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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
Sure, where do I find the names? Back where I bid on them?
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Review of New Day  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really like y our poem! It reminds me of a free spirit. I can see this person running into the forest just as dawn is breaking. Not knowing what she is running from, but carrying a heavy burden. It could be a lost love or someone she loved that died. It could be anything. I loved they way you put the trees laying their leaves down like hair for her to walk or run on.They knew their leaves could not compete.

So they gave their auburn lives,
To line the path beneath her feet.

I love this line as it is written so beautifully. It flows so very well.

But the forest showed no signs,
That something grand occurred within.


And this one. Again it is written so beautifully and flows so well. And yet, the reader begs for more because they wish to know; What was she running from? And what was the burden she carried?

How did she change, from being a young girl into a woman? So many questions unspoken. To me, this is good writing. You have said a lot, but you have left us guessing on so many points.

I think your title is great with this. Your setting, descriptions and character go together to make this a special poem.

Keep on writing these beautiful poems! And welcome to WDC. I am so glad you have joined us.

Lynda

WDC Happy 15 Birthday
Anniversary review
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh Robyn, that is so sweet of you, thank you for the candle and your beautiful words.

Lynda
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
You reworked this and it is a beautiful poem. AS a matter of fact it says a lot about what you have been through and the fact you are coming up to the surface of the water. Take a breath, breathe. Your poems are always beautiful. Now, tackle the paintings. Keep writing and modifying your work, if that helps. I am glad to see you so active in WDC now. Keep it up and I look forward to reading more.

Lynda
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Review of Got Any Twist?  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Are you sure he wasn't a throw away from the sixties instead of the thirties?

Anyway, wow! Not to far off the mark here. How many times have we read they were taking Mark Twain out of the school libraries or banning it. Many other ones of note also. I absolutely loved your title. Of course, I didn't know until he asked for it and it ended up being a book. Fantastic! What a wonderful writing piece yo have here. It should go public!

You fooled us all by making us think it was some kind of drug. I laugh because books area sort of drug to those of us who love to read them. From start to end you had me hooked. Your character were most definitely believable and you settings and descriptions were wonderful.

You took the reader on a journey and what a journey it was. I am still laughing because it was all about the books. I hope this never happens, but you never know what the future may hold for all of us.

For the child to be a cop, well done! They use people who look young to catch drug dealers, why not book dealers.

You really must keep your writing up as you are so very talented. Keep writing these stories. The are great!

Lynda/Scorpio

For the Anniversary Reviews..
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Review of Hog N' Dogs  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love these stories! Your little dogs are so precious. I remember how it was with three dogs. When the oldest died, then his buddy died the week after. The little Yorkie was young, so she was with us for quite a while and she enjoyed being Queen of the household. I loved everyone of them and it really pained me to see them go. NOw we have a rescue dog named Miss E. She is not little at all. 50lbs. of baby. If it thunders she wants to get into our lap. I always open a closet for her to see if she will hide in there. I think I am going to get one of those CD's that has the rain and thunder on it and play it over and over until she gets use to it. *Delight*

Keep on writing these stories as they are adorable.

Lynda

Anniversary Review
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (4.5)
Have I reviewed this before? Oh well here goes. I think this is a very lovely poem and it says volumes. Too many times many of us have felt this way and wished we were with God, but this isn't what it wants. He gives us tasks and sees how we deal with them. Prayer is the first and foremost thing I do and I can tell this is something you must do also. When it is time to face Him, then we will have a most glorious time seeing his beautiful light.

Your poem from beginning to end evokes many feelings from me and that comes from very good writing.
Keep up these wonderful thoughts and keep putting them into stories or poems. You certainly know how to do it. Great writing.

Lynda/Scorpio
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Review of Doll Stories  
for entry "Queen of Dollyworld" 
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I really like your start of the doll stories! Looking forward to reading the next one.

Lynda/Scorpio
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Review of Writing.Com 101  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
What if you want to give a # ID for a bank for GPS to be deposited in. Can you make up the number or is there a place to get them?

Scorpio
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
Bravo Brian Compton! I have thoroughly enjoyed reading your thoughts as they have progressed. I can see and feel a very different person emerging from their cocoon. Once a very sad and downtrodden person wrote a letter to himself about his depression, anxiety, and lack of self worth. For almost two years I have listened and watched to see if they would come around and back to the world that waits with open arms to hug them and say hello again. It's been a long time coming, but you are making it.

