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Review by Lovina
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Iva Lilly Durham!

Overall Impression: Now, what in the world do Gremlins have to do with it? LOL

Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:

1. In this section - made for her for her very first Christmas - you may want to eliminate one of the "for her"s.
2. In this section - You alarms going off again, Rhoda? - you may want to change "you" to "your".

Readability: A well-written and compelling read! Not your typical Christmas "miracle" but I still enjoyed it!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *ButterflyV*

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Review by Lovina
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi drboris!

Overall Impression: Not liking your Santa at all!

Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:

1. In this section - that sat on top of side table - you may want to insert "the" after "of".
2. In this section - there are carrots for your reindeers too - you may want to eliminate the "s" from "reindeers".
3. In this section - folding the note neatly in half and placed it in his coat pocket - you have "folding" and "placed", you can go with "folding" and "placing" or "folded" and "placed".
4. In this section - the final caught item caught his eye - you may want to eliminate one of the "caught"s.

Readability: An intriguing and entertaining read! You did an excellent job of leading the reader down the happy trail only to spring the REAL Santa on them!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *ButterflyV*

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Review by Lovina
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Nexist!

Overall Impression: A wonderfully dark little tale!

Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for you to consider:

1. In this section - wanted to be in a friend, rather than a stranger - you may want to delete "in".

Readability: A well-written and compelling read! Those little obsessions will be the death of us all!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *ButterflyV*

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Review of Slowly  
Review by Lovina
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi KimbleBug!

Overall Impression: Such a sad and depressing bit of prose!

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: A well-written and emotional read! Your emotions were captured perfectly!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *ButterflyV*

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Review of Death, Inc.  
Review by Lovina
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Artemis the Spy!

Overall Impression: I like Death, she has quite the sense of humor!

Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for you to consider:

1. In this section - his tendency to cry at a liberal use of violence and bloodshed - you may want to change "a" to "the".

Readability: A well-written and entertaining read! I sure hope there are many more adventures for Death and her hapless minion!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *CandyCaneG*

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Review by Lovina
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi MrBugSir!

Overall Impression: A very interesting look at the future of crime solving! It doesn't appear to be very effective though!

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: A well-written and entertaining read! I'm sure it had to be a bureaucrat that decided a computer could be a detective!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *CandyCaneG*

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Review by Lovina
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Kristina!

Overall Impression: A promising start to what could be a very creepy tale!

Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for you to consider:

1. In this section - funeral was to held today - you may want to insert "be" after "to".

Readability: A well-written and compelling read! Excellent job on the dream like quality of the beginning of this chapter!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *CandyCaneG*

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Review of The Cleaner  
Review by Lovina
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi A*Hopeful*Faith!

Overall Impression: A very creepy job!

Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:

1. In this section - in a city with the worse weather - you may want to change "worse" to "worst".
2. In this section - “The hell are you doing here cleaner?!” - you may want to add "What" in front of "The".

Readability: A well-written and interesting read! This could make for a very intriguing novel!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *CandyCaneG*

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Review by Lovina
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Calvin Reddick!

This is review 2 of the package you won:

Overall Impression: A very interesting take on Cleopatra's final moments!

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: A well-written and intriguing read! I really enjoyed your description of the asp, very creative!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *CandyCaneG*

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Review by Lovina
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi trudi!

Overall Impression: Hmmm, that happens to me all the time!

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: A well-written and entertaining read! The article title says it all!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *CandyCaneG*

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Review of The Book  
Review by Lovina
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Dan Sturn!

Overall Impression: A wonderfully accurate little poem!

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: A well-written and inspiring read! Well done!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *CandyCaneG*

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Review of War of the Sunset  
Review by Lovina
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi DarkHuntress!

Overall Impression: An awesome and very depressing little story!

Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for you to consider:

1. In this section - was greatness out despairing nothingness - you may want to insert "of" after "out".

Readability: A well-written and entertaining read! A very interesting plot, dare I assume that this is part of something bigger?! Well done!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *CandyCaneG*

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Review by Lovina
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Norksquad!

