Hi Zeke,
It's nice comedy,I enjoyed reading your short and sweet , "Her First Time" and laughed loud as I approached the end! Hats off to your skill in writing it.!.....kranand
Hi Tanith,
I read through your Sci- fi , my impression as reader are placed under: it’s about the conversation between spalding and Patterson, at the base while they were settling down with drinks at Port cordial , the official lunar tourist hub.
Patterson ignites for fun Scalding’s flair for describing and giving a long speech .
The discussion was about the paperback book “Watership Down “ a favorite of Spalding.
It was a good justification of print form over electronic media due to unexpected problem faced frequently in the later.
The description of Spaling’s character is brought out well. It’s good attempt to arouse fun in the readers.
I Enjoyed the short but sweet creation………kranand
Hi Astrogirll
It caught my interest to read your free written reflections on ethics of individuals with respect to other living beings that exist with us, the society, the environment, and whole gamut of linked matter that your mind hovers around.
The main point of my impression is the power of a free thinker’s mind and it’s forceful expression I found in you, in jotting down as soon as the feelings errupt. Yes I too agree and am happy you have chosen give out and share them with other likeminded by telling frankly “I find it very therapeutic to write whatever may come down as a way of letting it go so here we go.”
The other major impression I got in your writings is that the free flow of thoughts well linked and logical, knitting the entire matter chronologically keeping the discerning reader glued to reading till its end, where ever the subject takes .
It’s well written musings , I feel all thinkers should follow and jot down as and when thoughts pass through ones mind! It’s nice, keep it up.
Hi “Percy Goodfellow”
I read your advisory and open description of the nature and complexity of defining characters in a story. It’s an amazing clear picture of the art, you have fluently made a newbie like me to understand because at one time or other we have come across each of these points in our effort to write a story.
The fact that it lies dangling between an art as much as it’s a science built up with norms evolved has well been brought out making the student clear he being taken through a complex subject still making us to understand its art and science together.
A good lot of clues how and where to start,”chicken before the egg or egg before the chicken” dilemma is simply kept aside and advise us to start some where and add shape to it on either side, is really appreciable tip, no doubt it has given me hope, and confidence that my way of doing things work.
This time and space is not enough to put down my impressions in detail but let me acknowledge you are a great “ Guru”( teacher) who keeps the great goal that his “Shishya” achieves the art and science of the subject much better than himself and takes it to much greater heights!
Yes it’s a superb piece of writing I liked!.........kranand
Hi Joto-Kai,
I read your “Article Why in the World?” thou it was not solicited, as a matter of general interest. I place below my impressions as a reader in general, if it could help you in any way.
I was spun around in circles to decipher the depth and breadth of the philosophy you have woven into a few words and an normal scene where likeminded elderly buddies sit in a coffee shop enjoying lazily the ambience chatting anything and everything that comes to their mind.
Hats off to your ingenuity you have exhibited in your golden lines: “Again, cryptic, but not. He didn't need even Earth to have a melon, any more than He needed to spell it out for me. He needed it to house the people who would share in His creation. From my own experience, I understood. No creation is complete until someone enjoys it.” Yes I too am of the view “No creation is complete until someone enjoys it.”
I liked the great acumen in life that is hidden in your article, it’s a treasure trove of wisdom……….kranand
Hi “Happy to write”
I got a chance to read through your writing as an subject for random review. I am glad to record herewith my impressions about it if I could of help to you.
It’s descrption packed with imagination to the core, of the figure “coming in power and glory, he is dressed in white, with one of the biggest and brightest golden crowns you've ever seen, a long following purple rope that's the brightest purple you have ever seen is flapping in the wind and is attached to the top of his beautiful crisp and pure white robe near the shoulder area”.
It’s a feast to our inner eyes to share your imagination of Christ coming again from heavens, searching our souls if we do have faith in Him or not! I am carried away by the intense feeling with which you rest your faith in Him, it’s unparalleled devotion that drives it all! It’s nice I liked right up to the end. ………..kranand
Hi Seokjinnie ,
I am placing my unsolicited reading and recording of impressions, if it could help you as a reader.
