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Review of THE WAR HAMMER  
Review by Lauraday
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I truly adore this story! I do wish for more of the family history. My own research is at a stand still. Sarah is a true roadblock!
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Review by Lauraday
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
The Loan Traveler is so throughly addictive! I enjoyed it immensely.

I would like to see more detail in describing the people and surroundings. I found myself wondering many times about the locations, wanting more detail as in the weather, the grass and other sensory stimulants. I need to know what people and places smell like along with their personal appearance. Most of the time it was spot on, there were however a few times I could have used more of a discription on people, places and events.
I recall one time where it jumped from one scene to another with no warning and I had to go back and re-read to place myself back in the story.
In all honesty as a chronic reader this story would be on a best seller list in no time as a full series. I have finished it and I still want it to go on into more detail. I look forward to reading more of your works.
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