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Review by Lostwordsmith
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, 🌕 HuntersMoon !

I am reviewing "It Must Be Summer" for the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  June Review Raid.

I really enjoyed reading this. The repetition at the beginning of each stanza really works, and the flow and rhyme are exceptional. It felt like a summer breeze whispering "I'm here" in my mind. The little touches of humor also added to the charm of this poem.

I can't give any suggestions on improvement, as I think it is perfect the way it is. I am so glad that I took the time to read this. Thank you for sharing it with the community.

Karen
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Review of Blue Nights  
Review by Lostwordsmith
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, and welcome to Writing.com! I just read, "Blue Nights" which I found in the "Read a Newbie" section.

I liked your poem, it was well written and flowed easily. The third and fourth stanzas in particular really stand out to me. It vividly paints a picture in my mind as I read it, and I can feel the emotion behind it.

You used punctuation well throughout, and I have no suggestions, I think it is fine the way it is. Thank you for sharing this with the community. I hope to read more of your work in the future.


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Review by Lostwordsmith
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Passionwrite and welcome to Writing.com! I've just read your poem "Tears of a Melting Candle" and wanted to share my thoughts.

Your title drew me in, I like it.

This poem was very sad, I write quite a few sad poems myself. I can understand the emotion behind it. I've been there. The rhyme was good, and it read fairly smoothly. The message of the poem could be heard loud and clear.

The meter of the poem is a bit off, some of the lines seem as though they are two lines put together, ex:

The beatings start getting hard to handle, Slowly like a melting candle

Perhaps if you seperated it like this it would read a bit more smoothly.

The beatings are getting harder to handle,
slowly fading like a melting candle

Overall, I think your poem has great potential, I think you have a gift for poetry and look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

There is a great resource for poets, I use it a lot, it has explanations of poetic forms, syllable counters, and other useful information.
http://www.poetrysoup.com






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Review of Squirrel Survivor  
Review by Lostwordsmith
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Angus I just read "Squirrel Survivor"  and thought I would share my thoughts.

I have a thing for squirrels so when I saw the title I had to read this, and I am glad I did.

This piece was funny and drew a vivid picture in my mind. It brought back a memory of a day at work when I was doing inventory in the back room and I could hear all of my employees yelling "Run Squirrel, Run! Oh, NO!" as they watched a squirrel try and fail to get across the busiest street in town. One poor teenage girl was in tears. Poor squirrel.

This piece grabbed my attention and held it through to the end. I found no errors and I have no suggestions for improvement.

Thank you for sharing this with the community. I really enjoyed reading it.

Karen

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Review of Anon A. Mouse  
Review by Lostwordsmith
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, I just read "Anon A. Mouse"  and thought I would share my thoughts.

The title is very clever, great choice. It drew me in and made me want to read this piece.

The poem was very cute and well written. It flowed very well the rhyme felt very natural and unforced. The imagery was good and the ending made the poem a delight.

I found no errors in this piece and I have no suggestions to improve it. It is a little gem.

Thank you for sharing this with the community.

Karen

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Review of Death to Pimping  
Review by Lostwordsmith
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, I just read your entry for "Randomly Writing Poetry" I was wondering how someone would use the word "pimp" and you did a good job with it. The person before you skipped their turn because they didn't want to use that word, I don't blame them. Thank you for taking it on! I look forward to what you come up with next!

Karen
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Review of There is Love  
Review by Lostwordsmith
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, and welcome to Writing.com! I just read your poem "Chill" which I found in the "Read a Newbie" section.

I chose to read this because of your description. I can understand the cold meaning nothing but pain. I also suffer from the same problem. I live in a warm climate which helps, but it does still get cold here at times, and I feel it every time it does.

Written in a free verse style, that just sort floats, reading it gave me the sensation of how I feel just coming in from outside in the freezing cold. You used no punctuation which is fine as long as it is consistent, and I noticed no obvious typos or errors.

Thank you for sharing this, I know that it is not an easy thing to do, but feedback helps us all grow. I hope to read more of your work in the future.

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Review of Little Lady Luck  
Review by Lostwordsmith
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, and welcome to Writing.com!

