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Passionate, and hungry reader. I try to feel the vibes of the writer, and review accordingly. A. We are all in this together. B. Encouragement, and Empathy followed here. C. I am not a perfect writer or grammarian D. Language works when it works. Communication on some level occurs.
I'm good at...
Cooking, ironing, gardening, digging for fossils, budgeting, photography, writing, reviewing drawing, painting, landscaping, erosion control, research. Spotting patterns, rhythms and minute differences within patterns. Data entry. Taxes. Environmental. Public Service, Problem Solving, Building Databases, Data Entry, finding Free Resources (legally), Brand Building, Social Media The price of my reviews is due to a high demand for reviews. I cannot help but give an in-depth review. Peace.
Favorite Genres
Mystery, Juvenile, Childrens, Y/A, Folklore, Story Telling, Native Spiritual, Genealogy, Golden Oldies Sci-Fi,
Least Favorite Genres
Outdated Non-Fiction
Favorite Item Types
Too many to name. I like original content that is "stranger than fiction" from the author's character's experiences. I love when stories pour from the imagination of the writer - and I feel it. Or learn something good.
Least Favorite Item Types
Poetry, because I am really a dive-bar, bathroom poet, and it is too structured.
I will not review...
I do not mean this ugly, please take this from a place of kindness and love - I read a lot. I have been reading a long time. I speed read. If asked to review an item that seems familiar to things read, I will check for plagiarism, and do. I will not review hard porn, poems (unless more prose than poem), nor plagiarized items. I will not call you out. If I turn your review down, it is not about you. It is me and life. Peace.
Public Reviews
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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


Happy Belated WDC Birthday/Anniversary

As a naturalist and geologist, it took me a few reads to wrap my head around your art and poem. After a few reads through, I looked up disparity, and then reread the poem. The subtitle; The Beauty is the Beast makes sense as well. The descriptions of Oceans, Rivers and then Creeks, Oceans, Rivers, Creeks is logical in the descriptions of the beauty (beautiful, nurturing, calming) of, and then the beastly (horrible, inconvenient, deadly) effect that these same bodies of water (nature) have on mankind.

I like the way your mind works, and your expression of word, and art. Great work. Write on.


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Review of Red Bear  
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: E | (3.5)
*Pen* Welcome to Writing Dot Com!

Thank you for sharing this story. It is important to continue the tradition of passing family stories down to others. I hope you write many more.

I enjoyed this tale, and was quickly able to visualize the boys on pallets in the floor, the girls and grandmother up in the recliners and you on the couch. I lived in rural Arkansas, in the 1970s through the 1980's and so I can imagine everyone trying to rest during the hottest part of the day; hoping to get everyone to get in the 'nap' mode.

The story told about the bear was entertaining, This is a story within a story and you did a good job pulling it off.

I have a suggestion and you can take it or leave it, I am a fellow writer. No expert.
* After she finishes her story, you can also add a conclusion -...we drifted off dreaming of bear...

Technical - again I am using a Kindle and have issues myself so...check the formatting, like the space between the word and (.

"Resting our eyes" 2x maybe use another term like taking a midday nap. Again, merely suggestions. Your writing is solid, and you are excellent at description. I could hear your Grandmother telling the story. Good work. Write On! *Pen*


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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Quill**Books1*This is for the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  Celebrating Education BACK-PACK RAID! *Books1**Delight*

This is an interesting account of the lives and deaths of some of Chicago's notorious gangsters of the 1930's. The writing, descriptions, characters and dialog, are all spot on. This story had me spellbound from the first paragraph. It was a big twist for me when we discover who Helen's father is, and it is no wonder that she is as able to take a life as make love.

**Technical - my opinion only, the formatting is a little off, but I cannot really say anything as I am using a Kindle for publishing. Excellent writing.

I enjoyed this historical account of the "Streets of Chicago, 1930.


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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Quill**Books1*This is a review for the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  Celebrating Education BACK - PACK RAID! *Books1**Delight*

"The Color Purple and Its Controversy", is a hard-hitting and well written paper. I would be surprised if it is not published onto a professional or higher education platform. This work is constructed professionally, with well presented points of view, and contrasting arguments. This piece is also well cited. Bravo!

Elana asks for the readers opinion on this controversy, and I could probably add pages. The theme of bringing human rights atrocities to light has been a recurring one the last few days. Something that is blaringly obvious to me is that none of the censures stated that the abuse, raps, degradation, or violations were UNTRUE! The ones who want(ed) The Color Purple banned, just wanted this mess buried, burned, silenced...10 stars for you.


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Review of Writing.Com 101  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Quill**Books1*This is a review for the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  Celebrating Education BACK - PACK Raid
Writing.Com Copyright Policy - Writing.Com 101

Writing.Com distinguishes themselves above most other on-line forums for publishing. It does not take an attorney to understand the stringent Copyright adherence policy of WDC. The Internet is a vast ocean of schemers and scammers who have come up with all kinds of different ways to steal, scrap, scrape or pirate unique content.

