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I majorly review poems or short stories. Poems can be of any type. Short stories should be less than 600 words or approx. Novel and books are not in my reviewing list. I am not an expert reviewer but I'll try to tell your weak and strong points. In a polite but honest tone, I will tell your errors, if present. I will comment on the title, flow, main writing and will also provide you with an overall review. My ratings will not be biased. You can tell me at which points you want the deeper analysis. If you want me to review, you can give it a try. You can check some of my request reviews - Review of "Attack of the blobwoman " Review of "Not Past Redemption" Review of "Wanting to give up" Review of "Wrong timing in Manchester" and there are many more...
Favorite Genres
Comedy, tragedy, emotional, devotional, nature, romance and dark.
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Usually I review anything except for novels/novella, blogs and lengthy stories.
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Images, poll, word search, crossword etc.
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Review of Lost  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello McKeder

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I am reviewing your poem Lost Remember these are my views and thoughts. This is your original poem.


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Congratulations on this day!
The title is sad and attractive. Thus I chose this poem to review.

The flow was good with rhyme scheme abcb. The lines are short but crispy.

It is in first person narration who misses a person he lost. I am so sorry for the lost of your nephew.

The poem is written purely with love and sorrow. There is pain of losing someone which makes it a depressed poem.

I found no technical issues in this. It is a well written poem. Looking forward to read more from you. :)

Keep writing!
Lurie Park
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Review of Lost Kisses  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I am reviewing your poem Lost Kisses Remember these are my views and thoughts. This is your original poem.


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The title seems sutiable and defining. I like the word flow and the rhyme scheme of abab. It's about a child who thinks that he has lost kisses but then his father gives him one.

Then it has a humour component with the dog and fireplace. I didn't feel any connection in the last two stanzas but it is okay to be a humour.
No spelling mistakes! Write on as much as you can.

Keep writing!
Lurie Park
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Review of The End  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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I am reviewing your story The End Remember these are my views and thoughts. This is your original story.


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The story amazed me. When I saw the genre horror/scary I felt that is would be a usual story about a man returning back after death but it wasn't so. This story deeply felt. I had chills reading it.
The flow was engaging from the very start. I am not an animal lover but not a hater too. But I felt bad for Pluto. Alcohol can turn a man so cruel that he didn't see the pain of his own pets.

He thrust the knife into my eye and cut it from it’s socket! The pain I felt was indescribable.

These lines were so painful and the ending line too. I haven't read the original story but your 'cat's point of view' story is so good. It made me have to desire to read the original.

I liked the dialogues, the imagery and the way you presented them. Thanks for sharing this.

Keep writing!
Lurie Park
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Review of Long Shadows  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I am reviewing your story Long Shadow Remember these are my views and thoughts. This is your original story.

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Why I came here?
I found your title interesting and you had an anniversary.

What kept me reading?
Your dialogue and the flow of the story. It didn't make the readers bore.

My Personal Opinion
The story is moving. In suggestion you can add more dialogues instead of narrating paragraphs. Make the readers show the story from the characters point of view.
Every dialogue needs to be written from a new line.

One of my co-worker's wife

would cast 'long shadows'

No other spelling or technical issues found. Great story!

Keep writing!
Lurie Park
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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello just came across this through the newsfeed! I was excited to hear this.

Local Indian Railways never fail to fascinate people. Being famous for overcrowding, delay in timings, tea vendors and daily wonderful incidents they take us on an exciting journey. If I talk specially about tea vendors, I guess they are masters in that. Without getting any management schooling or business ideas, they sell their tea at max. level. Once I saw a tea vendor who used to read newspaper in the morning and then during his whole daily selling routine, he would narrate the news to the local people. The most amazing thing was that he used to tell only those sections, which his customers demanded to listen. This is really good!

Often we have seen that in other countries people are alone on subways or busy on their phone etc. But only here, we get all sorts of live entertainments.

I like the accent of your father. It's so calm and verbal.

Thanks for sharing!
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Review of Weekly Goals  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello The StoryMistress

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I am reviewing your forum Weekly Goals Remember these are my views and thoughts.

This is a lovely forum intended for people to complete their goals and do the task they assign for themselves. Awarding them gives them courage and brings on cheerfulness. Thanks for the creative idea.



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Lurie Park
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Review of Visual Poetry  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello The StoryMistress

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I am reviewing your poem Visual Poetry Remember these are my views and thoughts. This is your original poem.

