|Hello Axton Gard !
Welcome to WDC. It is an amazing site for people to upload their writings and get them reviewed. You can read and review other's works as well. Today, I am reviewing your short story "That Chair There" as you've asked me to do so.
This review is what I feel by reading this and based on my thoughts and opinion. Take whatever you feel is important. Remember, it is your original story.
'That Chair There' is a very good title. It defines the theme of the story. The reader's will easily read the story upon reading the title to know more about 'that chair there'.
The plot is fantastical. I will you a suggestion regarding this, below. There is an unnamed protagonist. He appears to be a kid, although the age hasn't been mentioned. The story is in first person narration.
One day, the main character ruins his mother's chair. Thus, they both go to buy a new. You named the shop place, Chair World. That's something catchy again.
The mother sees many chairs over there but none appeals her. The main character or the boy crosses a red line and turns to a chair, which finally appeals her mother and she decides to buy it.
1. If you'd written this for a contest or not, mention all the three genres. It will be easier for readers to find your story if all the genres are filled. You can put this under genres like - Fantasy, Action/Adventure, Sci-fi, etc.
2. The name of the shop is catchy, as beforesaid. But, I've a suggestion - you can keep it as 'Humanoid Chairs' or 'Man-Made Chairs'. When the reader's will reach the end of the story, they will understand the title deeply and ultimately this will impact the detailing of the story.
3. I like that you tried to 'Show, Don't tell'. My suggestion is to carry on with this technique as you go on the bigger journey.
4. Always mention the word count at the bottom or top of your story. You can check the word count easily when you open the tool box at upper right corner.
The quality and presentation of your short story is just amazing. I liked that the last two lines rhymed with each other.
'Not because it's more fun to be a kid
but because I should have never did what I did.'
I hope to read more from you. Good luck! Thanks for sharing.