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I majorly review poems or short stories. Poems can be of any type. Short stories should be less than 600 words or approx. Novel and books are not in my reviewing list. I am not an expert reviewer but I'll try to tell your weak and strong points. In a polite but honest tone, I will tell your errors, if present. I will comment on the title, flow, main writing and will also provide you with an overall review. My ratings will not be biased. You can tell me at which points you want the deeper analysis. If you want me to review, you can give it a try. You can check some of my request reviews - Review of "Attack of the blobwoman " Review of "Not Past Redemption" Review of "Wanting to give up" Review of "Wrong timing in Manchester" and there are many more...
Favorite Genres
Comedy, tragedy, emotional, devotional, nature, romance and dark.
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Usually I review anything except for novels/novella, blogs and lengthy stories.
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Images, poll, word search, crossword etc.
Public Reviews
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Review of Jesus  
Review by Vaishali
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Chris Breva,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Jesus" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

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Title:

Your title "Jesus" gives your poem a sense of purity and sanity. The readers feel happy and calm.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very smooth with rhyme scheme abab.

Imagery & Emotions:

The poem very well describes about Jesus and his qualities. It's more like his biography or a tribute to Him.

Mistakes:

There are not many mistakes.

To heaven He is the only way.
To heaven,He is the only way.

My favorite line is:

"Give your soul to Him today
To heaven He is the only way."

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello Prosperous Snow,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "All that will never be" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "All that will never be" is the prompt for the contest. You followed it well.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging with rhyme scheme abaca

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how the poem tells that there will be no silence and all between them. It is lovely poem.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes.

My favorite line is:

"unwritten lines of poetry
recited by
the keening wails of a banshee."

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello ChristineB,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "All that will never be" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "All that will never be" is sutiable for the poem.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging, though it being a free verse.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how this poems tells those things that can't be true. It is written for cramp so it is totally following the prompt. So elaborated the title so well.

Mistakes:

And the dinosaur fossil buried deep
And the dinosaur fossil, buried deep

My favorite line is:

"And the fish that swim
on the floor of the sea
Savor the food they find."

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of Rejected  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello SeanFear

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Rejected" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Rejected" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging with the rhyme ABABCCB .

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how this poem openly speaks on the topics which we barely speak.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes. The poem is flawless.

My favorite line is:

"Rejected, this is all the offers to be,
what in the power that could have been done?"

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of Goodbye!  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello SameOlSum,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Goodbye!" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Goodbye!" really caught my attention as I jave written a poem with almost same title 'Farewell'*Laugh*

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging with rhyme scheme abbcc.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how this poem expresses all the depressing emotions so easily.

Mistakes:

There is just an error.

Love is gone, thought it would never cease.
Love is gone, thought it will never cease.

My favorite line is:

"I'm done, that's all, nothing more to give.
Time to leave, I have a life to live."

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of Come Deep Joy  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Carly Blue.

I am reviewing your poem 'Come Deep Joy' as a random read and review exercise.

Your poem is very short but expressing a lot more. It is worthy of my praise

May I know which form of poetry is this?

Well done but!

Keep Writing
Lurie Park
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Review of Unchain me  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Joe House,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Unchain me" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Unchain me" is suitable. It is arousing interest too.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging although being a free verse. It is a monologue.

Imagery & Emotions:

I found your poem interesting to be read. Short and sweet. A person wants to be free from his love. He is tired from this bond.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes.

My favorite line is:

"Unchain me from this
Love
Set me free"

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Dr. M.C.Gupta,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Come Back My love" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Come Back My Love" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging with rhyme scheme abcb.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how the poet is calling his love back again by praising her. The expression used is so good.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes. The poem is flawless.

My favorite line is:

"Why wish that I be ideal?
I too am but His creation"

Note: I am glad that you are an Indian too.

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of New Day  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Prosperous Snow

I am reviewing your haiku, New Day

•The title is suitable.
•Senryu style poetry. Thank you for teaching me that.
•Mistakes are none
•Beautifully expressed in less words. The flow is amazing.

Keep Writing!
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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Tim Chiu,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "The practice tries-suprise" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "The practice tries-surprise" is cool.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging with the rhyme scheme aabb

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how this poem encourages one to practice and persevere.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes. But I think you should rate it 18+.

My favorite line is:

"Practice tries must yield rewards,
But dereliction's different chords!

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of My love  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Joe House

I am reviewing your own as a random read and review exercise.

The poem titled My Love is written by the poet Joe House.


Title

The title is apt and suitable. It describes the same what it contains.

Rhyme and flow

I found the rhythm engaging though it is a free verse.

Emotions

It has a lovely wording. The poet through this poem is longing for his forever love who he doesn't wants to let go.

Mistakes

Forever do I want with you
Forever do I want to be with you

As if my very life depended
As if my very life is depended

My favourite line

"That with out physical contact
I would surly die
So yes it is forever that I want
With you
My love"

Keep Writing!
Lurie Park
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Review of Blue Bird  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello Sophy,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Blue Bird" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Blue Bird" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging, though it being a free verse. You weaved the emotions in one go.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how the poet talks about the emotion feeling of a bird.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes.

My favorite line is:

"but she knew I was there -
and that was enough."

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of Twenty, Twenty  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello sleepywriter,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Twenty twenty" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "twenty twenty" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging. The rhyme scheme is aaaa bbbb which is excellent.

