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Review of World Swirled  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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DyrHearte writes ,

Hope my comments are welcome.


Your title is a great choice, it shows a certain sense of confusion is occurring, which often happens along with changes in our lives.


The world swirled
dancing to my dream music
though I walked along with wakeful eyes
The healing process can be quite difficult. I think your poem shows that though you were observant, the past moments can creep up on us sometime. It is up to us to not let it overtake us, so that we may continue with letting the hurt and pain go. I really like the phrase "dancing to my dream music."


I still hope sunshine replaces falling rain
Nice metaphor to use to describe wanting the positive things to replace the negative things. I can see the sunshine breaking through the clouds and rain.


I think that your final stanza shows that even though you're fighting the battle to make things well, that your destiny can always change. Even though changes can be a challenge we still need to learn to adapt and accept them.


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Review of Movie Quotes  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Maryann - House Martell ,


If anyone was going to have a movie quote survey, and I had to guess whose portfolio it was going to be in, you would have been my first guess! I am a huge movie person, so I was thrilled when you created the Movie Talk forum, which I need to visit since it has been awhile. Now, I come across this which celebrates the part of entertainment that both you and I love.

You have included some great movie quotes in this survey!

I was excited to see the quote from "Princess Bride" on your list because I actually just bought someone a shirt with that exact quote on it.


There are a few that I recognize, but I cannot seem to place them, especially the last one! It's driving me crazy because I know they're right there on the tip of my tongue! I know that it'll end up hitting me when I am not trying to remember. If that does not happen, then I may be checking out the answers.


I very much enjoyed the challenge and fun of trying to place which movie these belonged to. As always, nice job!


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Review of November  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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tucknits ,

Hope my comments are welcome.

First, let me start by saying that I love that you gave November a gender in this. It allowed you to use personification throughout the poem that works wonderfully! I thought the rhythm and rhyme choices were great!


She turns muddy gray and pours tears from here eyes
The picture you painted here is vivid and I also think it shows a true sadness. As the stanza goes on, while exquisite in beauty, she seems quite angry and almost in temper tantrum mode.


She blows the trees until they are bare
And sprinkles snow dust in mid air.
I feel like she's let off her steam and is calming down, and letting it all settle. She is done being mad.


she brushes a misty shroud
And wipes it away by laughing aloud.
In the third stanza, she is playful, carefree, and fun.


When November exits to snowy December.
Love the closing line, it feels like a goodbye- but not a final one.

I hope I am making sense to you in what I am saying*Laugh*

You made November a female character and showed us various emotions through metaphors and imagery.

I loved this.

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Review of Rebirth  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Angels in my Ear ,

Hope my comments are welcome.

Writing about this particular topic is difficult. I love that you decided to take the approach that you did here. It's like a song of victory, overcoming and conquering the darkness surrounding you!


burns that scorched my skin
felt like kisses on my cheek
Love the imagery here, I see burns and scars fading and then it being replaced with soft kisses- something which comforts and sets you at ease.


I love the idea of misery and sadness being whisked away by the wind, and thought that you used great metaphors in the poem which show what you're trying to convey. The smoke in the air unfolding your future- I can see the smoke like ribbons in the air and new opportunities and adventures are unfolding.


I am Reborn
Your final line is strong and powerful. It really makes this less about being a victim and more about being a survivor. I have seen too many people fall in situations where they feel defeated and cannot seem to get back up again. It's really great to read one that shows you can!



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Review of Silent Scream  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Angels in my Ear ,

I hope you don't mind my comments.


I chose this piece because I loved the alliteration and the contrast of your title- the idea that screams are silent. I envisioned someone fighting to get their voice out, but no sounds were heard, no matter how hard they tried.


This is heartbreaking. True friendships are not always easy to find, and it sounds like at one time the both of you had a special bond. It's such a tough situation when something happens, and it just pulls everything apart inside a person. The people we once knew and cared deeply about can suddenly become someone we no longer recognize. Your second stanza tugged at my heart.


We live like polite strangers
As the distance slowly grows
No longer can I help you
Though your sorrow truly shows
I don't know if our situations are the exactly the same, but I had that kind of friendship with someone for fifteen years, and your poem speaks to me because of what happened to it. We very much have become polite strangers. Excellent way to describe this, and at the same time it stings me!


My heart goes out to you. I hope that there will come a day when you and Daisy can at least try to mend things.