Writing.Com has a process for those who have had their copyright violated, spelled out within the body of the WDC Copyright policy, and it is Pro-Writer/Photographer/Artist. WDC is heads above the rest, as they automatically assign an item number, along with a Copyright notice which is dated, whenever an item is published.

The WDC Copyright Policy has a zero tolerance for content theft, as is spelled out, with good instructions for recouping intellectual property. To finish off this good information is recommended reading written by an attorney specializing in copyright law.

Thank you Writing.Com for your stance copyrights and those who love to violate copyrighted material.
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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
*Quill**Books1*This is a Power Backpackers Review
Technology in Education by Tammy Stewart (2007)

This document is a 10 page paper including citations. Depending upon what the teacher or professor wanted, it is possible that this was an "A" paper at the time. If there was a page and word count requirement, I curious to know if the paper lost points for using the word technology too much. I understand this is the theme, it just seemed overused.

Construction, spelling, and citations were "A " quality.

It is interesting to read about technology, students and gaming in 2007 versus today. The paper discusses how although few classrooms had computers with Internet access, the numbers were growing. Another point addressed was how the writer took the stance of using monitored gaming technology to encourage students to work harder in the classroom. The author Ms. Stewart noted at the conclusion of her paper she thought technology in education would be a growing trend. She was right indeed.

Looking back, and comparing student access to technology today, is viewing two completely different worlds. A large majority of students have a personal device; be it a phone, pad, or tablet. It is a big change in less than a decade.


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Review of Lest We Forget  
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This is a sad tale, it somewhat parallels our world today. This story has good bones and I can see it expanded to a novel. I like this poor family and the character of the do-little God. This is well written. I will note a few suggestions below, Take them or leave them, it is your work.
*...seemed so much hotter, and...
*...checking the rain gauges...soil testing, or testing the soil for nutrients...If he is checking rain makers this is different. If he is a meteorologist he is going to have more awareness of what causes the sickness and the blue mist of Urgod. As a geologist he will also have knowledge of his planet the microbes, as well as the solar system. As a scientist he can have faith, but it will not be blind. I like the descriptions at the end, and Tavnor's loving attitude toward his children. Perhaps as a scientist he realizes it is just a matter of time before they are all gone, and simply goes through the motions.

Good work - Write On!


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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Word. This is a beautifully woven tapestry of word rhythm, style, and prose. Knowing that you are a Classical Literary Poet, I probably do not know the fancy term for what you have done, but it is gorgeous. 'Pegasus, not Dancer or Dasher, though he is a dasher...' to paraphrase out of order. I wish you could have seen my first reaction - it included the happy clapping of hands and a squeal of delight. Woah, don't stop, Write On!


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Review of Writing.Com 101  
for entry "Gift Points" 
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a good article for those of us who are addicted to WDC. I am not a newbie in years here, but in experience as an active member. Having recently joined WDC Power Reviewers, Addicted to WDC, and whatever forum will have me; gift points have been somewhat a sweet mystery to me. This article is simple to understand, including links to more helpful information. Thank You StotyMistress!
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Review of Here Somewhere  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Yes. All of the ingredients are here for a dark, horror which reeks of death (or did, but "now the scent is gone from the air...") and Mr. Wheeler, the scary is sprinkled generously over the top like chocolate sprinkles. Beneath rests Grandma's hair. And they think its funny. Eerie would be another good descritor. EEEk.


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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the phrase; "...as if the eater of worlds hid somewhere within..." this puts me in mind of a Twilight Zone intro.
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Review of RAVAGES OF TIME  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Your poetry; these words make me think. I am forced to re-read, digest, think and do it over again. I enjoy the complexity of thought, the weaving of words and the final artistic piece this is. I know less than little about the technical workings of poetry, but I do know I have been challenged to think past surface layers.

For this contest do they want a word count, or line count in the body? Some do.

Welcome to WDC, you are a boon to this community.

Good Luck


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Review of The Sound  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is an enjoyable short story. You did a good job of keeping the suspense regarding the sound (buzz, Heep, clank) going. A couple of times I nearly gave up to get to the end to find out what drove poor Fred over the edge. The story is full-bodied. There is just enough information given about Fred (therapist in the past) , his family (Dad sent the rusty swing-set - Fred was not too freaked out about it.) I am still thinking about throw little crumbs of clues that are driving me crazy to figure out What Is Making That Noise. Well done.
*Ghost*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thank you for distinct instructions for this contest. The bulleted items of rules are set in an easy to understand format.

Hopefully I will be able to adhere to the instructions.

Not a 'newbie' but I feel like a newborn every time I attempt to enter a contest or join a group. Again, thank you.
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Review of Help Us Help YOU!  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I like the point of "Help us help you".

