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Review by Maci
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love strawberries almost as much as I love this Story. What a delight! Thanks for sharing!! Maci


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Review of Sands  
Review by Maci
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh, another hopeless romantic! I read several of your Poems. I love them all. I think "Sands" is my favorite! I enjoyed how you paint (with words) descriptions like--
" each breeze caressing my cheeks." Thanks for sharing these little bits and pieces of yourself with readers like myself. Keep writing!!


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Review by Maci
In affiliation with Newbies + Poetry Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, my name is Maci and I'm reviewing your story:

" KISSES OF THE MOONLIGHT "


What drew me here? The romantic title stopped me and the right away I was hooked.

My Favorite Part: How you wrapped it all up and tied the bow on this gem.... "All is made clear as the reflected light fills our blind eyes and makes brilliant the alabaster cheek. We see as never before the world of life before us and become enraptured by the kisses of the moonlight. "

Overall Impression:I can relate to this walk in the woods. There is nothing darker than the woods. But the moonlight takes it from something dark to magical! To see the moonlight to be kissing the darkness is brilliant! And as I said very romantic

Disclaimer: I am just one. There are many out there more polished than me. You would be one of those. Therefore, feel free to use what you feel helpful and please disregard the rest.


Departing words I didn't see any mistakes in spelling . This really touched me and made me long for those days of my youth when I would camp out in the woods. Thanks for sharing this it is wonderful!

Thank you so much for sharing this by putting this out here for people like me to read. It has truly been an honor to read,rate and review this for you. God Bless!


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Review of WORTHY OF REVIEW  
Review by Maci
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, my name is Maci and I'm reviewing your story:

"WORTHY OF REVIEW"


What drew me here? The title caught my eye. The short description and I was hooked made me stayMy Favorite Part: I pictured someone reviewing while surrounding and then I hoped you weren't talking about me. *bigsmille*

Overall Impression: I like to encourage others and I have had some crazy reviews. There are those that relive my whole story. Saying everything that I wrote and call it a review. So your points were well taken!

Disclaimer: I am just one. There are many out there more polished than me. You would be one of those. Therefore, feel free to use what you feel helpful and please disregard the rest.


Departing words If I become one of those reviewer I hope you will let me know.If you know of a way to improve my reviewing I am all ears!

Thank you so much for sharing this by putting this out here for people like me to read. It has truly been an honor to read,rate and review this for you. God Bless! Have a Great evening!


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Review of Broken Girl  
Review by Maci
In affiliation with Newbies + Poetry Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, my name is Maci and I'm reviewing your story:

"Broken Girl"


What drew me here? The title caught my eye and the description hooked me.

My Favorite Part: The whole poem tugged at my heart. I have been there too. But, like they say you never know how string you are until you have to be string. My guess is you already know how strong you are. This will serve you well as your life goes on.

Overall Impression: The fact that you are writing this says you are much stronger then you thought. This poem is very well written. Very heartfelt and honest. I hope to read many more items from you. Hang in there!

Disclaimer: I am just one. There are many out there more polished than me. You would be one of those. Therefore, feel free to use what you feel helpful and please disregard the rest.


Departing words

Thank you so much for sharing this by putting this out here for people like me to read. It has truly been an honor to read,rate and review this for you. God Bless!


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Review by Maci
In affiliation with Newbies + Poetry Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, my name is Maci and I'm reviewing your story:

" Together and Finally Whole"


What drew me here? The title caught my eye but the short description hooked me!

My Favorite Part: I loved the whole thing! It told a great story and I wish you both the best

Overall Impression: The story is well told. It was smooth to read. I saw no mistakes.

Disclaimer: I am just one. There are many out there more polished than me. You would be one of those. Therefore, feel free to use what you feel helpful and please disregard the rest.


Departing words Having someone who shares your love for God is a great Starting point. Almost as good as starting with a starter home for you already have a great foundation to build on! I really enjoyed your poem. It is heartfelt and I think it is well done!

Thank you so much for sharing this by putting this out here for people like me to read. It has truly been an honor to read,rate and review this for you. God Bless!


