Kelchworth's (klericus) Reviews

Very nice story. I could see and feel the operation. The tension of the mag shroud's possible malfunction. The deliberation and then decision to push through. Nicely done. The heroics felt weighty and real not cartoonish.

Dialog seemed to fit a mining operation that is close to quotidian in some future.

One line/area felt very long:
In 2147, the asteroid belt hummed with industry, and on Vesta, miners Amanda Morris and Darlene Voght prepped for a bold experiment. Their target: a 500-meter nickel-iron asteroid, “Silver-17,” packed with platinum and volatile gases. Their mission: test a new magnetic containment bag their engineer, Jiro Tanaka, swore could revolutionize mining by dampening kinetic impact energy transfer, reducing damage to both equipment and the asteroid’s valuable crust.

I found myself running out of air as I read that... <lol>

This line was perhaps not entirely filled out?
Amanda, a wiry captain with a scar from a rogue drill bit
- Scar where..?

This line, although I could see the ship did not quite land right:
The Stellar Harvester, a hulking ship of grapplers and refineries,
- the ship is covered with the grapplers and refineries perhaps?

This line felt like it did not belong in a space setting. There is no gravity, no atmosphere etc.
hovered a kilometer from Silver-17,
- Floated maybe?
- Hovering seems to suggest that there are some inconstant forces at play...

Again, really liked this story.

4

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#4820316

Review of Born in War, Held by Faith

Review by Kelchworth

Rated: E | (5.0)

Yes. This right here is one excellent story.

Emotions and thoughts pop right off the page and into the mind and the reader can hear your voice.

In fact, the reader can hear the voices of every single person, and thing, in the story.

The uncle, the aircraft bombing, the sirens, the squabbling of children.

I give you 5 stars.

5

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#4820066

Review of The Well

Review by Kelchworth

Rated: E | (4.0)

I enjoyed reading this. The tension was great. Pap wanting to hear the whole story actually increased the immersion here.

Instead of sighing at the last match, perhaps your adventurer should have whispered to himself?

6

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#4819781

Review of The Vanished Epoch

Review by Kelchworth

Rated: E | (4.0)

Very good story. I was drawn in and not willing to stop reading.

The use of English "thought" though I found a bit jarring?

Perhaps cubits not meters.

Not clay but some ceramic - to highlight the different hi technology of that submerged era?

Overall, a great tale. Enjoyed it!

7

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#4819780

Review of The Vanished Epoch

Review by Kelchworth

Rated: E | (4.0)

Very good story. I was drawn in and not willing to stop reading.

The use of English "thought" though I found a bit jarring?

Perhaps cubits not meters.

Not clay but some ceramic - to highlight the different hi technology of that submerged era?

There calendar should disagree with ours...?

Perhaps SOMA picks up signals, decodes them and says the current population of the planet believe that this is the year 2025...

Overall, a great tale. Enjoyed it!