a spiritual awakening are inspirational to my soul, and my own spirit joins with the new life that is being created. Thank you for sharing your gift and for the opportunity to read and review your special poems. *Smile*


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Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Pvons , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ , participating in a review challenge in the "King's Landing updating " .
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "Late night memories"  inspired.
 
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What can one create on the other side of tragedy? A message of sorrow? A tribute of honor and respect? In “Late Night Memories” there is some of both. Certainly sorrow for a painful loss and another “scar,” but also a tribute to a life that was lived valiantly through the anxiety of having lost one’s impetus to keep up appearances. To at last succumb to the secret wishes and leave life behind, breaks a once-upon-a-time lover's heart, and adds yet another level of despair for those who are left to grieve.

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The message for a love, who has left this life behind, is filled with the ache one would expect when sorrow and grief crash over those who are left behind. The words, like a eulogy, arrest my complacency towards the youth who are locked in a despondent world with no hope of ever knowing their purpose or call. The scar tissue is so deep that no hope or faith or love can penetrate the darkness that takes over. And the loss of our friend, our love, is nearly more than youthful reason can rationalize.

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The images of two souls mated for eternity are powerful. The transparency in which the emotions and bonds of two young lovers is expressed is breathtaking and vibrant. Every line that proves the devotion the two young people have for each other resonates within my own soul and I am taken back to the days when I too was locked away. I’ve not looked at the scars in a long time. But each one is a story.



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You have truly bared your soul in this powerful poem and I wouldn’t change a thing.

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Emotion and reason worked together in two lives to create a love so beautiful, but so tragic, that the sadness and loneliness have to be visualized in a last farewell. “Late Night Memories” expresses with great transparency the inexplicable part of the human experience where we are to love, and live and die and lose everything for the sake of another. Thank you for sharing your gift and talent. *Smile*


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Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Sunny , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ , participating in a review challenge in the "King's Landing updating " .
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "The Sound of Sunshine"  inspired.
 
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Language that is carefully crafted for the pleasure of the ear graces this love story. A school girl, frustrated by the hypocritical world she lives in, lets her pain turn to passion in the arms of a forbidden lover. Every image in “The Sounds of Sunshine,” plays with the reader, as nature and circumstances play with Maya’s moods and desires.

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The “Gatekeeper,” the one who guards the coming of goings of all the school children is away from his post the moment Maya is drawn to a “rower boy.” A match her mother would never approve of – a match that will mirror the actions of the one who used to nurture her. So many complexities in this vividly crafted tale that one can stay engaged with it endlessly. Superb.

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There is a pivotal moment in the story where the storm passes the children for a few moments. The description of the passing storm not only sets the scene it gives the reader a view of Maya’s soul. What the rain has poured out on Benny’s face, Maya longs to pour out as well. There are heart beats, new light with parting clouds, stolen glances, the steady beat of the oars and a longing to know the muscles and caloussed hands that work the oars. A very sensuous moment yet revealing Maya’s innocence.

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Beautiful the way it is.

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The descriptive word combinations are exquisite and the narrative is beautiful. The language, the setting and the characters are very striking. The exotic location and situation make compelling reading and your prose is fluid and rich. Excellent work!! *Smile*


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Review of Latam  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello KurtCress , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ , participating in a review challenge in the "King's Landing updating " .
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "Latam"  inspired.
 
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The letter is strong, passionate, clear and packed with emotion. Real or fiction, the piece rings true with a tone that pleads the case for eternal love, while keeping a voice that is familiar to me in every day life.

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Love should be aflame with the specific attributes of the one we love. It should be so vivid in our mind that when compiled and declared it etches into the heart the crevices that will produce a life-spring of eternal love.

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The way you expand the prose to add color and light to your expression of love is awesome. You contrast them to your own mortal limitations and the feeling is that there is a depth of passion beyond what your words can express. But you are obviously compelled to make your case for being together forever and your reach into the inner wealth of your soul is heroic.

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You’ve left nothing outside the arena of love – you’ve poured out your soul. Pain and ecstasy are in every sentence. Powerful. I wouldn’t change a thing.

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Will the woman of your dreams respond? Will she leap past her self doubts to find a oneness with your love for her? I can imagine she will as you have given her yourself, with nothing held back. Excellent work!! *Smile*


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Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello PAPIYA , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ , participating in a review challenge in the "King's Landing updating " .
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "Poesy of Childhood in Reverie"  inspired.
 
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The sounds of sighing and the birdsongs, the smell and feel of “dews” and “rains” and “sorrows” with the visual power of daisies, amber shadows, dawns, and “crimson rays” give me a feast for all of my senses in your magnificent poem.

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I enter into the sweet reverie with you as you create a perfect scene from the memories of our days gone by. And if we are now wizened and find solace in those reflections of what it all means today, then that is to me the reward of a life well lived.

