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I majorly review poems or short stories. Poems can be of any type. Short stories should be less than 600 words or approx. Novel and books are not in my reviewing list. I am not an expert reviewer but I'll try to tell your weak and strong points. In a polite but honest tone, I will tell your errors, if present. I will comment on the title, flow, main writing and will also provide you with an overall review. My ratings will not be biased. You can tell me at which points you want the deeper analysis. If you want me to review, you can give it a try. You can check some of my request reviews - Review of "Attack of the blobwoman " Review of "Not Past Redemption" Review of "Wanting to give up" Review of "Wrong timing in Manchester" and there are many more...
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Usually I review anything except for novels/novella, blogs and lengthy stories.
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Images, poll, word search, crossword etc.
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Review of Project Cana  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am reviewing your story Project Cana Remember these are my views and thoughts. This is your original story.

The dialogues had my muse! The expressions you used like WHIZ! BOOM! Bang! frip, frizzle creates onomatopoeia which enhances your writing. The story has a nice flow! Thank you for sharing.

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Review of How Old Are You?  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am reviewing your story How Old Are You Remember these are my views and thoughts. This is your original story.

This is a short and sweet story filled with pure innocence. You have not failed to display the sweetness and love between a granddaughter and a grandmother. The imagery used is so well. When they are hugging, the mere imagination of it is so good. You did a good job writing this!

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Review of I Believe  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am reviewing your story Ghost Remember these are my views and thoughts. This is your original story.

I liked the opening of the story. It is funny. I don't believe in ghosts. But I am like the character of Billy. It is a comedy story with concept of ghost in it. The imagery used is superb.

"The red robe, shimmery and translucent."
Nice descriptions. According to me, there are no corrections needed. It is absolutely fine. Just a suggestion, dialogues must be written from next line. For example this-
"It's OK, George. I will guide you"

It is a short written story with easy going flow and laws Characters.

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for entry "Act Natural" 
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Lilith of House Martell

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I am reviewing your poem Springtime Days as a part of 'Lilli's Portfolio Raid' with an intention of showing gratitude to you for being our mentor and helping us throughout.

The poem is written in free verse. It has four lines. I learnt a new word again. Yay! But this time I didn't looked up in the dictionary. I just saw your dropnote. Last time, I forgot to do so. *FacePalm* This poem has a great sense of imagery in it. You have described the feelings of hesitation, guilt, anxiety, etc.

"Try not to show
the furtive glance,
shaking hands,
heart wildly beating.
Hard to hide the anxiety"
These are my favourite lines. I mean, I loved the whole poem. *HeartP*

No corrections needed! Please increase the font and you may centralize it. Overall, a beautiful poetry piece.

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for entry "In Memoriam" 
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Lilith of House Martell

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I am reviewing your poem In Memoriam as a part of 'Lilli's Portfolio Raid' with an intention of showing gratitude to you for being our mentor and helping us throughout.

The poem is written in free verse. It has two or three lines. So sorry, I am confused. I want to appreciate the fact that you expressed so much in few words. 'never his smile' has a deeper meaning that he never remained happy or satisfied. It did have other emotions like anger, frustration, sorrow, guilt, tension, etc. Maybe, his being too ambitious never gave him the real joy or happiness.

"only for his
profligacy, avarice, and ambition"
This is my favourite line because I need to look up in the dictionary for these words. So I got bonus words to learn and use. Not being english my first language, I really need to struggle in such heavy words. *Laugh*

According to me, no corrections are needed. Very good poem! Please increase the font size, though. *Wink*

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for entry "Long Ago" 
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Lilith of House Martell

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I am reviewing your poem Long Ago as a part of 'Lilli's Portfolio Raid' with an intention of showing gratitude to you for being our mentor and helping us throughout.

The poem is written in free verse. It has four lines. This has 24 syllable. To be honest, I do not know till now, how we count syllables. I first thought, they are number of vowels or something like that. *Rolling*

I wish this poem is not based on your life. It is sad and takes us to abysmm of time.

According to me, there are no corrections are needed. I am also afraid that if I added a word or removed one, it would affect the syllable count. Though, you can give this a colour and increase the font size.

