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Review by K.H.Engl
Rated: E | (4.5)
There is a solemn quality about this poem that has to do with the fish that I cannot quite explain.... Let me read it once again....something about family ties...generations.. I almost want to say grandparents, the fact the these are traditions that last beyond the years... I don't know what else to say - grandfather, father, son....
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Review by K.H.Engl
Rated: E | (3.0)
Rhychus,

I found your poem to be very intriguing. It made me think of the Book of Revelations in the Bible, and even as some would describe the rapture. There are many elements of abstract imagery here that leave one open to the interpretation of the meaning. For instance, "War mongers bringing / To decorus politics / In constant pressure of / Nightmares in broad daylight / An enlightening event" - I'm not sure exactly what you mean here. Is this a spiritual awakening? Perhaps you mean these are ones who will reap their "just desserts"? In any case, I think the poem is emotionally strong albeit somewhat convoluted. Perhaps with the use of more concrete representation the effect would be more resonant.
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Review of A Jewish Life  
Review by K.H.Engl
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I think this poem is charged with imagery and emotion. There is a quality of deep strength and defiance against the tyranny of the unjust and the remarkable fortitude of the will to survive. That being said, I wish to tell you that there are several area where I was left confused as to what was the actual occurrence in the timeline, although you have give it a linear format. In other words, I didn't understand what had taken place in the poem and exactly when or how. In this particular instance the use of more concrete words would help to flesh this out. (What do you mean by sleepy sensation of of liquid consumed me.. alcohol? dreams? drugs?) In stanzas 15, 16 and 17 you are taking this man in and making him afraid...a previous tormentor, I am to understand, but I'm not sure how you do this. Also, I am confused - who is leaving the message - it sounds like he is but I would assume it is you. My suggestion would be to tighten up the last 3 stanzas of the poem to give it some clear explanation of just what happened. It is an intriguing "story" that most certainly need resolution. Again, I must reiterate that the poem is an intensely moving poem centered around a highly emotionally charged issue, which in and of itself makes good fodder for poetry. Overall, I think this is a wonderful poem that leaves one thinking about it long after the first reading, and the second, and third....


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