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Review Style
Hello there and welcome to my desk! I enjoy reading and writing and as I find time love to review. If there is something you would like reviewed, please submit and I will do my best to get to it!
I'm good at...
I enjoy "feeling" what I am reading, so imagery is important to me. I can express to you how what you have written makes me feel, the thoughts provoked and at times I can catch grammatical errors, but that is not my strength. I am no editor, I use Grammarly! *Bigsmile* I enjoy telling you what I see in your poem or story, is there a deeper meaning than the words used? I enjoy this.
Favorite Genres
I love inspirational pieces, I love poems and stories about faith and God's Holy Word, about nature, true events, and relationships and romance. I also like some fantasy and comedy as well as historical. I love most everything!
Least Favorite Genres
Netherworld, witchcraft.
Favorite Item Types
Free form poetry and short stories!
I will not review...
I prefer all my reviews be 18+ or less. Maybe at one time, I would have enjoyed blood, gore, grotesque events, and murder mysteries but today, with my background of working Forensic Nursing, I work with the people who commit these crimes, I have had to know as much about that as I ever care to.
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Review by LynnPenCakes
Rated: E | (5.0)
*ScallopB* Hi BradJShaw ⚓ . I'm here to review "The Dreams of Old Men

*ScallopB* I enjoy reading, writing and reviewing, it brings me a lot of joy!! I have been so busy of late with grandchildren preparing for college and both "old and young" turning points in my life, time has prevented me from taking part in WDC as I would love.
However, I'm here this morning for a little while. I traveled to your port to see who had fan'd me, I shall fan you back!
Please know I'm not a professional reviewer so these are just my thoughts *Geek* about your writing. It they help, great, if not feel free to toss us out! *Ha*

*ScallopB* Your title:
 The Dreams of Old Men  (E)
A poem about masculine dreams.
#2202312 by BradJShaw ⚓
is perfect, it's catchy, garners interest and invites window-shoppers to come inside.

*ScallopB* How your writing makes me feel: Your writing creates a "real moment" within me as if I have had the opportunity to spend a few moments with a friend and chat over coffee or tea.

*ScallopB* What I like about your writing: This is written from the heart, it is a sharing of feelings and emotions, truths and powerful realizations. To me as well, there is hope etched within the lines of this poem, hope that good can still be found in mankind and in life itself if we look.

*ScallopB* How you might improve: I find nothing to improve upon, just continue to share of yourself, your memories, your experiences and your desires.

*ScallopB* Remember, in the end this is your creation and only you know how and what you want to say, so... Write on! and Continue to share your awesome gift with all of us at WDC and remember,

*ScallopB* Words are powerful creatures!

*ScallopB* Until next time, happy quills to you *Wink*


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Review by LynnPenCakes
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
*ScallopB* Hi IceSkating SugarCube . I'm here to review "Blooms Among The Tombs

*ScallopB* I enjoy reading, writing and reviewing, it brings me a lot of joy!! However, I'm not a professional reviewer so these are just my thoughts *Geek* about your writing. It they help, great, if not feel free to toss us out! *Ha*

*ScallopB* Your title:
 
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Blooms Among The Tombs  (ASR)
A Lady's Slipper Poem for Easter
#2183910 by IceSkating SugarCube
Very fitting and fills the mind with blessed thoughts

*ScallopB* How your writing makes me feel: Written in Lady Slipper Poetry Form, your poem of three lines perfectly pictures Christ's tomb and His resurrection. One that will last for all eternity and touch all generations. A timeless poem of love, sacrifice and all things eternal!

*ScallopB* What I like about your writing: Your poem instills hope, the love it tangible, and the artwork accompanying your poem fits it perfectly, bringing a gentle comfort to the reader. It is fresh and new, and springs forth of truth. Christ's resurrection is the embodiment of our hope, the empty tomb, our proof of God's faithfulness.


*ScallopB* Remember, in the end this is your creation and only you know how and what you want to say, so... Write on! and Continue to share your awesome gift with all of us at WDC and remember,

*ScallopB* Words are powerful creatures!

*ScallopB* Until next time, happy quills to you *Wink*


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Review of THE JOURNEY  
Review by LynnPenCakes
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*DragonflyV* Hi there J.L. O'Dell-Your Scare Master I'm LynnPenCakes and I'm here to review "THE JOURNEY for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP and "Blue Ribbon Reviewers, 11th Anniversary. I hope my review can be of some help to you however, these are only my thoughts... *DragonflyV*

*DragonflyV* Your Title:
 
STATIC
THE JOURNEY  (E)
A man's journey home.
#2195230 by J.L. O'Dell-Your Scare Master
The title and cover image create interest to turn the page...