The excitement of knowing this person wants to be grounded, wants to feel and love again, and wants to stop being selfish is without a doubt overwhelming. The fact this person says, "No more poetry," IS a good note to himself, it is time to shelvethose and write anew. Whether it is in blogging, short stories, maybe funny ones about your life with your children and wife, and funny ones about yourself. Muse tend to like to get back with highs. Once that happens, they are ready to get to work.

Welcome back Brian

Scorpio
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (4.0)
I understand the pain of losing a child as I lost one also. I don't think you ever get over it. I too ask God why? why not me? But I think as time passed I began to understand. I think God is the one who let me know why. When she died, she left a small child who is now our son and grandson. I do not think his life would have been very good if she had continued the path she had chosen. But the drugs got her first. I still cry and it has been 4 years. I don't know about my husband because he does not want me to know his heart ache also. But I do.

We both are getting older, and we are enjoying raising him. We both just hope we can live long enough to see him go to college. He certainly is smart enough.

I find myself closer to God, but he has been in my life forever. That doesn't mean I was such a wonderful and good person all the time, I too had my moments and bad times, but I always turned to him. And I ma so thankful I did. He gave me the best of husbands, three children, who had some pretty special problems, but them they in turn gave me 4 beautiful grandchildren. Then #5 came with the youngest. I also have another step granddaughter who is beautiful and very smart. So, look at me, 6 grandchildren that I love very much.

I think when my time comes, and we never know when this will happen, I will be ready to see my Lord and Savior.

What a very good story you have written. From the title which fits you story to your character, settings and descriptions. They were all very good. the only thing I would ask, is that you bring your paragraphs up a bit. They are way to spaced apart. I have done the very same thing try to make sure they were spaced and found I put to much there. Good job. Keep up the great writing.

Scorpio
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Review of "L"  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
This is a great poem that certainly says a lot in such a short time. It would be nice if everyone could do this. But of course, that isn't the case. At least you put it down in words for all to read. Maybe they can take heed to it.

Live life without hesitate - maybe hesitation?
Love your past without regrets - what a great saying.
Learn to wait, not to rush - possible not to rush?
Last is not last, and beginning is a beginning. - would you want to put a the in both: last is not the
last, and the beginning is not the beginning.

Let no one can bring you down. - should be: Let no one bring you down.

Lead your own story as you want - could be: Lead your own story.
Losing anyone is not the End. - could be: Losing someone is not the End.
Lean to the World as they want to see you. - I am not sure what you are saying here. Is it, be your self and let the world see you as you really are?

Anyway, I am not a professional editor, I am a writer just like you. You can take my suggestions or leave your poem the way you wrote it. It is entirely up to you. I think this is a wonderful poem with great insight. Thank you for allowing me to read it and keep up the good work.

Scorpio
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Review of A family secret  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
oooh, this is such a cool story! I was trying to imagine just what was in the book that she didn't want the little girl to read. I thought it would have been full of spells and she would find out her mother was a witch, a good witch though. I never in my brain would have thought of her growing wings as she read. That's what makes this story so great. Obviously her mother had wings, I'm not sure about the father, he doesn't make me think he would be one to have them. *BigSmile* you certainly can write fantasy and I applaud you for it. I am in the throws of trying to finish my fantasy book. It's almost finished and i am so glad for that. I really like it, but I have been writing on it for about four years. I know authors do that but I just could't imagine me doing it.

I thought your title fit your story very well.Your characters are wonderful and I could see the mother being alarmed at the little girl finding the book. After having Malia read it, I could understand why

Your setting and descriptions were great and you kept the pace up very well. I say great job and great writing! Keep it up.

Scorpio
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi AuthorS, let me first say, I didn't know what I was getting into when I started reading your chapter 3 story. In the beginning I was little put off, but at the same time, I could not put your story down. In a very smooth way, you had hooked me in.

I am not a big reader of this type of story, but you have a great talent and I continued to read. I had to laugh when you gave the description of Sir Danton Elling in his black metal armor. Why in the world would he be wearing this at a round table meeting. One would wonder, is he too proud to just wear normal clothing?

I liked the dialogue you have written into this story. I feel is it done quite well. Your pace is great as you keep it going with the dialogue and the descriptions of the people attending. I so enjoyed reading about each person and how or what they were.

In some respect I felt it paralleled our government. Each with it's own agenda and just wanting to please the King. I was glad to see those that actually spoke to him with their thoughts. and it looks like their brainstorming paid off. Marrying off the Kings daughter to a wealthy man. mmmmmm, you know that still happens in other countries.

