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Review of Haunted Hallway  
Review by Write-fully Loti
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Aww you caught me! That was delightful and such a neat ending.
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Review by Write-fully Loti
Rated: E | (4.5)
What a neat story! Charming! Kept me reading to the end.
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Review of The Window  
Review by Write-fully Loti
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is delightful. Says so much in so few words. That is how I like my poetry.
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Review by Write-fully Loti
Rated: E | (4.0)
Delightful and funny. I assumed you wanted no capitals in your poem so I left that as it was, but I did suggest some spelling corrections. Hope you don't mind.


as jennifer ran through the orchard
eating the fruit that had fallen
from the trees thatsthat held up the sky
when she heard an ever soft calling

she looked around for a bit
and shrugged off what she was so sure she heard
and a she went on her way, she looked round her sides
and soon spotted a figure, small and obsurd absurd.

her wings beat softly,
sprinkled with sparkle
and her face whispered innocence,
as she flew in small circles

she slowly made her way
and sat in the air in front of the girl
and offered to play
and the girl agreed, though slightly unsure

(with good reason, no question
since a fairy's a lousy friend
for they can't help but be trouble
which leads to relationships'ends relationship's end)

but she was unwise
in the affairs of fairies
and went on with her to run
through the forest of oranges and cherries.

and after a day of fun
they sat down to rest
and as they remained in the shade
the fairy accomidated accommodated the guest

and as jennifer fell into sleep
the fairy fetched a rock
and soon, when the girl finally rose
she rose with her pig tails-
cleanly cut off.
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Review of june bugs  
Review by Write-fully Loti
Rated: E | (4.5)
Absolutely delightful. Thanks for the great read!

Loti
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Review of Siren's Song  
Review by Write-fully Loti
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What a story! A winner no doubt. You did a fantastic job on this one.
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Review of The Ride Home  
Review by Write-fully Loti
Rated: E | (5.0)
Awesome. You have written it well and to the point. And I couldn't agree with you more.
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Review of Silent Knight  
Review by Write-fully Loti
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is just too funny. A delightful piece I am sure. You made me laugh out loud.
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Review of Death Chamber  
Review by Write-fully Loti
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Just love your story. You did a good job.
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Review of Joey And Me  
Review by Write-fully Loti
Rated: E | (5.0)
Totally delightful. I could feel the snow and the excitement. It was so real. A great piece with a fine ending.
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Review by Write-fully Loti
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
So funny and yet delightful. Caught me off guard pleasantly and tickled my giggle buttons.
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