|To all the souls brave enough to lay their hearts upon the empty page, I offer a field of daisies in which to romp. For it is in this field, that imagination takes flight and ideals shall be born. Step into the field of creativity and soar to heights yet unattained. L.A. Grawitch
Hello! I found your story at WDC. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.
Overall Impression: This is a very heart wrenching story that grips the reader and compels them to read on. It is a personal exploration of an incredibly painful experience. It exposes the raw pain of the writer as she remembers the sorrowful time in her life. The writer manages to turn the grief into a process of healing and hope for the future. She draws on the coping mechanisms of her lost angel to guide her forward.
Plot: The plot is straight forward and the loss is poignant and real.Like a roller coaster ride, the writer takes the reader from worry to loss, and onto hope. It offers a glimpse at the pain experienced by mothers who lose a child.
Style and Voice: There is one voice and it is dominating and strong in its reflection of a painful time in a woman's life. The details are explicit and vivid, adding truth and realism to the story.
Scene/Setting:The settings are clear and concise, painting a vivid picture for the reader.
Characters: The characters are strong and easy to identify with on a personal level. The reader feels the anguish of loss through the writer's portal.
Dialog: Realistic and adds needed detail to the story
Grammar and Mechanics:I love the style and many descriptive terms used. Your use of clauses and action verbs make the picture clear and easy to vision There is no easy way to find the road back from grief. It is a personal journey and one never forgotten. I identified easily with your story, having had many miscarriages years ago. I will never forget the pain and sense of failure. Everyone I knew made having a baby look like such a simple thing, yet I couldn't. It drove me crazy thinking that I had done something wrong until I found strength in my faith, family, and friends The rainbow always lies hidden waiting for us to discover it in our own backyard. Thank you for sharing your story.
Suggestions: One error noted that may need attention:
but iI was unaware that birth and death could coincide