*DragonflyV* What your poem spoke to me: "The Journey" speaks of transition, whether in spirit or the flesh, a time of travel is at hand, a journey back to things familiar, things to be built upon, memories to be made, life will push forward.

*DragonflyV* What I liked: The feelings of peace and joy that accompanied my reading. The sense of hope and a knowing, fulfillment was coming within reach.

*DragonflyV* Structure: Solid, descriptive, leading, as movement was felt with the reading of each line. Your reader was aware of progressing forward with a desire to reach an ultimate goal.

*DragonflyV* You write beautifully with depth of thought. Your writing inspires your readers and causes pause for introspection.

*DragonflyV* J.L. O'Dell-Your Scare Master this brings to a close the last of my reivews of your wonderful works, I hope in some way they are of benefit to you. In the end however please know, you have a gift with words...
Words are powerful creatures, may they always be your friends!

*DragonflyV* Until next time, happy quills to YOU

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Review by LynnPenCakes
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*ScallopB* Hi J.L. O'Dell-Your Scare Master . I'm here to review "HOW TO HONOR VETERANS as part of the package you recently won at The Summertime Auction.

*ScallopB* I enjoy reading, writing and reviewing, it brings me a lot of joy so I hope my review will do the same for you.

*ScallopB* Your title:
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HOW TO HONOR VETERANS   (E)
To honor our Veterans
#2191027 by J.L. O'Dell-Your Scare Master
is a perfect tribute to Veterans everywhere and will initiate discussions of patriotism wherever it is read!

*ScallopB* How your writing makes me feel: I was moved by this poem. Feelings of patriotism and honor flooded over me as I read through each line, several times, and then read it out loud. This is what it is all about and we cannot be reminded enough. This poem is symbolic of the very fabric of America.

In a world of distortions and grandstanding, of little people seeking to make themselves a name, America stands as a beacon of hope and who better to represent this to the world but our men and women in uniform. America is symbolic of the heritage our father's fought and died for, a country built, and now stands proudly, taking her place as the leader of the "FREE WORLD" whether all the Kaepernick's believe so or not!


It's America, and that's just how we do things.


*ScallopB* What I like about your writing: It is inspiring, engaging, insightful and true. It provokes a sense of pride in a Nation that well deserves to be honored for all she has given freely, to a world in darkness, by faithful men and women. Men and women who stand fast, always ready to sacrifice their very best for the cause. Can we ever give thanks enough? This reader loves America and supports our men/women in blue in many avenues across this land. This beautiful poem excites these very passions of patriotism!

*ScallopB* Areas that could be improved: Nothing! this reader cannot rate this any less than 5, in all, it is completely representative of its title with all the reasons tucked neatly within its lines. The structure, the movement, the imagery can not be improved upon in my humble opinion. This reader loves this poem and it will be one of her favorites going forward.


*ScallopB* Remember, however, in the end, this is your creation and only you know how and what you want to say, so... Write on! and Continue to share your awesome gift with all of us at WDC and remember,


*ScallopB* Words are powerful creatures!

*ScallopB* Until next time, happy quills to you *Wink*


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Review of The TEACUP  
Review by LynnPenCakes
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*DragonflyV* Hi there J.L. O'Dell-Your Scare Master I'm LynnPenCakes and I'm here to review "The TEACUP as you were the winning bidder of my package during the "The Summer Time Auction. I am thrilled you are the winner and have enjoyed roaming your port! I hope my review can be of some help to you however, not being a professional writer or reviewer, these are only my thoughts penned... Please use or delete as you see appropriate *DragonflyV*

*DragonflyV* Your Title:
STATIC
The TEACUP  (13+)
Story of a young couple, strange happenings and a little humor
#2172437 by J.L. O'Dell-Your Scare Master
has a pleasant ring as it calls to the "would-be reader" to come in and have a seat, rest a bit and enjoy a charming story. And, just as The Teacup paints a mental image of a collectible treasure, so this story holds treasure for all who enter in!

*DragonflyV* How your writing made me feel: This reader could relate, as so many will be able to do as they see themselves in the daily activities of this young couple so in love, making the very best of each day. For some, they will remember when they hurried and rushed about their days, scrimped and saved, just to make it through, all the while with the one they loved, while on the road of accomplishment. However, this cute little story has a very nice twist, as a reward awaits the unsuspecting couple. Can it be? Yes, we have a Golden Goose in the cabinet! Nice touch!

*DragonflyV* What I liked: This is uplifting, endearing and very charming. It spells out a working relationship between two hearts, one of love and honesty mixed with healthy doses of humor and imagination. All necessities in any good, working, successful relationship. May we never take ourselves so seriously that we lose sight of the very joy of living and loving.

*DragonflyV* Your writing style: Reads easily, flows nicely, peaks imagination and interest keeping your reader engaged to the end. You've done an excellent job with editing as there are no discernable typos or errors.