Anyway, I truly felt I was watching a very large production of a movie. Yes, I really did. I loved the ending because it left me wanting more. I don't profess to be a professional editor. I am only a writer like you. But I have to say, you have a great story going on here.

As far as grammatical errors, as I read I didn't see any. Now you might have some, but I was so engrossed in your story, I didn't notice. You may want someone like Uppty1 or angus to read it for any big mistakes, but all in all, I think it is great. you keep on writing this story as it is a very good one. Just go to Authors on the right side of your screen and type in the person you are looking for. The names will come up and you will find them there. Thank you so much for allowing me to read this.

Scorpio
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
WOW! Have you ever hit the nail straight on its head. Every line you wrote was the truth. It is time for people to wake up and stop these do gooders. It doesn't matter what bandstand they are on today, because tomorrow the tide will turn and it may be you are the one they are screaming about.

It's funny, I never had the desire to own a fur coat, but I was given one, so I wore it and I liked it because it really kept me warm. But when people started throwing paint on other people who were wearing fur coats, I had to asked myself, who is in the wrong here? Me, because I wore a fur coat or the person who thought nothing of destroying someones property? Of course my conclusion was they were in the wrong. To me it was just the as if they had broken into my house and cut the coat up. Breaking and entering. Completely unlawful.

I have yet to understand why I have not seen more people rise up and fight back. These people are bullies. If we really took a look at the percentage of these groups we would be amazed at how few they are and how many we are. Thank yo for this enlightening article/essay. I wish there were more people who would write about this and ask people, Why don't you stand up to them?

Scorpio
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for entry "Kicky was his name" 
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is such a sad story. The thing is, this can be anywhere. It could be third world or right here in the states.
It breaks my heart to know there are so many that go hungry, have no place to stay and have to hide out of sight. They are subject to the others that prey upon them. Never safe. Children. The are all Gods' children, just as we are.

I see the people who are starving and have swollen bellies and flies laying their eggs in their hair and eyebrows. It's disgusting to know they have to go through all of that until they finally meet their maker.

Did you know that in Florence, Italy in the 1700s, the very wealthy people - and there were a lot of them - had benches built onto their homes for the poor people to sit and wait for the food the people would give them? After the people would eat their servants were instructed to take the food down to them and feed them all. As a matter of fact, if someone/household did not give to these people they were shunned throughout the town and usually had to leave because no one would trade with them or buy from them, etc. I think people in general want to help others and do the best they can. It is those in power who are the greedy ones and do not want to have their money/paychecks lesson.

Excellent writing! Keep up the good work.

Scorpio
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Review of Behind the Vines  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (4.5)
WOW! Great start. I will be looking forward to reading your book. I like the way the prologue gives you a lot but not everything. It makes you want to read more and more and that is exactly what writing is all about. Your scene of her entering the bedroom is great. I could feel her hurt and see the room and the sweater she held of her friend. Her father must have been quite a monster from the description you have given. The note from her aunt was a nice added touch. It is obvious she loved vines because it was in the wall paper and her friend found her journal that had vines on it. Kind of a strange thing to center on most of your life.

It is rather sad this friend had to die the way she did and had to arrange her very own funeral. I think about people that are alone and may have to do the same. It is very sad. My mother had a cousin who lived alone. Once a yer he would go to Alaska to fish for Salmon, have it canned and bring it home. Then he would make sure to give her some every year. Sad to say, he died alone in his home. someone found him dead beside his bed. I don't know who, I just remember thinking how very sad it was.

I think your book will be a hit. At least from what I have read it should. Great wok! Keep on writing.

Scorpio
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
I have enjoyed reading this article/opinion on ghost and the likes. I am a believer in Ghost. And I truly believe there are things know one should mess with. It can really get you into trouble. As for as the White House goes, I could see Lincoln haunting it. After all, he kinda left a mess here after the big war. It was a wonderful thing he did in free the slaves, but he didn't leave a plan to help thing adjust to freedom. Of course, we know the war wasn't all about that. I suspect he is still there because he left some stones un turned. But enough of Mr. Lincoln. I have even herd his wife haunts the house every now ans then.