Overall Impression: A wonderfully inspirational tale!

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: A well-written and entertaining read! If only all sultan's were so just!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *CandyCaneG*

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Review by Lovina
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Maryann!

Overall Impression: Awww, sci-fi with no mayhem and a happy ending!

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: A well-written and sweet little read! Maybe they should have taken a quilt home with them, just to add some beauty to thier own planet!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *CandyCaneG*

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Review by Lovina
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi KerrieAnn!

Overall Impression: A very sad and depressing little poem!

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: A well-written and gloomy read! You did a good job drawing out those feelings of aloneness!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *CandyCaneG*

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Review by Lovina
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi D.A.N.T.E!

Overall Impression: An entertaining little story!

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: An easy read, the dialogue felt a bit stinted but the plot was interesting!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *CandyCaneG*

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Review of Man of the Cloth  
Review by Lovina
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Kbennett!

Overall Impression: Hmmm, I think the priest is not really a priest!

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: A well-written and entertaining read! So, what happened to the other briefcase? What is in the briefcases? So many questions...

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *CandyCaneG*

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Review of Monopoly Spies  
Review by Lovina
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Amay!

Overall Impression: A sweet, sweet story!

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: A well-written and entertaining read with a nicely developed main character!

An extra tidbit: I chose your story because I just purchased a book called "Hidden Catch" which is about this very thing, it is in my "to read" stack and hopefully I will get to it soon!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *CandyCaneG*

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Review by Lovina
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Second of Nine!

Overall Impression: A very interesting world!

Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for you to consider:

1. In this section - giving me the Harbringer of Doom? - you may want to eliminate the extra "r" in "Harbinger".

Readability: A well-written and entertaining read! Love the brat - I think I've known a few of those!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Pumpkin*

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Review of Deep In The Woods  
Review by Lovina
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi J.A. Cunningham!

Overall Impression: Sounds like it could be somebody's nightmare!

Spelling/Grammar: I found only a few spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:

1. In this section - all Avery knew was right now is - you may want to eliminate "was".
2. In this section - strait for the woods - you may want to fix the spelling of "strait".
3. In this section - Slowly keeping through as not to make - I'm confused. *Confused*
4. In this section - powerful voice scalded Darian - I think you meant "scolded" instead of "scalded".

Readability: An easy read with an interesting storyline! I am curious as to why she calls the tree "father", there are way too many possibilities.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Pumpkin*

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Review of Recalculating  
Review by Lovina
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi hank!

Overall Impression: I am thinking this should be in the horror/scary category!

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: An interesting little read that should be labeled "scary pyschotic comedy". *Laugh*

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Pumpkin*

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Review by Lovina
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Rhayven!

Overall Impression: A very interesting take on life!

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: A well-written and interesting read! I found it interesting that you referenced "Father" in one section and "Gaia" in another, effectively intertwining the two! Well done!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Pumpkin*

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Review of Mind Control  
Review by Lovina
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Rhayven!

Overall Impression: Sweet Jesus! I knew somebody else was in control, but They told me I was crazy! *BigSmile*

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: A well-written and interesting read! You touched on the crux of insanity! Well done!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Pumpkin*

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Review by Lovina
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi BeginnerWriter!

Overall Impression: A wonderful bit of Sci-fi!

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

However: You may want to recheck your quotations, they seem to have wandered out of place in many areas! Dang things, they must be watched constantly! *BigSmile*

Readability: A well-written and entertaining read! I enjoyed your main character and the story premise, your futuristic world sounds like a really good place for many the story to unfold! Well done!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Pumpkin*

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Review of Paralysis  
Review by Lovina
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi InsanityInduced!

Overall Impression: An extrememly creepy tale!

Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for you to consider:

1. In this section - the eight-legged bugs crawl across my - you may want to add "ing" at the end of "crawl".

Readability: An entertaining little read! I am totally with you on the spider thing, I will probably have nightmares now! *Worry*

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Pumpkin*

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