This looks so cool. You have amazing given this a heart shape which has words in it. They give the essence of writing.com
You really did this so good and you always inspire us! Thank you for sharing

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am reviewing your poem A father's love Remember these are my views and thoughts. This is your original poem.

I agree with you that father's love her child unconditionally. They should try to understand what's going with thelir child. This poem is good and has an awesome flow. There are no issues to be seen me in this poem. Well done

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Review of The Beach  
Review by Vaishali
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Winnie Kay

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I am reviewing your poemThe Beach Remember these are my views and thoughts. This is your original story.

Congratulations for your win.
Your poem is well written. Yes peace is always there in natural places including beaches especially if you are with a loved ones. We can not imagine there amount of pleasure and peace we get it. You have dealt with imagery, brilliantly.

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Review of Prussian Blue  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First of all, I welcome you to this wonderful site. I am reviewing your piece 'Prussian Blue'. These are just my thoughts and opinions. You are free to either use them or discard them.

You have well described the colour with emotions attached. This isn't nonsense as the genre you mentioned.
Looks like you have written an essay to it. You can make it a bit more interesting though. Tell us what role it has played in your life or example setting.
By the way, I like your handle name 😂

Keep Writing!

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello essayist

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First of all, I welcome you to this wonderful site. I am reviewing your essay ' Writing About Writing'. These are just my thoughts and opinions. You are free to either use them or discard them.

A very deep and thoughtful essay. Why do writers write? Some write for pleasure, some for time pass, some for money, some to release stress, some to rejoice emotions, some to talk to themselves, some to discover, some to convey, some to publicize, some to boast off and some write from heart *Heart*

The essay is very good. Do increase the font as many people here have eyesight problems so it will be difficult for them to read. I like the spaces between the lines. It made it look neat.
Thanks for sharing!


Keep Writing!

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Review of Word Searches  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Showering Dutchessbarbie.

I have found *GiftP* {e:GiftP}

I like your idea of word searches. Word Searches are meant for fun. But you engulfed fun with honour. A tribute to someone who is not among us now and making a word search after raiding the portfolio is such an sweet and awesome idea. It encompasses others too to be humble and kind to the community. The birthday word search is the one I solved completely. I am using mobile right now so the words are not swiping well. I will search the others too once I get my hands back on my laptop. *Wink*

Thank you.
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Review of The Park  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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First of all, I welcome you to this wonderful site. I am reviewing your piece 'The Park'. These are just my thoughts and opinions. You are free to either use them or discard them.

A short poem but an interesting one! I am fan of rhymed poems and your rhymes are perfect. The flow is nothing but engaging and easy to follow. The things experienced in the park and the lady love you got is so refreshing.

Keep Writing!

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First of all, I welcome you to this wonderful site. I am reviewing your piece 'The House Near FallowField'. These are just my thoughts and opinions. You are free to either use them or discard them.

Congratulations for your published book. The beginning seems good and the genres are pretty much my type. I did visited your Instagram page and saw you have bunch of books there of different authors. To display any published work you can use the writing ml,
{amazon:B09B2SQLJH}

ASIN: B09B2SQLJH
Amazon's Price: $ 3.99


I wish you all the best for your novel.

Keep Writing!

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Marvelous Friend

The opening of the article is awesome. It kept me engaging right till the end. The fact I loved the most is your article writing skills. You have written the article in a way it should be written. No unnecessary details and elaborations, only to the point things. Your research part is what I liked.

I am not a Christian nor I know much about Jesus. But somewhere in newspaper I have read that Jesus of Nazareth is the Christ.
You contained a lot of information in it.

Reading such stuff provokes me to know further. Crucifixion and resurrection and other things which I have been knowing are also included in this so I felt that the article is bit more engaging to me.

Keep Writing!
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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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THANKFUL SONALI 17 WDC YEARS!

This is such a beautiful translation. I haven't read this poem before until you gave the link below. The original poem is indeed a masterpiece by Sir Maithili Sharan Gupta. I cannot express in words how much we love this. I have studied his poems in my school. They all were so great.

Reading your version of it, I was having chills all the time! It did not comprised with the literal meaning or the purity of the poem. This epic 'Ramayana' is itself so great and every extract, every poem, every interpretation of it is sacred. This translation is amazing!! The font used, the other writing ml were all so fine and easy to read. The title is so good but I think the cover does some injustice with the madhuvan and panchvati and forests of their time. I mean I first thought, this is something fictional from the cover but the moment I clicked this poem, the translation thing caught my muse. Wohoooo!!! I am glad you shared this with the greater audience.

