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138 Public Reviews Given
152 Total Reviews Given
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I'm honest but constructive. I'll explain why I give the number of stars I give and what you could do to improve that. I do fix grammar as well as look at style, emotional triggers, characters, and other things like that. I'll get back to you with a full review in a couple of days or so after the request, depending on the length of the item.
I'm good at...
I'll read almost anything. I look at everything I can in regards to your writing.
Favorite Genres
Fiction of any kind
Least Favorite Genres
fanfiction where I don't know the universe or subject matter, erotica, western.
Favorite Item Types
Poetry, Short Stories, pretty much anything.
Least Favorite Item Types
Full-length books, although I will review them.
I will not review...
I will not review Erotica or Sexual things.
Public Reviews
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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I liked this, it was fun. It was a bit challenging, but it was extremely gratifying when they all popped up as correct. I think Frank Sinatra fans will like this :)
1) I Get A Kick Out Of You
2) Love And Marriage
3) Somethin' Stupid
4) Night and Day
5) My Romance
6) Three Coins In The Fountain
7) I’ve Got You Under My Skin
8) Hey! Jealous Lover
9) Strangers In the Night
10) Your Love For Me
11) Luck Be a Lady
12) You’ll Never Know
13) Close to You
14) It Had To Be You
15) All The Way
16) The Best Is Yet To Come
17) This Love Of Mine
18) People Will Say We’re in Love
19) My Funny Valentine
20) Something
21) I’ve Got A Crush On You
22) The Way You Look Tonight
23) All or Nothing at All

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Review of Joy!  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This gives me a "boy named Sue" vibe :)

Are you a Johnny Cash fan perchance?
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Let me just get this out at the start: I absolutely love this. It's adorable. It made me smile in spite of the bad day I had. I love it.

Just a side note: It seems to me that George and Martha seem to be the default old couple name. Maybe because of the Washingtons? No complaint, they go good together, just an observation.

Great job on this!

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Review of Hello, Out There!  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi! I really like this poem, the rhyme scheme is good and easy to follow. There isn't anything super apparent that needs to be changed. The style is very good. I like the way the poem is written, the mood and tone are nice. I definitely feel the sense of welcome! Keep up the good work!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! You requested a review and I'm happy to oblige. First of all, I'd like to say this piece made me chuckle, which isn't easy to do. Well done. I love your spirit and attitude towards a goal, even one that seems unattainable. That being said, I do see one thing I would change. Although it isn't necessarily a flaw or grammatical error and is more of an opinion thing, I would change the part towards the beginning that says:

153 years 9 months 6 days
or 1845 months 6 days
or 8023 weeks 3 days
or 56164 calendar days

or find a way to revise it. I love that you put the 1st statistic, but the other 3 probably wouldn't mean much to a random reader. That being said, I'm not deducting any stars for that, because as I previously mentioned, it's just my opinion. Take it with a grain of salt.

This is overall a very good piece, I really like it. Keep writing, you've got a considerable amount of skill!

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Review of All jokes aside  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I've read a pretty good amount of your stuff, and I'd like to extend an invitation.
I'm the leader of a new group called The Fire Dogs, a discussion group where anything goes. You can learn more info here, all I ask is you give us a chance:

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I appreciate your time and admire your exceptional work. Keep writing, you're really good.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem gets 5 stars. Here's why:

You use seriously masterful figurative language throughout. Your grammar and spelling is immaculate. The biggest thing that speaks to me is the style though. I can picture the scene, the happy mood, and the emotions swirling in and out. Great job!


Before you click off, I have a small ask:
Would you mind reviewing my piece? No pressure, but it’d mean a lot to me, and I’ll send gift points after the review. My inbox is always open for questions about this review or to discuss other things, and the link to my work is here: https://www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/223...

Thank you regardless,
LorenIsOneOfMyNames
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Just a question: Why is it 18+? Feel free to email me, my inbox is always open.

In the meantime:
Would you mind reviewing my piece? No pressure, but it’d mean a lot to me, and I’ll send gift points after the review. My inbox is always open for questions about this review or to discuss other things, and the link to my work is here: https://www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/223...

Thank you regardless,
LorenIsOneOfMyNames
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It's a good essay, and very informative. I'm afraid there's not much to review, but it is a good job. Your first paragraph "hook" is spectacular, and your descriptions throughout are thorough and interesting. I'm giving it five stars because I don't really see much wrong with it at all.


