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I majorly review poems or short stories. Poems can be of any type. Short stories should be less than 600 words or approx. Novel and books are not in my reviewing list. I am not an expert reviewer but I'll try to tell your weak and strong points. In a polite but honest tone, I will tell your errors, if present. I will comment on the title, flow, main writing and will also provide you with an overall review. My ratings will not be biased. You can tell me at which points you want the deeper analysis. If you want me to review, you can give it a try. You can check some of my request reviews - Review of "Attack of the blobwoman " Review of "Not Past Redemption" Review of "Wanting to give up" Review of "Wrong timing in Manchester" and there are many more...
Favorite Genres
Comedy, tragedy, emotional, devotional, nature, romance and dark.
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Usually I review anything except for novels/novella, blogs and lengthy stories.
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Images, poll, word search, crossword etc.
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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Tim Chiu,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "An Eye for the prize" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:
Your title "an eye for the prize" is a sutiable eye catching title.

Rhythm & Flow:
I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging with rhyme scheme aabb ccdd.....

Imagery & Emotions:
The constant rhetorical questions is nice. I liked the pattern of them explaining what's love.

Mistakes:
There are no mistakes.

My favorite line is:
"Would life seem a coldness and glide so absurd?"

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello lmiller

I have read your item. It is written so well! Amazing!

A lot of information with examples and thoughts and views are given. A good informative discussive item. Briefly explained everything in a gist.

Talking about the cover, it suits well giving more imagination to the thought. It is a journal I suppose.

Well done!
Lurie Park
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Review of The Hedge  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Kit MacPherson

I liked the haiku. It has meaning and flow is smooth. Most of the haiku's I've come across are meaningless! People write just to satisfy the syllable and line count but they ruin the content. Anything which comes to their mind is presented in a jumbled way. But this is really good and expressive.
Well done
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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello LittleChuck,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Desolate sands of time" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:
Your title "Desolate sands of time" is apt.

Rhythm & Flow:
I found the rhythm and flow better than rest but not very good. As I have said earlier the transition or linking should be smooth.

Imagery & Emotions:
The topic is enhanced. A well written four lines poem.


My favorite line is:

"Like the sands of a desert
Drifting away into nothingness;"

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of A Tautogram poem  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello LittleChuck,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "A Tautogram Poem" and to give
you helpful information if needed.


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "A Tautogram poem" is fine but you can write this in brief description area. Your title should be different.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow fine being a free verse.

Imagery & Emotions:
Many different ideas are written in this to make this a perfect Tautogram. My suggestion is it can be better you link things together or make the transition smooth.

My favorite line is:
"Projecting powerless poetry"

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of Don't Trust Cupid  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello ForeverDreamer,



It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Don't Trust Cupid" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:
Your title "Don't trust Cupid" really caught my attention. I think a picture of Cupid as a cover will make it more attractive *Wink*

Rhythm & Flow:
I found the rhythm and flow very good with rhyme scheme aa bb cc dd ee.

Imagery & Emotions:
I liked your poem as the flow is smooth. The story is funny. The imagery you used is also nice. I could imagine the court fight *Laugh*.

Mistakes:
There aren't any mistakes in your poem.

My favorite line is:
Basically the whole poem is my favourite. But to be in particular-
"She slung the thorned plants at me
And kicked me sharply in the knee."

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Superb Acrostic Sonali Ji

Can't think ofmuvh better than this on the topic. You have me the pleasure of reading an acrostic which is also good. The last line is my favourite. No no actually every line. Each sentence status out the meaning of spuddle. If this note was something like a challenge or a contest, you will be winning for sure. Again telling, you have written it so nicely!

Keep Writing
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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Delia

I am reviewing your story "The King's Crown "  as a random read and review activity.

Title
The title is good and beffiting here.

Story line
I actually liked the the story very much. You have beautifully expressed the feelings between a daughter and a father.

The crown plays an important role in the story. The conservative is nice and unique. I appreciate for this new idea. There are lots of tales and stories about mother and daughter relationship and mother son relationship but few on this topic.

Angelique character is great too.
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Review by Vaishali
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi 🌕 HuntersMoon

I am reviewing your poem as a judge of Oriental Poetry Contest.

I loved your ambaham "When Darkness Overwhelms". It is a well written poem with good expression.

It is following the prompt with monorhyme and the 7 syllable lines. Good job!

Keep Writing!
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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "June 11, 2021" 
Review by Vaishali
In affiliation with  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi ridinghhood-p.boutilier

I am reviewing your poem as a judge of Oriental Poetry Contest.

I loved your ambaham "Wheel of Fortune".

It a poem for a friend's birthday giving him a useful life advice.
It is following the prompt with monorhyme and the 7 syllable lines. Good job!


Keep Writing!
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Review of Heartfelt  
Review by Vaishali
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Words Whirling 'Round

I am reviewing your poem as a judge of Oriental Poetry Contest.

I loved your ambaham "Heartfelt".

Beautiful poem for someone you love.
It is following the prompt with monorhyme and the 7 syllable lines. Good job!

Keep Writing!
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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi 💙 Carly

I am reviewing your poem as a judge of Oriental Poetry Contest.