*DragonflyV* Always remember, your writing is your own creation, and who better than you truly understand what you are saying? So, write on and share the blessing!

*DragonflyV* Words are powerful creatures, make them work for you!

*DragonflyV* Until next time, happy quills to YOU

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Review of Secret Santa  
Review by LynnPenCakes
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*ScallopB* Hi J.L. O'Dell-Your Scare Master . I'm here to review "Secret Santa

*ScallopB* I enjoy reading, writing and reviewing, it brings me a lot of joy!! However, I'm not a professional reviewer so these are just my thoughts *Geek* about your writing. It they help, great, if not feel free to toss us out! *Ha*

*ScallopB* Your title:
 
STATIC
Secret Santa  (E)
Quick poem I wrote when I was feeling silly.
#2177476 by J.L. O'Dell-Your Scare Master


*ScallopB* How your writing makes me feel: Happy, this poem created a warm, happy feeling inside. It is packed full of truth and joy, while encourages one to give, in the truest sense, giving without recognition or gain, just a heart filled with love of the fellow man, the unsuspecting child, sibling, parent, the peer who is feeling down or the forgotten relic, looking for any soul to pay a visit. What a way to brighten anyone's day and who knows, you may be the only dab of sunshine they will experience!

*ScallopB* What I like about your writing: This is about giving, expecting nothing in return. In fact, this reflects the very actions of a very good book I love.
Your poem flows nicely, rhyming comfortably while painting an endearing image of bright eyes, heartfelt smiles, flushed cheeks and eager hands reaching for that something special, just for them.

*ScallopB* How you might improve: I find no area that I would change. Remember, in the end this is your creation and only you know how and what you want to say, so... Write on! and Continue to share your awesome gift with all of us at WDC and remember,

*ScallopB* Words are powerful creatures!

*ScallopB* Until next time, happy quills to you *Wink*


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Review of Christmas in July  
Review by LynnPenCakes
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi J.L. O'Dell-Your Scare Master I am tickled PINK you are the winner of my Review Package at
 
FORUM
The Summer Time Auction  (E)
This auction will be a fundraiser for Bi-Weekly Oriental Poetry, RAOK, and other charities
#2195633 by Chris Breva - Graduate Student

Jack, you have a lovely portfolio, nicely put together, creative and interesting. In my looking around I have found my first item to review which is, "Christmas in July. I hope to be able to present my review in a way you know how your writing touches others, even to capturing a part of their heart, a mark of someone who writes from the heart in my opinion.
*Disclaimer* *Bigsmile* I am not a professional reviewer, this will not be exacting or technical, but rather a sharing of my impressions of your work. If you find this helpful, I am happy, however, you may choose to disregard and that is alright too. I just appreciate this opportunity for I love to "read" and "write"!

*HeartV* Your title: "Christmas in July definitely got my attention as I am a lover of Everything Christmas, always have been, always will be...

*HeartV* What your item says to me: My eyes were opened to a letter from your heart, gently placed within the lines of a beautiful poem, forever safe, forever held, forever loved.
Your poem speaks of joy, laughter, love, and great sadness. There are celebrations and realizations throughout your poem. There are memories captured within each line, realizations peaking through. A son beloved yet gone before his time.

As parents, we have all faced hard decisions, made choices we thought, at the time, were the best we could make given the options at hand. Hindsight, they say, is 20/20, and experience bears this out. Of a surety, we cannot change the past however, we can allow our past experiences to affect our future choices and therein we grow and hopefully find that nugget of truth, that is concealed in all we do and think... and walk in that.

Your poem is beautifully put together, easy to read, flows nicely without errors or bumps, in fact, it is a "10" in all ways. It is a winner for you Jack, and a keeper, a tribute to a beloved son, always cherished and never relinquished, a permanent fixture of your heart. Well done.

*HeartV* I wanted to thank you for allowing me to review "Christmas in July. Keep writing Jack and sharing your wonderful gift with all of us at WDC!

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

LynnPenCakes
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Review by LynnPenCakes
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi writerchuck I happened onto your poem entitled ""Valiant Warriors" among the request review items on The Hub and after reading wanted to review this for you. This is only my opinion and if it can be of some help to you then I am glad, if not please feel free to disregard!

*HeartV* Your title:
 "Valiant Warriors"  (E)
A sad poem about the abuse of police officers in New York City and other places.
#2196724 by writerchuck
really caught my attention and I wanted to read it.

*HeartV* What your item says to me: You have caught hold of what is happening in America today. As we look on in disbelief the truth of what a day at work can be for our men and women in blue is presented to us. In this case, the NYPD being disrespected, gunned down in cold blood, their mayor siding against them, these men and women feeling no support to do the job they are called to do, silently resigned to having no recourse.

