This is a really nice poem. It allows the reader to picture the location of Pensacola very well with a lot of great descriptive phrases. I feel like the reader is given a great impression of what the city is like as well as a little bit of insight into the narrator who is writing this. A lot of the stanzas are very well written out offering a glimpse the the locations being described.
I knew nothing about Pensacola going into poem but after reading this I know more about the city and get the sense it is a coastal city. This poem really stimulated our senses giving the sights and sounds of the city. I could easily picture the roads there and I love the verbal depiction of the docks discussed. I felt like I was in a fish market itself in the second Stanza. The third stanza has some great uses of colors contrasting the blue bays, with the nets glinting in the sunset. There are some great contrasting images in this poem (i.e winter with summer, hills and dunes, grey haired ladies with children).
On a technical level this poem is nicely setup. I am unsure if this poem is written in a particular style or if it is just a freeverse poem. From reading it, it feels like there is a format to it. There are some light and approximate rhymes used (pains - lane, parts - carts, death - breath etc) which add beats for the reader to enjoy. There are also some really good uses of alliterations in this (i.e. fresh fish, Shipwrecked and soiled etc) that added some spice to the poetry.
I really enjoyed reading this poem a lot. Thank you very much for writing and sharing it.
Awesome crossword puzzle. I had a lot of fun taking it. It has a lot of great comic book trivia in it. That comic book fans can appreciate. I was able to solve it. The most challenging clues for me was "Weapon wilded by Wonder Woman", "Alias adopted by Clark Kent" and "Mutant Leader who fights for Co Existence". Filling in other clues helped to obtain the answers needed i.e the R from Krypton and the N from Superman. Thank you for making and inviting me to try this. I really enjoyed it very much.
Nice interactive. I like the idea of having Shrinking stories in the Chris Nolan Gotham universe. This story is still very early in development but the chapters so far are very god. I like the setups with Rachel and Bruce shrinking available. It's nice to see Nolan female characters available as choices for story arcs like Anne Hathaway Catwoman, Rachel and Talia. I would love to see hero characters like Batman wind up shrinking around them. Anyway this is really exciting story and I hope you continue to build it out. Thank you very much for making it.
This is a really good poem. It captures the feeling of Spring with some nice spring imagery (flowers, bees, butterflies). Phrases like "dance in the breeze" help provide engrain in the reader's mind sensations of the season. I also really like the refrain "Flowers of the field" it a nice bit of alliteration to read through. It is a beautifully written poem and a great way to welcome Spring!
This was a great short story. It seemed to fit perfectly with the prompt. The dialogue was very well written. I love the banter between the husband and wife. I have to wonder what Mark did that the situation they were in (i.e. them being abducted by aliens) could be blamed entirely on him. The two characters played off of each other very well as it was fun to watch them go back and forth. Connie asking her husband about the quaiser and the two discussing whether the Aliens were Martians or not was particularly hilarious. The Aliens also added some great comedic elements to the story as well. It was really funny to see one of them so eager to get in his quaiser poke.
You have a really great writing style being able to blend action with comedy so seamlessly. The comedic beats hit very well while maintaining a tense atmosphere as the reader is left wondering if the two of them would successfully get out of the situation until the very end. I really enjoyed reading this very much. Excellent writing!
This story really captures how nice dolphins are. I love the description of them in the beginning. It describes them perfectly. The dream described was very vivid. It was very nice to visualize like a tropical vacation. The way events moved fast like that felt like a real dream. I'm glad that it had a happy ending with the dreamer surrounded by the dolphins that he/see felt were missing. It was a nice scene and story!
This is a cool premise. Yugi GX is a fun series and it is great to see it combined with Giantesses. I like Alexis and it is great to see her have GTS story arcs. The initial setup for this story is very good where the Giantess scenario comes as the result of a duel. That type of situation is in line with what would happen in the anime. The arcs available in the interactive are pretty good so far. I like the choice following the chapter Jayden's trouble. Hopefully this story continues to develop and grow.
This is a great short. I love the sci fi and steampunk combination and this one has time travel. It's a very cool setup and I think it has the potential to be a full length story if you decide to adapt it. There are some great written segments in this this that really gave the characters human touches. I love the moment at the beginning where Terry jumps spilling coffee over himself. The premise and idea that Terry came up with is definitely a huge temptation for ambitious time travelers. Having knowledge of future events is something that could really advantageous.
One of the classic examples of that is the movie Back to the Future Part II where a character use that ability to manipulate the future. He had a sport history book and traveled back to the past with it. He used it to make himself rich and powerful betting on games that he knew the outcome to.
Your story is really exciting and ends at the one of the most intense points. It really left the reader wondering what was going to happen. It would be nice if this storyline was continued further. Really excellent writing!
Wow... great article. I have never been to Omaha but the description given is done so well that I felt like I was visiting the zoo being described as I read through it. It seems like it is set up very nicely divided up biomes and animals. The Bronx Zoo the closest zoo to visit nearby me is set up in a similar fashion. They have similar exhibits a world of birds area, a monkey house and a reptile. They also divide up by continents so they have an Asia area and Africa area. Omaha has this zoo beat with the Wallabies.
Each location in the zoo described sounded really neat. In particular the Aquarium sounds really nice with the fish swimming to the right left and above. The desert area sounded really cool as well.
Mentioning the restaurants and the butterfly pavilion and mentioning they won't be covered just made me want to know more about them. You might consider expanding this article unless you are working with a character limit. I liked how the gift shop was teased and then covered at the end though. It usually the last location people visit in the zoo so it really helped the reader feel like they had traveled along with you on this experience. Great article. Thank you so much for writing and sharing your experiences.