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am reviewing your poem Home is and so is my heart, today. My review is my personal opinion. Remember this is your poem.

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The title is confusing and grammatically incorrect.

This line - My heart is where my home is.

It is a fabulous poem and interconnected with the things. A well written free verse.

For me there are no other corrections needed. Just add a cover to it. You can also add colours or centralize it. Your poem is unique. The flow and rhythm is engaging.

The poem has my review
My review is my opinion
My opinions are my thoughts
My thoughts are what I feel
I feel what I like
I like your poem.

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Anna

I liked your crossword very much. You have very nicely written the details about us. I am impressed more by mine *Blush*

Just wanted to tell you, that you need to manage your crossword and add 5 more in across and 5 more in down to complete the task.

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello LorenIsOneOfMyNames

It was fun to solve this. I really like how you included details about the Rising Stars Members. For the across 12, I thought it was soulswindow but it was not. Lol

And I like the clue about me *Wink* Now I will play more badminton 🏸.

A Classmate to classmate review *BigSmile*
Lurie Park
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Review of Universal Energy  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am reviewing your poem Universal Energy today. Remember that these are my thoughts and views. It is your original poem and it only matters how you feel about it. The title is very unique, looks like you are science student. Lol

So let's start with the review. It has a transient rhyme scheme abab in first two paragraphs and aabb in last. Although it looks nice. I found the flow very engaging and likable.

I would suggest you some writing ml like centralize and colour.
The poem as I already said, has a unique taste.

Being a science student, I can relate the things as per my understanding. It does not have any grammatical or spelling errors in it.
So keep on writing! Happy anniversary once again.

Write on!
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Review of I See Beauty  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Hey


I am reviewing your poem as you asked me. My thoughts on it are-

Title-
The title is very catchy. Indeed I liked it.

Rhythm and flow-
It is very difficult to comprehend. The flow needs to be worked on. It is free verse. I know that this poem wants to tell a lot but can't convey properly to the readers.

Imagery and Emotions-
The imagery is well used. The emotions as we go have a message in them. Beauty is not something we see but what we feel.

Mistakes-
You can add some Writing ML like centralizing your poem, giving it a colour or so. The grammar at few places needs to be checked. You can use grammarly for this.

My favourite line-
It is not seen through the beholder.
Beauty is seen through your eyes.

Overall Review-
Construction of the Poem needs to be looked on. Rest fine. The message delivered is beautiful.

Keep Writing!
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Review by Vaishali
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Marvelous Friend

This is unique and super interesting! I enjoyed solving your quiz. Best of luck!

Write on!
Lurie Park
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Review of In Your Eyes  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
So deep a poem! Lovely. You have described this very well. I know a person who has lovely eyes like this and beacuse of her I am on the this land. A emotional touching poem. Superb!


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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Shubh


I am reviewing your poem 'Wanting To Give Up'. I will give my views and opinions but remember this is your poem and I am not an expert reviewer.

Title:
The title 'Wanting To Give Up' delivers the message inside. Suitable and apt.

Rhyme and Flow:
Your poem has a good rhyming scheme of aaaa. The flow is also engaging. I would suggest to make the length of lines in a Stanza equal because it interupts the flow. Check it by reading your poem aloud.

Imagery and Emotions:
The poem has a good sense of imagery of Shadow and light. The details are also well written. I liked the transition or a sad, dejected self to a hopeful person.

My Favourite Line:
"For I told you, your journey has just begun"

In-Depth Review:

When the sun makes you burn
When the shadows give you no fun
[shadow gives]
When the rain hides the water down your cheeks that run
[This is a long sentence interrupting the flow. Here's an alternative- "When the rain hides your tears that run."]
Let me tell you,the journey has just begun.

When the heavens send you down,
[Heavens (H must be capitalized)]
Taking away your rightful crown
When the hells do but frown
Because you are too good to be down.
[These last two lines are enthralling. So thoughtfully written!]

You are helpless,having no friend,
[helpless, having (space after comma)]
Remembering the words “Our friendship shall never end”
[make this shorter for the flow.]
Broken shards of brain you mend,
Thinking of giving up, cause that’s the end.
[If you are telling this to the read then last line should be like- "You think to give up, cause that's the end"]

Raise your head, you are it.
They sent you down with a wit
For every little pain you felt
Is the proof that in the strong fire too,
Your goodness never melts.
[I appreciate this stanza. Though it has lost its rhyme scheme but it has weightage in words. Well done!]

