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I would like to thank you for entering Round 5. I wish you luck this round and hope to see you in future rounds.
I do like the imagery in your poem. I have to say though as you read the poem, that this is hard to read due to the flow of the natural pauses as you read this.
I am not sure if you are doing a rhyming pattern or not. Some of the lines were rhyming and some were not so I could not tell if there was a rhyming pattern. I do like the last stanza how you can picture this stanza. I hope to read this again and review it for you. Keep On Writing!
Again I wish you luck you this round and hope to see you in future rounds to come.
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. I am glad that you have entered Round 5 of the contest. Hope to see you in future rounds. Due to real life issues the judging was delayed.
I think that this story has potential. I think that this story has started off really slow. The imagery in here is good, but could be better with the more descriptions and maybe more detail at the beginning of the story. I think that some of the long paragraphs could be put into more than one paragraph. I think that this has potential to become a great story! Keep On Writing!
I wish you luck this round and hope to see you in future rounds of this contest.
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. I am glad to see that you entered Round 5 of the contest. Due to real life issues, the judging has been delayed.
This is a great story. I love the descriptions through out the story. The imagery in this is awesome. I really love how Mary-lynn was able to to trust her Nanna with all her heart. Abby was able to feel at home at Marta house. I love how Mary-Lynn was told the proper story of Jesus and Santa Clause. I think that really brought Nanna and Mary-lynn closer as the story was told. I love how Mary-Lynn was so into the Christmas lights. I think that her climbing to the roof to see Santa added just the right touch of suspense. Then to come home to Nanna house with all the lights and Santa on their roof too made a great ending! So she now knows that Santa has came to their house too!!
I hope to see you in future rounds of the contest. I wish you luck in this round. Keep On Writing!!
Kiya as always you are doing great ideas to help others out no matter what!!! I am so glad to see this group out there to help with upgrades!! I would like to be member if possible...I hope that you are guys help out all the members you can with the upgrades!! I can't wait to see you helping more and more every day!!! Keep On Helping!!
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I want to thank you for entering this round of the conterst and hope that you enter future rounds. I want to let you know that i Do not read much fantasy. SO this is new experience for me, and I have to say that you did a good job. I would work on what point of view you are using. I think that you need to make some of the chracters tell the story more...I think that you have a great start for this story. I think that you should go into more in depth on the "daughter of the Ice godess" and who the ice goddess is...I was trying to remember if this was for the NaNoMo, if so you have done a great job for that...I want to apologize for having this late...Keep On Writing!! Please let me know when you have revised this again so that I can rereview it for you!!
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. I thank you for entering this round for the contest. I would like to see you in further rounds to come.
Personally I could not read the rest of the this story. I am disturb with it...I Do think you did a good job with the imagery, and the descriptions of the words to get the picture of what you are writing about. I also think that it does need a better title and descripttion of the story. I do appreciate you entering the contest. Keep On Writing...
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. I would like to thank you for entering in this round of the contest. I also hope that you enter in future rounds.
First of all I think that this poem as great imagery. I could picture what the descriptions were painting as I read through this poem. This poem has alot of emotions in this too. I really enjoy reading this. Keep On Writing! I hope to see you in the future rounds...
Hello there I am one of the judges for the Free Content Contest. Thank for you entering the contest and hope to see you in future rounds. I love this poem. This poem has lovely imagery in this. I love the description of the words that painted when you read the poem. You can feel the emotion as you are reading this to you your mom...Keep On Writing!! I hope to see you in future founds of this contest and the best of Luck!
Hello there, I am one of the judges for Free Content Contest. Thank you for your entry in this contest and hope that you continue to enter each round after this round!
I love the imagery in this poem. I think that the descriptions of the words painted a perfect picture that you are going for with this poem. I can picture the drunk mother who does not calm the baby down. I can picture the stooped man thinking about his wife that he lost too. As usual you have done a wonderful job on your poem.
I hope to see you in the future rounds of this contest...Keep Writing...
I think that this is an awesome idea! I know that you are always think of awesome ideas to raise gp's and for the members to get enjoy and work on WDC. I can't wait until I have some extra time to get some more gp's to donate to RAOK. I am so glad that you and SM have this site so everyone can enjoy the community within here!
Hello, I am one of the judges for the Free Content Contest. I think that you done a good job in the story over all. I do see some areas that you could improve with a little more detail. For instance, the accident would be an area that you could let the reader know how it occurred, when it happened, what was the emotion that the character felt after the accident. I also think going into more detail about the mother and father a little bit will give the reader an idea on the whole background of the character.
I did see some imagery in this story, but the description lacked in details on the above items. I think that you have a great start with this story and it does have potential. I hope that if you do write more to this story, that I am able to read and review it again. I wish you the best in this contest, and invite you to come back again for future rounds. Round two has been opened, so I wish u good luck! Keep On Writing!!!