I just read your story "Little Lady Luck" and wanted to share my thoughts.

I like the way you tell the story, in the beginning, I envisioned a shady lady looking for someone to "buy her a drink" and loved the image transforming into a stray cat.

I really enjoyed reading this little gem of flash fiction. Thank you for sharing this and I hope to read more of your work in the future!
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Review by Lostwordsmith
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, I just read "Reflection of the Night" which I found while perusing your portfolio.

The title captured my interest and I decided to read it.

I like the basis of the story, and I think you did a great job with the contest prompt. I loved the sense of compassion and tolerance shown by the narrator. I see that this story was written in 2003, and it is sad to think how much more intolerant the world has become since then.

I saw no errors and there is nothing I can suggest for improvement. Great story, it touched my heart.

Karen
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Review of Der Totentanz  
Review by Lostwordsmith
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, congratulations on your Writer's Cramp win, very well deserved!

This story was well written and very moving, and I am so glad that I chose to read it. It packed a big punch for such a short story, great job!!

Thank you for sharing this, and I hope to read more of your work in the future!
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Review by Lostwordsmith
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, I just read "Othello's Adjustment" and wanted to share my thoughts.

The title and picture of the cat drew me in and is what led me to read the story.

It was well written, and I felt that feline attitude, a sense of indifference that cats so often display while describing a horrific part of history.

I had never thought about the holocaust in the point of view of an animal, and I like what you did with this. This story really got to me and I am so glad I chose to read it.

Thank you for sharing this!

Karen
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Review of As she waits  
Review by Lostwordsmith
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi, I just read your poem "As She waits" and thought I would share my thoughts. First, I would like to welcome you to Writing.com!

I chose to read this because of the title, it had me intrigued.

The theme of the poem is very somber but I could relate to it. It is a different situation, but it reminded me of my family's cat, she was very attached to my husband and when he passed away, the cat was never the same.

The piece flowed very well, and I could feel the sadness of the pet. The rhyme scheme seems natural and is not forced and I didn't notice any obvious typos or errors.

I am glad that I chose to read this, it really touched my heart.

Karen







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Review of Imagination  
Review by Lostwordsmith
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Mari McKee I just read your poem, "Imagination" which I found in the "Read a Newbie" section. First, welcome to Writing.com. I hope you will like this great community, I have been a member for a while and I love this place.


This is a cute poem and I can picture reading it to a child. It follows an abab rhyme scheme and the poem flows fairly well.

I am glad I took the time to read this, thank you for sharing it with the community. I hope to read more of your work in the future!

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Review by Lostwordsmith
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, I just read "Life is Like a Cup of Coffee" which I found in the "Read a Newbie" section. First I'd like to say welcome to Writing.com!

I have to say, I really liked your story. The message is a great one, and I really enjoyed reading it. It is great advice and something everyone should remember. Well Done!

I found no errors in your story and it held my attention until the end. I have no suggestions, I think it great just the way it is.

Thank you for sharing this with the community and I hope to read more of your work in the future!

Karen Lostwordsmith

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Review by Lostwordsmith
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi! Welcome to Writing.com! I just read "A God Who's Not There"  and thought I would share my thoughts.

I like your poem very much, and I can identify with that little girl, as I'm sure many people can.

The flow and rhyme of this poem were done very well, it was easy to follow and it held my interest until the last word.

I saw no obvious errors and there is nothing I can suggest to improve it.

Thank you for sharing this with the community! I hope to read more of your work in the future!

Karen
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Review by Lostwordsmith
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, I am reviewing your entry for the "Newbies Are the Judge!" contest. Since you were the only entry for this round, I thought I would send you a review. Technically I'm still a newbie, so I guess it still counts!

I like where you took the prompt and the poem it inspired. Your rhyme and rhythm were well done, and I enjoyed your poem. Your message was well put, and it made me smile.

I saw no errors, and I have no suggestions for changes.

Thank you for entering!
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Review of Power of Actions  
Review by Lostwordsmith
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi! I just did your crossword! I got them all right, but clue 5 across sure was tough! This was fun and you did a great job with it! I hope things are going well for you! Have a great day!