I read through your story of a poor single mother, working for livelihood in restaurant, Eun Ji, struggling make two ends meet and still be a loving mother of An. Losing her father when she just turned eighteen, she could find emotional support in her only brother Jong-suk, just graduated from high school, currently working part-time jobs to meet two ends meet.”
The scenes at the restaurant bearing all the embarrassment with customers and colleague Adora are quite picturesquely described to the utmost sympathy of reader till the end awestruck.
It’s beautifully crafted drama of day to day life of poor single mother clinging on to eakout a respectable living, I was moved deeply by its hardships and attendant onslaught of society around. I LIKED IT RIGHT UP TO END WITH GREAT SYMPATHY FOR EUN JI………..kranand
Hi Sophia,
I read through your post “Chapter 1 – The Void” and felt sorry for her plight. It was a heartrending scene you have picturesquely described, well done, good simple language. Well knit flow of thought I appreciated all through.
It’s my impression only as a reader, I wish it could be of help to you. Here the protagonist, she, and the scene are well described. Her husband and in laws are shown as the root cause for the conflict. But the conflict itself is kept as vague as possible by cleverly to attract reader’s attention to remain till end in expectation of knowing more about it! Perhaps you have kept it to further continuation dragging the reader to read further! A good technique deployed .
Somehow I am averse to go into details like spellings or grammar though I did not find any such errors.
In all a well began effort I liked a lot……….kranand
Hi “Percy Good Fellow”
Yes, it’s well conceived idea to interpret the words God and Heaven to mean Aliens and Space respectively. Whether it stands the common point of view or not, it’s an extended stretch of a writers imagination as they say, “A Poet can see where The Sun couldn’t ” to appreciate the glory of the imaginative power of a writer.
As long as we consider various earlier literature as pure bit of imagination it fuels interest to read through for fun and derive reading pleasure. I liked the way you have explored past writings and tried to sum up the your views. In addition your writing gave me a fillip to complete my book “Aliens of Milear” that talks of experiments done by Aliens to develop Hybrids between them and humans.
I liked it also as it serves a sort of “Compilation on the subject hybrids of humans with Aliens” …….kranand
Hi "Escape Artist"
Its an action packed scene depicting the wrecking of ship.desperate moments moments of Mikhail trying swim ashore,repeated throw back by the fury of waves, his dangling between life and death sent jitters down my spine, I read through the lines till end with awe and curiosity! It's great novel that mesmerises a reader to read through end without a stop!
The description of his encountering a female, her father have all been brought in with great detail, picturesque , I couldn't forget the scene.
Quite a lot of imagery brings a feast to a discerning reader! A master craft I liked it and enjoyed.......kranand
Hi HuntersMoon,
I got to read and review your fantasy comedy as a part of random review exercise. I record my impressions as a reader with the only intention that I could be helpful as reader to your works.
This is about Wiliam’s canoeing Bermuda Triangle? In the dark evening, in an absent minded state.As the experience turns out to be adventurous against huge surge of waves. Soon he observes the abrupt colour changes to red around the pines on shore. He gets know it indicates he’s getting marooned!
The remarks by the dock hand is quite funny amidst distress!
Quite a picturesque descrption I liked , kept me curious to read to end, you’re marooned!........It’s nice …….kranand
Hi Random Number ,
I read through your fiction drama The sale..I record below my impressions. It is purely to help writer how a reader feels and orient his writing to attract and retain readers. If my comments are not agreed, please dump them.
It’s a prolonged interaction between Param and Naveen. Param had sought Naveen’s help to clinch a sale for their company product. It’s the steadfastness of Naveen during discussion with Vishwajeeth , param is convinced they were able to clinch the deal.A number of obstacles like traffic snorls had to be overcome . Many a time the casualness of Naveen pushed Param to neves and loosing confidence he would spoil the chances.
