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Review by Zorro
Rated: E | (3.0)
I loved how Sharon loved the butterflies, and how you told us the specific kind of butterfly it was. I would suggest more emotion, and showing us how much Sharon likes butterfly in the first paragraph instead of telling us. In the first paragraph, you also described how Sharon looks in parentheses, maybe you could show us that instead of telling us? I loved the story though, and I loved Sharon's fascination with butterflies.
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Review by Zorro
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I honestly don't know what to say this is really great
I can't find any grammar or anything else
this is so good like
I'm sorry but I don't have any edits.
I hope you have great writing and I can't wait for more of the story.
I hope you have a fantastic day.
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Review by Zorro
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I love this.
It's really great and pulls me in.
I can't really find anything to edit. I apologize.
The detail is spot on with the character's. I can really get a sense of who they are.
Thank you for choosing me to review your writing and I hope I did a adequate job.
Great story and happy writing.
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Review by Zorro
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I really loved it.
Your description of the character's is great.
The story pulls me in and makes me want to read more.
I didn't find any grammar mistakes.
I hope you have a fantastic day and happy writing.
Thanks again for reviewing my story.
Anyway, have a great day.
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Review of Well-Earned Gold  
Review by Zorro
Rated: E | (5.0)
Loved the dialog, and use of words. Great job.
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Review of Easter Friends  
Review by Zorro
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Loved it.
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Review of Stalk Home  
Review by Zorro
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I loved the detail! Maybe, a little less detail? I loved it. Can't wait for more.
I would love it if you could check my story out! Thanks for reading my message.
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