A humble request before you go:
Would you mind reviewing my piece? No pressure, but it’d mean a lot to me, and I’ll send gift points after the review. My inbox is always open for questions about this review or to discuss other things, and the link to my work is here: https://www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/223...

Thank you regardless,
LorenIsOneOfMyNames
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is so well written and possibly one of the deepest short stories I've ever read. Kudos to you for that. I'm giving it five stars because it is perfect for curious minds, people who are just reading for pleasure, or those who are writing and looking for inspiration. Good job, and keep up the good work!

Would you mind reviewing my piece? No pressure, but it’d mean a lot to me, and I’ll send gift points after the review. My inbox is always open for questions about this review or to discuss other things, and the link to my work is here: https://www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/223...

Thank you regardless,
LorenIsOneOfMyNames
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A good start, not much to review. To negate the risk of nit-picking, I'll keep it brief. I like it a lot. You have compelling characters, and they're interesting to think about as well. I think we all know someone like Liam or Uncle Pete, and that helps the story. The concept is interesting as well, overall it's an excellent start.

Would you mind reviewing my piece? No pressure, but it’d mean a lot to me, and I’ll send gift points after the review. My inbox is always open for questions about this review or to discuss other things, and the link to my work is here: https://www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/223...

Thank you regardless,
LorenIsOneOfMyNames
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Review of Oneka: Chapter 1  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
First impression: Very well written, a little slow to start, and a bit tedious with the descriptions, but overall an attention-grabbing read. *HalfStar*
Second impression: As the story deepens, it also gets a bit confusing. The adversary appears out of nowhere, and you start throwing names and things at us, assuming we know what it all means. It's a bit confusing but bearable. *HalfStar*
Characters: You've made quite compelling characters, very good or very evil. Good job, you get a full star. *Star*
Emotional Triggers: Pretty emotional, even for a first chapter, so good job there. Triggers such as childbirth and death are very powerful, so use them wisely. You did well here. *Star*
Grammar and Conventions/Style: I feel like you go back and forth with modern and dated language, which I don't think was intentional, but as far as grammar and conventions go, I can't see anything terribly wrong. However, for the style portion, going back to the language use, I'm going to give half a star. *HalfStar*

Summary/Suggestions: Perhaps consider writing a short prologue or definition sheet, something to give a bit of backstory and define some customs and terms.

A request, before you go:

Would you mind reviewing my piece? No pressure, but it’d mean a lot to me, and I’ll send gift points after the review. My inbox is always open for questions about this review or to discuss other things, and the link to my work is here: https://www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/223...

Thank you regardless,
LorenIsOneOfMyNames
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Review:
It's a good quiz, very concise and factual. I'm giving it 5 stars, and it's well-deserving of it. The questions aren't ridiculously easy, nor are they ridiculously hard, and as a Christian, it made me think. I'm very impressed with the simplicity of it, good job and keep up the good work!

Request:
Would you mind reviewing my piece? No pressure, but it’d mean a lot to me, and I’ll send gift points after the review. My inbox is always open for questions about this review or to discuss other things, and the link to my work is here: https://www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/223...

Thank you regardless,
LorenIsOneOfMyNames
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a really good poem. I love the use of modern language like "Trolling" and "Goofily". It really flows and is easy to read. The rhythm is nice, almost like a chant (to me anyway). The meaning isn't so glaringly obvious that it's boring, either. Overall, good job!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh. My. Gesundheit. That is amazing. There aren't any other words, just wow.
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Review of Elf Rights  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very interesting! I'm a Potterhead and you were really true to the character's personalities. If you weren't going to, I would suggest you elaborate and continue the story, it's really good so far. One small thing I would change is in the beginning, it's a little hard to follow who you're addressing/talking about between the elf and Effie (I think)
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Review of A New Dawn Ch.1  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hey! I read this and it's a really interesting concept. I like how you really start out giving the characters distinct personalities and such. One weak point I see though, it does read a bit like a textbook at the very start, but it isn't unbearable.

I was wondering, could you review my preface on the Unit 7745 story in my portfolio? I'd love a second set of eyes and it isn't terribly long. It'd be super appreciated but no pressure *Smile*
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