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Review by Lexi
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Showering Dutchessbarbie. ,

Hope my comments are welcome.

First, let me say that I am sorry for the loss of your friend. This site is the reason that many of our friendships end up feeling close to family.

I have read and seen many tributes, but I think that this is the first word search that I have come across that is used that way. I think it's actually a pretty creative idea! It was a great idea to raid through her portfolio and pull phrases and ideas that obviously meant a lot to her. Those that did not get the opportunity to meet her or read her work will get little snippets of who she was though this. From what you provided, I gathered that she was a very involved and helpful member. It's always wonderful to have things that make us remember and honor someone for who they were, what they accomplished, and the contributions that they gave while here.

Just a thought:
Since her portfolio is still active, you should consider linking her case in the introduction, so others may share in her work.


As per requested in the end:

Please send this donation to the New Horizon's Writing Academy in memory of Rixfarmgirl .


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Review of This I Believe  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hatesmondays ,

Hope my comments are welcome.

My goodness, you have a knack for writing! Your approach in this is artistic and honest. I felt like I was there because of the way you described the objects and smells around you. I could feel your excitement and enthusiasm to share something you worked on, and them my heart sunk when you're feelings were crushed. This brought you down the moment it happened, but you also did not give up like many others do. Instead, you put thought into the situation and created this heartfelt and intelligent piece.


I wish that Roy had been more prolific and offered ideas for improvement. Perhaps, he did not understand it, so the only thing he could do was comment the way he did, in hopes that he would not look ignorant. I have a feeling that your painting was wonderful, and did not need improvement. The things we create are ours, and truthfully you don't really need approval from others. You loved it, and were proud of what you did, until he said something. Try not to let others take that away from you. Be you- the talented and creative person you are!


Without judgment you will never improve.
You are young, but very wise. There are people three times you age that aren't able to recognize that.

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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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GabriellaR45 ,

These are beautiful c-notes! I think it was a wonderful choice to have the background in faded black and white. It really allows the burst of color to pop from the flower and word, making them the star of the note.

I love the idea that these are messages of motivation, and can be sent any time of year. Sometimes, people need a little pick-me-up, or a reminder of encouragement. Having each flower relate to a single motivational word is a wonderful idea. I think though the idea is simple, it makes for a great gift for everyday purpose. I also appreciate that you left the text inside it blank. In doing that, I think it allows for the buyers to put their own personal stamp on it better. Sometimes the images are great, but what is inside the note does not really match the things we wish to say.


It's very generous of you to have a portion of the proceeds toward helping those that need assistance with their memberships. People will get to make someone smile and have a hand in upgrading at the same time!


I still send C-notes quite often, so this will be a nice addition to my favorites.


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Review of Love You To Death  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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dejava

Hope you do not mind my comments.

I chose this piece to read because of your title choice. I could feel the conflict and anguish in his fight to not become like his own father. Your story shows that jealousy can indeed drive someone crazy. Jimmy felt like Angie still belonged to him, even after she has moved on to someone new. His behavior is what tore them apart, but he can't seem to stop it.



Confusion filled my mind. I stared at the gun, my body was tight with tension. This line of thinking could not be. I was not like my father. I'd never hit Angie." Then why are you here?" My thoughts whispered." Is killing her different or better then hitting her ?"
I love the conflict here! I can envision Jimmy going back and forth in his own head, trying to get the good thoughts and decisions to beat the bad ones. The struggle with himself was interesting to me. You gave the character a moral compass, despite the fact that he was raised to think that it was alright to beat women. The problem was that he did not really know how to read the compass.



Chilling ending! I actually started to feel badly for Jimmy. He was raised a certain way and did not wish to be like his father, but sometimes it's hard to break the cycle. I pictured Jimmy standing there, trembling begging for his mother's help.



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Review of Sounds  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Fhionnuisce ,

I hope my comments are welcome.

I think you have a great idea behind this! It can be difficult to describe sounds in writing, so that people may experience what it is your poem is conveying.


In the first two stanzas, I think you provided enough imagery to give us a picture of the first moments of morning and waking up. I could imagine the sounds the the floor boards, and see the grogginess of someone trying to get their thoughts together.


I like that you made this about the sounds from the beginning of the day to the end of the day. I can tell that you were thoughtful in your process.

phone sings its song
good use of personification!

As I read on, I became somewhat saddened. Your sounds changed to those that involved an accident. I know that there is a lot of haste in our lives, so this added element makes sense, but it was still surprising.