The senseless lives that have been lost among the NYPD and other police departments across our land call to us, the public, to bring this to a stop. Red, Yellow, Black or White, it makes no difference if you are an American, this is YOUR and MY country and it is time to take it back from these useless criminals who think they can disrespect our laws, our flag, our people!

Your poem stirs your reader to want to see action against those who strut their pompous attitudes and vile manners and see the law slapped hard and fast around their wrists and served upon them in court, the American way! They have gone too far and it is time to bring an end to their deadly charades.

This is well written, full of the truth without apology, and this writer believes you will find multitudes who agree with what you have written.

There is wrong and right in our country today but this type of thing can no longer be tolerated, if we value life at all.

*HeartV* I want to thank you for allowing me to review your item and encourage you to continue to write and share your gift with WDC.

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

LynnPenCakes
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Review by LynnPenCakes
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi LegendaryMasK❤ I happened onto your item entitled "A Day of Butterfly Kisses and after reading wanted to review this for you. This is only my opinion and if it can be of some help or pleasure to you then I am glad, if not please feel free to disregard!

*HeartV* Your title:
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A Day of Butterfly Kisses  (E)
A gift from heaven above
#2161522 by LegendaryMasK❤
is wonderful and captures the interest of guests in your port.

*HeartV* What your item says to me: Your use of words to paint images so tangible your reader finds themselves looking through your eyes beholding these beautiful butterflies. Your reader feels the brush of their velvet wings against their own fingers while mesmerized with their ease of movement, suspended and floating in mid-air. You effortlessly take the reader through the meanings and symbolism attached to butterflies through the placement of a collectible trinket, a true treasure found within a beautiful poem. What a blessing indeed this visit has been!

Your poem is filled with grace and beauty, peace and love adorn the page and the realization is known, we have been visited this day...

*HeartV* I wanted to thank you, Teresa, for allowing me to review your poem. Thank you also for the beautiful Trinket. Please continue to write and share your gift with WDC, you are a blessing to so many, in so many ways.

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

LynnPenCakes
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Review of Everything To Me.  
Review by LynnPenCakes
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Spiritual Dawning I happened onto your item entitled "Everything To Me. and after reading wanted to review this for you. This is only my opinion and if it can be of some help or pleasure to you then I am glad, if not please feel free to disregard!

*HeartV* Your title: is endearing *HeartV*
 
STATIC
Everything To Me.  (E)
I felt inspired to write this after a sit in the meadows.
#2112240 by Spiritual Dawning


*HeartV* What your item says to me: There is a certain sadness of revelation that in time all finite things in our lives will change. We love those given to us dearly and feel pain in their passing. We recognize that change will come but are ambivalent about this. Still, we purpose to look up and see the beauty placed there for us, those of us who remain.

This is a beautifully written poem. Your reader's hearts are stirred and can readily identify with the emotions expressed of passing loved ones.

Your poem read easily with a steady ebb and flow allowing your reader to relax and settle while experiencing the thoughts scribed. Nice touch. Genuine and true.

*HeartV* I wanted to thank you for allowing me to review your item. I want to encourage you to continue to write and share your gift with WDC.

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

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Review of Miracles  
Review by LynnPenCakes
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Beholden I found your item entitled "Miracles among the winning entries at The Lighthouse Poetry Contest and after reading wanted to review this for you, *Cool*. This is only my opinion and if it can be of some help or pleasure to you then I am glad, if not please feel free to disregard!

*HeartV* Your title:
STATIC
Miracles  (E)
A poem about miracles medical and divine. Third place in the Lighthouse Poetry Contest.
#2196774 by Beholden
Is catchy and inviting

*HeartV* What your item says to me: "Miracles Takes the reader on a journey with the writer of their vividly serious experiences which could have turned out quite differently, yet through it all, there is peace and a knowing that the reader is held safely, cared for, protected and sustained to live another day to declare the reason and purpose of his existence. That the writer knows their source of strength and endurance is clear, pleasantly stated and offers the reader hope. There is no mountain so high that God is not there, no valley so low that He would forsake us. The writer has been on these mountains and walked through these valleys and remains in this life to proclaim God is alive and well, for this writer is a walking miracle and pays honor to God in all His Glory.

Your poem reads easily, shares truth and remains strong throughout. It is like a lamppost in the dark, shining forth His truth and great love to mankind. Great job!

*HeartV* I wanted to thank you for allowing me to review your item. I want to encourage you to continue to write and share your gift with WDC.

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

LynnPenCakes
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Review by LynnPenCakes
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jay O'Toole I enjoyed reading your entry "My Portion Forever which was among the winning entries in The Lighthouse Poetry Contest. After reading I wanted to review your poem. This is only my opinion and if it can be of some help or pleasure to you then I am glad, if not please feel free to disregard!