Karen
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Review by Lostwordsmith
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Sewcrazy Again 🤗 I'm reviewing "This Makes Me Think Of Your Sister!"  for the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  December Review Raid.

This short little story was great. I really enjoyed reading it. As a parent, I have a song that makes me think of my daughter every time I hear it. It is called "Little Miss Can't Be Wrong" by the Spin Doctors, and I shared a similar moment with my son about that song, so I understand why you treasure this memory. This story really touched me. Thank you for sharing it.

I hope you have a wonderful holiday and a fantastic 2016!

Karen

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Review of Meeting Him  
Review by Lostwordsmith
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Rated: E | (5.0)
HI, Sum1 I just read "Meeting Him"  as part of the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  December member review raid.

What a delightful holiday poem. The flow was nice, the rhyming was good and the picture this painted was charming. I really enjoyed reading it. I haven't been in much of a Christmas mood this year, but this touched my heart.

I saw no obvious errors, and I have no suggestions.

Thank you for sharing this with the community. I hope you have a wonderful Christmas and an outstanding 2016!

Karen




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Review of "UNGH!"  
Review by Lostwordsmith
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Angus I am reviewing ""UNGH!""  for the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  December Member Review Raid.

I chose to read this story because the title caught my attention. I am so glad I did. What an unexpected turn of events. This was a great story with a plot that moved along at a steady pace, the dialog was natural and the ending was fantastic.

I saw no errors and I have no suggestions for improvement.

I hope you have a great Holiday and wonderful 2016!

Karen

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Review by Lostwordsmith
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Angels in my Ear

This is an "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Dare to Review Raid Review

I am reviewing "Poetic Traditions Poetry Contest " 

I am so glad you created this contest after the "Traditional Poetry Contest" was closed. I haven't entered the contest yet, but I intend too.! I love traditional rhyming poetry, it is the form that comes most naturally to me.

I like the contest graphic and the quote by Edgar Allen Poe. Your rules are easy to understand, the prizes are generous and I like your use of font color.

I hope your contest is a great success!

Karen



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Review of words revival  
Review by Lostwordsmith
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, mais and welcome to Writing.Com! I just read your poem "words revival"  which I found in the "Read a Newbie" section.

This Free Verse poem is very well done. The message of breaking your silence to live through words is beautiful. After living in silence myself for nearly twenty years, I find myself living through my words.

The last line was great and gave the piece a great impact.

I noticed you only two punctuation marks in the poem, which is fine. My only suggestion is to make the font larger, the poem is hard to read in the tiny font, and it is so worth reading.

Thank you for sharing this poem with the community. I know that it is not an easy thing to do. I hope you enjoy Writing.com it is a great supportive group of people. I hope to read more of your work in the future!

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Review of Fickle Child  
Review by Lostwordsmith
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, I just read "Fickle Child" which I found in the Read and Review section.

I had never heard of the Huitain form before, and I like it. As a poet myself I enjoy reading and learning about new forms of poetry. This poem is very cute and well written. It reminded me of my son. I had to force him to take a shower, but once in I could not get him out and he always used all of the hot water!

I noticed no errors and you followed the form perfectly. Thank you for sharing this, I am glad I read this! I hope to read more of your work in the future.

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Review of A Needed Friend  
Review by Lostwordsmith
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, I just read "A Needed Friend" which I found in the Read and Review section.

This is a beautiful poem with a powerful message. It brought tears to my eyes as I felt the emotion.

I have no favorite part, I enjoyed the poem as a whole.

I saw no errors and I have no suggestions, this poem is perfect just the way it is.

Thank you for sharing this with the community. I really enjoyed reading it.

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Review of November  
Review by Lostwordsmith
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, tucknits and Welcome to WDC! Just read your poem "November"  which I found in the "Read a Newbie" Section.

This poem written in quatrains with an aabb rhyme scheme is very nicely done. The flow is good and the rhyme while not perfect works well. It paints a beautiful picture of fall.

My favorite lines:

Her fading light brings day to close
Too quickly now in sweet repose.

I really like the way you worded this. It just dances off the tongue.

I saw nothing that detracts from this poem. Thank you for sharing it with the community. Good luck with the contest you entered this in. I hope to read more of your work in the future!


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