Poetry is an expression of your feelings.It simply comes straight from the heart.A good poet is one who can write about simple things.
Your poem evoked such feelings.When I was a kid, I was afraid to look under the bed specially at nightbecause I found only darkness there.
This is a nice poem.
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Nice poem about scarry dreams.However I had a trouble in figuring out the rhyme scheme of this poem.The rhyme scheme seems to be aabb but in the last three lines you failed to accomplish it.Also let more emotions flow into this to touch the reader's heart.
Keep writing!
This is a very cute story.I liked your imagination.As for the story,it moved around smoothly.There are no grammatical errors or spelling mistakes.You have done a great job.I have no suggestions for improvement.keep writing.Look forward to reading more of your work.
Hi Connie,
This is a very sweet poem of a flower's journey from the store to the garden.The emotions of a flower nicely displayed.I liked every verse of this poem.This is a couplet , the rhyme scheme being aabb.You have painted a beautiful picture of a flower with your words.Very picturesque !Keep writing.
Hi Vantha
This is surely a lovely story.I wonder at your spontaneous story telling ability.It goes around so smooth.
Also you have a rich and vivid imagination that made it possible to write such a wonderful story.You do have the gift of writing.I enjoyed this very much.Look forward to reading your other parts as well.
Hi Magoo,
This is a very lovely poem about the love between a skunk and a porcupine.I really admire your imagination and your poetic prowess.This poem would be surely loved by children.You certainly had my attention.I had never thought this way.This is an unique poem.Keep writing.
This is a lovely poem about a butterfly seeking fulfillment and freedom to soar the sky.You really have a lot of talent .This is a free verse and I like it very much.I liked most the last but one stanza.No grammatical errors or spelling mistakes.Absolutely wonderful!
This is a simple poem about your brother.I wish you could add a few more sentences and a bit more emotion to make it more poignant.This is too short a poem.In the line"He is a man of whom I wish I could be like" , there is a grammatical error.It should be "He is a man whom I wish I could be like".Keep writing.
I think this is the bast story I have ever read.You are a very talented writer and grasp the reader's attention very well.Your choice of words is excellent as well as the storyline.
The way your story revolves round the characters, is both exciting and interesting.I am going to read all of the parts of this story.Keep writing!
Liked this perspective of yours.Our soul is like a banana, very true.Nice choice of words.
This is a free verse but you need to tighten the flow by controlling the meter a bit.Emotions well displayed.
I liked specially the last six lines.
Well done, keep writing!
Hi RedButterfly,
Great poem and very nice imagery.Can understand your feelings and pangs of a broken heart.I like the title "Ghost of Me", very much.Only suggestion is that you better stick to the meter a bit more than now then it will be perfect.One of the lines in the last stanza is longer relative to others and it distracts a bit.
Write On!
Writing in iambic pentameter is quite difficult.You have done a splendid job using it.
The story is well-told having a nice ending.The tale had gripped my attention and I was wondering , the reason why Gran forbade you to marry.
I give thee kudos!
Your poem speaks of the deep faith in God hidden inside you.You have expressed your reverence to God in an extraordinary way .Your words spurred me too.I got a new picture of Jesus from you.
On the technical side, this is a free verse where the flow is good.I look forward to reviewing more of your work.
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A funny children's poem ,hey! An amusing story of an elephant over-eating bananas.I am sure children would love this.
On the technical side, this poem has nice flow, well-maintained rhythm and nice rhyme throughout the verse.
No mistakes I could find here.
Great work!
A very nice crown cinquain, well told in the form of a story.This reflects apt choice of words threaded together like beads to form a poem like necklace.There are no spelling or grammatical errors.Lovely display of emotions and sad memories shared together.Loved this one!
Very lovely haiku chain based on the prompt "galley".I noticed that you are a very talented poet writing in various forms of poetry.Loved the use of imagery and words in this one.
Look forward to reading more of your work.Keep writing with your gifted pen.God bless!
This is a nice poem.Only the flow(meter) is off in few parts.This could be better if made more uniform.No doubt, this is a sad poem,the emotions well depicted.Liked this one.This depicts the death of someone,and is a very dark write.Hope to read more of your works.
Gosh!This is a beautiful story..I could feel the Yeti coming towards that girl and place her in the lap of death.This is like a suspense thriller.You did an excellent job in only 299 words.I am quite impressed by this.Loved the way the story was told,resembled a suspense thriller.
You have grapsed the reader's attention very well by this excellent piece.I liked this very much.Emotions that breaks a relationship,a rift in the married life of a couple is very well portrayed out here.I liked your choice of words and your details of everything.Brilliant work!
I liked this story very much.You have an excellent figment of imagination which made this story so beautiful.I liked your command over the language and also the use of creative ideas.The Big Bang,Nano factories and all, made it very scientific also.It has touched my heart.
This is an exceptionally beautiful short story sharing the pangs of lost love.Love is an emotion which when felt deeply creates magic sometimes.Your story has delighted me greatly.The songs in this story are little poems which are like little gems.I liked this very much.
This is one of the nicest ballads that I have ever read.Exceptionally beautiful poem.I would like to know about one thing,the beats daDum daDum etc and 8-68-6 means the syllables?I would be grateful to you if you would kindly explain all these things to me.
This is really a lovely and perfect tribute to Obama,The New President of America.I liked the simplicity and the free flow of words in your article.It is altogether a very inspiring write.You do have the gift of writing.Keep on writing and keep creatingbthe magic of words .
This is truely a wonderful ode to the Afro-American President Obama.I really liked your rhythm and rhyming throughout the verse.Your poem speaks about Bush's regret for his mistakes and the begining of a new era- the era of hope.Overall a quite inspiring verse.
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