*HeartV* Your title:
STATIC
My Portion Forever  (E)
The truest way to Home is to rest one's entire existence into the arms of the Creator.
#2195532 by Jay O'Toole
draws your reader in, great title!

*HeartV* What your item says to me: I picture one sitting and contemplating the many experiences they have had in their lifetime and holding up the reward they know our true and faithful God has promised unto them and can find nothing in this lifetime to compare. Your poem paints in such beautiful imagery these very thoughts and contemplations which allows your reader to experience this in their own way fresh and new.
You are a great writer and one used for His purpose. Blessings...

*HeartV* I wanted to thank you for allowing me to review your item. You are an integral part of WDC and contribute many wonderful pieces that are enjoyed by so many, continue to share your gift, it is a blessing!

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

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Review of My Future  
Review by LynnPenCakes
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Nani - Blessed Indeed I found your item entitled "My Future among the winners of The Lighthouse Poetry Contest and wanted to read and review. This is only my opinion and if it can be of some help or pleasure to you then I am glad, if not please feel free to disregard!

*HeartV* Your title:
My Future  (E)
Contest entry for July Lighthouse Poetry Contest
#2195298 by Nani - Blessed Indeed
Clear, concise, open.

*HeartV* What your item says to me: "My Future garners interest for the reader. Upon entering, great use of imagery is utilized to build a picture in the mind of the reader. The picture created is one that any individual can identify with, recognizing themselves at one time or another in the very same spot. It is comforting, inspiring and instills resolve to continue on.

Your poem is beautiful, it flows nicely with no bumps or pauses. You poem takes the readers hand as you walk through the halls of one's heart, recognizing how tiny and small we really are in the presence of God, and how He is truly the one in control, all the time... There is peace and satisfaction as one finishes knowing, in the end, He is truly all we need. And one is blessed...

*HeartV* I wanted to thank you for allowing me to review your item. I want to encourage you to continue to write and share your gift with WDC.

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

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Review of Son.  
Review by LynnPenCakes
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Spiritual Dawning I happened onto your item entitled "Son. and after reading wanted to review this for you. This is only my opinion and if it can be of some help or pleasure to you then I am glad, if not please feel free to disregard!

*HeartV* Your title:
 
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Son.  (E)
About my son.
#2111491 by Spiritual Dawning
Sets the stage for a "heart-sharing"

*HeartV* What your item says to me: This is beautiful and nothing but. It speaks from the heart what every parent feels with the anticipation of a child to grace our lives, the plans made come and go, the child grows, we do our best and by faith, God does the rest.

This is such a genuine sharing of heart and soul that reaches deep into the readers' senses. The reader too can identify with the feelings of awe, of love, of appreciation for such a gift, a child.

Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful.

Well written reads perfectly and flows nicely as if carrying your reader along on a cloud of billowy thoughts. It is light with such deep meaning. It is a classic.

*HeartV* Thank you for sharing your poem with WDC. Please continue to write and share your thoughts here at WDC. They are inspiring and a blessing.

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

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Review of The Universe.  
Review by LynnPenCakes
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Spiritual Dawning while having a coffee, milling around in your port I discovered another item; "The Universe. and after reading wanted to review this for you. Use it or toss it, entirely up to you *Smile*

*HeartV* Your title:
 
STATIC
The Universe.  (E)
A short poem about the sky at night, it's secrets.
#2193570 by Spiritual Dawning
Panaramic!

*HeartV* What your item says to me: As one contemplates life, our world, our existence, our purpose, the Universe opens before us holding many more questions than answers. The Universe in all its vastness, steeped in mystery, is yet small compared to eternity. Our Universe is only one, in an unknown number, and to think, there is Man placed in this particular universe, upon this earth designed to adapt and flourish, to impact and bring about change. With such attention to the tiniest detail, it would take great faith to believe we just are. For this writer, answers are found within a star, the Bright Morning Star.

This writer thoroughly enjoys this type of thought-provoking poetry full of substance and transparency.

Great job, written well, reads easily and lingers in one's thoughts, nice style.

*HeartV* Thank you for allowing me to review your poem, as part of Simply Positive Reviewers and Blue Ribbon Reviewers, it was a delight.

Please continue to write and share your gift with all of us here at WDC!

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

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Review of The Flower I was.  
Review by LynnPenCakes
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Spiritual Dawning I came to visit your port and found an item entitled "The Flower I was. and after reading wanted to review this for you. This is only my opinion and if it can be of some help or pleasure to you then I am glad, if not please feel free to disregard!

*HeartV* Your title:
 
STATIC
The Flower I was.  (E)
Life as a flower.
#2196473 by Spiritual Dawning
Sparks interest and one's imagination...

