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Review by LETY
Rated: E | (4.0)
interesting. liked it. it was short but it was enough to understand what was going on.
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Review of My First Romance  
Review by LETY
Rated: E | (4.0)
I liked it. You told a story from top to bottom. Expressed how it shattered but how she / he will come back up. not allowing this to take them down. Well said.
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Review by LETY
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Let me first say, congrats on writing your first short story. I did like where your story was going but I feel as though its missing pieces of how it elaborated and then ended. what is the history of this house. Why was the boy suddenly interested into going into this house? why was he cursed? I got the base of it but there is no connection. I did not connect to the story. I liked it , It just needs balance. To believe he was cursed when he sealed his fate, while entering an abandon house. Give the reader a reason to care.

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Over all, I think you have a great foundation. Keep at it. Never give up. I hope I was not being harsh. My intention is for you to succeed.
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Review by LETY
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
some of us can be monsters. But I have hope for some that are willing to change. I liked it. A little creepy with the thought that a person can be capable of such terrible things. good writing.
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Review of Check Please  
Review by LETY
Rated: E | (4.5)
very well written. I've asked for the check a few times in my days. I think its time for a vacation. I really liked this. keep writing.
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Review of Broken  
Review by LETY
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I really liked this. I could feel this person on their side, hoping to die, or better yet, a piece of them dying, while no one cared to bother if they were okay. The world can be cruel. But even though death seemed to be in the air, maybe the moon cascaded a glimpse of hope. Giving them another day to become strong. I dunno, this is just my thoughts. But very well written. Keep writing.
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