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Review by Maci
In affiliation with Newbies + Poetry Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, my name is Maci and I'm reviewing your story:

THOSE ETERNAL YEARS


What drew me here? I ventured over to your port to see what I could find. I realized you have R&R a couple of my items and I wanted to return the favor. Oh My what a treasure trove of wonderful did I find here! What drew my to this piece was the title.

My Favorite Part: I love how this piece flowed all the while telling a fantastic story of the yearning as we get older, while adding to the realm, the fact that tears do flow easier as we age.(I have noticed this in myself)

Overall Impression:This is the kind of poem I wish I could write. Reading it was like riding on the back a of a butterfly. Floating in the air. It's flow so calm and inviting that I could get lost there. Well Done!!!

Disclaimer: I am just one. There are many out there more polished than me. You would be one of those. Therefore, feel free to use what you feel helpful and please disregard the rest.


Departing words Thanks you so much for stopping by my port again and allowing me another chance to visit your port and finding a butterfly to ride. What a delight! I have to fan you and revisit you again soon!

Thank you so much for sharing this by putting this out here for people like me to read. It has truly been an honor to read,rate and review this for you. God Bless!


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Review by Maci
In affiliation with Newbies + Poetry Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, my name is Maci and I'm reviewing your story:

"Where Has Our North Star Gone? "


What drew me here? I saw your story on the shameless plug page. The title and the short description drew me in.

My Favorite Part: I could fall into this story as if it were a movie. The way you describe everything that is going on in this smoothly written story is just plain wonderful. My hat is off to you for that!

Overall Impression: I sure can identify with the Mother being the "North Star" what a beautiful tribute to motherhood.

Disclaimer: I am just one. There are many out there more polished than me. You would be one of those. Therefore, feel free to use what you feel helpful and please disregard the rest.


Departing words Welcome to writing. com! I am pretty new here, as well. I have been a member since Dec 2016 but didn't do anything on here until May of this year. If you have any questions I can help you with feel free to email me! I hope you find this place as warm and inviting as I have.

Thank you so much for sharing this by putting this out here for people like me to read. It has truly been an honor to read, rate and review this for you. God Bless!


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Review by Maci
In affiliation with Newbies + Poetry Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, my name is Maci and I'm reviewing your story:


"Change or distortion"


What drew me here? I was drawn in by the name and after reading the first two sentence I was hooked!

My Favorite Part: I have to say that I liked and agreed with the whole article. Besides those first two sentences..."Believing, manipulation of ideas which has now implemented in the name of CHANGE, ends up pertinently as DISTORTION. This is not only ending the efficacy of humans, but also depriving the word "Change"." And this part really hit home to me..."Sadly, today, youth is either innocently or willingly following it closely. They want to become fruitful in a blink of eye, but they never see the efforts and years of dedication behind that particular work. They want to be fruitful but don't want to be part of shear diligence. Putting less efforts and evaluating externally driven desire to limitless. They, somehow, manage to trap into state of DISTORTION."

Overall Impression: I believe that this subject needs to be talked about more often. The time for this discussion is now! Before the chance to correct ourselves is gone forever! This article was a smooth read. I did not see any mistakes or any break in the flow.

Disclaimer: I am just one. There are many out there more polished than me. You would be one of those. Therefore, feel free to use what you feel helpful and please disregard the rest.


Departing words We have fallen into the habit of expecting everything to be acceptable to everyone. Where in this world is that something that is real and works? I mean the laws and the criminal can't both be right! We have snowballed for a generation of "I want it now " to a generation of "I want it now but I want to control the narrative as to how I get it and what I can do with it." Never mind the history --- let's rewrite that or ignore any of it that isn't "politically correct". Nowadays politically correctness is an excuse to ignore and muddy up all that had co-existed so far in our sociality. We have made and learned from many mistakes. We are in no way a perfect sociality. Our history can not be swept away by ripping up our past and choking out our future!
As a grandmother I worry about what my grandchildren are being taught or not being taught in school. Will the fine line between "Change or distortion" ever be present and accepted again?


Thank you so much for sharing this by putting this out here for people like me to read. It has truly been an honor to read, rate and review this for you. God Bless!