I saw you underlined the word bhabhi. Maybe you want to add a dropnote below and you can also tell something about mata Sita and Bharat and Kaikeyi for the larger audience.

So my question to you is, have you published this somewhere or not? Because it deserves to reach many people especially the south Indians who do not know Hindi but know this epic.

"Our kith and kin, they weep for us
Imagining the forest's fury
If only I could bring them here
To the reality of this luxury."

This stanza and the last one are my all time favourite. Once again thank you for sharing this. As an Indian, I can understand the inner meaning very well and know the real value of this lovely piece! Great flow!

Keep Writing!
Lurie Park
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Review by Vaishali
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Congrats on your win. I like the story and your presentation. No technical errors found. I enjoyed the conversation.

Keep writing!
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Review of Blank Page  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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First of all, I welcome you to this wonderful site. I am reviewing your piece 'Blank Page'. These are just my thoughts and opinions. You are free to either use them or discard them.

Title:
So, this is a catchy title and an apt one too.

Rhythm and Flow:
I found the rhythm easy to follow and quite engaging, though it is a free verse. The presentation was nice too.

Opinion and Thoughts:
I think that there are no such technical or grammar errors found. The various emotions you expressed are well achieved. I like your writing style. You have a great voice in it.

Conclusion:
A good read for today. It was a lovely short poem with good selection of words. Thanks for sharing!

Keep Writing!

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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First of all, I welcome you to this wonderful site. I am reviewing your piece 'The Face in The Mirror'. These are just my thoughts and opinions. You are free to either use them or discard them.

Title:
The Title is very catchy. To me, it reminds of the story 'A Face in the Dark' by Ruskin Bond. Maybe that made the title more attractive.

Rhythm and Flow:
The flow and the rhythm is fine. It is a free verse and just an outflow of emotions. I think, the rhythm can be improvised a bit.

Opinion and Thoughts:
You wrote this piece for a friend and you did an amazing job! Like you have some technical and grammatical issues but the way you expressed and maintained the self confidence till the end is appreciable. For grammatical issues, I would suggest you to use 'Grammarly'.

Conclusion:
Your poem is encouraging and self motivating. Thanks for sharing it.


Keep Writing!

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I am reviewing your poem Tears for the brave Remember these are my views and thoughts. This is your original poem.

The title is catchy. So, here the flag is personified to cry.
You have beautifully described the scene of raining and how it looked like from the narrator's perspective. There is no grammatical mistake as far as I know. So well done! Thanks for sharing.

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Review of You Win!  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I am reviewing your story You Win! Remember these are my views and thoughts. This is your original story.

Congratulations for this winning story.
First of all, what is a Houdini?
I liked the plot and the winning of Scavenger hunt. But it must be really tiring. The flow was good.

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Review of Mother Goose  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am reviewing your story Mother Goose Remember these are my views and thoughts. This is your original story.

The concept is imaginative and suitable for kids to read. Your descriptions say that you were once a goose and a duck.*Laugh* You relate your story so much that even these ducks seem to quack. No corrections are needed. A nice short story.

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Review of The Mother Ship  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am reviewing your story The Mother Ship Remember these are my views and thoughts. This is your original story.

The cover is vibrant. This is a contest entry so now I know why it is only 297 words. You should write longer. Your stories never failed to amaze me. They have a great sense of readership. The burnt spot where he used to look up every night is something touching. The dialogues are good. Thank you for sharing this piece.

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Review of Bear in the Woods  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am reviewing your story Bear in the woods Remember these are my views and thoughts. This is your original story.

Quite an engaging story. The opening is like a movie scene. A cool bear comes and starts the conversation and human amazed.
Do these Ursus Americanus really exist or it's imaginative? The idea is something unique. I've not read before pieces like this. The cool dude bear is my favourite character.

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am reviewing your story If Wishes Could Fly Remember these are my views and thoughts. This is your original story.

Well, as I am reading your stories, I feel like a connection made. I think you write with much thought. Your story has a great sense of imagination which some people lack. From where do such imaginative thoughts come? Like seriously, who would come up with this idea if wishes could fly. Another thing is your story presentation and expression. About the flow, it was engaging!

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