This is a very cool story. I like the description for it. It is a great hook letting everyone know they are in for a mystery. It is an interesting idea to have the story be told from the Cat's perspective. It reminds me a little bit of the movie Cat's eyes. It was a creative idea having the sorceress explore the cats memories to be able to find out the murder. It lead to a great resolution.
On a technical level, the story is well written. It opens with some great description. I love the use of colors with the contrast of scarlet and white. It gives a great visual image and the rest of the story follows along with some nicely described allowing the reader to visualize the story really well. The description of the pheasant sounded delicious and the murder was shocking. The segments within the cats memories were captured the essence of the way that a cat would think
The story moves at a quick and I feel could have benefitted more from more pacing. For example the murderer gives up a little quickly. The Writer's camp challenges are written within a short amount of time so that is understandable though. That said though the plot was exciting to read through and overall it was a very good story.
I know that I am reviewing this late and outside of the holiday season but really cool Christmas Word Search. It definitely made me feel warm Holiday feelings. It had so many winter and holiday words available in it. I enjoyed trying this out. Thank you so much for making this. It was a lot of fun.
A lot of great insights with this analysis on time. It makes me want to make every second I have could Time is definitely a commodity that we never have enough of. You make a great point considering time to be more valuable than money. When it is gone that is it. It is a thought that makes you want to push through things quickly. Nice writing!
It is very cool to see a Sonic Interactive on WDC. It is neat that you have included a variety of Sonic universes to choose from. It would be very cool to see some arcs with Shadow and Knuckles. It looks like this story is off to a very good start. Hopefully it will continue to develop and grow.
This interactive combines two of my favorite things Pokemon and Giantesses. It is developed really well with pretty much all the gym leaders and champions. I am happy because my two favorite gym leaders are included in the mix (Flannery and Clair). It also has my favorite Champion (Cynthia). I hope that we get more storylines involving them in the future. Of the arcs available, my favorite is the one with Cynthia although you have some other great ones available as well. Keep up the great writing.
It is great to see a Zelda crossword. I really have to brush up on my Zelda knowledge. I could only get about three of them with the oracles and Ganon. I probably need to play the the more recent games. In any case this was a fun puzzle. Thank you for making it!
Great word search. I really love Alice in Wonderland and Through the Looking Glass. You have a nice variety of classic Wonderland characters and phrases in it making it a lot of fun to go through. I brings back a lot of my memories of reading the series. I also love the cover picture. You did a really good job making this.
Mushroom hunting sounds like a lot of fun. It seems like a great way to celebrate the springtime. You really capture the feel of the activity very well with the sights and smells involved. Just from reading, I feel like I am involved in the activity as well. I could picture the scent of the mushrooms as they were being picked. You seem like a pro at this activity being able to find the mushrooms and knowing when and where to check for them. Since it is done regularly on an annual basis, it makes sense that you would be adept at it.
This is an interesting story. The perspective of a scientist performing tests on animals are not typically done so it is a unique perspective to witness. The reader immediately feels sympathy for the monkey but the later humanizes the scientist as well showing that the scientist has a child struggling with Diabetes. You can't fault the scientist for doing everything possible to help the struggling child. It is a powerful shift.
You should share a link to the photograph that was used as a prompt. I am curious to see what inspired this story. In any case great writing.
Great tickling interactive. You have a nice set of characters and set up with each character having different weaknesses leading to a variety of story possibilities. This interactive is still developing but the arcs that have been added seem to be coming along. I really like the arc with Taylor so far. I hope that you continue to build this interactive some more. With these type of stories I recommend you provide as many details as possible as it will will help readers to visualize and imagine the scenes very well allowing them to enjoy this story more. Good luck with your writing!
This is a really good poem. I really liked the contrast between where the narrator is and where the narrator wants to be. You could feel the congestion of the narrator's current surroundings vs the freedom of where they were hoping to be.
I particularly loved the second stanza (and fourth)... it made for a nice refrain with the peaceful imagery of the the cascading waterfalls and grass. Actually this poem have beautiful imagery throughout both covering the frustrations of crowded (what I imagine to be city) areas and the natural environment being yearned for. It is very convincing and makes the reader yearn for them and want to get away as well.
This is a really nice story. The setting is very well written and it gives off the impression right away that I am reading a science fiction type of story. I immediately thought of the beginning of the movie Independence day when I was reading this with the military investigating something of Alien origin.
The characters in the story feel right out of that type of movie as well with the FBI agent and Doctor looking into the site of the monolith. The story has some great description as I could visualize every moment that occurred clearly from the Monolith to the hotel room cool.
I feel like the setup of this short story was developed could have easily been expanded into a full length Science fiction Alien story if desired but it also worked really well as is. The ending was really a great punchline with the monolith turning out to be an advertisement that I did not see coming. In hindsight the title hints at it but it was a really great twist. I really enjoyed reading this story very much. Thank you so much for writing it.
This is an awesome crossword puzzle. It's been so long since I've seen the Merlin series. I couldn't completely solve this but it brought back memories. I miss this series. This reminded me of a lot of things that happened in Season 1. I forgot Nimueh was the early Villain. Morgana was also a great character and I love the Dragon. The series definitely could on for longer. You had some great clues in this with a lot of memorable characters and classic elements from the series. I really enjoyed this puzzle very much.
This is a beautiful poem. I think that anyone who has a loved one relates to this heavily. This poem emphasizes the idea that someone you are keeping in your heart has the ability to strengthen you. You have some really beautiful imagery in this Poem. I love the contrasts between sunlight and darkness, life and death and the Heart and Mind. On a rhythmic level. I really loved the rhymes. It made your poem flow and read smoothly. It is very powerful and comforting idea that keeping what you love in your heart stays with you forever. Thank you so much for writing and sharing this.
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