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Review of The Human Magnet  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
Lighthearted and humorous. Thanks, Bubblegum!
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Review of TJ was here  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice desk. Thanks for sharing your thoughts about it here.
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Review of Into The Darkness  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
Sad, but well-defined.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A lovely prayer... Amen.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I was glad to read your essay. What we do and/or do not believe is important to God ...faith is the substance of things hoped for, the evidence of things not seen. We cannot pick and choose what we want to believe about God. We either believe Him or we don't.

And the Word became flesh and dwelt among us, and we have seen his glory, glory as of the only Son from the Father, full of grace and truth.. Jesus is the Way, the Truth, and the Life; and no man comes to the Father, but by Him. He (Jesus) is the door/the gate to heaven, to the Father. He who comes in by any other means is a thief and a robber.

Thank you for responding to the question posed in the Spiritual Newsletter.
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Review of The Little Pin  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
Cute. Thanks for the read.
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Review of First drum set  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
Love it! Thanks for your poetry.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I love it... much fun and smiling as I read through THE ENEMY WITHIN. Thank you, Hunters Moon, for amusing me and keeping me on your trail. Nice work!
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Beautifully amusing. Thanks for the read.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
How do you actually read a book? I tried to click on a book to read it and nothing happened.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, ridinghood--p.boutilier. I am pleased to present my review of your poetry entitled:

MY PERSONAL COMMENTS FOLLOW:

Title - I found your title most appropriate.

Point of View - Obviously written from the author's point of view, as the poem speaks with authority.

Diction - Diction is consistent and effective. The only word that gave me pause was "quotidian" as at first it didn't flow smoothly off my tongue smoothly, and I had to look-up the definition.

Imagery - Your images are effective, causing reflection upon how the Lord often uses our sleep to speak and/or bring clarity to issues that may effect us when awake.

Rhythm/Rhyme/Cadence - The cadence is soft-spoken, staying nicely within the chosen format.

Structure - Stanza form and line breaks are appropriate to the Monotetra style. I found no punctuation or spelling mishaps.

Theme - This piece evokes a holy reverence for the spiritual capacity of dreams in keeping with its well-chosen title.

Final thoughts - These are merely my comments. Whether or not you agree or disagree matters fractionally in comparison to my hope that I have encouraged and provoked you to even better writing. It has been my pleasure to read, rate and review your writing. Write on!

I look forward to reviewing more of your work!



A helpful link for every writer: http://www.unc.edu/depts/wcweb/handouts/passivevoi...
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
You sound melancholic here, though interesting at the same time. Maybe, like me, your frame of/state of mind when writing shines through whether you like it or not. No hiding.

I feel that we met before on this site; however, I do look forward to reviewing your work again.

Thanks for sharing this piece.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
69th entry -

Once upon a time there was a joyful little boy. Every day he made his parents smile with his antics, merrily playing with friends, toys and his puppy. One day, it was raining and he had to play inside. All of his friends were busy too; so he played alone. But that was okay because sometimes his toys came alive and played with him. Because of that, he had fun despite the rain.

While his mommy and daddy were busy doing grown-up things --- paying the bills, working, cooking and cleaning, he played. Until finally, his mommy called him for lunch. After that, the rain stopped and the sun came out again.

So he went outside and played on his swing-set with Tommy from next door until the sun went down. By Maria Mize

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This was fun. Thank you, Bubblegum!
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Congratulations on receiving the 1st place award for this piece on "Freedom of Speech." I live in the USA; and it was interesting to read your views of what is going on in The Netherlands in this arena.

I put "free speech" in the same category as "freedom from discrimination in the workplace." Both are "good ideas" not often applied with integrity in any real sense.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
Excellent. I found this piece very informative. Though I have a Twitter account, I think I only "tweeted" once just to see what it was like.

I read the entire hash-tag link within the article and found it amazingly sad. We can be so quick to judge others...

I find direct communication is less likely misinterpreted----but it cannot be "documented" either. So when someone is offensive on the telephone, for instance; the offending person can deny the conversation ever happened.

Well-written. Thank you for sharing your thoughts, Seuzz.
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Review of I pray  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you, Danial! I enjoyed the solemness of your poetry and prayer; the cadence of rhythm and rhyme fell appropriately also.

I cannot distinguish a part I liked best because I loved this piece entirely.

I see you are new to this fellowship. Welcome. I look forward to seeing more of your work.

Beautifully done.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
I found the music of your life interesting and uniquely informative.

The One Direction song, "What Makes You Beautiful" as performed by The Piano Guys and "Angels We Have Heard on High" by The Piano Guys reminded me of a harp. I never before thought of the piano as a type of harp. Beautifully, spectacular.

Thank you!

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Review of a piano  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Thank you, Rhyssa.

First suggestion: Consider being more mysterious with your title and brief description.

Second suggestion: In keeping with my first suggestion, remove the words "ivory and ebony" and find a suitable replacement. I find "ebony and ivory" in terms of piano keys a little over-used. Instead maybe say:

         graceful curves
         contrasting white and black
         hide the magic
         of the soundbox


Also consider removing "of the" in the final line above and end this stanza with simply: "hide the magic soundbox."

Finally, consider removing any extraneous words throughout your work to add power and dimension. For instance:

         wires stretched taut
         over eighty-eight strings
         with high notes mirroring
         sound intensified


...or something to that effect.

I enjoyed learning a little more about the piano --- always an instrument I wanted to play.

Thank you for sharing your writing with us!

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Review of Turning Golden  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
I liked the heartfelt quality of this piece. Thank you for sharing.
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Review of Silver Forest  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
I think I would call this a squib (a small firework that burns with a hissing sound before exploding) since it's so short, yet packed with beauty and depth.

My favorite phrase, I think: ...the bursts of periwinkle light illuminating gossamer wings and gentle secrets. And quite iridescent, was ...each heart shimmering with armor.

Each and every word frolicked past my senses in Silver Forest.

Well done. Thank you!
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Bubblegum. When we were growing up, I think we had every Dr. Seuss book available, and new ones arrived in the mail regularly.

Thanks for doing the research on this. I enjoyed the read and learned a thing or two as well.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
Sadly beautiful, I enjoyed this collection, L.M. --- the raw honesty of your words, as well as the presentation (rhythm, rhyme and flow). I found the striking simplicity paralleled with strong emotion both captivating and satisfying. I wasn't disappointed.

I am glad you are here and look forward to reviewing more of your work.

Again, thank you!
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Aniu. I am pleased to offer a modest review after reading this piece.

I enjoyed the rhythm and rhyme---though some stanzas could use more work to maintain consistent flow, I think.

I'm glad you decided to join the site and participate.
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Review of The Reality  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (3.5)
Ross, you may want to review and edit this significantly. First off, I noticed the word "passed" should be "past." Second, check for redundancy of wording as you seem to overuse some words quite a lot.

Check presentation and spacing, organizing your work for appeal and clarity. It looks like you accidentally italicized some of the text as well.

With more work, this piece has potential.

Thanks for sharing!
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Excellent, Robert! I loved this imaginative piece. Most enjoyable was Rudolph's approach toward a frozen Andrea.

Certainly, this was a joy to write just before the Christmas holiday.

One suggestion---you may wish to correct the inconsistency in the name John Conner/John Cooper.

Thank you!
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