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Review by Maci
In affiliation with Newbies + Poetry Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, my name is Maci and I'm reviewing your story:
Hi My name is Maci and I just read your wonderful story... "Mourning's Twilight1"

What drew me here? The title caught my eye and the description Hooked me.

My Favorite Part: Has to be the part where her father shows up looking young at first but sad.

Overall Impression: As a parent I can not even pretend to know what pain a parent goes through when they have a child that is "different" in such a constant way. That has to so very hard to deal with. With the constant emotional roller coaster. A bundle of unanswered questions and fears and maybe even regrets.

Disclaimer: I am just one. There are many out there more polished than me. You would be one of those. Therefore, feel free to use what you feel helpful and please disregard the rest.

Departing words I think this story flowed well. I did not see anything that made me stumble or have to backtrack. I enjoyed the story. I think that you did a very fine job in taking the reader into the night with you! Well Done and thanks for sharing!


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Review by Maci
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi This is Maci. I am returning the favor of a review. There are so many interesting Items in your port that I had a hard time picking one. This One I sure can identify with. I have always wondered why, it seems that every thing comes crashing in on you at night time.
I enjoyed the visual so clearly painted here. I have to say to pick a favorite part would be hard to do. I liked it all and would not change a thing. Well Done!


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Review by Maci
Rated: 18+ | (2.5)
Hello, my name is Maci and I'm reviewing your story
Guardians of the Earth

What drew me here? The Title stirred my interest. Right away I thought
of "Star Wars" But when I started reading it. Your words kept me there.

My Favorite Part: Hands down the imagery of this story is well done !

Overall Impression: I am new here, and for me to write a short
story I write down three words on a piece of paper and space them on the page.
On the top I write Beginning (this is where the writer sets the stage leading into the heart of the story. The build up! This story has done that quite well.
In the middle of the page, I put Meat or heart- this is where I put what
makes the story. If I take this part and reread it, I usually name my story from my first and lasting impression of this section of the story. Then I ask myself. Does the title match my story and does my description tell others what the story is all about.? Does yours?
Toward the bottom of the page, I write Sum it up. This part brings the
story "full circle." Sometimes it states the reason for the story. Here I bring
closure.(example; Picture blowing up a balloon if you tie a knot in it the air stays. If
you let go of the balloon (story) before tying it... Then what happens?)
These things for me have to have consistency. So I read It out loud and look for
inconsistencies. In your story is the Mother -"Mum" or " Mom?" Choose one. Little things like that. I look at imagery details.. are they consistence? In your story toward the beginning you said " live in an apartment six stories up," later in the
story you write... "started towards the elevator. We're almost 20 stories up," Do you see what I a mean?
I struggle with grammar so. I do not review on grammar. But, you need to always
capitalize the word "I"! *Wink*

Disclaimer: I am just one. There are many out there more polished than me.
Therefore, feel free to use what you feel helpful and please disregard the rest.


Departing words I think this story has all kinds of potential! I
believe you stopped too soon.
For example. Go on... tell what happened to the couple in the park? What happened to the boy in the store? What happened to you?
Read it out loud to yourself as if you are a school teacher grading a paper. LOL, I would enjoy seeing you continue with this story. Take this beautiful start and dream big. The directions you can take this story are limited only by YOU! Please don't give up on it. If you have any questions, please feel free to ask.
Keep writing! Maci
P.S, Please do not let the 2 1/2 stars get you down. I look forward to revisiting and increasing them!*Heart*


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Review by Maci
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, my name is Maci and I'm reviewing your story (Title) What Am I?
What drew me here? I think the title is grabbing
My Favorite Part: I ejoyed the part where he “got the Girl” lol
Overall Impression: Thids Story is very well put together. It flowed well. The imagery was right on the mark making it easy to see.
Disclaimer: I am just one. There are many out there more polished than me. You would be one of those. Therefore, feel free to use what you feel helpful and please disregard the rest.
Departing words I saw that this is chapter 1. The way you left your opitions open was well done. At the same time you, left it in a way that the reader will no doubt turn the page and continur on to Chapter 2, Thanks for sharing this with me. I enjoyed the story and can't wait to see where it leads. Maci


