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Review of Deep Thoughts  
Review by LeGrand
Rated: E | (3.0)
This is a good piece. I liked your thoughts. You got me thinking about the importance of planning (something I still struggle with), and it made me want to be better.

The only thing I would say to make it better is to go back through it and replace some of the words.

This could be just me, but I thought the phrase: "creating a pointed pile" would sound better with either the word "pointed" being replaced with something better, or to simply remove it. Again, this could just be me.

In the fourth paragraph, in the phrase, "even if I do say it myself" I would remove the word "even" and change "it" to "so". To me, that sounds a little better. However, take this advice for what it's worth. It's just my opinion. Others may think it sounds fine just as it is.

Overall, it's a good piece that made me think, and motivated me to be a better person.
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Review of Cleatus  
Review by LeGrand
Rated: E | (3.0)
I liked it. *Smile* While reading, I kept trying to figure out what animal he was. My first thought was that he was a cat, and I kept thinking that until I got to the end of the last paragraph. Clever!
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