Hi Amber Autry
This is a nice poem.Good debut.In the first stanza, third line it will be "and" instead of "an".Also, this is a free verse but the flow is not smooth.The lines need to be organised a bit and the flow more uniform.I like the concept of this poem.Since this is a free verse , rhyming is not so important , but some lines are longer thaqn the others and this distracts a bit.Just a thought.Keep writing and posting.
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This is a nice story about a vampire and her human husband.I like this written from the vampire's point of view.This is quite a different kind of a story and unique of its kind.I like the character driven plot in this.There are no spelling or grammatical mistakes.Only suggestion is that it missed out the creepy, eerie mark that vampires usually have.Just a thought.Keep writing and posting.
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This is a nice poem.I liked it though I think this is a short poem.A bit more emotions in it would make this perfect.This is a free verseand it flows smoothly.The rhythm is wonderful.An addition of a few more lines or stanzas would make this perfect.Just a thought.Keep writing and posting.
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This is a nice poem about werewolves and vampires.The rhythm and meter is wonderful.The rhyme scheme of this poem is aabb, and it is maintained perfectly in each stanza.Only suggestion is that it lacked enough emotion in it.I wanted to to know more about the werewolves and the vampires.The ending was a bit funny.Just a thought.Keep writing and posting.
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I really liked your story.This is a story based on science fiction with an interesting end.There are no spelling or grammar mistakes.Punctuation is perfect.The only error/snag I noticed was that you, the narrator turned and twisted the story at a very fast space.I had a little trouble in figuring the course of actions and events.A slow down of the pace might hook the readr's attention.Just a thought.Keep writing and posting!
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Hello Dr.Taher,
I enjoyed this poem immensely.This is a humorous poem and made me laugh.The rhythm and meter of this poem is wonderful.Also, the rhyme is excellent ; the rhyme scheme being abcb, and this is perfectly maintained in each stanza.You have used the picture prompt perfectly.There are no spelling or grammatical mistakes.No suggestions for improvement.
This is a nice, comic poem and made me giggle.The rhyme scheme of this poem is aabb and it was perfectly maintained in the first two stanzas , but in the last stanza if you used the word "incantation" instead of "incantations" then it would have been a perfect rhyme.Also, a bit more comedy might have been added.Just a thought.Keep writing and posting!
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Oh ! what a beautiful poem.I liked the exquisite imagery of this piece.This is a free verse.What I liked most is that you have created a fantastinc write with so few words.I loved every verse of this poem.No error could be noticed.Keep up the great work!
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This poem symbolizes dark love.You have used the prompt very well.The rhyme scheme is aabb and is well maintained in each stanza.The more I read your work , the more I get impressed.Your poetic prowess is amazing.The words flow so smoothly in this poem.Keep writing and posting!
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Hi ShiShad,
This is a beautiful poem.This poem evokes profound feelings .A sad poem of your dear one's death.The rhyme scheme is abab and it is maintained well in each stanza.I loved the rhythm and flow of this poem,simply wonderful.Keep up the great work.
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Hi willow
This is a lovely emotional poem.I liked every verse of it.The rhyme scheme is aabb and it is perfectly maintained in each stanza.The imagery is exquisite.You have blended Nature with Romance/Love.Keep up the great work!Keep writing and posting.
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This is a beautiful poem with exquisite imagery.This poem speaks about a relationship that has lost its warmth and become icy cold,devoid of life and vigour.This is a free verse.The line breaks in stanza 3 and pauses add to the beauty of this poem.Keep up the great work!
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This is a lovely poem with excellent imagery of blind love.I liked every verse of this poem.It evokes a lot of emotions .You have a way with words.The rhythm and flow of this poem is wonderful.I liked the comparison with a moth attracted to a flickering flame in the opening stanza.Keep up the great work!
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This is an exceptionally beautiful poem.You have got the prompt "All By Myself" nailed.This is a free verse.This poem speaks of a broken heart and is very touching and emotional.Nothing I have to add more.Not a single mistake was found there.As usual, this is brilliant.Keep writing and posting.
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This is a wonderful poem ,evoking a lot of emotion.This isa free verse but is rhythm is well-maintained and it flows out smoothly.I loved every verse of this poem.Not a single error was spotted.I loved the last couple of lines specially.No other suggestions I have for you.Keep writing and posting!
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Cheers!
A beautiful poem about the poet's love tinged with sadness.This poem has the rhyme scheme abab and it is maintained perfectly in each stanza.Wonderful rhythm and flow.Only a few more lines/stanzas about why the poet will never meet with her lover would make this flawless.Just a thought.Keep writing and posting!
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Hi Connie,
I liked this poem.This poem reflects an older person yearning for the Spring of his life.Lovely imagery.The rhythm and flow in this poem is wonderful, so is the rhyme .The rhyme scheme being aabb and it has been maintained flawlessly in every stanza.No suggestions I have for you.Keep writing!
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A great poem related to the Moon.I liked the wonderful imagery .This poem has wonderful rhythm and flow.Just within eight lines it has created something that will touch the reader's heart.The pain and agony of the poet is reflected in this piece.
Keep writing!
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You have used the phrase "Darker than black", well.This is a nice poem.Wonderful rhythmand flow.The rhyme scheme is aabb.Only snag I noticed in the second stanza where "abandoned" does not rhyme with " no one".Also in the fourth stanza you have reduplicated the word "go".
keep writing!
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Your thoughts are very beautiful.Very emotional and touching poem.Wonderful rhyme in this poem, the rhyme scheme being abab.Only suggestions are , it will be "voyagers" instead of "voyageurs".Also I feel that in one of the lines the flow is off, in the first line of the second stanza.You have to make this more uniform and keep a check on the meter.
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This is a nice poem expressing a mother's love.Very emotional and touching.But I am confused about the rhyme scheme it is following.In the first two stanzas it is abba ,then in the second two stanzas it is abab and finally in the last stanza it is aabb.In the fourth stanza the last line "Would I ever know the delights of a model wife ?" did not convey me the meaning supposed to be told.Maybe it is me who only stumbled upon this.Keep up the great work and write on!
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I liked your perspective to this poem.This speaks of burying the hatchet and unifying the world.This poem has wonderful rhythm and meter.Only suggestion is that an addition of a few more lines or stanzas would make it just perfect.Just a thought.Keep writing and posting.
A lovely and sad poem about innocent people murdered and killed.I think in the last line it should be "Let us never forget the loss" instead of "lost".A noun should be there.
Otherwise, a wonderful poem.Keep writing and posting poems like these which evoke a lot of feeling.
A beautiful poem with wonderful imagery.The rhythm and meter is also excellent.I liked every verse of it.Only suggestion is that an addition of a few more lines or stanzas would make it just perfect.The lovely words of this poem made me to crave more.Keep up the great work and write on!
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This is a nice attempt.My suggestion is that you add a few more lines or stanzas to grasp the reader's attention.Also I felt the lack of enough emotions in this piece.Try to make it more moving.Finally, please put a check on the rhythm and meter.The lines are not organised.
Anyways, keep writing!
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