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Review of Halos  
Review by Maci
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is so Beautiful! I have to fan it. Thanks for sharing! Maci


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Review of Glory Daze  
Review by Maci
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Ha Ha how witty!*BigSmile* I bet this was a fun one to write! Took me back in time! Whatever happened to the Pointer Sisters anyway. Oh well they are probably in their late 70's rockin' in out in a rockin' chair somewhere. Sorry, about that rabbit hole I just took you through. I bet this won a contest or two. I just love it! Thanks for sharing! Maci

Please do not be offended that I am giving you back the 375 gps. It is not intended to be an insult. I feel that it was such a pleasure to read that I should pay you.


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Review by Maci
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a wonderful story! So full of emotion and well written. God can kick cancer's butt!!!! I think that prayer and God are the only true cure to any crazy illness like this. I cried sad and happy tears with this piece. Well done and thank you so much for sharing! Maci


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Review of I can fly.  
Review by Maci
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a great read! I can see my daughter who teaches kindergarten reading this story to her class! What a great lesson for parent and child.Reminds me of a song called "let them be little" Well done. Maci


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Review of The Story Box  
Review by Maci
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, my name is Maci and I'm reviewing your story "The Story Box"
Hooks[/b} What drew me to your story was the title. Once I started reading it I was hooked. I worked as a Nurses Assistant for 19 years. I was all to familiar with the setting. I was, however intrigued by the BOX.

My favorite part was the gentleness of the Writer. What a clever way to bring back a memory without fussing and/or frustrating anyone. My Mother is in the early stages of Alzheimer's. My mind was racing as I read this. I was thinking of things I could put in a box for her. *Smile*

My overall impression: Is Bravo ! I think the story flowed well. I think it is pleasantly, informative. I did not see any thing that slowed and or confused me as a reader.


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Departing words: Very well done. My hat is off to you for making ,what could have been a difficult time for both, a visit between the two of you
warm and pleasant. Thanks for sharing this! Maci


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Review by Maci
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, I bet someone had a long night.*BigSmile* I really enjoyed this story. I liked

how the story flowed. It was easy to follow. The visual of this story is well written

and clear.It was clear to the reader that the lady did not want him going anywhere. Her

anger was visual in her actions and her words. Very well written. Way to Go. I look

forward to reading some more of you work. Maci


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Review by Maci
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a touching poem. Made me cry!


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Review of The Sleepwalker  
Review by Maci
In affiliation with Newbies + Poetry Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
oh I feel your pain! Been there and done that! yes, even sleep walking. And I figure I have gain and lost 4 of myself in my life time. I think a lot of people can identify with this piece. I really enjoyed it! Thank you so much for sharing this wonderful poem! Maci

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Review of The Star  
Review by Maci
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a cool trip you take the reader on. From salty tears to the stars! I love it. I did see just one little boo-boo. on the 2nd line in the 2nd verse "The guilt and confusion inside cannot denied. I think you might have meant to put the word cannot be denied. Other than that I think this piece flowed well. I liked the message. Thank you for sharing this. Maci

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Review of Slugger  
Review by Maci
In affiliation with Newbies + Poetry Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love baseball so the title pulled me in and the well written story kept me there. Am I mistaken or was it a foul ball that broke the window? That's how I read it. I loved the fact that Mom knew how to calm his nerves and make him instantly at ease. I thank you for sharing this wonderful story! Maci

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Review of Rising  
Review by Maci
In affiliation with Newbies + Poetry Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a wonderful, wonderful story! I enjoyed every word. I hope you "like Mitch" never give up your writing. You are gifted! I had to smile when I read that Mitch "was always on the phone, never actually talking to anyone." I have done that when I didn't want to be bothered. Thanks for sharing this. Maci

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Review of Dog’s dally  
Review by Maci
In affiliation with Newbies + Poetry Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
what a cool visual. I have not seen many Haiku sonnet but this is very well written. In fourteen sentences you told quite a story. Makes one wonder if the dog woke you on purpose to witness the crime. I really enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing. Well Done! Maci

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