Please keep in mind these are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them!
I am not good at reviewing poetry, I care not for the rules, I know only what I like.
Overall Impression: A current day suicide being compared to the Cinderella fairy tale, so sad!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - A poem bases on the imperfect perfect amongst us - you may want to change "bases" to "based".
2. In this section - Who cut of her toes, for him to kiss her - you may want to change "of" to "off".
Readability: A well-written and interesting read.
Suggestions: I have no suggestions for you to ponder, I did, however, find the form very interesting and fast paced.
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