I enjoy reviewing on Writing.com, because as a writer I know it is anguishing to write, and have no audience, or an audience who loves my stuff primarily because they know me and love anything I write; or say they do anyway.

One way to improve the traffic for reviewers (who will not cheat the system), is to keep the flow of new things ready for review on the sidebars. Most of those have been there for a long time. If they have been edited and reposted, I hesitate to re-review them because even if it is not cheating, it feels like it is. Also, why does the old stuff linger there?

Another thing is I have brought people on board, but it is not easy to find them. I am now mentoring an entire Writers group as part of my job with the Library, and it would be easier to encourage them if we could find each other. Maybe put some of the User/ member info in posts on the Writing.com Facebook, about involvement, membership levels and the like, not just links back.

RedGage is a site where writers, and photographers retain all rights and they allow linkbacks from any item posted on any other site as long as it is within the TOS. And posters make a little coinage which is sent on a prepaid RedGage money card when the participant has reached a 25.00 payout. (I have reached it twice). It is a good place sometimes it is hard to log in. They do a good job of preventing theft if intellectual property.

Hope this helps. Write on.

I am eager to be involved on Writing.com but get very little feedback from my activity (except for admin of WDC Thank you.) This makes me feel like I am saying stupid stuff.

This site rocks. I wish I felt more sure of what I am doing.
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Review of I live in my Car  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a well written story. You answered all of the questions the reader may think to ask. What, where, when, how and who. The narration is very calm or nuetral. This is a subject very few can write in first person. You did an excellent job. Your state of mind, and thinking is three dimensional. Later, when you "feel", or are able to express the feelings along with the thoughts of what was transpiring, or even want to, another chapter could be added. Thank you for being a voice to the homeless.


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Review of Stay  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This work is full of angst and emotion, I feel like I am a neighbor or jogger caught out of sight, behind the shrubs, witnessing this in person. I did not breathe the entire time I was reading. Gosh, love hurts. Or, war is hell. Good writing.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am glad for the opportunity to put my edgy stuff to work. This was the first time I was eligible to enter a contest on WDC. I just realized I neglected to put the line count on. I still feel empowered to try again next time. Thank you for a comfortable place to write freely.
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Review of A Note to Self  
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
I love the flow and imagery of how you are working to keep negative and useless jargon from your brain as you go through the day. Your words instigate pictures into the reader's mind.

The focus and detail is good.

Honestly, the last stanza did not seem to flow as naturally. You used imagery in the beginning, and then for the last 9 lines left the word weaving behind.

An example:
My soul rumbles for food, I am nourished by the fruit of praise,
not concerning myself with this house I am in...etc. Stay real to your art, you can still give God the praise.

You have a way with words, remain honest to that gift given. Tag: *GiftP*


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Review of Final Waters  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a well written, and memorable story. I like the honesty of Danny's feelings, and how he dealt with the loss of his Grandfather even before Grandpa was gone gone. You did write good character descriptions as part of the story which is excellent writing. This is good. I would go back through it, read it aloud, and do a little editing. One sentence; "as scared, terrified even, so he..." sort of stopped the flow...not that it is incorrect, just hinders the flow. You used some $5.00 words, when the average reader uses $1.00 words. Again, this is not criticism, just a caution to consider the average reader is on a 5th or 6th grade level.

Please keep on, I love this.


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Review of An Epic Tale  
Rated: E | (3.5)
I really like the content of this tale. I do not think this much used title is unique enough for the great work it is. The story told is full of feeling and needs to be told. I am not a stickler for punctuation, but a semi colon use seemed to interrupt the flow. Keep on writing on. You have the goods.


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Review of The Tenant of 306  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a well written story. You skillfully showed the end of life for several people by the hands of one man. This is amazing, like you are in this guy Adam's head. There is a small glimpse to his mind-set, an unexpected twist via his walking in and startling the canary. I really expected Adam, to be kind, taking care of the bird for a friend. Instead, we find Adam to be a creature that holds what he wants so closely, it must be crushed, and bloodied. Excellent work. Dark, but your descriptions are spot-on. Thank you for sharing. Thank you for the GP points.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Yes! I love this beautiful story. It is award winning, and my day is better for having read this. (On the Short Story, I understood it was a shorty, that doesn't stop me for wanting more; this does that very well). A beautiful tale of people caring for one another. Being willing to sacrifice a little, for those who consider it A Lot! Thank you.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Excellent writing. I am a hungry reader, so when I find really good writing, like this is, I am frustrated with its brevity. Good job, you have a new fan, and I look forward to reading more of your work. The truth of the characters lives; raw humanity glare brightly. Readers have a need for more good writing, I would say you fit the bill. Thank you for sharing this story.
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for entry "Chapter 1: Old Dogs" 
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I really like this, I couldn't stop reading. I can imagine your characters taking on lives of their own. Reading this chapter, flows very well. The language remains true to the setting of this great story. I cannot wait to get to know them better, find out what this future world has wrought. Bravo, and congratulations.
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