Not much of a review, just wanted to say that I love this. It cracked me and made me smile in a dark way that only someone who has been the object of 'peeping toms' could truly appreciate!!
I came across your poem this afternoon and wanted to share my thoughts. I found this to be quite inspirational. Dealing with addiction is no easy task. It is possible to overcome it, if you believe in yourself and truly want to do it.
This poem had a nice flow and the rhyme was well done. I did notice one small typo, the word 'instill' was missing an 'l'.
Thank you for sharing this with the community. I know it is not easy to put yourself out there. I hope to read more of your work in the future.
I usually responded to reviews by thanking the reviewer for taking the time to read my work, regardless of whether they liked it or not. Most reviews here are fluff, and I learned a long time ago, to not let them go to my head. There are a few people who claim 'honest' reviews as a cover for being rude and downright cruel. One person told me once that they couldn't believe I had the audacity or the stupidity to enter the piece into a contest. I responded by thanking them for their honest opinion. I then deleted it from WDC feeling completely humiliated. Funny though, that same poem was published in a literary journal a few years later, unedited just like it appeared here originally.
I confess I don't do a lot of reviews, especially of fiction. I don't write much fiction, so I don't feel I can give a helpful critique. If I read something that really blows me away, I will send a review, which might be considered fluff by some people, but I don't write reviews to get gift points, or reviewing badges or any of that. If I read a poem that I think was fantastic, I'll send the person a review to tell them I think it was awesome, if I read something that has great bones and potential, I will offer some advice. If I read something that is just bad or so full of mistakes you can hardly read it, I don't review it. Most of the time peoples response to my reviews is merely a thank you.
I saw your poem listed on the entries in the Shadows and Light contest page and wanted to share my thoughts. This is very poignant and flows really well. Powerful words of truth. Excellent work.
I saw your piece in the read a newbie section and I am so glad that I took the time to read it. I know where beauty is, it is in your words. This piece was very moving and well written. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
I noticed no obvious errors or typos and if it were my work, I wouldn't change a word.
Thank you so much for sharing this with the community and giving me an opportunity to read such a lovely poem.
Hi, Dia's diary and welcome to Writing.com! I can totally relate to your poem as that happens to me often. I enjoyed your little poem, and look forward to reading more of your work.
Thank you for sharing it with the community I know it is not easy to put yourself out there.
Hi, SomaSilver. I came across your poem in the Read and Review section and wanted to share my thoughts.
The title is well-chosen for this piece. The poem has a good flow, but I think it could be better if the rhyme pattern wasn't so unusual. Only rhyming the first two lines of each stanza, makes it feel a bit uneven. Although that also seems to fit with the context of the poem, not being sure where you want to go.
Overall I enjoyed reading this poem, I liked the tone and the message it presents. Thank you for sharing this with the WDC community. I hope to read more of your work in the future.
Hi, I just read your poem,"Christmas Mourning" and wanted to share my thoughts.
The title drew me to read this and it is perfect for the piece. Christmas can be such a bittersweet time for so many people. For me, as I have grown older and lost so much of my family and many of my closest friends, Christmas makes me sad. The memories are nice, but they also leave me with a sometimes overwhelming sense of loneliness and loss. Your poem conveys this feeling very well.
This piece was incredibly written, and I very much enjoyed reading it.
I found no errors, and have no suggestions as this is a five-star piece in my opinion.
First, let me say I am sorry for your loss. Losing friends is never easy, and it is made harder when their death is caused by something like drug use. Writing is a good way to deal with grief, I know this because I have done quite a bit of grieving myself.
Your poem has a good flow, and I can feel your emotions through your words.
I remember seeing this contest listed when I first joined WDC back in 2015. It seems like it would have been an incredible challenge. It was something that I thought about trying back then, but I never had the courage to give it a try since my fiction writing skills aren't all that great, I didn't think I could even get past the audition.
The contest page is well laid out with different sections.
The premise of the contest is well explained, I like that there are thorough explanations of the required character reference and the introductory story.
The rules and requirements are specific and easy to understand.
The prizes are generous.
I am sure judging this contest is quite an undertaking because of the multiple tournament rounds.
I didn't notice any errors and there is nothing the detracts from the contest page.
It would be great to see this contest open again. I can think of a few good short story writers who would probably have a great time with this contest.
When you said in the newsfeed you'd written a poem about squirrels, I had to check it out. I LOVE squirrels. I would say they were my spirit animal if I believed in such things.
I love your poem, it flows very well and has great imagery. I'm feeling a bit like hibernating myself today, it is very cold outside and I have to go take my dog for his walk and I am not looking forward to it!
I'm glad I took a minute to read this, it made me smile! Good luck in the contest!!