You are so right on this about persons with dyslexia...I am a fellow writer that has this problem too...Mine seems to be more now that I am no longer able to work. I ran a cash register for 8 years, so I had to focus on getting everything correct so I would not put the wrong code in for produce, soda 12 packs, and beer cases...I know that it is more difficult to type and see a word that was misspelled, and not correct it before I go to the rest of what I am writing about. I also have to write looking at my hands when typing on here too.
I am so glad that you have wrote about this...You did a great job on this, and it explains it carefully and precise...Yes everyone who has dyslexia have it in a different way, and no one is "dumb or stupid"! These persons who call all dyslexics "dumb and stupid" just have hide from the ignorence of what Dyslexia is! Keep On Writing!!!
Here I go again to stalk you...hehe...I think that this is an awesome contest that benefits the person being reviewed and reviewer...I Think that reviews are the most important part whether you are the reviewer or the reviewee!!! I can't wait to participate!!! Keep On helping!!
I think that this is a great idea to keep track of all your friends, comments, experiences, and reviews for your work...I think that you have a great way to let others know how they care about you!!! I hope to come back to lever more messages for you!! Keep On Writing!!!
Wow I love this, I could see the imagery as you described about your blindness. I could never imagine being with out my sight. I could only imagine how it is for you and your family to get through the day and at night. I liked where you mention "eyes that die in night, feel nothing from the division". You are already in the dark...that is hard to "see" with other senses....
You described everything with words that paint the picture of you struggling with your sight. I know that you have great poetry, that you use all your senses as you write these. That is more important because then you can really picture everything. Especially senses that you took for granted before. I am on to read more of your port! Keep On Writing...
I think that you have described the person exactly as player...I could picture the person when reading this poem...The sad part is that there are many out there men and women that have to be a player because they do not want the commitment and want you when the feel and nothing more...Within this poem you have show many emotions that you went through with this person...
You show how the player messes with the emotion inside of you. I especially like the parts where you have shown that you are strong and will not let him get to you...I wish that I was strong enough on that part...I have let my guard down to many times...I am honored to have reviewed this...Keep On Writing!!!
Sherri this poem is short, sweet and simple...I love the imagery that it suggests when you are reading this...I enjoyed reading this poem becuase of the positive feeling it brings as you read the descriptions of the words, and it really describes you. I can picture it all as i am reading this...i can see you chasing the rainbows, and reaching for the stars. You can also picture you reaching all your dreams. This is great poem that you have showed everyone about yourself! Keep on Writing!!
I have to tell you that this is a great story about a strong character. I hope that this is a fictional character that someone did not really have to go through all this...I hated to see that this daughter had to go through the rape and then having to get rid of the baby...All because she wanted to be "normal" and was not prepared for this...I hope that there will another short story to this, seeing what happens next...I would love to read it if you have it in your port already!! Keep On Writing!!!
I think that this is an ineteresting poll...really tells you were everyone stands with Politics, and America...I think that this could possible be a prompt to do an essay or other types of prose...I hope to visit your port again....Keep On Writing...
This a great poem...I like that it is short sweet and simple...The description sets the imagery...Great imagery on this...I love the picture get while you are reading it...Ilike how you can see the flowers flowing...the waves rolling over...I hope to read more of your work...Keep On Writing...
This is are great poll...You have to really think about what rating that you would be as a writer...I think that most of the members here would give themselves a 4 stars or a 3star since that is average for authors on here...and since a 3 star is average for your work that would make since...Thank you for having this poll for others to do...Keep On Helping and Keep On Writing...
MM this is really cool forum that you have to help others with...I think that it has helped many members so far as I have read through the first page of posts...as usual you seem to keep helping other members on here...Keep up the great job...may be one of these days I will post in here with my port...Keep On Help others!!!
Wow that is deep and powerful...I can see why it gives you the chills why you read it...love the imagery in it...you can see your son as you read this...I hope that as he gets older they will come out with a cure...Love to read this with the descriptions of the words...you are awesome...Keep On Writing...
First of this is a beautiful poem...The imagery in this is so cool...I love how I can picture the light from the candle and the glow of her in the candle light...this is my favorite part of this...I can also picture the death upon her, as he is begging for her not to die...This is really pretty...I hope that this was not wrote about someone you need...if so I hope that the love for her, has been found in someone else since then...I will be reading more of your port!!! Keep On Writing...
Well I am trying to figure out why you have a low rating for these haiku's...they have perfect 5-7-5 syllable count...they are on nature that follows the traditional haiku...The imagery is awesome...you can picture it as you are reading it...You can picture the Sun and the rays...you can picture the rays going through the ocean sprays to make the rainbow...I think that this is great...Keep On writing!!!!
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