In a nutshell it’s routine salesman’s grind explained at length. No doubt it’s a series of conversation and action packed drama . Too many lines not relevant to the story like the series of traffic problems are explained. What interest the reader will have to read all such unconnected matter? I suggest you review and remove lines not relevant to story.
I find no efforts to attract the interest of reader is found. You need to relook keeping reader’s interest,or curiosity or bit of fun, and such requirements. Keep writing,reading some of the great stories simultaneously to get a hang of it all. All of us have been sailing in the same boat! Some in the front,others at the back!...........kranand
Hi Oddman,
You wrote the golden lines, an advice to ponder repeatedly, to go into full depth and width of environs, adopt in every facet of our life. Hats off to you, the lines can’t be taken light, they are a treasure trove for discerning minds to practice in every endeavor in life, widen the horizens of our understanding the world around. I am happy you stirred a great storm of reviewing my day to day work to adapt it! It was a great inspiration indeed!......kranand
I read your story “The Broken Cup” as a part of my random review exercise. I record below my impressions for your perusal.
It was a feast my palate, a nice fun to read again and again , picking up the great skill of writing behind the joy I derived reading!
The humor of it all sends me tizzy in a great laughter remembering each one of them alone sitting in front of my writing desk! ………..kranand
Hi Redtowrite,
I read through your “A Clown’s Tears” a vivid description of high action, life risk action, right at the start of the story. I was on my nerves anxiously waiting to find how the victims of fire are saved from fatality.
As the rescue got in sight another larger already kept before me drawing my sympathy towards Augustie. He had to reconcile to the awkward situation of allowing his estranged wife Angelina and her boyfriend , together to share his apartment, partly because his darling daughter Angela and her mother Angelina wanted each other’s company and partly because he himself had the crush for her like a hidden flame, he calls it his weakness! This forces him instinctively attempt to rescue his estranged wife as she was also in danger of getting burnt, risking his own life after he successfully hands the daughter to rescue fireman out of the window.
He helps to rescue her answering her frenetic cries for help and in the process gets burnt severely himself. At that stage, I as a reader felt a sigh of relief and it’s their survival of them and the way they overcome the effects of burn that is my anxiety and keeps me eagerly latched on to read further. A part of my mind tells even if they recover, it would be partial and the cruel scar would remain. To that extent my initial curiosity to read is reduced. Further as I read the author in you is trying to convert the readers sympathy into appreciation of Augustie’s will power to attain his original form and life style. I knew that’s the trend the story progresses. Personally though I appreciated the steadfast efforts of Augustie to come out completely the damages inflicted by fire, the original intensity to read on waned gradually, I was in a hurry to perfunctorily glance and hurry through my reading the story.
You may wonder why I am describing my interest in the story than evaluating its good and bad. Yes there is a purpose behind it. I want to convey you I was driven through the story by the beautiful picturesque description. My curiosity peaked out as soon as the recue from fire is accomplished. The oncern to read gradually decreased. The continuation of the story beyond this is not effective and I feel it should end around the peak, to have best effect on reader. All details after that could be the subject for a different narration . It is only my impressions you may or may not agree. It is intended to help you to consider dividing the story into two parts one about the fire and rescue from it. The other about the willpower of Augustie that helped him to overcome soon from the scars of fore accident
As for the title of the story, it is quite apt and well coined.………kranand
Hi olgoat ,
The story is about “The Joining”, the process of establishing peace between male and female regiments by forcing male and female soldiers duly drugged earlier to indulge in sexual act. It’s evident in Michaels’ thought in the lines “This Joining had been arranged by the inter-armed services committee and he had been told that it was not just his genes but also about the promotion of peace between the two regiments.” I was horrified to read through the explanation of the barbarous act and fight between Michel and Joan to defend onslaught on each other. I was keen expecting them to ward of the barbarity in an ingenious way , a wishful thinking, but to my dismay it did’nt happen. After the firce fight ripping each other “Their bodies slammed together which stopped them for a moment. In that moment, everything changed. Their eyes met differently and their mouths crushed together in an animal lust.” “found two snoring bodies intertwined on the floor”. A funny situation hard to believe!