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The counting of mellowing years is over. That which is somber, vexing, anxious and dreary is at last vanquished. The puttering with time is done, no need to appear busy. These thoughts are truly blissful, as I begin to comprehend their meaning day by day. Enchanting.


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Perfect.

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Where our childhood meets the wizened elder, there is a special bond that occurs where memory colors everything with sweet pastels and brilliant rainbows and contentment finds us at every turn. You have pictured my contentment with amazing accuracy. Excellent work!! *Smile*


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Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Francis Mckenzie Elliot , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ , participating in a review challenge in the "King's Landing updating " .
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "The girl in the mirror."  inspired.
 
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I appreciated the thoughtful transparency of your poem. Besides the rhymes and rhythm being clear and focused, I liked that every encounter with the mirror moves the internal journey of the girl’s thoughts forward.

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There sometimes is a price that the soul must pay to get what it wants. Hands may do wrong and the heart may plot a path that we are morally outraged by, but when it is soul at work, things can become eternally crooked. There is no end of devious devices the crooked can employ.

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Being trapped behind the outward appearance the girl puts on was well written and I identify easily with what you express as the duplicitous nature of most human experience. It is obvious the girl knows there is a difference. But she gets quickly to the essence of why it won’t be any different for her. This is her way of being now. She has what she wants.


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Your poem was thought provoking and pleasing to read and re-read. I wouldn’t change a thing.

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What are sins anyway? If there is a rotten side to a person…I say rotten, maybe just a touch of selfishness, is it a sin to get what you want by any means possible? Don’t we call that pragmatism? Doing business. I am under the conviction of what you wrote. I feel the burn. Well done!! *Smile*


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Review of The House  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello A.L. Rush , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ , participating in a review challenge in the "King's Landing updating " .
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "The House"  inspired.
 
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“The House,” is a wonderful picture of what a house might experience. Its life is fully dedicated to the neighborhood in which it was built and so knows the sights and sounds well. It has known the emotions of those who dwell within and every
day there is something new.

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Intentional or unintentional, I like the irony within the scene as the house begin’s its narrative by being bored with the field across the way. I couldn’t help but wonder about what the field sees when it looks at the house. The contrasts between what is life and what contains life is greatly portrayed in your piece and I enjoyed the diversity of thought and expression through out.

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I appreciated the list of all of the items of inspiration there are in the house’s world. As the words gain momentum and vibrancy, it is soon apparent that this house relates most of its cares and concerns to the emotions of those who abide in its many significant rooms.


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My only suggestion would be to take advantage, on a re-write, of your piece’s wide open structure and flow. You could easily entice more readers to your piece if more of the senses were engaged. At first it makes sense that the house should have feelings, but it also, hears, smells, tastes. More of those images that speak directly to the heart would draw a larger readership into your work.

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The house may tend towards depression, but its aspiration, beyond being a dwelling place, is to be a notable observer of the priceless life around and within. Thanks for sharing your gift. *Smile*


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Review of falling to rest  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello ElaineElaine , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ , participating in a review challenge in the "King's Landing updating " .
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "falling to rest"  inspired.
 
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With just a few words you stir the soul and awaken my imagination to enter into a new season of rest and respite. I love these two words and they have a significant place in your poem as the season of great change in nature is so much like the human nature’s need for rest and respite.

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Perhaps when I seem to be at my most unproductive, that is the time that I am entering into a season that will take me into dormancy and out the other side into what I esteem as great production. I have seen the trees change and almost appear dead… but there is the place where “all beings need respite”.

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The quick tempo and reliance on single word pictures drew me into some wonderful places of relaxation and meditation. This was a favorite moment:

The heart and soul observe the season and are aligned with the wonders of the season and they appreciate the tone of the world declaring a time of resignation and peace. Only the mind would reason that this is no time to be unproductive.

It is the child in me that wants to play on. But it is the child in me that will ultimate fall asleep in the midst of the game. And I have my fall…asleep.

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Every word and image in “Falling To Rest”. Spoke to me and I would not change it a bit.

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I am glad I took some time to meditate on what you have written. Within the poem there is both a philosophical message as well as a practical admonition. I feel as I rise with the dawn of a new day that I have been exquisitely designed to work – create, but I hardly ever think about what I have risen from – a sweet sleep, a refreshing respite from the battles of the day before. It is definitely time to celebrate the fall. Thank you for sharing. *Smile*


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Review of The Final Out  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Ben M , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ , participating in a review challenge in the "King's Landing updating " .

I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "The Final Out"  inspired.
 