In the end, the noises fade, the silence fills the room and the days for this person are truly done. Heartbreaking thought!


I like that you were able to start in an upbeat manner; we did not see it coming because of that.

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Review by Lexi
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Fhionnuisce ,

I hope my comments are welcome.


Unrequited love is possibly my favorite subject to read and write, so I decided to drop in!


I love the conflict between friendship and love that this poem shows. It's difficult to have that balance sometimes, especially when you feel you know someone. As friends, you reveal things to one another, and learn things about each other. It's only natural if the feelings progress; it's just difficult when it doesn't happen from both sides. I think that you do an excellent job in showing the struggles of that. I can feel the heartbreak and see the disappointment.


Your rhyme and rhythm are nicely done. I can tell you chose your words carefully, and paid close attention to describing what it felt like to be let down.


We drink in the warmth
Of each other’s lips
Tasting of lust
Enthralling sweet sips
I adore this stanza! Romance dances from these lines.


I got a chuckled from the last two lines. I think it ties the poem together nicely.

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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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rjsimonson ,

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Your title makes me smile. I love the colorful images your words bring to my mind. Your poem focuses on rain and how it revives and nourishes the earth.


Spring rains kiss the grass.
This line uses personification very nicely. It's easy to see the rain gently finding their spots on the blades of grass.

Leaves sprout from so many vines.
I love this line because when I think of renewal, the color that comes to mind are different shades of green. I can see the luscious leaves growing from the vines.


The sun sneaks a peek between thick clouds.
I thought the inner rhyme was a nice addition to the poem.


buds burst forth, blooming with laughter
Your play with personification is a lot of fun here! Buds blooming in laughter give me the image of the fullness and vibrancy. I adore the idea of the buds playing hide and seek with one another.


Your poem shows many beautiful things in nature and how the rain nourishes these things.


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Review of Flowers for Mom  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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rjsimonson , hope my comments are welcome.

This a is an incredibly sweet and adorable poem. I really like what you intended to do with the poem- making it come from a younger perspective, the child's point of view. Also, I appreciate in doing this that you managed to make it both identifiable for adults and children.

I thought your description of the child was lovely. I could easily envision the excitement and anxiousness of the child, rushing through the door wanting to give her mother a beautiful bouquet of flowers. You focused on the simple things that bring a smile to a child's face and melts a mother's heart.

eyes as bright as noontime sun
wind whipped hair
Beautiful way to show the shine in the child's eyes and nice hint of alliteration.


You stated that this was from a personal experience, so it made me wonder if this was something you did as a child and you were reminiscing, or if you were the mother of the child and you're writing from their perspective.

I found this pleasant to read, lighthearted, and an enjoyable for all ages.

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Review of The Budda  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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DMCarroll ,

Hope my comments are welcome.

This was an enjoyable read! I love your description of the winter and the children's excitement on the car ride to Grandpas. They're anxious and restless the whole way there, probably talking about all the things they'll do the minute they get there, and all it does it tucker the poor kids out! It actually reminded me a lot of when my sister and I were little.


A few suggestions:

Board with what they found in the room, they quietly open a door.
Bored with what they found in the room, they quietly opened a door.

So delighted are the two children at their find that they do not notice the approaching figure coming up behind them
*Idea* The two children are so delighted that they did not notice the figure approaching behind them.

I like the details that you provided about the room that children explored. It felt like a home built out of many memories and love.

Also, I thought that it was an adorable idea to have them rub Budda's belly (which I assume is also Buddah) and make a wish for their Grandpa, that ended up coming true.


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Review of The Anchor  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Ben ,

Hope my comments are welcomed.

Initially, I thought that this would be about something weighing you down in a negative way. I am not sure why my mind first went to that because an anchor is used to steady and keep in a ship in place too, which is a good thing.

The rhyme and rhythm are wonderful. The words dance like lyrics and are a fantastic metaphor for showing unwavering in your thoughts and beliefs.

Though I meander, my way is never lost,
For, though It I cannot see,
It is not hard to believe
There is something holding me.

*Up* I love that stanza! You're saying that you don't need to physically see something to know it is there. It's about placing trust in God. It also shows a great amount of love and comfort.

This piece made me smile. It is a reminder that there is someone there holding us steady through life's battles. We are not alone, and we should not forget that. Others may ridicule you for taking such a strong stance, but I think that is part of the test- to be able to remain constant in your faith.

Beautiful and personal.