*HeartV* What your item says to me: Immediately the reader is beside a flower, imagining a meadow full of beauty, sensing a light breeze and gentle warm rain. Inside there is a knowing that this flower is content that its existence has brought pleasure to someone special. There is innocence represented in children splashing through puddles and a sense of freedom through the birds in the sky.
This is a delightful poem, carefree and gentle yet secure in knowing one's self.

This is well written, flows well, no distractions or bumps, no errors that my eye detected, a very satisfying escape.

*HeartV* Thank you for allowing me to review your item. Please continue to write and share your gift with WDC, for it is a gift.

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

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Review by LynnPenCakes
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Spiritual Dawning Your poem entitled "Warmth Of The Sun. is a wonderful little poem. I love the way you express your thoughts and feelings.

*HeartV* Your title:
 
STATIC
Warmth Of The Sun.  (E)
A short poem about our Sun.
#2151904 by Spiritual Dawning
takes something commonly occurring in each of our lives and takes us inside the experience.

*HeartV* What your item says to me: Appreciation. The writer fully appreciates the beauty that is all of ours to behold, and how careless we can become with it sometimes. Seeing it as just another day coming and going. The writer brings a deeper meaning for the reader to ponder and entertain. Now, when one beholds the coming and passing of another day in their life, they can appreciate the awe and true spectacle of what has just happened, their mind has been opened.

For truly, it is a miracle we are here, we hang in perfect balance without reason, only through faith can the true appreciation of the wonders of this world be realized.

This piece flows, no distractions, no delays, perfect.

*HeartV* I wanted to thank you for allowing me to review your item. I want to encourage you to continue to write and share your gift with WDC.

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

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Review by LynnPenCakes
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Spiritual Dawning I have been enjoying your port, as I told you I would visit, in response to your thoughtful reviews... and so many of your poems speak to me. Your peom entitled "It's oh so beautiful here .. just struck a chord with me and I wanted to review it.

*HeartV* Your title: "It's oh so beautiful here .. Catches the reader's attention and stirs warm, cozy thoughts, which upon entering the piece are not disappointed!

*HeartV* What your item says to me: This is an endearing read, full of life and love, finding the value and importance of those things we have with us and close by, paying them homage and respect.
A young man enjoys his time going for a walk in the country with his dog. He allows the reader to accompany and sense a peace deep within his heart. A stirring piece that captures hearts of all who enter.

You have a wonderful gift for writing from your heart. Your words are impregnated with the truest emotion and meaning, easily identified with by your reader. A gift. Thank you for sharing your gift!

*HeartV* I wanted to thank you for allowing me to review your item. I want to encourage you to continue to write and share your gift with WDC.

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

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Review by LynnPenCakes
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi jdennis I received a request to review your short story entitled "A Life Fully Lived and am happy to provide you my take on it. Always remembering I am just a fellow writer and reader and these are only my opinions *Bigsmile*

*HeartV* Your title:
 A Life Fully Lived  (E)
The world may not have known Mrs. Johnson, but that was their loss, her passing was ours.
#2193543 by jdennis
instilled desire to know of what and whom it speaks! That's great *Smile*

*HeartV* What your item says to me: "A Life Fully Lived lets me know this would be about someone's life who had meant something to someone, enough, it was worth writing about. I found it inspiring, endearing, and my heart was captured.

The short story is about the life of Mrs. Johnson, who lives alone, but not really for she has her faith, a very good book and a life of memories to visit whenever she chooses. Mrs. Johnson has found the pearl of great price, during her lifetime, and now waits patiently, for her next adventure which we read about at the end.

She spent her days enjoying her life, giving beauty back to those around her in many ways to include an apparent very-green thumb and she ended up being remembered for love, the love she walked in daily and the love she shared with all those around her.

That is a lot to be said of someone's life though it is of no great importance by worldly standards. We should value the small things in life (in truth, BIG, impacting others positively), the inconsequential things of life, for they are the very things that make our lives truly meaningful. This is what makes your short story inspiring to me as you have caught hold of value.

In addressing your style and manner of composition;
Your writing is very descriptive, it arouses the senses while painting images. Too many descriptions can, however, be confusing for the reader, requiring they re-read to fully understand what the writer is saying.

This is just an example to look at and then capture the image in a clear, straight forward manner with your words... for it is a beautiful image.
Morning winks over the horizon leaking into a spreading crack, creeping along mountain tops, fading North and South into the haze, lingering between day and night. Slowly, the breaking day blossoms into shimmers of reds and oranges, swirling through shades of yellow, maroon, grey then bursting into a violet hue of baby blue, mirroring inside puddles along sidewalks, roadways and the garden in Mrs. Johnson's backyard.