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The crack of the bat, the determination in the eyes of the fielder, the pitcher the batter and for a few brief moments we get to play an at-bat with all three players. This is a rare moment you have created, to not only feel the emotion of the game as a fan, but to actually be in the action from three points of view. From these perspectives I can feel the seams of the ball and its hide covering. I can push away the sounds coming from the stands and hear my heart beat. I can weigh the bat in my hands feel my muscles ride a wave of adrenaline as I swing away towards the fence. I can smell the grass of the outfield and feel the wetness of the sweat as it chills the back of the neck under a brief gust of wind. I am ready to play the game coach. Young again.

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The drama of a one-at-bat scenario is well written and every image is an amazing visitation of past glories and defeats. From three different perspectives the tension builds and finally explodes. Cheers and groans - and sweet relief - as we live a glorious moment, when all the elements of baseball are super charged for our experience.

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Reading “The Final Out” was extremely entertaining and super fun. Pitcher, hitter and fielder alike, were clearly written so that I could be deeply involved in the game from all three postions. This was my favorite moment:

Trey’s at bat is the nail biter that makes baseball the sport that it is. Maybe he has 30% chance of doing something good. As long as he is not the final out the Sox could still pull the game out.

The pressure is intense because in sports there are only winners. To be the last out has so much shame and derision attached to it that every cut at the ball is a chance to be the hero or the curse. It is like life and you have capture it with amazing detail.

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All very nicely written and fun to read.

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There is a field where life is played out in strikes and outs, hits and runs and the sound of the bat cracking against a fast pitch is enough to work a young boy into a frenzy. Your story took me to some very special places. Thanks. *Smile*


♫~ Kenword~♫ *Shield1**Shield1**Writing*
 
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Hello anne , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ , participating in a review challenge in the "King's Landing updating " .
 

I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "Pilgrims"  inspired.
 
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The traditional form in “Pilgrims” adds a grace and power to your wonderful poem. The inspiration lies in the well-known images you use to convey the message that we are on a road, but we are not alone.

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We know in this life we will need to carry a heavy load and what blesses me in your poem is how the focus is directed to our reality of not baring our load or our journey all on our own. In my youth I may have scoffed at this notion – but wisdom teaches us that your words are eternally true.

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“Pilgrims” weaves lyrically images of both the work ahead of all mortals and the love we express to our creator through praise, worship and song. This was one of my most favorite moments:

I enjoyed the vision of blending our meager abilities and powers with those of the great God almighty. You speak clearly and knowingly of how this union between our souls and the “help from heaven” occurs. I drink in the vision and peace of these truths and am refreshed.

What unmeasurable joy we have as we come to the place of giving our load over to the greatest help of all.

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I love your poem exactly how you created it.

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Your gift for expressing the eternal with rhymes, rhythm and hopeful images comes through powerfully in “Pilgrims.” It transcends what many would perceive to be reality to speak of the eternal journey all mankind is on. You are blessed with a gift for expressive writing. Thank you for sharing. *Smile*


♫~ Kenword~♫ *Shield1**Shield1**Writing*
 
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello R. Michael Wood , I am ♫~ Kenword~♫ , participating in a review challenge in the "King's Landing updating " .
 
I enjoyed reading your work and I am delighted to share with you some of my thoughts and feelings your words in "The Determined Wife"  inspired.
 
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Bless you for this perfect piece of humor. I was stressing over some menial chores this morning and was delighted to find your story. You hooked me with the “self- talk” you gave Karen in the opening lines and I appreciated the tone and flow of your writing. It was definitely a surprising and delightful tale of one wife’s approach to “fixing things.” .

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What possesses some husbands, not me of course, to set before our wives tasks that they have no aptitude for? If, after making such demands on one’s love, they feel they have accomplished something that will make them shine as a radiant star in their wife’s universe, they most assuredly have to be the most delusional souls on the planet.

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“The Determined Wife” is a well-constructed, tightly written piece of fiction that sets the reader up for a delightful twist. This was one of my most favorite moments:

The guy at the shop had assured her it was the right one. Of course, he could’ve handed her a brick covered in plastic and she wouldn’t have been able to tell the difference.

I appreciate Karen’s voice and tone in the story. All the way through it is clear that the story is really about Karen’s husband, but seeing the situation from her perspective, with the filter of the feminine style of frustration, makes the story extremely entertaining.


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Since the story was created for a contest with a 100 word limit, I think you did remarkably well in setting the stage, creating tension and interest with the perfect amount of dialogue. My only suggestion would be to rewrite the piece to expand it just a bit more. Not a criticism by any means, it’s just that Karen is a great character and it would have been a joy to spend more time with her.

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Writing humor is a tricky business, but in “The Determined Wife” you demonstrate a clear understanding of how to do this form of writing well. I pity Karen’s husband Frank, when he discovers, probably not for the first time knowing the Franks of the world just what kind of woman he is really married to. Excellent work!! *Smile*


♫~ Kenword~♫ *Shield1**Shield1**Writing*
 
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