Yes,you were right,
Say it with all your might;
Your war is too long too be called a fight,
[too long to maintain the flow. Suggestion- "Your war is too long to be a fight"]
And the angels stand by your side


For the dark shadows you are the sun
[dark shadows, you are (you missed a comma]
For the little innocent fireflies you are the one
["For the fireflies, you are the one"]
Do not give up, that’s what you have to go for
You are the weapon against the evil that need more.
[Overall this stanza has a very good transition. You engulfed confidence in the readers.]

You are special, you haven’t been told yet
Cause that gong of clock you haven’t met.
Your pain has been taken, now rerun ,
[no space between rerun and comma]
For I told you, your journey has just begun
[As I have told you earlier, my favourite stanza!]

Remember, this is only my views and thoughts. It is your original piece. Overall a well written piece. I enjoyed reading this. Write on!

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Review of Poetry  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello bluehats#5

I liked your poem. It is a well written limerick. The expression is neat.

My suggestion- The title is your choice whatever you want it to be but better give it a catchy title summarizing the content because poetry is just the for of item you write. Test fine with the grammar. No corrections.

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Review of I, Katrina  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

It seems you made me love your poetries. Again an awesome piece. I didn't knew about this is lady Kathleen. It is difficult for me to decipher a particular rhyme scheme so i think it is a free verse, isn't it? Again the flow is okay. Grammar is all good according to me. No corrections needed.

The imagery and description is really well. Readers are engaged this way. Good job!

Keep Writing!
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Review of Lily [97]  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hello again! This poem has a new concept matching with the prompt. The flow is good and smooth.

The rhyme scheme is aba. According to me, no changes or corrections needed in this.
My favourite line "Come tangle with me
and dance till you die." All the best for the contest. Keep writing!

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Review of Five cats  
Review by Vaishali
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

The Poem is so attractive. The format in which it is written is so cool. How well you managed to describe these five cats, two being frenchy.

A unique poetry that I discovered today. Good job. No corrections needed. All fine!

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Review of I Am  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Christopher Eastman-Nagle

I have read your poem. It is a well written piece on self. The starting two lines caught my attention and made me read the whole stuff.

Add I read along, it was at ease. Means the poem has a great flow.
They who believe in me shall be saved by products
And my enemies shall be frustrated for ever. my favourite lines after the starting two lines. No corrections required. Well done.

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Review of I am Sam  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
A good try!

You had written it very well. The picture is catchy too.

It is an emotional poem which brought tears to my eyes. While you started describing this Sam, I felt I knew him personally.

Yet when I reached the ending, I felt sorry. A very good piece that I have read. Thanks for writing.

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Review of The Sirens.  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello inkwell

I am reviewing this piece randomly. A well written poem. Efforts can be seen.

The title is catchy. The content describes the topic and takes it in a broader level. A whole new perspective. A good job. The excursion used is fine. The thing I personally liked is the presentation and the flow though it being a free verse.

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Review of The Promise  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Simple Dykie,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "The Promise" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:
Your title "The Promise" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging with rhyme scheme ababcc.

Imagery & Emotions:
Expression is good asking with the idea.

My favorite line is:

"A familiar face framed by the sun,
I recognize, and soon remember."

Keep Writing!
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Lurie Park

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Tim Chiu

I read this poem A time of thrills. It is an amazing poem which imagery used very well. The scenes and plots are described nicely. It creates a picture. It is a bold poem on a topic on which very few write. You have taken a step forward in bringing them out.

I loved the title and the simplicity of this poem although being a free verse.

Keep writing
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Review of The Ooze  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Joto-Kai

I am reviewing your item as a random read and review activity. I came across this story but now I feel great. It is nicely written. The suspense till the end, the description and the dialogues were all amazing! I enjoyed reading this story. You did a really well job!

Keep Writing
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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very nice poem. Very good imagery used. I was literally imagining the morning scene and the night disappearing so fast.
Good rhythm and flow. Well done


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