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Review by Serena Blade
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello,

Very nice beginning. It has intrigued me to know more. It kept my interest and would like to more. The writing ran smoothly with no issues that I see. Keep on writing.


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Review of Them! WC 283  
Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello.

the story was short and cute. wanted to see who was this "Them." But we never do which i would say is a good thing cause you can decide what this them, is.

keep on writing.


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Review of My dog Teddy  
Review by Serena Blade
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello,

I am so sorry for your loss. I know it is hard to lose a pet that you love dearly. I am sure they are in doggy heaven , watching over you.

keep on writing.
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Review of Cow Shadows  
Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Interesting little short story. very few words but very true.

keep on writing.


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Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello,

I am not so sure what happened. But at least you had the courage to step up and fight for what you believed was right. Good thing.
keep on writing.


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Review by Serena Blade
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
This speaks volumes of saddness and emptiness, hidden behind a smile. I am sorry for anyone's loss. I liked it.

keep on writing.


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Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello,

This is an interesting poem. Kind of gave me a feeling of a tribe gone sideways. Here are a few things I've noticed where questionable to me. Please see below.

If they my people when I hurt so would they ( missing "were")
However they can’t be you see because not everyone will stick by your side (Doesn't make sense. Is it missing an apostrphe?)
writen twice ( not sure if in error) Not everyone can love you no matter what
If you have put you trust in Christ than God and his Holy court are your people (doesn't make sense)

keep on writing.


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Review of 1. Missing  
Review by Serena Blade
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello,

I enjoyed the beginning of this story. Its believeable about the kids being friends and I liked how you started to unravel the story. it kept my interest. The only thing that confused me and felt a little abrupt and come out of nowhere, is how the character Chalam was introduced. It was introduced and cut shortly, that it had me wondering what I just read. Other then that, good story. Keep on writing.


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Review by Serena Blade
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello,

interesting concept of a story. I liked how it started and how it runs smoothly. It kept my interest. I actually want to know what is gonna happen next. keep on writing.


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Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello,

Very well writen. It kept my interest. The pain and the courage to stay strong is something that I am very aware. and it can be hard to drop down our sheild. sometimes it needs patients.

keep on writing.


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Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello,

This poem remind me of that saying "I want to be loved and hugged. But at the same time, be left the hell alone." overwhelming with sorrow, yet I do ponder if there is hope somewhere. The poem ran smoothly and it kept my interest.

keep on writng.


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Review of Cats!  
Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello,

I think Cat's are great. You just need to find the one that is for you. I am sure they are out there. Cat's can be such a great creature. I love them. poem is short an sweet. shows the distaste and curiosty of a cat.

keep on writing.


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Review of A Prince's Vow  
Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello,

well, this story was rather interesting. Love was doomed from the beginining. however, bitterweet. It was writen nicley and it kept my interest. It reminds me of a song called "Perhaps"

Keep on writing.


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Review of Lost Umbrella  
Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello,

cute story. straight to the point. keep on writing.


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Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is an interesting. it kept my interest. Hope she finds peace in her heart one day. It's not the holiday she hates, its the memory that is revolved in it. I believe that she knows this deep down inside because she celebrates it with her kids. There is a deeper meaning but I like it. Keep on writing.



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Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello,

I feel the yearning for this person, in this poem. ONe thing that caught my attention is when you wrote "mi amor" I felt that.i say that to someone everyday and even though it means nothing to him, it means alot to me. keep on writing.


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Review of Mom of Four  
Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello,

This sounds like something I do when I get out of work or when I need some me time. I assure you things will be all right. I liked it. I felt the urge for peace and quiet. Keep on writing.


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Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (5.0)
HELLO,

INTERESTING STORY. I LIKED IT. IT RAN SMOOTHLY AND KEPT MY INTEREST. KEEP ON WRITING.


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Review of The Perfect Storm  
Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello,

I like this because of the weather. it is my favorite time to write and just enjoy the day.


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Review of Bit O Honey  
Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello,

I have not felt that way in a long time. Must be nice. Very nice poem. keep on writing.


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Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello,

This reminds me of my job and all the rats that seem to wanna bite and the king (supervisor) that thinks he knows best. I enjoyed the little poem. keep on writing.


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Review of LIES  
Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello,

This is so true. I hate lies an prefer the raw truth. This was short and interesting. keep on writng.


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Review of Dust My Book  
Review by Serena Blade
Rated: E | (5.0)
hello,

I liked this poem. It ran smoothly and it kept my interest till the end. I feel the same, that we are all books in a shelve, just waiting to be picked up and read. To feel understood for the paths that we chose and the mistakes that were made. To feel the happiness within our grasp before it ended so abruptly. Keep on writing.


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Review of You Choose!  
Review by Serena Blade
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello,

The beginning of somehting vengeful. The main character just needs to know what exactly she must do to get to her goal. I am assuming that is what the voice is trying to tell her. And it has caught her attention. That does bring interest to the reader.

There are few things that I did see in error, or at least it seems as if there is errors:

Possible 1st error: "I'll answer them--one on condition,"
Is it meant to say "I'll answer them on one condition," ??

Possible 2nd error:

"And when they do, may their descent be swift and painful"
Not sure if this makes sense or if this is my preference. But if their death is swift, there would be no pain? Being killed would be quick and possibly, abrupt. The mind would not be able to function the injury until after, and even then, it would be too late. I would think that you meant " may their descent be slow and painful." Something amoung those lines. This could just be me.

keep on writing.




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Review of Dear Pip  
Review by Serena Blade
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I can sense the anger and pain in this poem. The hurt that comes with the down fall. I've been there and I know that in time things will get better. The words kept me interstested till the end. I do hope you find true happiness. It is out there. For now worry of yourself and heal. keep on writing.


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