|Good job with this one. I've just finished what you have so far and I must admit to liking what I have seen. Your grammer is excelent, especially when compared to what I usually see. This world and these characters seem very well thought out. I especially like the length and detail of your first Chapter 2s. It shows that this idea has been swimming around your head enough to build on some decent development.
However, I feel I must question the implication of clothing. By your own definition, mothers cannot digest their children because enzymes recognise their skin. Shouldn't this imply that everything else is digested, even clothing? Most same size vore stories have the prey undress before being consumed for practical reasons. I would suggest that you edit to include a kind of super fabric, or the removal of clothing before hand.
Further, and this is less important than the previous one, I would suggest that you adjust the first page to allow the inclusion of family scenarios created by other writers.
This is a pretty good premise and I look forward to seeing where you go with it. I especially look forward to when my creative streak returns and I am able to add myself.