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Review of ~Bleeding Sunset~  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Damas ,

Hope my comments are welcome.

I love the idea of the title. The sunset bleeding into the sky paints a breath-taking picture in my mind. Also, I think it is a nice metaphor- the ending of the day and the start of a new one.


It was a lovely way to use this as a start of a new journey with your significant other. I thought that the scenes were romantic and can even be used as an analogy. Perhaps, there's something wrong with your love and she feels like the end is nearing, but you're encouraging her to hold on and not give up. Life is just beginning for the two of you so don't lose hope.

My doubt vanishes
Knowing that this bleeding sunset means one thing
The bleeding sky tells me that it isn’t over
These are my favorite lines from your poem. It's letting go of worries, and placing faith in each other.

flames fade into the night
visually pleasing to the eye, but this could also refer to letting the worry and doubt disappear.

*Idea* Consider adding this under the romance or relationship genre.


Beautifully written!

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Review of Carolina's Curls  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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maggie , I hope you do not mind my comments.


Your title and brief description made me want to review this piece. I think that when a child loses something, such as Carolina's curls, it can make them feel like they're losing a piece of who they are, which can be a crushing blow. I like that though Carolina was not happy about it, she was courageous and understood. It's amazing that some children seem to have more of that than many adults.


I think it makes such a difference if we all can have someone like Mrs. Dunphy in our lives. I know she's just a character, but she is someone who places a positive spin on things and can bring you right out of the gloom. She encourages Carolina and the other children to celebrate differences, and teaches them to embrace change by the things she says and in her actions. Great role model and mentor!


I love that though this is a heartbreaking thing, you turned it around by making it have an upbeat message. She may have lost her curls, but she did not lose her creativity! This sends good and positive vibes.


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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Annie , I hope you don't mind my comments.


I thought the poem presented a pleasant and calming picture about your favorite time of day. Nature is a lovely thing to use as a source for inspiration. The pace of life can move quickly, so it was nice to read this as a reminder to stop and appreciate the environment around us. As I was reading this, I felt refreshed and serene. There is something about the things you described which makes you feel centered.

I like that your poem led me to think that with every new day, new possibilities are in in store for us, and that there are changes are all around us. I think your title choice represents the opportunities that reach out to us everyday. It is up to us to take advantage of that and not let it pass us by.

Your hints of alliteration in the poem add a nice touch. Also, the thought that the birds were on a wire having a deep conversation made me smile.


Hope you don't mind one small suggestion:
Rejuvenate,re-imagine
place a space between the comma and "re-imagine"

Enjoyable read!

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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Sum1 , I hope my comments are welcome.

I absolutely love this poem. The rhythm and rhyme are wonderful. Your words illustrates a vivid picture for me, which allowed me to envision Jonathan and Jerry.

In this, you show that looks can be deceiving, and that there are so many things that you cannot tell about someone from the looks of them. This is an important lesson to learn because there are many people that judge someone from their appearance.

There is a lot of heart in this, coming from all sides:
Jerry wanting to help Jonathan
Jerry's wife welcoming Jonathan in to her home with open arms
Jonathan wanting to share what he has with those that made him feel welcome

I love the added touch of Jonathan cleaning up after himself before leaving.

The letter he left behind was touching.

Paying it forward is something I truly believe in. In many marriages, money is a big issue and not every couple would easily agree like Jerry and his wife. I think that says a lot about the kind of love they have in their hearts.

You send such great messages in this!


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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Shaara , hope my comments are welcome!

Initially, when I saw the title it intrigued me and it made me want to take a peek at your poem! It's a creative choice, and I thought your approach to the given prompt was both unique and clever. I never would have thought of this, but it makes me wish I had.

When analyzing the poem, I like that I found it to be quite metaphoric. You are the "bird" that everyone depends on during the day. You are responsible and work diligently to keep the "babies" in line. You are the mentor and the one they look up to for guidance.

At night, you fly freely and can be someone other than who they expect you to be. I actually like that the secret in not really revealed, rather suggested in your poem.

Twenty spins and seven twirls/I ride my magic quill- implies that writing is your secret, but as I read on, it was only an implication and not definite. I love that I thought I figured it out, and then later realized that it was only a possibility!

The rhythm and energy is fantastic. I love the imagery you provided. I can see you flying freely, sweeping across the night's sky.


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Review of Her Collection  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi ! A very *ConfettiG* Happy Birthday/WDC Anniversary *ConfettiV* from House Martell at "Game of Thrones" !

