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I majorly review poems or short stories. Poems can be of any type. Short stories should be less than 600 words or approx. Novel and books are not in my reviewing list. I am not an expert reviewer but I'll try to tell your weak and strong points. In a polite but honest tone, I will tell your errors, if present. I will comment on the title, flow, main writing and will also provide you with an overall review. My ratings will not be biased. You can tell me at which points you want the deeper analysis. If you want me to review, you can give it a try. You can check some of my request reviews - Review of "Attack of the blobwoman " Review of "Not Past Redemption" Review of "Wanting to give up" Review of "Wrong timing in Manchester" and there are many more...
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Review of The Jester King  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello Beholden ,

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It is my pleasure to review your piece today "The jester king".

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow of your nice but it is suggested to change lines after one sentence as this makes the presentation of the poem better.

Imagery & Emotions:

I like the way you have described the motions. Well done!


My favorite line is:

"To the side looms the tall figure of the Unnamed One,"

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of Bumble Boy  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello. I am reviewing this story as a random read and review exercise. I will give my thoughts and opinions but I am not an expert reviewer.

Your story includes Jonathan and bumble boy as main characters. It was very long and tiresome to finish reading the story. The flow was good but it can be better. The concept is nice. It is emotional too.

Write more
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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)


I am reviewing your poem Common Sense Shortage as a random read and review exercise.

Your poem is written as an entry for the writer's cramp. I wish you all the best.

Title
Title is according to the prompt but it best suits your poem or rather I should say your poem best suit your title. The titke is great indeed and true as well.

Commentary
The starting was good. The phrase used are nice. The rhyme scheme is relaxing and not forced. This makes the flow very smooth and easy going.

Common sense is very uncommon. The way you presented your poem is fantastic. I think it can win and I wish that it may win. The poem is a satirical view on the lack of common sense for to which we harm our own environment and misuse our very own resources. It is a reminder for mankind to use their common sense and stop deteriorating the world where we live.

Mistakes
Mistakes, you have made none. Thus making your poetry flawless.

Favourite line
"If you, poor thing, lack common sense"

Keep writing!
Lurie Park

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Midoriya

I have read all your chapters. The length and pace is interesting. You have skillfully written everything. Jaden is a good boy.

Interesting story. Interesting titles. Keep writing more and sooner.

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Review of This Appearance  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello.

I am reviewing this writing as I saw your post in newsfeed. It is written beautifully with beautiful words used. I can imagine and see everyone sentence written. How Kalindi looked and how she felt and all. This is a perfect example of an excellent story.

Probably you should increase the age restrictions as it talks about various things in detail.

Kalindi was beautiful but had never realized it and always underestimated herself. Manish was the one who pushed her and gave him confidence.

Due to less characters, this story was easy to follow and the flow was quite smooth. I was just reading with a flow always wanting to read more. The audition scene is great and I can even create a movie out of this. You have so skillfully written this.

I wanted to know:

"Then prove it."

She did.

What did she exactly did? I mean what was to prove? I assume two things but please clarify don't leave this open ended for me.

I think more - which font did you use?

Keep Writing!
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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Midoriya

I have read chapters of your novel. I really wanted for you to continue and upload the further episodes fast. I am so on this story and wants to know more about Jaden's life and it's deeds.

The idea of this novel seems super interesting and the starting is also good. Let me tell you that I love your novel mainly because of its "SHORT LENGTH". I hate reading long lengthy chapters of a novel regardless of them being interesting.

Now let me review your story-

The starting is good. You have used less details or rather I should say just the necessary details unlike other novels with stretch their writings unnecessarily on writing descriptions. Till now, you have introduced only one character- Jaden, so it is easy to follow him. I am a teen too and exactly 16 years old, so I can relate to him much. Please use more imagery for him so that I can continue to imagine his character.

The storyline is nice. Now let me comment on the errors part.

"This is the story about a teen, " = "This is the story about a teen."

"Jaden had been an orphan for his entire life, one day as he left the orphanage and headed to his high school he noticed a burning building with people screaming." = "Jaden had been an orphan for his entire life. One day as he left the orphanage and headed to his high school, he noticed a burning building with people screaming."

Like this check for the full stops and commas everywhere again.

Chapter two:

"but at least the baby had another chance at life." = "but at least the baby had another chance to live."

These are my suggestions and opinions. I am not a an expert reviewer. Consider these only upon your discretion.

Keep the length this short in your further chapters too and release them soon as I am eager to read them.

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Keep Writing!
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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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It is my pleasure to review your piece today "The Grim Reaper Gathers His Pose".

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow of your dark poetry engaging yet being a free verse.

Imagery & Emotions:

There is a good sense of imageries used. It is creating a dark atmosphere with Grim Reaper.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes.

My favorite line is:

"Bonus kills were bonus points"

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Four Horses of the apocalypse".

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow of your poem very easy to follow and engaging.

Imagery & Emotions:

I am amazed by this dark poetry.
It's something really concerning seeing today's scenario.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes.

My favorite line is:

"Cared less the measure of their wealth.
"

Keep Writing!
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Lurie Park

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Review of 04.12.2019  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello feyre!

I am curious to know why you chose this title. What really occurred on this day? Is something about stars?

I see you included stars and all. The genres are experience, relationship and nature. Okay so from whatever information I got of this piece, I 'll conclude.

Maybe there are two stars in some kind of kinship who are conversing, right? It's about nature so they are talking about stars, of course, how they made up and all.

"Floating out here with me"
This line suggests that they are in love. Oh yes!
No matter how small/less you wrote, I am going to comprehend it *Laugh* Please tell if I am correct.

It was fun reading this short piece today. Have a good day.

Keep writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park
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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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It is my pleasure to review your piece today "It's hard to say no".