So, in a nutshell;

*Writing* "tighten up" your story (I do this all the time for I have a tendency to be wordy *Wink* ),
*Writing* check for spelling and grammar, I believe I noticed a couple but that is surely not my calling *Bigsmile*. Truly you will know what, if anything, you want to change

*Writing* And in the end will have a short story that many will want to read, and may even assign to a loved one or identify with themselves, in my humble opinion.

*HeartV* I wanted to thank you for allowing me this opportunity to review your item. I want to encourage you to continue to write and share your gift with WDC. I love your story!

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

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Review by LynnPenCakes
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jay L I happened onto your item in The Hub entitled "The Meek Shall Not Speak and it got my attention. You are requesting an honest review and I will do my best but please remember I am not a professional reviewer, I just give you my opinion and how your particular piece touched me. If this helps you in some way, I am happy, if not, please feel free to toss it away.

*HeartV* Your title:
 The Meek Shall Not Speak  (E)
My newest piece of original writing.
#2194209 by Jay L
is catchy and entices the reader to look further and see what you are speaking of. Great title for you first must be read, right?

*HeartV* What your item says to me: There is a lot of thought and activity in your poem. Your poem speaks of someone at a crossroad in their life, who stands poised to make a decision as they consider the cost and the consequence. You come away knowing they have made their decision and are happy with the outcome. The reader also realizes there was a great struggle to make the decision and for it to be the right one. Chances had to be taken which were cloaked in fear and uncertainty, so the cost is tangible to the reader. The reader is happy for the writer as they profess they made a good choice.

This is inspiring as everyone has known a crossroads and can, therefore, celebrate with you.

Your writing style is easy going with a personal touch as if sharing with a friend, a little wordy in places and turns many corners (shifts) within the same piece.

*StarfishV* You might consider double spacing at corners(shifts).

Example of corners or shifts:
Causing the suffering in your life

They say talk is cheap


*StarfishV* You may consider rewording some of the long lines to mean the same but with fewer words as you don't want to lose your reader in the midst of making your point.

*StarfishV* Your rhyming structure rocks along evenly and then you hit a bump or two where it does not continue the flow. There is nothing wrong with causing a portion to differ or stand out, let it be, however, something that you are wanting to draw attention to, not just the change of structure that gets the reader attention.

*StarfishV* Now, as far as the wordy lines, I will not suggest alternative wording, realizing you will want to create those lines yourself if you choose to change anything at all. You know what and how you are wanting to say things. My suggestion is only to see about shortening them if you can.

Our minds love to read, be carried along enjoying an easy, smooth flow so when a reader hits a snag, they must go back and re-read to make sure they understand what the writer is saying, or they simply move on. Don't lose your reader.

*HeartV* I wanted to thank you for allowing me to review your item. I want to encourage you to continue to write and share your gift with WDC.

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures, harness them to accomplish your goal!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

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Review of I AM  
Review by LynnPenCakes
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Princess Morticia Megan Rose } I happened onto your item entitled "I AM while exploring your port. The title caught my eye, as it is the name of God Almighty, and after reading this I wanted to review it for you. This is only my opinion as I am not a professional, but I truly enjoyed this poem!

*HeartV* Your title:
STATIC
I AM  (E)
A poem for Brainstormers Group.
#1889457 by Princess Morticia Megan Rose
Is "catchy" and fits your poem nicely.

*HeartV* What your item says to me: This is a lovely and sweet poem. There is an innocence that is quite compelling as one sitting and sharing their thoughts with a friend. There is a childlike innocence that is portrayed. It is full of hopes, aspirations, dreams, and sincerity. Your poem works it was into your reader's heart.

Your poem is visually appealing, reads easy and flows well. There are no bumps along the way to distract your reader, it just lives there on the page to be discovered.

*HeartV* I wanted to thank you for allowing me to review your poem. I encourage you to continue to write and share your gift with WDC.

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

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Review of Age and Wisdom  
Review by LynnPenCakes
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi 🌓 HuntersMoon I happened onto your item entitled "Age and Wisdom and I'm so glad I did!! (I was looking for my review tool, when it was not at the bottom of the page I was trying to review! *Bigsmile* ) After reading your poem I wanted to review it. This, as you've stated, is in Roundel form. I do not fancy myself knowing much about poetry forms, but I stand in awe of those who seem to so easily flow from one form to another, all the while entertaining their readers, provoking thought, and just bringing pleasure in reading and thinking! What a concept.

With that said, I am not reviewing your poetry for proper Roundel form, for to my eye it looks perfect... but wanted to review the poem you have written.
Of course, please feel free to drink it in or spew it forth, it's all in the eyes of the beholder! *Bigsmile*

*HeartV* Your title:
 Age and Wisdom  (E)
Age is not wisdom ... (Form:Roundel)
#1995410 by 🌓 HuntersMoon

Your title rightly captures the intent of your poem.


