Considering the time line allowed for this contest, I feel you did a good job.
You had your ideas in order through out the story which can become a bit difficult when you are on a time limit.
In the second paragraph you lost me a bit. You are describing the Linda and then go into they. After reading past that you figure out that you the writer is talking about Marilyn and Jeff.
Overall you did a good job and I hope you keep it up. Keep writing.
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