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Review of Lilac Hyacinth  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, and thank you for entering 24 Syllables! I love the imagery of this poem. You got the syllable count perfect!

I do have one suggestion, just to make it flow just a bit better, without changing any words or the meaning.

Instead of
Their lilac hues
Cherished my heart


Change the words around to

My heart cherished
Their lilac hues.

Thank you for sharing this with the community!

Karen

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Review of Threads Of Life  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Pure Evil and welcome to Writing.com. I saw your poem on the Read A Newbie Page and wanted to share my thoughts.

I love the message and sentiment of your poem. For the most part, the poem flows beautifully, and the rhyme is well done. The last stanza does lose the flow a bit. I have a small suggestion to make it read a little smoother.

For a world where all can finish first
and no one's left behind
Being true at heart can only be
the future for mankind.

I really enjoyed reading your poem, thank you for sharing it with the community! I hope to read more of your work in the future.



Karen
"WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group
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Review of Silent Partner  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, I came across your poem on the Dark Dreamscapes contest page, and just wanted to say, WOW! This is so well written. It flows beautifully and is so full of emotion. The ending was perfect, Michael Jackson's words or not, they fit so well. Fantastic Job!

Karen
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Review by
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Elle I am reviewing this contest for "a very Wodehouse challenge

I remember seeing this contest listed when I first joined WDC back in 2015. It seems like it would have been an incredible challenge. It was something that I thought about trying back then, but I never had the courage to give it a try since my fiction writing skills aren't all that great, I didn't think I could even get past the audition.

The contest page is well laid out with different sections.

The premise of the contest is well explained, I like that there are thorough explanations of the required character reference and the introductory story.

The rules and requirements are specific and easy to understand.

The prizes are generous.

I am sure judging this contest is quite an undertaking because of the multiple tournament rounds.

I didn't notice any errors and there is nothing the detracts from the contest page.

It would be great to see this contest open again. I can think of a few good short story writers who would probably have a great time with this contest.

Karen






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Review by
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Bob!

When you said in the newsfeed you'd written a poem about squirrels, I had to check it out. I LOVE squirrels. I would say they were my spirit animal if I believed in such things.

I love your poem, it flows very well and has great imagery. I'm feeling a bit like hibernating myself today, it is very cold outside and I have to go take my dog for his walk and I am not looking forward to it!

I'm glad I took a minute to read this, it made me smile! Good luck in the contest!!

Karen
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Review by
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Northwood and welcome to Writing.com! After reading your blog at the 30 Day blogging challenge, I wanted to check out some of your work. This piece caught my eye because I like garden gnomes. I have several vintage gnomes I have purchased at auctions. My favorite one is the gnome riding a pig. That one stays comfortable and dry on my back porch and in the winter, he gets to warm his old bones by the fireplace.

Your poem was fun and I really enjoyed it. I like well written humorous rhyming poetry. I write it sometimes too, although not as often as I used to.

Maybe it is just me but I think this line:

but I couldn’t catch snail.

needs an 'a' before snail. Every time I read it, my mind inserts one there.

Thank you so much for sharing this lovely little poem with the community!

Karen


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Review of Armani David  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Dominique and welcome to Writing.com

I came across your poem in the Read and Review section and wanted to share my thoughts.

I love the sentiment behind this. Kids change everything, don't they? I have three of my own and three grandchildren. I worked myself into disability to raise them, and I would do it all over again.

The poem reads well, though the meter is all over the place which does affect the flow. There is a great website that can help out when writing poetry https://www.howmanysyllables.com/syllable_counter/... It isn't perfect, I haven't found a syllable counter that is, but it is more accurate than most.

In this stanza:
Mom life once sounded outlandish and crazy
Not anymore, I love it, I was just being lazy
Only thing that's a bother is the nights that you holler
Precious, I wouldn't give it up, not for one-million dollar(s}!
one million dollar sounds off even though it rhymes. You should add the s.