Cat Voleur ,

Hope my comments are welcome.

I came across this title, and I wanted to find out what was inside her collection so I decided to give it a go!

I found the content and point of view quite interesting. Most of the time, the characters capable of this kind of thing are males, so I really like that you opted to make your character a female. It's very creepy to have her thinking this way at thirteen, but I think that adds to the horror of it.

I like that you dug inside of her mind and let us see what it is that she was seeing and feeling although it was unsettling to imagine.

Your character's motto was a good added element. It would be interesting to see if the pattern would help her become exposed, but the fact that you're using "special days" would mean that she would have to spend time getting to know her victims on a personal level. That is a terrifying thought!

I appreciated your comments at the end. I think that sometimes we can spend so much time on trying to make something perfect that we end up losing creativity. It helps to go back later and edit here and there instead of doing it while in the creation process.


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NickiD89 ,

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When I saw the brief description, it sounded like quite the challenge so I wanted to check it out. While the prompted quote is sure to bring inspiration, to bring what it brought you is a gift!

The skill, detail, and visual art of its form is very impressive! It is the kind of thing that you'd want to enlarge, place in a frame and hang on the wall (and you should totally do that).

Iambic meter is not something that comes easy to me; I always seem to stumble somewhere within the poem when I try. It really is crafted beautifully here. Your poem tells a story while staying in the meter and it does not sway or stagger. It flows effortlessly!

The story within the poem provides me with great detail, so I was able not only to look at this as the artwork on the screen, but imagine it in my mind. It's a rare gem if an author can make that happen!

The only suggestion that I could offer is to add a few more genres so more people come across this lovely piece of art.

Excellent and Impressive find for me!

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NickiD89 , hope my comments are welcome!

Ouch, this was a tough read!

In the beginning, I love that you opened it as if she was reflecting upon her mother and on the physical resemblance between the two of them. You started off with remembering lighter days and time spent where a doting, loving mother was evident. As the story goes on, you reveal darker times. I appreciated the progression in that. As the reader, it made me be sympathetic toward her. However, it made me wonder if those moments truly happened, or if it was just wishful thinking that at one time it was that way. Almost like, she was remembering it the way she wanted it to be.

My heart broke when I pictured a five year old child, searching for comfort and guidance. I wanted so badly for her mother to acknowledge her and let her know that she was loved. It's difficult to fathom that she would not do that.

It did not occur to me that she would follow in her mother's career path! Perhaps, I should have seen that coming, but your decisions to tell the story in the way you did left it unpredictable to me.

Excellent imagery and full of emotion!


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Hello, there Stormy Lady ! Hope my comments are welcome!

First of all, I love the title and what it represents!

the storm felt sorry for him
In the opening sentence, you've already given the storm personal traits, which is something I love. Doing this, always makes for a better story for me personally. It adds an element of poetry and art.

I think this is clever idea. The sky and clouds reach down from the Heavens and take a man in because he is heartbroken, but then it is realized it is before his time, so she sends him back. I love the imagery you use to show that specific scene.

Because the storm fell head over heels, it is my observation that she could no longer cry her tears, so the rain stopped. However, once her love was taken away, she had the opposite response. I think hoses are wonderful analogies to use.

This is much about letting go and selfless acts- I always appreciate a good moral to the story, and this definitely has that.

"My Stormy Lady, I will love you forever."

I probably should have seen that coming! However, I think that because of the lovely details you provided, I found myself lost in the story itself. I did get teary-eyed when they reconnected again.

Beautiful writing!

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Stormy Lady ,

Hope my comments are welcomed.

This is really a tough read because I remember feelings like this, though it was many years ago. It's strange how much someone can forget with time.

Sometimes, there's just so much built up anger and resentment and someone is unable to get passed it. The person who loves and treasures him the most, ends up being the one that is affected the most by the results of his past. It's certainly an unfair thing to do to someone, and I was never really successful helping someone realize that myself.

As I read this, I felt the struggle to try and make things right by the love you offered:

I have used
All my strength
Just to try to
Let you know
Love isn’t
Something that
Just comes and goes

It shows a strong sense of loyalty and dedication toward someone. You won't get up and walk away when things get difficult or disagreements happen. Just because others did that, it does not mean that you will. I hope that he was able to find peace and happiness. The road ahead is lonely and difficult when someone can't let go of the past and place trust in someone.


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