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow of your poem very easy to follow with rhyme scheme aabb. My favourite!

Imagery & Emotions:

This poem reminds me of delicious food. Yum yum.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes.

My favorite line is:

"with a handful of Cheetos," because I haven't eaten them for a long time and this line provides me with it's taste. Haha

Keep Writing!
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Lurie Park

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Review of Pete the Parrot  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Pete the parrot".

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow of your poem is very easy to follow and engaging.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love the happy penny and her little parrot partner- Pete. I also liked the usage of a lot of 'p's' in your poetry.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes.

My favorite line is:

"Pete and Pearl would dance perfectly"

Keep Writing!
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Lurie Park

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello sindbad ,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Live it, love it & enjoy it..." and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Live it, love it & enjoy it..." really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how this poem takes a optimistic turn of life satisfying every grief.

Mistakes:

It is preferable to use you instead of u.

My favorite line is:

"Do not take life too seriously. You will never get out of it alive"

Keep Writing!
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Lurie Park

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Review of On Beauty  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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It is my pleasure to review your piece today "On Beauty".

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhyme engaging though it is a free verse.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how this poem takes us to the beauty of nature.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes.

My favorite line is:

"A single bird gives the tact,
A strong monotonous chirp.
The others follow suit,
Not in unison
But still in harmony."

Keep Writing!
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Lurie Park

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Review of Harry and Megan  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Harry and Megan".

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Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow of your limerick very easy to follow and engaging.

Imagery & Emotions:

I see that the queen was not a good choice made by the king *Laugh* that's why they lost some sparkle.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes.

My favorite line is:

"And the Brits lost some of their sparkle."

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Review of Charmed  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Charmed"

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow of your limerick very easy to follow and engaging.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how this poem talks about a snake's charm.

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes.

My favorite line is:

"and a mystical, tootling tune;"

Keep Writing!
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Lurie Park

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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It is my pleasure to review your piece today "The dark cathedral" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:
I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:
Your title "The dark cathedral" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:
I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.

Mistakes:
There are no mistakes.

My favorite line is:
"How broad the span beyond the light
Eternal berth to sad refrain,"

Keep Writing!
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Lurie Park

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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello hooves.

Your mom is really beautiful. I am sorry for her. I think she was a proud mother that her son is writing. You made her proud. May she be happy in heaven.

Lurie Park
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Review of Polyphemus Moth  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello

That's so unique photograph. Amazing to see such photography. Keep it up.

Lurie Park
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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Piripica

It is indeed an amazing illusionary photograph. I liked it and its colour.

Lurie Park
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Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello. I am reviewing this as a random read and review activity. Your poem seems interesting. I like the idea of how you portrayed a soldier . It's fabulous. You did an awesome job in writing this piece. I salute to the brave warriors protecting us. I appreciate the topic. Keep writing.

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for entry "Think inside the Box" 
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello sindbad },

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Think outside the Box" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Think outside the box" really caught my attention. It is apt and suitable.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging. The emotions from each line are very vivid and clear.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how this poem talks about the daily issues in India. Yes! These problems rightly exist but no one dares to speak up on this topic. It's a daring poem. I appreciate.

Mistakes:

My personal opinion is that there are no mistakes. The poem is superb. Though, I want to suggest you to write a note at the end telling what the words 'halaal' and 'maal' means. It's just a suggestion.

My favorite stanza is:

"Sing softly to the One ,
offer prayers and incense ,
Keep it silent and strong ,
or quiet and intense."

Overall Review:
The overall poem is fabulous. You have made good efforts in showcasing the Indian issues like people screaming on loudspeakers and spitting on roads. I can truly understand different set of problems we encounter here. Your skill will surely provide you more success.
Good luck for the contest.

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of Jonah  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello winklett,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Jonah" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:
I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Jonah" is apt.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how this poem takes us to the emotions of a mother.

Mistakes:

There aren't any mistakes.

My favorite line is:

"your dad and me
and you makes three"


Conclusion:
I feel sorry for your son. May Lord give him more power and he live a happy long life. The overall poem in nice and refreshing like a candy.


Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of Exercise Bike  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Chris breva,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Exercise Bike" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Exercise Bike" is apt and suitable.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how this poem takes us on a bike ride and talks about ordinary things.

Mistakes:
There are no mistakes.

My favorite line is:

"I like to sleep
and also work
maybe go on my bike."
I can relate to this. Haha

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of empty room  
Review by Vaishali
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello bee,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Empty room" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Empty room" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging though it is a free verse.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how this poem takes us to different times when the person was together and when he was alone.

Happy Mistakes:

There are no mistakes. You have used good words.

My favorite line is:

"a quiet room,
lacking the warmth we once shared,
bearing an air of melancholy
quite alien to the senses.
along with it is the crippling feeling of harrowed
emptiness."

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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Review of Absolute Zero  
Review by Vaishali
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon,

I am reviewing your poem as a random read and review exercise.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Absolute Zero" and to give
you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are
only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest,
for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Absolute zero" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

Your poem is a free verse yet so moving. It is appreciated.

Imagery & Emotions:
I love how this poem uses the significance of absolute zero that is 0 Kelvin to depict the cold setting of heart. The feeling of loneliness, sorrow is clear. The imagery of snow covered fields, arctic winds are so well depicted. Simile is also used in this line wisely.
"It was your love that, sun-like"

Mistakes:

There are no mistakes. The poem is flawless. In fact, I loved the pattern of the poem moving like a staircase.

My favorite line is:

"Then, it was gone."

I liked the way you separated her presence and her absence by this line. The entire mood changed from togetherness to loneliness. The last line "an ending"
is giving an excellent ending to the poem. Loved the style. Can't be better than this.

Keep Writing!
Regards,
Lurie Park

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