Overall, I really enjoyed your poem, I can tell it was written from the heart, and that makes it special. Thank you for sharing this with the community.

Karen






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Review of January 26th  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, Fyntastic!

I came across this poem in the Read and Review section and wanted to share my thoughts.

This poem gave me the chills as I know exactly what you were going through. I ran away from my abuser twice, he found once and I was forced to flee a second time. Like you I found someone wonderful - who understood- and my life was better than I ever thought it could be.

The building intensity of this poem was very good. I could feel your fear growing as the poem moved forward. My heart began beating faster as I read through it. Well Done!

I have no suggestions, I would change a word. This has such a powerful impact.

Thank you for sharing this with the community.

Karen
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Review of The Sailboat  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Ceredir and welcome to Writing.com!

I found your poem in the Read and Review section and wanted to share my thoughts.

The title is perfect as is the short description. The poem flows well and has very nice imagery. I could picture this little boat being thrashed about in the storm churned sea.

I saw nothing that detracts from the piece, no errors or typos and I have no suggestions. I like it just the way it is.

Thank you for sharing this lovely little poem with the community!

Karen
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Review of The Wait  
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi, just krista

I love this little poem, it flows beautifully, the rhyme is great and it just works! I thought I had found my winner, but unfortunately, it has 32 syllables and was an ineligible entry. *Sad* You did a great job with the prompt though!

I saw no errors and I wouldn't change a word of this little gem.



Karen
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Review by
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Dominique and welcome to Writing.com!

This is a lovely acrostic written for WDC's 18th Birthday. The form was followed well. I like the way you separated the words by using different colors. That added a nice touch. My favorite line is

"Writers safe inside this haven" that is really well put and is so true of the WDC experience.

Thank you for sharing this poem with the community. Good luck in the contest.

Karen
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Review of What Am I?  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, intuey*PortRemodeling*

I found this poem in the Read and Review Section and wanted to share my thoughts.

This is a lovely poem with great imagery. The prompt words were used well ad the rhyming seems natural and not forced.

I enjoyed reading this and I am glad I came across it this morning. Thank you for sharing it with the community.

Karen

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Review of Solace  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi and thank you for entering "Endings are the New Beginning Contest

This was a very moving poem about grief. You put intense feelings into words very well. I lost my husband and soulmate eleven years ago, so this piece really touched me.

I noticed no typos and I have no suggestions, I wouldn't change a word.

Thank you so much for sharing this with the WDC community.
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Review of Time Passes  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Patrick! Welcome to Writing.com

What a lovely poem! I really enjoyed reading it. It had a wonderful flow and rhythm and the rhyme was well done. There were a few slant rhymes, but it still worked beautifully.

I offer one suggestion, and it is just my opinion. I think you should cut the last stanza. There is nothing wrong with it, I just think that this stanza:

So let's live in the present not future or past
And treasure each experience that goes by so fast


Makes more of an impact. To me, it feels like an ending. Just an idea, my initial feeling when reading it.

Thank you for sharing this fantastic poem with the WDC community. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

Karen








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Review of 3 AM Thoughts  
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi, and thanks for entering the "Endings are the New Beginning Contest

The title and description fit this poem perfectly. I can totally relate to this addiction, I used to have a similar problem myself. It didn't help that I had an employee who plied me with frozen coffee drinks every day at work. It is crazy how wide awake you can be after three or four shots of espresso.

This poem was well written and used punctuation consistently throughout. I found no typos or errors and have no suggestions for improvement.

Thank you for sharing this with the WDC community!

Karen



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Review by
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi,

I just finished reading this entire novel. I came across it on the Hub page somewhere and after reading chapter one, I just couldn't stop. This is the first time I have ever read an entire novel on WDC.

I found this to be a sweet story that reads much like a memoir. My husband is English and parts of it reminded me of stories he's told me of his youth, like going to see the Beatles at the Cavern Club. It was well written and kept me clicking on the next chapter all afternoon. The characters were totally believable and it moves forward at a good pace.

