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356 Public Reviews Given
375 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
I majorly review poems or short stories. Poems can be of any type. Short stories should be less than 600 words or approx. Novel and books are not in my reviewing list. I am not an expert reviewer but I'll try to tell your weak and strong points. In a polite but honest tone, I will tell your errors, if present. I will comment on the title, flow, main writing and will also provide you with an overall review. My ratings will not be biased. You can tell me at which points you want the deeper analysis. If you want me to review, you can give it a try. You can check some of my request reviews - Review of "Attack of the blobwoman " Review of "Not Past Redemption" Review of "Wanting to give up" Review of "Wrong timing in Manchester" and there are many more...
Favorite Genres
Comedy, tragedy, emotional, devotional, nature, romance and dark.
Favorite Item Types
Usually I review anything except for novels/novella, blogs and lengthy stories.
Least Favorite Item Types
Images, poll, word search, crossword etc.
Public Reviews
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Review of Our Last Walk  
Review by Vaishali
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi N.Mulhare.

I am here by a random read and review exercise. You're a newbie here so you're very welcome.You have a nice sense of narration.Details are focused.


Keep writing.
Lurie


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Review of Speech  
Review by Vaishali
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello.

I guess I am reviewing your work again. This poem makes me emotional and sorry for Kim. Your message of talking to the friends here alive with us to very true.

The only blemish in your work is the title. At first I thought it is something related to speech or like that and it's not catchy at all in my point of view. May be you like it.

Keep writing.


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Review of Courage  
Review by Vaishali
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi StellarStories.

I came here by a range read and review exercise. I read your poem. Itis beautifully portrayed. According to me no corrections are needed in this.

Keep writing.

Lurie


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Review of Blackout Curtains  
Review by Vaishali
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Teargen!

I came here by a random read and recite exercise. I read your poem.

The title is quite captivating.
It is a sonnet with fourteen lines. The structure is well built.

My fav line---

"I guess you’ll go down hating to the end;
once more, it’s Hello darkness, my old friend."

Keep Writing.

Lurie


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Review of Santa Claws  
Review by Vaishali
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
It is a horrifying poem. Don't know why but I feel something dark behind it.

Keep Writing!

Lurie
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Review by Vaishali
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Ilya!

I cam here by a random read and review exercise. Your poem has many difficult and quite uneasy words. Maybe excellent writers can reach it but for me and the common reach, this is not suited. Keep your words simple.

It beautifully narrates your experience. But it would be unkind to call a lady who sells flowers (do something for her living) a "beggar".

Okay. Let me not consider this. But overall review is your good.

The lines:
'May you be loved by people as you are loved by God.'
are really deep and great!

Have a nice day. L


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Review by Vaishali
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Ahhhhhh! Nice. Was looking forward to kinda stuff like this.

Good things happen.

This line is adding colours to your story. It was a bit comic too .

Keep writing.


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Review by Vaishali
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Firstly, it not a short story. It is sort of an article. Considering it as an article or a blog I will just say that it is real.

You have beautifully portrayed these feelings through your words which one can't express. He feels alone and doesn't want to share. Maybe he wants ears to listen him and not to leave in middle. Someone who can understand the same.



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Review of Life  
Review by Vaishali
Rated: E | (3.0)
A reflection on life. The variations and twists and turns of life , its uncertainty and behaviour is brilliantly portrayed.

Keep writing.

Lurie
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Review of Beauty  
Review by Vaishali
Rated: E | (1.0)
It is not a poem. Starting is doubtful. Not well narrated. More descriptions can be given.
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Review by Vaishali
Rated: E | (3.5)
A small nice and Jolly poem
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Review of Poem  
Review by Vaishali
Rated: E | (3.0)
A free verse moody poem. Nothing much to say but if you add a cute cat cover to this , it will really look nice.


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Review of Unexpected  
Review by Vaishali
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Unexpected is a very short story with not much description . It describes that Eleni is a girl who was returning to her native place , Greece. The idea is not much clear about what "unexpected" thing really happened. Though the writing was simple. You could have used imagery in this. There is a lot of scope for improvement.
Lurie Park
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Review of The Real Me  
Review by Vaishali
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
A challenging topic.
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Review of Have You Ever....  
Review by Vaishali
Rated: E | (3.0)
It is a piece of self introspection. A set of questions which forces us to get an answer from our soul. Beautiful message depicted. You started very well but at one point felt like repetition.

Your last line needs correction. Instead of
"If no, the you may continue."
it should be
"If no, then you may continue."

Overall impression is average..but it can improve.


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Review by Vaishali
Rated: E | (2.5)
You have a good writing style but you should use simple words as it can make your way through commons . Your poem don't have any rhyme scheme.

"Painful apprehension peaks,
And the mighty instincts
Of humanity clamor
For ageless poise..." This part is really appreciable.
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