*HeartV* What your poem says to me:

Your poem speaks of one contemplating life, growing older, ever learning, full of knowledge and yet so many questions left unanswered. Questions arise as one looks about in our world to see some very old, foolish individuals, and some very old wise individuals, some very knowledgeable individuals but lacking practical qualities so it would seem there is a contradiction or is this left to the individual to choose the perception and application?

With age comes understanding, one would hope, but not always. This understanding can be one of application through practice or possibly great learning but neither requires the presence of wisdom just a mind able to process rational thoughts and reason.


A writer writes, and a writer reads, all with the intent to understand and apply what has been written and read in truth and honesty.

In your poem, you use as a reference, the scripture of Job 12:12, "Is not wisdom found among the aged? Does not long life bring understanding?" To fully understand what the writer has written in this excerpt, one must read the story of Job, who has a beginning and an end. His "lifelong" friends turned on him and accused him of all manner of wrong when things in his life looked as if Almighty God had abandoned him. Even his wife. His children were met with one calamity or another, but in the end, we read, his latter days were greater than his former days. Not because he was wise or full of great knowledge but he never quit believing in the truth.

Some things our finite minds are not capable of understanding because they originate in the infinite mind of an Almighty God.

You have skillfully written your poem in a way to provoke thought, entice your reader to fully engage and ponder the words and seek to understand more fully.

You did an excellent job writer! This is a wonderful poem which each individual who reads will find delight musing over the thoughts therein provoked!

*HeartV* I wanted to thank you for allowing me to review your poem. You are a very skilled and talented writer and WDC is blessed to have you!

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

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Review of Spring is here...  
Review by LynnPenCakes
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Princess Zelda I came to look about your port after you reviewed my poem and happened onto your item entitled "Spring is here... and after reading wanted to review this for you. This is only my opinion and if it can be of some help or pleasure to you then I am glad, if not please feel free to disregard!

*HeartV* Your title: "Spring is here... Perfect!

*HeartV* What your item says to me: Your poem gives Spring, the season, a voice and personality all her own. She, after all, is the daughter of Mother Nature and she does not disappoint. I like the form and flow of this poem and sense the arrival of Spring while reading, being taken there firsthand. Excellent!
You guide and direct your reader through your words and make it a memorable experience.

*HeartV* I wanted to thank you for allowing me to review your item. Keep writing and sharing with all of us here on WDC and God Bless!

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

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Review of Betrayer  
Review by LynnPenCakes
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Merrijane I happened onto your item in The Hub, entitled "Betrayer and after reading wanted to review this for you. This is only my opinion and if it can be of some help or pleasure to you then I am glad, if not please feel free to disregard!

*HeartV* Your title: "Betrayer Fits your poem well.

*HeartV* What your item says to me: Our adversary, comes not with pointed tail and horns, but can appear as an angel of light, with strong delusion to persuade us of a lie! Yes this is all very true, and the less we recognize him the better he likes it!

If a heart could but grasp the meaning in these words and how close they are to so many of us, much of the time, we would truly understand the saying... but for the grace of God go I...

Your poem is interesting, reads well and flows nicely. "The Betrayer" paints out exactly what he comes to do. Before leaving your work, you might shine a tiny light on how to be saved for those reading and identifying yet wondering "how do I escape this life?" That would be my only suggestion, use it or not, you know exactly what you want to say.

*HeartV* I wanted to thank you for allowing me to review your item. I want to encourage you to continue to write and share your gift with WDC.

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

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Review by LynnPenCakes
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi trailerpark bodhisattva I happened onto your item entitled "The Girl, The God, And The Island and after reading wanted to review this for you. This is only my opinion and if it can be of some help or pleasure to you then I am glad, if not please feel free to disregard!

*HeartV* Your title: "The Girl, The God, And The Island creates interest and intrigue pulling potential readers in! Good job!

*HeartV* What your item says to me: This is a fun-filled story full of revelation, poised on fairytale thinking, light and friendly with a healthy dose of exploration and imagination. This story builds nicely upon itself, moves at a good pace and sets an intriguing stage.

The author has drawn the reader into the very middle of the story, to experience each revelation right along with Tawhiri. As Tawhiri feels the coldness of his heart changing, he is delighted to find love, standing right there in front of him. He never realized that the simple changes taking place in his heart would propel him to the future he desired, but the story tells us it does, and ALL of us rejoice at his great fortune.

Though Tawhiri was a god, nothing forbade him, his experience with La'akea shook his world to the core, leaving him ready to look at himself, as he was and desire to change. La'akea became that point of reference in which he could move outside of himself to realize the worth of others. He had grown.

*HeartV* I wanted to thank you for allowing me to review your item. I want to encourage you to continue to write and share your gift with WDC.

*HeartV* Words are powerful creatures!

*HeartV* Until next time, happy quills to you!

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