I did notice one typo somewhere in the middle, I'm sorry I don't remember where *FacePalm* it was a left out word like 'the' or 'of'.

I am really glad I stumbled on this story. I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing it with the Writing.com community.

Karen

"WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!.
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Review of Finding love  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, tucknits

This another review as part of your package from 'Marvin's Birthday Auction'.

I really liked this poem. The lines:

And you provide with one touch,
Infinite magical moments.


brought me lovely memories of my late husband. One touch was all it took. I have never experienced anything like what we had together and know I am unlikely to ever have that kind of love twice in one lifetime.

This poem flowed wonderfully and was just really well written, I am so glad I took the time to read it.

I have no suggestions for improvement.

Thank you for sharing this with the community,

Karen
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Review of Harbinger  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, tucknits

This review is part of your winning package from Marvin's Birthday Auction!

The title of this poem drew me in, I like the word 'Harbinger'. The cover for this poem is very pretty too. As a kid, I used to look forward to the crocus blooming in the spring. They were planted in a circle around the tree in our front yard.

You executed the Diamante form well, and the imagery is very good. This little gem was a pleasure to read.

I could find no errors and I have no suggestions.

Thank you for sharing this with the WDC Community!

Karen

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Review of Meditation  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, and thanks for entering "Endings are the New Beginning Contest

I really like the theme of this poem. The first two lines are great. Love of self isn't always easy. We tend to be much harder on ourselves than other people.

The imagery is good and it flows nicely, however, the last line threw me off a bit. It doesn't seem to fit in with the rest of the poem. Maybe a few more lines to work up to contemplating 'the mystery of what is" would help.

Thank you for sharing this with me and the writing.com community.

Karen
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Review of 24 Syllables  
for entry "Who Am I?
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, I just wanted to leave a note to let you know how much I enjoyed reading your entry. I love what you did with this prompt. This brief poem says so much for a mere 24 syllables.
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for entry "🏆 Poetry
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, just dropping by to say that I love what you did with the 'meander' prompt! These 24 syllables hold a lot of meaning. Fantastic job!
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Review of My Life  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow!!

This is really, fantastic, Bob. You make jokes about writing free verse, but you've done very well. This is so powerful it just gives the reader a good smack to wake them up and what is really important. I love it. Best of luck in the contest!

I have no suggestions, personally, I wouldn't change a word.

Thanks for sharing this,

Karen

PS If I could give it 6 stars I would!
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Review of Awakening  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Ricardo Monascal and weclome to Writing.Com!

I found your story in the read a newbie section so I thought I would check it out!

The title and description are both good, they fit the story perfectly. The first paragraph is nice and descriptive, almost poetic. I liked it. The second paragraph is also done well and sets up the unexpected ending of the solar flare.

I did notice one small typo,
Merciless the alarm clock sound once more. sound needs an 's'.

Overall this was a fun read and I'm glad I took the time to read it this afternoon! Thank you for sharing it with the community. I know it isn't easy to put yourself out there. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future!

Karen
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Review of Caught  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, I just read this after seeing that we -co-won the Writer's Cramp contest.

This was a great read and well done. I love the stream of consciousness feel to the narrative and the ending was great. Had I been the judge, you would have won on your own.

Thanks for sharing this and congratulations!

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Review of May 2018  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, CJ and thank you for entering the "Endings are the New Beginning Contest!

This poem is hauntingly beautiful. The flow is good and the rhyme is well done. I also like the impact of ending the poem with the beginning line. It worked well in this piece.

I did notice one small thing, in the line:

All of them sad that their gone. 'Their' should be 'they are,' and I would use they are instead of they're because using it as two words evens the syllable count with the line above it so it flows better.

Children, grand kids, the list goes on. (8)
All of them sad that their gone. (7)

Overall this was a great poem and I really enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it with the community!
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