|Hello my writing friend!
Sorry it took so long to respond, but I've been wrapped up in work. I just read your story, and I thought it was nice. I liked your characters and their development. I also think you have a very good premise as well. I hope to see a little more "witchiness" in future additions to the story. However, I did have some suggestions to help. When you write, try to make every word count. I know sometimes we want to make our stories a little longer, so we put in filler words to add some length. Instead of using filler words, try to use more descriptive words instead. Which leads to me other suggestion. In the story, work on being more descriptive. Instead of telling me the story, show me the story. Right now, you are almost narrating the story, which you want to fix. Use more adjectives (but try to avoid "ly" adjectives) to fix that problems.
Those are just my suggestions to help. The story is fine, but i just wanted to give some suggestions to think about. I will read the next part soon, and I look forward to seeing you around the campfires.