I was amazed at the research you did to show the various sightings and findings. They were very interesting. And the children, now that is a strange one indeed. I do wonder if it was true. After all they keep talking about Area 51 and the things they have there that are being hid from the public. You're so right when you said

"Sounds like something straight out of a science fiction novel, or the latest tabloid headline, or even Ripley’s Believe It or Not, doesn’t it? However, these stories and hundreds more like them came from a highly respected and well read publishing house,"the Reader’s Digest Association, Inc." It certainly does, doesn't it. And yet, Old Warrior, I have seen a ghost. To this day I keep asking myself if it was my imagination or real. I lean toward it being real because of the many things which came with it and after it. I am in the process of writing the story, but it is a rough draft and so I am reworking it. If you ever want to read it just pop on over to my port and it is in the short stories, titled, "The House on Bay View Road." Thanks for sharing this story with all f us. From the beginning with the title, to the very end, I couldn't put it down. The scenes, descriptions,characters and the flow of your work were very well done. Keep up the great writing!

Scorpio
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Review of That Last Breath  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
I am going to do my best to write a review on this, but it will be hard to do. You see, we too had to make that decision four years ago with my youngest daughter and even today I can break down in tears at the thought of it. Reading your story so paralleled our daughter with the exception that she did not have cancer. She overdosed on drugs. I know the feeling of going up and talking to her. I know the feeling of bringing pictures of her young child to tape to the bed just in case she opened her eyes. I only got to talk with her one time and that is right before the had to intubate her. She said "What happened?" When I started explaining it to her she would not look at me and slowly drifted away. I missed the second time she woke up and my husband was able to talk with her a little bit. she really couldn't respond with the breathing machine down her throat. I will never forgive myself for not being there, but life never said it was going to be easy.

I am so sorry for your loss and so glad to know God decided to take him away so none of you would have to watch that decision being made. God Bless and Keep you.

Scorpio
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Review of The Visit  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is so typical of young boys and younger men. Always thinking of something to do, but what you decided is not always the best thing to do. *Delight* I have to admit it doesn't stay with boys, girls do these things too. What a thrill it must have been to ring the bell and take off. Lucky for you, you had cars.

When I was little, I never would have thought of doing something like that, but there were some in our large neighborhood that did. The things is they would leave dog poop in a bag, where the person would step on it when they went outside to get the paper. I don't know which would be worse, dog poop or sardines.

I like the action in your story. It keeps the pace going.

Now, I have to admit when I became older, lets say in my 60s, I did something like this with my grandchildren and pulled my youngest daughter into being the get-away driver of the car. She didn't like it at all. For one thing, we were going into a gated community and they had patrol cars all over the place. Of course, they knew me because I had been over there so much to see my friends. All I had to do was wave.

We went to one of my friends which the kids knew, went to the front door, rang the bell that is attached to the security camera and comes on in their bedroom. They can look to see who it is. We didn't stop there though, the next thing I told them to do was to turn around and pull their pants down and moon them. We did and took off after that.I told my grand-kids they now had a picture of our behinds. They believed me, but to tell the truth, the camera didn't take pictures.

That's okay, they still talk about it today and can't believe I got them to do moon someone. What fun! So I can understand your adventures to this one house. I find it is ashamed you never knew who lived there.

From you title, which was perfect for this story, to the hook, the settings, the characters and descriptions, you wrote a very nice story with a lot of humor. Keep up the good writing!

Scorpio

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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is such a good story with lots of humor. The thing is, it can be so true. Two old crotchy folk who want give in one inch!. It doesn't matter how long they have been married, they won't budge. This is what makes a beautiful relationship. In the end they will make up, but the stories I bet these two have are priceless. I felt sorry for the psychologist. She probably wanted to laugh more, but knew she couldn't.

Your story definitely show that know matter your size, you will get your way. I know because I am only 4'8" and my husband is 6' 2". LOL! We used to have some great fights. Sometimes I would get so mad that I would jump into the car and say I was leaving, only to find myself driving around the block and going back home. After all, it was my home and I had children.

I thought when she put him outside in his long johns and they froze was so funny I could hardly stop laughing to read the rest. And yes, I would have sold the Lawn Mower also if he had run over my roses. I bet she prided herself on them, just like the pies and was really put out with him.

Your title fit perfectly.
Your hook was great!
The story flowed well with the setting
and the description and characters were very believable. A written story, very well done! Keep up your writing.

