|Greetings! I am reviewing your short story as part of a review prompt for the Week 4 August MHWA Challenge. Please be advised that the comments I write in this review are solely my opinion.
Theme/Subject Matter: Friendship, Friends
To write this in article form was an interesting choice which worked well for the piece and subject matter.
I was left with the feeling that you know exactly what friends and friendship are all about. I also was left with the feeling that you know, probably from experience, about those "friends" who use and abuse a friendship until the trust between friends has been lost.
My Favorite Part:
"A true friend and pal is the one who appreciates your efforts and helps you to become best version of yourself, and accepts you with all your faults." - You hit the nail right on the head with this line and I agree wholeheartedly. I also like the sentence, "Friends who care about you are the most precious gift which God has bestowed upon us.", but know that while they are precious, our most precious gift (in my opinion) is the gift of our own lives, followed closely by the lives of our loved ones and friends.
- Check your punctuation and word spacing. The way it is written, seems that everything is a mashed together.
- You also might try indenting the first line of your paragraph.
- Another little hint: Don’t use can not when you mean cannot. The only time you’re likely to see can not written as separate words is when the word “can” happens to precede some other phrase that happens to start with “not” (eg. We can not only break even, but also turn a profit.) - Because of these little technical difficulties, I am giving you 4 stars.
I like and appreciate the idea concerning friends which you are trying to convey here. I agree that true friends accept you for who you are, flaws and all. Just a little work on the punctuation, etc. and this piece would be worth 5 full stars.
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