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Review of Each Day  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (4.0)
Seek, pray each and every day could be "Seek and pray every day." Each would mean the same


Jesus atoned for us do you know? drop the "do"

Holy Ghost comfort, guide, and my friend - drop and then put as

Heavens bright beauty waits for me - drop me and use "thee"

Pretty poem. Be sure to use commas and periods along with your capitalization.

Those are only suggestions, you do not have to use them.

Lynda with a Y

Grace
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Review of Chapter One  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi! This is s great beginning. I liked the way the story flowed going from the sweet boyfriend to the abusive boyfriend. It follows the path of how these things get started. While reading your story I did not see any errors. I may go back and contrate on that, but overall, you have wrote this beginning very well. And, I really like the way you left everyone hanging.

Glad to have you aboard!

Lynda with a Y
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
Aundria, you have touched my heart and made me cry. I don't know if you lost a child or not, but I have and this poem is exceptional. Within 5 months I lost my sister and 5 months more I lost my cousin/sister. After three years I lost my beautiful daughter-in-law. I have had a rough three years and the only way I came through all of this is my love for my God. I asked him for help and told him that his will is my will. I will follow where he directs me. It took time, but I am better. I miss my daughter so much and I miss all the rest I mentioned, but a daughter, a child is a part of you and losing any child makes you lose a part of yourself. There is a hole there and it will never be filled up again until you meet them in heaven.

Beautiful poem. Keep up your wonderful writing!

Lynda
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Review of Valentine Daze  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Still laughing and tolling on the floor!

Lynda
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Review of Cadence  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
You did a wonderful poem. It flows very well and says a lot for the musican.

Well written,

Lynda
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
It wa "There was a dog" #2027933

Lynda

Would you at least review it for me?
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I am sure you can use them. Especially since you have been gone. Glad to have you back!

Lynda
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This story is so neat. No wonder you won. Keep on writing as it is fun to read. (even scary ones) *BigSmile*


Lynda
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Review of Noticing Newbies  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is truly a good site to be on.
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Review of Avoiding Alicia  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
What a sad story. Is it true? Possibly. I know it rings true for many mothers who try their very best to not be go heads to heads with others, including their own. In some respect, many children respect their parents for not fighting with them, but in this case I can see this child wishing she had been parented more. But, in all respect to you, when mothers or fathers do argue or put down strict rules, they are treated the same.

This is a god story and very well written. I hope to see much more of your work and my apologies for sounding like Dear Abby.

Lynda
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Review of I Miss Buttons  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (4.0)
A very well written, growing up story for a little child. I like the way you had mama, then papa help with her understanding of why Buttons was not there any longer. And I loved the ending of her supplementing with a puppy.

Well done. I did not see any grammatical errors and did not go back to double check. Keep up the great writing!

Lynda
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
I would love to donate 20,000

Lynda
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
I would like to donate 30,000.

Lynda
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I think this is a beautiful poem honoring Robyn Williams. The only comment I have is you used "tears streaming down my face, twice and I felt it is repetitive. Other than that , you should be very proud of what you wrote.

Happy New Year!
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (4.0)
You have a very nice poem here. I like the way you start with the Lord is my teacher.

The only comment is the staza "You give a diploma no man read. How about no man can see?

Other than that, it is beautifully written.

Lynda
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Review of The Lesson  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is a good story. What I liked was the honesty of Patrick feeling alone on the bus and getting home. I loved him releasing the sign pinned to his tie.
Michael, I am sorry to say, may have received a spanking, but not the humility that Patrick had to go through.

It doesn't say whether the Nun was mad about the shoving or the fact it was over a stupid toy or both. Probably both.

Anyway, there really isn't anything I find fault with. I felt the young man tense as he listened to the other get hit with the paddle and the humiliation when she pin a sign on hims saying "Big Baby." How cruel.

Well written. Showed me many pictures as I read it.

Lynda
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Review of Knock Knock  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Angus.

What I liked about your story is the description of the place he lives in. I can picture it very well in my mind. I love the fact you mention writing.com on here.

I knew something was amiss when you started talking about the poster and I was right. I just didn't expect them to hang the poor boy to wait until they could eat him. I'm not sure how he was killed and it would have been nice if you eluded to that part, but the short story is still good.

Good job!
Lynda
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (3.0)
I thought your story to be a good one. Similar to a Christmas Carol, but still different. What I liked the most is the way he didn't have to go through past, present and future. He knew what he needed to do to change. And it did change. He even got is girl back.

There are a few errors on grammar and spelling that should be checked. Mr. Buttons is said a few to many times. You can put he instead. If I were you, I would go back and carefully check every thing yo have written. Read it out loud, this will help you to catch any mistakes you have made. God job a writing though. Keep on writing as you will get better.

Lynda
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a beautiful way of explaining Showering Acts of Joy. It truly is a wonderful poem that sows all how you feel about this group.
Keep up the great writing.

Lynda
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Oh how you have told the story and oh so clear. Some of us knowing what it was like when we had our young children. The cute ornaments they brought home from school to hang in and adorn the Christmas tree. Thank you for a beautiful reminder of what was.

Lynda
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Review of "UNGH!"  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
not what I expected at all. Good job on this. You surprised me completely. Ii liked the way you had them being civil in the beginning, that is why the ending was such a surprise. Keep up the greatt surprises. lynda
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I think this is a great contest!

Lynda
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Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
Will there be a reminder when it gets close? I am always running - suppose to be walking, slow- and sometimes forget. *Smile*
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Review of Family Christmas  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful and truthful. Thanks BB Wolf.
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Review of The Black Widow  
Review by Lynda Miller
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow! I really like your poem. I like the way you talk about the hour glass on its back and the awful sting when it bites you. Good job Marci. You must have encountered one at some point. Now do one about the reclusive Brown Spider with the violin showing.

Lynd
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