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This is a great story! I see no grammatical or typing error. Your style is sublime and keeps the reader on the eddge of his/her seat to hear more. You really have a talent. Nicley done!
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You have shared a nice sentiment here and I enjoyed reading your piece. I think you written just the right amount or it could have become redundant. Your third stanza is my favorite. It stands out from all the rest and has nice imagery. I enjoyed this also because it is Springy. Nice work!
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Your opening was fantastic. Couldn't have been better. You use all the writing skills with ease. Well done! Great work! What more can I say? I see no grammatical or typing errors. Thank you for sharing this grand work with me.
I read several of your poems and found them all to hold very deep and informative insights. My favorite one is Haikus and Senryus about the cards. I enjoyed reading each one. My overall impression is that you have a real skill and the love you have for poetry shows very clearly in your work.
You first statement was great and was quite a attention getter. Your short was very touching. The Irish have it right don't they with their wakes. I fully agree with what you said in closing your piece and I was left with the overall impression that you know. You just know.
I enjoyed reading your piece. Pretty cute story. Felines are so unpredictable and fun. I found no grammatical errors. I can't find a favorite part because I liked all so well. Good work! This is my overall impression.
I have bipolar kids so I have had some experience with it. Your essay was well written and has alot of good information in it. I enjoyed reading it and I hope alot of other members do as well. Thank you for sharing it with us.
I really enjoyed reading this piece. It was very professionally executed. The description, grammar, conversation- all done very well. I wouldn't change a thing. My overall impression is that you really know what you are doing. Nice work!
You have chosen a nice font to use for this. It is easy to read. Nice description and good conversation skills shown here. I enjoyed reading this and found it different and well put together. You have done some really good work.
Good beginning. It hooks a reader and makes same want to read on to see what is going on and what is going to happen. This sounds like a complex storyline and you are working it well. My overall impression is that you have an excellent handle on the society, characters and action of this story. Good job!
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Welcome to WDC!
My overall impression is that this is an interesting premise for a story. I feel that your conversation could use some work. Too much character direction. I think too much can be just as confusing as too little.
You do have the right idea, however.
Your first sentence: 'Karen looked around the room as the world started spinning.'is alittle jumbled. You might try combining the second with the first. One thing to remember about your first few sentences is that you want to grab your reader, getting the reader interested. Good work!
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Short and sweet, huh? My over all impression is that this piece was nicely executed and that you used very good imagery to bring it to life. So much is said in six short lines. You speak of fear, emotions,solitude, and I feel it all so vividly. I think my favorite line is 'freedom from the bondage of pain'. This is good writing. Good work!
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I enjoyed reading your piece. It was very descriptive and held some very nice imagery. It left me feeling shivery and alittle nervous. Each stanza holds new information to the stormy developement.
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Short but sweet, huh? Interesting point you seem to be making. That is the point. Good writing. You might want to do a re-read and decide if you want all your lines to start with a capitol or not. Making it uniform straight through will make it look more professionsl.
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This is a good start for the first entry in your port. I think if you gave this character a name and directed her along through the action it would come out longer and serve you better as a story. Just some points to ponder.
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Welcome to WDC! Enjoyed reading your piece and here are some points to ponder. Just my opinion.
I think there is too much dialogue. It needs to be broken up with something else. Character movement, story events, etc. A good re-read would help you to find several grammatical errors.
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What a lovely poem. My favorite part was: (A young heart is known for trading the ability to see
for the ability to love.) A very nice sentiment. You have used descriptive wording adequately.
I feel it could use a re-read and edit. For example: amist= amidst. Their= There, etc.
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Interesting. I enjoyed reading it. You have covered all the basics skills and it was quite suspenseful. Good work. Just a thought, I am not sure if this is the finished product or just a piece of an idea, but, I would add something at the beginning to explain what's up. Just my opinion.
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Welcome to WDC. I am sure you will enjoy your stay.
I enjoyed reading your poem and appreciate your reason for writing it. I would advise you to do a re-read and edit it. I think it was nicely done.
Keep on!
KM
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I am not sure why you say you may not feel this is your best work and you don't care if members like it. I really liked. Love stuff like this. And, it was written well. Hey, if you don't want to call it yours I'll take it. (Teehee)
Keep on !
KM
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Welcome to WDC. I enjoyed reading your piece. Your opening lines made for a good hook. Alittle more description in your next draft I think will open this work well. Good work!
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I enjoyed reading your poem. I found it very descriptive and i was quite moving. If we didn't have the sorrow and bad times we would be void of feeling and not know what it was all about. Reason for pause.
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Welcome to our world. I enjoyed reading your list. Very good things to live by indeed. I think #2 and #4 are my favorites. I like pieces that leaving you thinking and this one certainly did.
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I enjoyed reading your work. I think if you use some spacing your piece will be easier to read. Alittle descriptive wording here and there will bring your story to life. You have a good start to your story. Congratulations in being a new member.
Keep on!
KM
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I enjoyed reading your piece. Cute. Natural interactive between chanracters. Realistic conversation. Well used basic skills of creative writing.
Keep on!
KM
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