You have a multitude of talents. Did you have horses or do you? I mostly had mules, ponies, donkeys, milkgoats and lot of other stuff.
I thought the dialogue between you, the adult, was well written for talking to a child. You talked to her like an adult, but slipped in some information, rules and lessons, too. I had a huge Belgian mare like Chester. She was six feet tall at the withers and weighed over 2200 pounds. She was gentle, thoughtful and never lost her temper. She liked for me to walk on her back and dig in my toes to give her a massage.
Yes, I do think children will love your story. Children always love stuff about animals, don't they? If I had decided to teach, I would have encouraged the students to write, then read, then write, then read. It's a good routine and while the kids wrote more and more, they would learn more and more. Don't you agree?
Let me go for a bit. I am editing a story for one of the contests, but I forgot if the one I planned to enter has been entered before. I guess I'll write a new one. It's the "55 Word" contest. I also like the 150 word story contest, and Words of the Wise. That is where all of my spiritual reading and writing has helped me ---- big time.
Oh, check my port. Gertrude, my mare, is on a couple of stories. Tell me what you think of "Savng Gertrude?" Or can I use one that already has an awardicon? No problem, I am a prolific writer, as you can tell.