It appears they both die when they wake up, the overseers take pity and separate them.
It’s a scene of horror that squeezes the reader’s heart beyond immagination. The description is picturesque, the feelings of Michel and Joan before joining is well depicted. Story is well written Well done……kranand
Hi “mxnasi”
I read through your flash fiction, you carved a very good set of Kyle and Jerry, Hats off to the ingenuity behind such gentle surprise! It was feast to my palette I read trying to make out , you were clever enough to burst the surprise through your mother’s words ““Honey, there is no one else in the room with you. But the friends in your head have returned.” Fantastic in deed!.........kranand
Hi Paul,
I read through your work about insisting daughter responding to an invitation by the daughter and attending a friends costume party, a prank.Mom permits her to attend it though reluctantly. When she finds it was a prank she didn’t cry, comes back cool, an adult’s respomse . I Liked the clear descriptions and well knit conversation.
Its quite interesting ……..kranand
Hi Angus
I read your story Not you again well described and appealing. Here are my impressions:
It’s about the repeated plea of Jerry to forgive him for the he again and again does the mistake of marrying and aborting the marriage. It’s the seventeenth marriage for which he asks God almighty to parden him for his repeated mistake. Lord reminds him of the wrong doing but jerry was insisting promising it’s the last time he promises. Lord grants but tells it’s not you again to plead for mercy.
I liked the vivid description of Jerry’s stooping mind but without any correction. It looks Jerry is addicted to the act. It’s a common weakness found in any addict!........kranand
Hi Dawn Embers ,
I couldn’t but get carried away by your sense of fun in chosing to describe how to type a new article or story on Writing.com. I am astonished as to the meticulous instruction you have given to a newbie step by step how to use the website to enter one’s creations. I think one instruction that says “drag or copy paste your item here” as an option is not mentioned if I am right? It’s a minor issue we needn’t worry about.
I thought for a while, if a writer minds he could create a story or article from out of nothing!
Some thing similar is your article. I could enjoy it with lots of fun …..nothing like it.It’s great! ……………kranand
Hi Mordee2,
I read through your fiction ‘The Unhappy Princess”. I append my impressions as one of the many readers, to help hone your writing skills from reader’s point of you if possible.
It’s quite a hilarious topic you have chosen to reflect present day predicament of lovers engaged in distance love making!
Quite lot of the story space is spent in introductory information I feel would only end up in long reading in anticipation of some fun or something would crop up to quench the thirst for surprises by a reader but gets so so feeling. The story ends up in a mild obstacle the story should contain no more than one hundred and forty characters. You could create a better ending with some thing more forceful fun. It’s only my impression as a reader , it may or may not be accepted. No offence meant please. ………kranand
Hi A M Harley,
I read through your introduction of a character Samuel Albert Harrison.
Samuel Albert Harrison is introduced in a novel way, Opening with a environment of people busy indulged in “chatter, among business associates and professional couples” much to the “anxiety building in his chest and seeping into his stomach.”
He, a man of middle thirties, worn out to appear considerably older, “content with the comfort of his own solitude” is described in a vivid detail I liked the skill of writing compact but filling as much of information about him as possible to get a vivid picture.
I liked to read through appreciating the poetic descriptions filled with similes and metaphors. ……….kranand
Hi Angrika
I am appending my heartfelt impressions on your short story, purely as one of the many readers with an intention to be of some assistance in your endeavor! Not intended to offend an one without my knowledge.
You have picturesquely described the story with a heart rending tragedy falling on you abruptly making your darling daughter’s leg amputed and bringing the green dreams of moving to a bigger city in pursuit of quatum improvements in life ahead; crumbling down to abyss.
The best part of the story is Anna’s bubbling and inspiring attitude towards life you said “But Anna unexpectedly made be me believe that life is still beautiful”
I was carried away by the beautiful narration, the picture of the story still ringing in my mind. Very good, I liked it all through…………kranand
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