Hi, Northwood and welcome to Writing.com! After reading your blog at the 30 Day blogging challenge, I wanted to check out some of your work. This piece caught my eye because I like garden gnomes. I have several vintage gnomes I have purchased at auctions. My favorite one is the gnome riding a pig. That one stays comfortable and dry on my back porch and in the winter, he gets to warm his old bones by the fireplace.
Your poem was fun and I really enjoyed it. I like well written humorous rhyming poetry. I write it sometimes too, although not as often as I used to.
Maybe it is just me but I think this line:
but I couldn’t catch snail.
needs an 'a' before snail. Every time I read it, my mind inserts one there.
Thank you so much for sharing this lovely little poem with the community!
I came across this poem in the Read and Review section and wanted to share my thoughts.
This poem gave me the chills as I know exactly what you were going through. I ran away from my abuser twice, he found once and I was forced to flee a second time. Like you I found someone wonderful - who understood- and my life was better than I ever thought it could be.
The building intensity of this poem was very good. I could feel your fear growing as the poem moved forward. My heart began beating faster as I read through it. Well Done!
I have no suggestions, I would change a word. This has such a powerful impact.
I found your poem in the Read and Review section and wanted to share my thoughts.
The title is perfect as is the short description. The poem flows well and has very nice imagery. I could picture this little boat being thrashed about in the storm churned sea.
I saw nothing that detracts from the piece, no errors or typos and I have no suggestions. I like it just the way it is.
Thank you for sharing this lovely little poem with the community!
I love this little poem, it flows beautifully, the rhyme is great and it just works! I thought I had found my winner, but unfortunately, it has 32 syllables and was an ineligible entry. You did a great job with the prompt though!
I saw no errors and I wouldn't change a word of this little gem.
This is a lovely acrostic written for WDC's 18th Birthday. The form was followed well. I like the way you separated the words by using different colors. That added a nice touch. My favorite line is
"Writers safe inside this haven" that is really well put and is so true of the WDC experience.
Thank you for sharing this poem with the community. Good luck in the contest.
What a lovely poem! I really enjoyed reading it. It had a wonderful flow and rhythm and the rhyme was well done. There were a few slant rhymes, but it still worked beautifully.
I offer one suggestion, and it is just my opinion. I think you should cut the last stanza. There is nothing wrong with it, I just think that this stanza:
So let's live in the present not future or past
And treasure each experience that goes by so fast
Makes more of an impact. To me, it feels like an ending. Just an idea, my initial feeling when reading it.
Thank you for sharing this fantastic poem with the WDC community. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
The title and description fit this poem perfectly. I can totally relate to this addiction, I used to have a similar problem myself. It didn't help that I had an employee who plied me with frozen coffee drinks every day at work. It is crazy how wide awake you can be after three or four shots of espresso.
This poem was well written and used punctuation consistently throughout. I found no typos or errors and have no suggestions for improvement.
Thank you for sharing this with the WDC community!
I just finished reading this entire novel. I came across it on the Hub page somewhere and after reading chapter one, I just couldn't stop. This is the first time I have ever read an entire novel on WDC.
I found this to be a sweet story that reads much like a memoir. My husband is English and parts of it reminded me of stories he's told me of his youth, like going to see the Beatles at the Cavern Club. It was well written and kept me clicking on the next chapter all afternoon. The characters were totally believable and it moves forward at a good pace.
I did notice one typo somewhere in the middle, I'm sorry I don't remember where it was a left out word like 'the' or 'of'.
I am really glad I stumbled on this story. I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing it with the Writing.com community.
This another review as part of your package from 'Marvin's Birthday Auction'.
I really liked this poem. The lines:
And you provide with one touch,
Infinite magical moments.
brought me lovely memories of my late husband. One touch was all it took. I have never experienced anything like what we had together and know I am unlikely to ever have that kind of love twice in one lifetime.
This poem flowed wonderfully and was just really well written, I am so glad I took the time to read it.
This review is part of your winning package from Marvin's Birthday Auction!
The title of this poem drew me in, I like the word 'Harbinger'. The cover for this poem is very pretty too. As a kid, I used to look forward to the crocus blooming in the spring. They were planted in a circle around the tree in our front yard.
You executed the Diamante form well, and the imagery is very good. This little gem was a pleasure to read.
I could find no errors and I have no suggestions.
Thank you for sharing this with the WDC Community!
I really like the theme of this poem. The first two lines are great. Love of self isn't always easy. We tend to be much harder on ourselves than other people.
The imagery is good and it flows nicely, however, the last line threw me off a bit. It doesn't seem to fit in with the rest of the poem. Maybe a few more lines to work up to contemplating 'the mystery of what is" would help.
Thank you for sharing this with me and the writing.com community.
Karen
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You did a great job with the prompt though! 
it was a left out word like 'the' or 'of'. 
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