Scorpio

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Review by Lynda Miller
In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
What a lovely story. Is this fantasy or did you base this on someone you know or knew? I believe in miracles and I know for a fact they do happen. I have a very dear friend you had to have radiation on her brain so cancer would not invade it. She had stage 4 lung cancer. A few years later she began to withdraw, had to be fed and many other things. As it is, she is now in a wheel chair, but she never gives up hope as to when she will walk. Anyway, they found she had a massive amount of fluid built up in her brain. The Doctors had to go back into her brain and put some kink of stint in it and ran the drain from her brain down to her abdomen. It truly has been a miracle for her. Lots of prayers went out to various churches. We all prayed for her as she is a loving and giving person. and it happen. My husband went to see her in the hospital and he said, "I rounded the corner and stood at the entrance to her room. Penny looked up and said 'I'm back!" Who could asked for anything more? This is why I wonder if your story is real or not. Miracles do happen.

I thought you did a fine job on writing this piece. Your title fit very well and told a lot about what the story was going to be about. I found a couple of errors and they are below with what I thought should be the correction.


Jeremy and Shayla took Jade to the doctor the next day. Her blood count was perfect and her vital signs were good. The doctor sent Jade to the hospital for tests. Jade had went these tests a hundred times it seemed - I think it should be - Jade had gone through these test a hundred times.


Her parents did, too - put the comma after too

These are the only things I saw as I read.

Beautiful story, well written. And don't you wish this happened more? Keep on writing! I give you a 4.5 rating!

Scorpio
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Review of My Entry: Maggie  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (4.0)
No wonder you received honorable mention. This is precious. How true with all of our pets, especially dogs (I have nothing against cats) as they always love you, no matter what. When they are little, they are a lot to train, when they are almost there, you begin to see the light and what a wonderful dog it will be. finally, they are a little older, like two years, and they begin to settle down. Well, some of them do. And, although they still bark at the cars, or people walking there dogs down you street, they have become one of the special children in your household. You just love them as your own children. I love it when my dog gets so excited when new people come over and she can sniff them and immediately become friends with her. She loves everybody. I got mine from a rescue center and I love her to death. She used to sleep with us until we realized she shed twenty-four seven, three hundred and sixty-five days a year. Then I bought her a bed to sleep in our bedroom. She knows when to go in it to go to sleep. She will follow my husband out in the morning for her outside break and food, then demands to come back into our bedroom and stay there until I get up.

So I say, Great writing and keep it up!

Scorpio
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (4.5)
Meow, meow. Meow! I love this little story. And I have already sent this to several friends of mine. I want to be sure to give you a review before I too turn into a cat! I hope I will be a beautiful Persian, white of course or a silver point Siamese. Don't get me wrong, I like the Silver Points also and I had one, wait , actually two. Strangely enough I think something is happening to me, but I'm not really sure this letter is right. And I had already figured out it wasn't a chain letter. But, I did wonder if it was on the up, hang on, mmm, and up. Now if you want to talk about whiskers on the face, well I have had them forever! And you're right, it hurts to try and pull them out.Now, I have tried the wax method, but man, that hurts worse. Oh, I really don't like you telling me to take my pants off, even if it isn't because of any sexiness. And, I too have a tail. You just can't see it. Wait, I don't think you can. What is that? I have to admit there is something going on and it is hard to sit. Anyway, As I was saying, I too have a tail, you just can't see it. As a matter of fact it was broken long time ago. Man, did that ever hurt.

Can you hang on for another minute, I' get back asap.

Hmmm, I have never seen my tail before and I think it has long white hair. Wow!

Now, if this is a hoax, well, I will have to write the Story Master and Mistress about it, but on the other paw, Meow, meow, meow?

Meow 1 - Keep on Meow 2 writing!

Scorpio
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Review of Burning Desire  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
I think you have a great start to a good story. Your title does go with the story. Here's the thing. first, I had a really hard time reading this because you did not double space between sentences. And you could have indented when you broke down your story into paragraphs. I saw the absence of punctuation and you must remember to capitalize i (I).

You started out with gabbing a glass of champagne and then it was a glass of wine when you put it down in the room. You didn't have to capitalize some of your words. Example, Black jean, should be black jeans. When someone speaks it should always be on the next line with the quote marks, not run together with the other. I think your wording could use some help. Example: Something like, As I pull into the nearest space to park, I glanced up at the Mansion with the lights blazing. I see all the fancy cars parked all around me. I sat in the dark organizing the details of my plan.

Sucking in my breath, I open the door and take my first steps towards the mansion.

I believe some of this can be taken out. is it really necessary to describe her attire. If so, work it into the part where she is walking up the stairs and entering the room.

How did the boots sound as she walked across the room and up the stairs? Is it a hardwood floor or carpeting?

These are just some of my comments. I am a writer and not a professional editor. Take them or leave them. You have a good story beginning here and you need to keep writing.

Scorpio
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