Overall Impression: The children of this union should be very interesting!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only two spelling/grammar errors for you to ponder:
1. In this sentence - the knight broke free with a mighty road - you may want to change "road" to "roar".
2. In this sentence - and drew her into loving embrace. - you may want to insert "a" after "into".
Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome!
Readability: Too many I did this and I did that's, try being more descriptive. Instead of "I felt" write what you felt. Example: "I felt sad" could be "The overwhelming sadness devoured my soul."
Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for you to consider:
1. In this section - shut again from lose of energy - you may want to change "lose" to "loss".
Readability:The idea is good, but you may want to try for more drama for this type of story. Example: I felt the darkness around me consuming my thoughts. Maybe: Darkness consumed my thoughts. I could feel it surrounding me, bit by bit, eating away at the light.
Overall Impression: Awww, a sweet and romantic tale!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - you didn’t want me up sooner - you may want to change "want" to "wake".
2. In this section - Dongwoo flashed smile at Aidan - you may want to insert "a" after "flashed".
3. In this section - they watch the fireworks - you may want to change "watch" to "watched".
Readability: A well-written and lovely read! Considering your first language is obviously not English, you did great! Well done!
Overall Impression: Awesome! I love your honesty and your two cents!
Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome!
Readability: A well-written and note-worthy rant! Though, to be honest, I must disagree about the cowboys, not the name but the current version of cowboys, there aren't too many men anymore that can fill out a pair of jeans like a real cowboy! Now, back to topic , if you think about it there are many football league names that could be construed as offensive, so I wonder which one will be the next target. Maybe the Ravens, I'm sure birds everywhere are deeply offended!
Overall Impression: Is there any other kind of coon hunt?
Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome!
Readability: An entertaining little read! You need a wee bit more work on your hillbilly speak (such as "would" should probably be spelled "wood" instead of "wuld"), but all in all you done good and it was purty funny!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - stay far away from all of his mess after - you may want to change "mess" to "messes".
2. In this section - have seen green glimmering thing out that way - you may want to add an "s" on the end of "thing" or an "a" after "seen".
Readability: A well-written and entertaining read! I liked that you made it a memory.
Overall Impression: I think that would be a bit weird reading a letter I wrote to myself more than a year ago, so much changes in that amount of time!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a few spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - My eyebrow lifted off its own accord - you may want to change "off" to "of".
2. In this section - My first though had been to delete - you may want to change "though" to "thought".
3. In this section - you nor I have won the Dear Me contest last year - you may want to delete "have".
4. In this section - I managed to do over hundred and - you may want to insert "a" after "over".
Readability: An interesting and entertaining read! Save, save, save!
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, if you think about it there are many football league names that could be construed as offensive, so I wonder which one will be the next target. Maybe the Ravens, I'm sure birds everywhere are deeply offended! 