Imagery & Emotions:

The poem sums up all the unusual things that occured in twenty twenty. It was a hard year for everyone. But congratulations its another year.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes in the poem. The year was the mistake *Laugh*

My favorite lines are:

"Twenty, twenty, this is just the beginning
Is the virus winning?
Just by sinning?"

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of Impersonal  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello igotthebluez,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Impersonal" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Impersonal" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging, though it being a free verse.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how the poem expresses its views so accurately with strong statements made.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes.

My favorite line is:

"We are reborn into a seemingly free world
Free of connection
Free of blame
Free of consequence."

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Gerv,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Our tomorrow's ushers" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Our tomorrow's ushers" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging. It has a rhyme scheme of aabb.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how this poem talks about the deeds of teachers. It is honoring them!

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes.

"Reminisce your great deeds for one and for all"
"Reminisce your great deeds for one and all"
Just a suggestion.*Smile*

My favorite line is:

"Our words and praises would never suffice
But we are grateful; no less, no lies."

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of "Come as You Are"  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Jay O Toole,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Come as you are" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Come as you are" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging. Though, it is a free verse.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love the way you represented some deeper thoughts. It is a topic on which we rarely write.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes. Just you need to proof read it once.

My favorite line is:

"You needed forgiveness. That is now done. You needed lasting friendship. You have that in me, dear Son."

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of In Court  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Jacky

I am reviewing your story as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "In Court" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "In Court" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow constant moving. The story didn't bore me.

Imagery & Emotions:

I like how you presented the characters Mr.Alex and Mr.Banks

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes. But here's my suggestion-
"I am positive he would not be able to" =
"I am positive he would be unable to"

Overall Review:
A good story content with nice presentation overall.

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of Fearless  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi simon!

I have read your story Fearless which is of 75 words written for the flash fiction.

It is written difficult to express much in seventy five words but you can still it a try. The story lacks many things . It describes a woman standing at the threshold and thinking of her past memories before being a mother or a wife.

Not much information is revealed. The name of the character, how she ended up there and more to answer in just 75 words. You can shorten the description but not the details.

These are just my thoughts and opinions. No compulsion at all.
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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Chariot of The Heavens,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "The Beauty of Poetry" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "The Beauty of Poetry" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.I like the scheme aa bb cc... You did it very well.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how this poem talks about the poems itself and their beauty. Every line stated is true. I believe that poems have some special magic in conveying a lot through themselves.

Mistakes:

There are very minute mistakes like-

"I honor their beauty with ribbons and flowers"

"I honored their beauty with ribbons and flowers"

"Is the same as the beauty your souls unfurled."

"Is the same as the beauty your soul unfurled."

My favorite line is:

"Reach deep inside for your inspiration
Do not be afraid of a changing generation"

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of Here and now  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Joe House,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Here and Know" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Here and Know" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow quite interesting though it being a free verse.

Imagery & Emotions:

I like the man's love for the woman for so long.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes. Suggestions- it can be written in a more presentable manner.

My favorite line is:

"No lies no games
Only my heart do I have
To offer"

Keep Writing!
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Lurie Park

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Review of L'aura del Campo  
for entry "Rubaiyat for May [86]" 
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Kare!

I am reviewing your poem as a judge of Oriental Poetry Contest.

Your poem is upto the rhyme scheme. A poem made up of good words.

I like the imagary you used to describe the seasons. The poem has a unique style.

Keep Writing!
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for entry "Gifts of the Garden" 
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Dave!

I am reviewing your poem as a judge of Oriental Poetry Contest.

I loved reading your poem.
The rhyme scheme is followed very well. The way the poem is expressed is nice.

A nature poem so well written.
"protecting earth like Mother Nature planned."
My favourite line.

Keep writing
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Review of The Blue Flu  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Gaelic Queen

I am happy that you asked me to review your story "The Blue Flu"

Title:
The title is befitting as the story revolves around the blue flu which has came around those elves.

Story and Content:

The characters are many. I see this is a contest entry which needs all the alphabetical letters to be used. You have did this job gracefully. The story begins with Maxwell's announcement and ends to a party. The theme of the story is yet not clear to me. It is a fantasy story with elves at the main center.

Pace:

The pace of the story is fine with sufficient amount of detailing. The flow is smooth.

Mistakes:

Note: I am not an expert reviewer. These are just my thoughts and opinions.

Please, show Edwina and the girls to the guest wing. =
Please take Edwina and the girls to the guest wing.

Each of the girl elves curtsied when their name was called. = Each of the female elves curtsied when their name was called.

St. Nicholas raised the flag to guide his reindeer in for a landing on the green = St. Nicholas raised the flag to guide his reindeer for a safe landing on the green

In the sleigh behind him were Maxwell, Edwina. and the elven girls. = In the sleigh behind him, were Maxwell, Edwina and the elven girls.

Overall Review:
I enjoyed reading this story as the flow was engaging. It never felt boring to me. Good job!

Keep Writing!
Lurie Park
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Review of A THREAT IN JEST  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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It is my pleasure to review your piece today "A threat in jest".

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow of your poem very easy to follow and engaging. The notes at the end and at the starting was really some important piece of information a reader should know.

Imagery & Emotions:

I think that the imagery used in this poem well directs towards the darkness created.


My favorite line is:

"Dark they are not but sometimes that’s forgot
swiftly the stories were told and he was caught"

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Ghouls are gathering".

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow of your dark poetry pretty good.

Imagery & Emotions:

I am amazed by your descriptions that you have used to give this a horrific and thrilling tinge.


My favorite line is:

"and guzzle all that red blood from your veins"

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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