I loved your ambaham "A life lived with Connection".

It is following the prompt with monorhyme and the 7 syllable lines. Good job!

Keep Writing!
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Review of L'aura del Campo  
for entry "Interlaced [107]" 
Review by Vaishali
In affiliation with  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

I am reviewing your poem as a judge of Oriental Poetry Contest.

I loved your ambaham "Interlaced".

You have described a story within a poem very well. The poem was sad but enjoying. You made the readers felt the poem.

It is following the prompt with monorhyme and the 7 syllable lines. Good job!

Keep Writing!
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for entry "Refugee" 
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Dave

I am reviewing your poem as a judge of Oriental Poetry Contest.

I loved your ambaham "Refugee".

You have successfully penned down the story a refugee. The poem has an emotional attachment with the readers.

It is following the prompt with monorhyme and the 7 syllable lines. Good job!

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for entry "Where Have You Been" 
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Prosperous Snow celebrating

I am reviewing your poem as a judge of Oriental Poetry Contest.

I liked your ambaham " Where Have You Been". Good job!

It is following the prompt with monorhyme and the 7 syllable lines. Good job!

Keep Writing!
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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi JCosmos

I am reviewing your poem as a judge of Oriental Poetry Contest.

I loved your ambaham "I will always remember".

It is following the prompt with monorhyme and the 7 syllable lines. Good job!

Keep Writing!
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Review of WEATHER  
Review by Vaishali
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Monty

I am reviewing your poem as a judge of Oriental Poetry Contest.

I loved your ambaham "Weather".

It is following the prompt with monorhyme and the 7 syllable lines. Good job!

Keep Writing!
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Review of A Woman  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Kimala,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "A woman" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:
Your title "A woman" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:
I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging with rhyme abcb.

Imagery & Emotions:
I love how this poem talks about a woman excellently. You've described a mother so well.

Mistakes:
She suffered like so many.
She'd suffered like so many.

My favorite line is:
"She has a name I do not call,
Because I call her "mother ""

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of NAG Assignments  
Review by Vaishali
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Chris Breva

I reviewing your item NAG Assignments but I seriously don't know why I am reviewing this *Laugh*

This is a fun activity. An item within an item and the item here is the same item which you have created. So I guess this is a loop. Though I found this interesting *Shock2*

The last line was good. It was kind of naive and I smiled reading that.

Thank you
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Review of Toressa  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello rl

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Toressa." and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:
I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:
Your title "Toressa" really caught my attention. It is a name of the girl whom this song is dedicated.

Rhythm & Flow:
I found the rhythm and flow superb. Like I can make my own song out of this. The flow was very smooth.

Imagery & Emotions:
I love how these lyrics so well created an atmosphere of love and the emotions are so well expressed. I believe this should be inserted in a movie.

Mistakes:
There are no mistakes. The lyrics are just nice.

My favorite line is:
"The gentle rain plays out your name
A soft, sweet lullaby"

Keep Writing!
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Lurie Park

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Review of The World is Red  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Yesmrbill,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "The World is Red" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "The world is red" is amazing


Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging with a good rhyme scheme.

Imagery & Emotions:

Through the poem you told usso many red things around us in an interesting way creating a backstory of each.

Mistakes:

Everything was fine. But you can make the relevance more clear. Though I like your colouring tge text with red.

My favorite line is:

"The sun is red, and so are the trees.

As are the gulls, gliding in the breeze."

Keep Writing!
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Lurie Park

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Review of Rays of Light  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello jaya

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Rays of Light" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Rays of Light" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow not very smooth. Try keeping the length of sentences nearly same. The readers find it difficult to catch up. The rhyme scheme is abcb.

Imagery & Emotions:

The idea of the poem is not very clear to me. The characters changes suddenly or is it a different story. From the title I can infer that it is an optimistic poem and some bits from cancer and priest. But the idea is not much clear.

My favorite line is:

"inside the four walls; soon I feel the gloom.”
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Keep Writing!
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Lurie Park

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Dave,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Scars and Souvenirs" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Scars and Souvenirs" is fine. It has alliteration in it.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow quite smooth though it being a free verse.

Imagery & Emotions:

The poem glorifies the meaning of scars by relating it to the army. It is a beautiful tribute to them


Mistakes:

There aren't any mistake.

My favorite line is:

"Scars on my heart, scars on my wrist.
I could not continue
facing such bleak prospects.

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of Flu Shot  
Review by Vaishali
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Rhychus

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Flu Shot" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Flu Shot" is impressive.

Rhythm & Flow:

You have followed the syllable rightly.

Imagery & Emotions:

This is a comic poem with plenty wierd descriptions *Laugh*

Mistakes:

There is a minor error.

You didn't get your flu shot.

You hadn't got your flu shot.

My favorite line is:

"You didn't get your flu shot."

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of A Place to Hide  
Review by Vaishali
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Elizabeth,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "A place to Hide" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "A place to Hide" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging with the rhyme scheme abcb.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how the poems describes the natural beauty. It has a lot deeper meaning contained in it.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes.

My favorite line is:

"This place is my place
It's a place to hide
I can finally feel free
In my place outside"

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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