This is totally delightfully funny. Had to read it a couple times and each time was funnier than the one before. I have no corrections to suggest. It grabbed my attention and away I went right to the end of the poem as if I had slid along on that squirt of cheez. Thank for the smile you gave me.
Loved the way the rhythm and rhyme unfolded in this piece! It was great to get the dog's point of view the whole time and the surprise ending was perfect. Couldn't see anything to critique but then again I was mesmerized by the poem right to the end! LOL.
Wow! Do I understand that! I have been to that place and my writing also suffered. I have stopped writing so I can make money and eat and buy what I need. But the pleasure that comes from writing is not there.
You said it so well. So glad I came to visit.
I found your writing definitely inspirational. And I certainly do agree with you on all points. Forgiveness is the key to a happier life. You have written this all very well and it flows smoothly throughout. I was caught up in the message to the very end. Thank you.
This was an interesting story! Had me fooled to the end, wondering what was happening. Then it all made sense at the end. It took a different viewpoint of what was planned by the person and how she felt. I liked the fast paced way you wrote the story. Could use some editing throughout but then most stories do! A delightful read. Thank you.
This short Haiku says so much in so few words (as haikus do). Almost tempted to write a review in Haiku. but I will say that writing a Haiku is quite an endeavor and you did superbly well on this one. I love it. I have never written one although I have written poetry. Thank you for the read.
What a delightful poem to tickle the imagination of various pictures. The rhyming and rhythm is great. I love trees too and remember as a kid I would climb any that looked climbable. I particularly liked the part "Bark for the woodpeckers' tommy-gun sound."
Wow! This was totally intriguing. I had to chuckle at the open window, never suspecting what that was. They way you tackled the story and still planted it with intrigue was interesting and totally workable. Thank you for the delightful tale. I didn't find any errors. Write on!!
Isn't that the truth! So many things to be addicted to and one of the worst is another human being that you love and hate. But then again, if we feel these things, it proves we are alive, doesn't it?
You wrote this so precisely. I enjoyed it and it reminded me of when I was a lot younger.
Thank you for the read.
Intelligent story plot. And surprise ending. But of course!! Love these shorts that tell a lot in little words!
Only correction I would suggest is so minor. Just in that last sentence a wrong word.
"Which proved yet again that were really wasn't any intelligent life on the planet Clyde."
"were" should be "there"
A delightful piece with a great message. I too have a little dog and two cats and know the time it takes to negotiate a peace agreement. But it does come in time.
Love that cat motto. Made me chuckle. So true.
Well written piece as well. Write on!!!
This is a wonderful piece and well worded. I believe it was written from the heart and not yet edited. Some editing to correct the punctuation and wording etc will greatly enhance the piece when you get a moment. However, it has a great message to all and captured my interest through out.
Whoa!! This story has potential to turn into a larger story. I was totally intrigued and pulled along in the story. Then left wondering with lots of questions! I do hope you expand this one.
I feel it is written well, so offer no changes really. Perhaps a missing comma or two - minor things.