Wonderful words, simply stated; this is also good advice for all. It's really odd to me that people think that if it doesn't have specified meter or rhyme, it's not a poem. This IS a poem and it's just lovely.
I liked your opening paragraph, especially the statistical information about red hair. Maybe you think your story is just "average", but, I find myself wondering, "What's this 'average' girl doing today?" That, to me, is a sign of a good writer; you got my attention and I want to know more. I noticed some spelling, punctuation and capitalization issues; other than that, great story! Keep writing.
Holy Moly! I love this well written story! The legend comes to fruition. It makes me wonder if the little girls are evil, Martha is just misunderstood or if the people dying are simply coincidental unfortunate events?? Maybe a sympathetic ghost hunter can help Martha rest in peace??
This kind of reminds me of my middle school years and my sophomore and junior years of high school. All I was being was me, but, for whatever reason, that wasn't good enough and I was subject to ridicule. Even a childhood friend became part of the popular crowd and rejected me, too.
Ok, enough of that. This is a heartbreaking piece of prose. So, of course I sense the desperation and despair of sweet Scarlet, but, now that I'm a parent, I could feel myself getting frantic as her mother probably was, as I read this to the end.
I'm sure many young people feel this way. My advice is to keep living, be yourself and hang in there. I'm proof that it does get better.
This is excellent! I'm at a loss for words; it's a perfect piece. I really hope that we always remember to treat each other with kindness; that's what we've forgotten, or perhaps some have never learned that. Thanks so much for writing this. I do hope you'll publish this elsewhere.
Oh my goodness! This is perfect! My babies are now 8 & 10 and I miss the days when I would cradle them in my arms. It's like I blinked and here we are now. Soon, they'll be grown women and not my babies anymore.
If anyone has lived in a not so savory part of town, they could definitely relate to this piece of prose. This describes perfectly those parts of town you dare not tread past sundown. The protagonist sounds like a nice person just trying to make his/her way home after working late hours. However, woe to the person who's a threat to him/her!
Very nice! I used to play when I was younger and am getting back into it. I'm always hard on myself when I mess up. This poem reminds us that it's okay to make mistakes and it also reminds us of the wonderful, mood changing, healing power of music. Thank you for these lovely verses.
Ah yes, there's nothing like declaring your love to someone, only to be shot down. Been there, done that. It amazes me that poets like yourself have the ability to incorporate the words given and create such an eloquent piece of work. Well done, sir!
If you're not married already, you absolutely MUST recite this in your vows! It is just lovely. My favorite line is "I love how you take pride and faith in me as if I was a precious jewel dug up from the dirt" Everyone should have that feeling of love.
This a a raw, candid, emotional piece. You really laid your soul bare. This essay offers possibilities of hope and optimism, which is something that people who struggle with being bipolar and those who have loved ones who struggle with it need to hear. Thank you for sharing.
This piece conveys awkward adolescent angst quite accurately; I remember those years. There are no grammatical or punctuation issues, at least none that I could see at first glance. Our writing styles are similar so, of course I think your writing is great. However, someone with more experience may have a different opinion. Keep writing!
Very informative essay. I am familiar with American flag etiquette, not well versed, though. I noticed a few typographical errors in the last paragraph: First sentence: "If something is not down (done). . . and last sentence. . ."it would certainly spell doom for the rest of the counties (country's) dim future. Also, in the second paragraph regarding the flag being near fire or lit on fire, there's a space between the "o" and the "n."
I have a question for you: how do you dispose of a worn, tattered flag? We were taught that only then was it okay to burn it.
I also agree that we as Americans should be better versed in flag etiquette.
Selling yourself is hard for quite a few people. I also struggle with it. My shyness and quietness have cost me so many opportunities, not to mention struggling with answers on those "off guard questions" you wrote about. The only sound advice I can offer is to get a friend or mentor to do mock interviews including a list of unorthodox interview questions. The more you practice, the more confident you will become. Best of luck to you.
If it can go wrong, it will go wrong. . .such times as these try our patience and chip away at our optimism. Yet, the protagonist is undaunted and "keeps it moving", so to speak. I like this passage. I can't wait to see what else you've written.
It sounds like gossip or rumors; so true indeed. I like the last sentence about becoming a terminal host. For some, resistance from passing "it" along can be difficult, depending on how salacious "it" is. Many have been victims of "it" and for those reasons alone, "it" should be stopped in it's tracks.
Carrie Fisher is listed twice. I looked through your list and am amazed at some of the most creative, gifted minds struggle with manic depression/being bipolar. Fascinating topic.
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