I'm sadly not the best with names, so I asked a friend without giving her the context. When she saw 'Aeryne' she pronounced it exactly as you wanted it. So I'd say that spelling works fine.
Now the team thing is a speciality of mine. While I would need to know why 'Cranium' is the team name, 'Octanium' sounds perfectly fine. Especially when some team names are usually inspired after the members. So I'd say Octanium.
This seems like an intresting idea for a story. The fact you compare this to three anime gives a basic idea of what to expect from the world.
The fact that you created different levels of complexity, as well as explaining what each Badge can do clearly shows that you have a solid grasp of what you want.
Due to my personal history, I'm not the biggest fan of any religion, though I won't berate believers either.
I grew up with some hatred for the Bible, but I have recently come across a Christian with a similar hatred to be, yet with a strong belief in the Bible.
She showed me where I was wrong. Not berating, but with genuine passion and love. While I have no desire to convert, I am very much open to reading the Bible. If for nothing else but to learn my own errors. And this is another example of my own misgivings.
While I would normally say you're looking too deep into a children's show, consistency is important no matter the demographic.
You clearly put a lot of time and effort into this, which shows just how much love the series.
The fact that you explain each rule, then list each time that rule is broken is once. The fact each episode name is in bold is very much appreciated. Very well made.
This is something I wish I saw earlier. A very useful description of what each Item is, as well as what level of Membership is needed to use each Item.
I'll definitely have to remember to come back and check each description before creating an Item.
Well, this is a very handy spreadsheet of ages that I may have to cheat off for an upcoming project.
Jokes aside, this useful to return to when needed.
I was also surprised to learn about Jessie's mum disappearing but their ages make sense. As Meowth confirmed they were doing the dirty deed in the 2nd movie.
Little late, but I think you should. If the characters are unique and/or original to your story, it would be nice to have a character sheet to work off.
Whether or not you choose to make the character sheets though, or make a small list, is up to you.
Oh, that's a difficult question. I love all four of them for different reasons. But if you put a gun to my head, it'd have to be Mikey.
While I love Leo's willingness to protect his family, Donny's know-how, and Raph's attitude, Mikey is just the best (done right) because of how he makes anything funny.
This is a hard one for me, because I have a deep love for all the starters. And with four different starters at different stages of evolution, it made it difficult to decide.
Therefore, I ignored my current favourited and go for my original. Mewtwo.
This was a fun little quiz. However, I'm going to have to remove points due to one question being extremely opinionated. And a few more because you practically give us the answer to two of them.
Apart from being given the answer to those two, I enjoyed thinking about what the answers could've been.
Personally, I love Sally Acorn. I've never read any of the comics, so I cant judge her by that. But in Sonic SatAM, I love how she was portrayed as Sonic's equal. What Sonic does with speed, Sally can do with intelligence and preparation. I hope she returns one day.
This is very difficult for me, because I love both colours equally. To be honest, I'd love if you made one with both, or made the two with each wolf on opposite sides. Like they were facing each other.
Choosing randomly, I chose black because it fit with the night.
With no real idea of what I'd be adopting, I don't know which I'd pick. How big will it get? How much trouble will it be? Will it be stressful, or relaxing?
That being said, I'll have to adopt the Rainbow Dragon. Not only because it's the name of a Yu-Gi-Oh monster, but also because I love colourful things.
I would personally go for "Disease plus Nature" idea. The idea that even dragons get sick isn't done too often, and it would work to show how even dragons have their limits.
It would also be interesting to learn more about his father. Is he the god of all nature, or just the dragon god of nature?
This is a surprisingly simple yet creative interactive. While the idea of Jaune being turned into a girl is fun enough, I like that you went the extra yard and gave various methods to cause the change. As well as not limiting the story to only RWBY girls.
This is a pretty cool idea for an interactive. I like that there are various ways to change, allowing for different levels of interaction for the readers/writers.
While there doesn't seem to be that many chapters as of yet, I look forward to seeing more.
A rather dark but creative idea to have one of our heroes (or villains) taking over the world. While I expected the second choice to be from the hero's point of view, I actually found myself enjoying the idea that we're following one of the slaves instead.
This is a surprisingly simple but fun idea of an interactive. The idea of creating a small change that will have a Butterfly Effect on the world as a whole allows for creative ideas and outcome.
Despite that, there sadly doesn't seem to be many chapters. K hope that changes.
A really fun and enjoyable story. I liked Tom and saw a bit of myself in him. He was (from what I can tell) an accurate and respectful interpretation of autism.
Lenny was also a well written character. Typical buddy cop duo who cover each other's weaknesses. It makes me want to see more of him and hope he made a full recovery.
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